Penname: EagleGirl6 [Contact][Report This]
Real name: Kelly
Member Since: 30/12/06
Reviews by EagleGirl6
Summary: In the space between the life they have and the life they wish for, exists the life they are meant to lead. Dean's sacrifice as told through Sam's eyes...
Categories: General, One Shots, Missing Scenes Characters: None
Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes Word count: 9246
[Report This] Published: 07/05/07 Updated: 07/05/07
Reviewer: EagleGirl6 Signed
Date: 08/05/07 Title: Chapter 1: As brothers
I really enjoyed this tag; I'm glad you finally took the plunge:)
DAMN! That was creepy, seeing Sam pull that needle out of Dean's neck... sent my fangirl instincts rocketing!
>As he does, I catch sight of the angry bruise on the side of his neck and remember the needle… the IV bag full of my brother's blood…
Dean, my hero!
>He came back to this reality because he couldn't let them die.
Oh, this is so sweet... I love protective Sammy (as you know!):
>I start the car and see him jump. ... "It's okay, man," I reassure him.
I really thought the scene in the motel was after a day or two had passed, at least after they cleaned up. Now I have to go watch again. You're such a taskmaster! And BTW, is it me or did Carmen look a lot like the crossroads demon?
I know this is true, but it makes me sad to think about it:
>There was a time in my life when I was happy having nothing to do with Dean.
Multiple lash fixes, thank you!!!
> his eyelashes brushing the purple shadows under his eyes that have been present since I found him strung up in that warehouse.
>He presses his lips out, and I watch as his lashes brush his lower lids when he blinks."
I can't get enough of this hero stuff, I love that Sam finally understands why Dean does it and can remind him:
>"Someone has to stand up for the people who can't stand up for themselves, Dean."
Yes, again, it's really gratifying to have Sam finally appreciating Dean! I think he did in the ep, and you've built on it here:
>It's his strength that is going to get us through the coming storm. ... It's Dean's strength, his will, the force of his light standing between me and the darkness
Deep:) Very nice:
>In the power struggle between fate and destiny, we are simply pawns, collateral, marketable materials traded and sold, soldiers used up in battles that no one can win. But once in awhile, someone will stand up, grab the reigns of fate, and ride it into submission.
>In between what life is, and what we wish life could be is where we find our purpose.
Ah, brothers. We can only hope this is true in the final two episodes...
>I will stand beside him and we will face this storm together.
I hope you write many more tags! Sometimes one hour just isn't enough. Who am I kidding? It's never enough! (Sometimes I enjoy your "episodes" more than the show itself... shhh, that's a secret).
You spoil me, you really do. Thank you so much for this detail! You should see the grin on my face because of your "secret". :) That's probably one of the best complements I've ever received. I don't say it enough -- you are very, very much appreciated.
Set after BUABS. There is no rest for the weary. An old friend and a new hunt pits Dean against the elements and Sam against himself as the brothers fight for each other and for survival. T for language and themes.
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Categories: General, Action Characters: None
Chapters: 8 Completed: Yes Word count: 99433
[Report This] Published: 29/01/08 Updated: 04/05/08
Reviewer: EagleGirl6 Signed
Date: 29/01/08 Title: Chapter 1: Watch
First off, I love that you're starting this right after BUaBS. I love when stories continue the eps; it's so cool to have a defined starting place.
Nice. That's just like Sam to say this:
>"Yeah," Sam barked. "Yeah, I do, Dean. I want to know how I left you. How you let me leave you."
I didn't even consider this! Ah, Dean is so protective to try to hide it, good job:
>He couldn't tell if Sam remembered shooting him, and until Sam was steadier, he didn't want to remind him.
>Were you there when she… when she took me? Possessed me? How the hell did that happen, huh?"
>His lips were completely shadowed by a wide, white mustache, and his thick-knuckled hands hung loose at his waist, thumbs tucked behind a gold buckle.
>"Seriously? No?" He called to Sam over the sound of the jukebox.
I like that you said this; it's nice to hear Sam thinking complementary about Dean:
>He'd never confess as much to Dean, but he enjoyed watching his brother play—both pool and people.
I love how you're having Sam remembering while Dean's playing pool, good improvement:
>He lifted his head, looking for Dean and seeing him…standing on the edge of a dark pier.
Aw, Sam, you're supposed to have Dean's back! But I can see him doing this without thinking because of his memories. You're so good at keeping them in character:
Yes! Dean is so slick!
>Twirling the pool cue easily around his wrist, Dean shoved the rubber-tipped end of it into Lloyd's gut as the man crept up behind him.
>When a hand ground hard into his left shoulder, Dean saw white. He felt a raw burn in his throat as a scream of pain tore through him.
This is a great line! I love this lady already:
Very interesting, I'm curious!
>an odd halo shimmering around her through his blurred eyes.
>Half my life's in books' written pages.
Oh, no... They're gonna have to tell Abe about John :(
>Abe released a breath of tension, thankful that the hunter hadn't once again mistaken him for his father in a confused tangle of pain.
>nodding once more at his now-snoring brother.
that's awesome! A dog protecting Metallicar:)
>"The dog wouldn't let anyone near… what?"
That's so sweet, I love it:
>Dean reached up to carefully brush some hair away from Sam's eyes, barely touching his brother,
I love how she put this:
>You're Bobby's boys, yeah?
Ah, Sam, observant and sweet and silly:
>"Hey, Abe," he said, his voice carrying a sleepy, pleased lilt that made Abe smile in return.
>"Uh-huh." A grin was plain in Dean's voice. "That's what we all say. Until there is a next time."
huh. Is this a comparison with one of our heroes?
>Doesn't really fit in with either pack. It's too wild for humans to tame and too tame to survive in the wild.
Awwww, so sad, *sniff*:
>A palpable feeling of devastation had replaced the gritty determination Abe had seen before.
and another awww moment:
>"G'night, bitch," Dean said, fingers resting lightly on the back of Sam's head.
>He felt his face pull tight in memory of need, of hope, of horrible disappointment.
OH, hahahah!!! Perfect Dean!
>Dean grinned. "Belladonna…isn't that the name of a porn star?"
oh, that's so cool, the concern goes both ways. Very good:
>"Your shoulder okay?"
"It will be."
"You need some aspirin?"
OMG, this whole exchange was so good:
>"'M okay, Sam." His whisper was far from convincing.
"Are you hurting?"
Ah, jeez, crying again:
>His body was ticking like a cooling engine. He felt his heartbeat in his shoulder, his eye, his head—nearly everywhere but his chest. He closed his eyes, feeling the moisture gather there immediately to combat the burn. He let the tears trail down the sides of his face into his hair in the dark.
I think your story legs are back. That last scene was particularly awesome. I'm so looking forward to this story! Welcome back to the real world, GS, we've missed you a lot :-)
Kel -- your reviews are incredible. I feel like I'm reading over your shoulder as you go. The closer you get to the end with your comments, the tighter my stomach gets hoping you like how I ended the chapter. Thanks so much for the time you take to do this, and for all the help you give along the way.
I hope you enjoy what's to come!!
Reviewer: EagleGirl6 Signed
Date: 04/02/08 Title: Chapter 2: See
Hope you don't mind my wordiness, but I like to share with you just a very few of the parts I enjoy the most:) Although I guess I can't really quote the whole story, can I...?
This is an amazing turn of phrase:
*laughs loudly* ME? Mind WORDINESS? You of all people know how much I love words. :) Thanks so much for the time you spend with your reviews. I adore them. I look forward to them. They help sustain me.
And I know that was a mean cliffie, but it was the perfect breaking point for what is on the way. Oh, have to say, your comment about the imagination coming up with the possessed jukebox and whiskey eyes had me grinning. Thanks for that!
Reviewer: EagleGirl6 Signed
Date: 13/02/08 Title: Chapter 3: Look
Whew, you have some nice turns of phrase in these intro sections:
>... let laughter trip over insanity as the brief rebellion failed and the human will succumbed to acquisition.
Dude, where do you come up with this??? It's so good!
>Combing through the maze of dark memories, it nibbled on loneliness with a cackle of childlike glee.
Oh damn! I 'bout forgot Dean had just gone over the edge...
Oh, sweet! Lobo saved Dean, then an aurora lights him up, that's awesome!
>Abe stepped forward as the light from the humming gasses above them built, increasing in beauty and intensity and casting a greenish hue over the body at the edge of the water.
Uh Oh, this doesn't sound good:
This is an interesting way thing to say, that Abe is wary of Sam... hmmm:
>Sam was aware that Abe was speaking very carefully, as if wary of Sam. His frown deepened. "Okay."
Is this a comparison of some sort? I'm thinking of DALDOM, I think:
>"The dog is loyal to a fault. It will return to a master time and again, regardless of treatment."
Oh, poor Dean, bleeding tummy is really getting me!
>"It wasn't bleeding before." The gash on Dean's belly had suddenly seemed to open up, spilling copious amounts of precious blood.
I love this exchage; you do the best dialog ever!
>"Did you help him?"
"I'm gonna kill him." Sam felt his lips draw back against his teeth in a snarl.
Aww, I love these visuals:
>Unable to do more than hold him, Sam rested his chin once more on the top of Dean's head, relishing the rarity of contact, the physical closeness with his brother he hadn't felt in a long time.
>He felt a slight whoosh of air as Lobo sank into the sand, resting his head on Sam's leg, his muzzle on Dean's arm.
Wow, this is the kind of little detail that sets you above:
>Abe lifted his gaze to the stars, knowing their dead light offered comfort to some. They chilled him tonight.
hehehe, that's so "Dean"!
>"Not something I want to hear from my little brother when I'm lying half naked in his lap."
"You're such a friggin' jerk." Sam said affectionately.
This is SO awesome! I was thinking as I read the italics, "which one?" and that's what you meant! Great job!
>He needs you to forgive him, Abe thought suddenly, realizing he wasn't sure which brother he was referring to—the one who had allowed the possession, or the one that had been possessed.
Okayyyy, just the mention of Dean's fly is sending quivers through my person...
>Amazingly, it wasn't bleeding either. Fear born of blue-tinged skin around his brother's full lips had Sam dismissing the wound and fumbling with Dean's button-fly.
Oh, this is so awesome, I love how you compare Dean's voice to John's:
>the roll of sound from Dean's full lips was reminiscent of John Winchester—water over rock, focused, but rough.
Oh, poor Dean, this is so good, especially right after the voice comparison:
<"I can't tell you why, Dean."
"Dad? Hey! Wait, no—Dad!"
Aww, this is very endearing, Sam:
>Sam made sure he didn't take more than Dean, though he was ravenous.
I'm intrigued by this...:
>He'd felt caution and wariness from Abe directed at him since they'd begun the search for Dean and he couldn't pinpoint the cause.
This is really good, so... Dean:
>"We escaped," Dean pointed out. "That's what matters….ah! Shit."
"Yes," Dean snapped, continuing forward.
"Fine!" Sam huffed.
>"Fate has a way of creating intersections where we strive to build parallel paths."
Oh, crap, what a way to end it! You did a great job building the boys right into a place where you want them - excellent. Now, about the next chapter???
Ta failte romhat
Oh WOW -- you used Gaelic in your review!! *laughs with delight*
That was too awesome. Thanks for this, my friend. Your reviews keep me going. Wouldn't want to do this w/out your help.
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