I've really enjoyed reading this so far. You've written some very compelling plot twists and I like the additional characters you've come up with...

...keen to read the rest of this so get to work girl...I'm interested to find out where this leads.

Love the other characters you're introducing into this, LD sounds very interesting, and this line...

"I need a long night of sex with a set of frisky twins and a couple of beers, that's all" Dean lifted his head off John's hands. "Don't worry, I'm fine".

...lol, this is Dean to a T...

Nice work!

First time I read the first few chapters, I wasn't reviewing - but I need to put that right as it's such a great story!

This is 'menacing' , and with Dean pretty helpless, a bad guy he's never seen, and a threat he can't guard against, this is compeling stuff! 

Gonna try to make it through the whole story, cos want to get on to the sequel.

...wear your emotions like other people wear their clothes....love that line. And like the way you've used the idea of neither brother being able to handle others getting hurt because of them - very true to the series!

Gruesome, but real to Charlie's character. Suddenly it's all 'hands on and personal' with a blade - where as before - all from a distance with a rifle. I like the way you paced this.

The blood on the lips thing - a whole new level of dark!

I agree, it was always gonna be Sammy that would break him, one way or another.

Got to say, the dialogue - mental torture - in this chapter is as dark as the physical.

Reading this one chapter after the other, It really shows how well this is paced, like a pot getting to boiling point - not sure if that's deliberate or if its just a 'happy accident.'

Only just remembered all the 'Yellow brick road' references in this story.

Like the way you've set up the biggest twist of all in this chapter.

Dean, not salting and burning the body should go down in Winchester history as one really bad move!!!

And there it is, God I love this twist, it's probably one of the most surprising direction changes I've ever read.

I like 'sneaky' Dean, It's very true to his character, and to the series.

Also great to see a very believable Bobby, he's always been one of my fav's.

Ahhh, we just know the s**t's gonna hit the fan but we want it to anyway.

I loved this the first time I read it and again now. Your attention to detail and emotions, makes this such a believable story and it's paced just right.

Just sorry I'ts taken me so long to review, you've been on my list forever, but glad I have now.

Very cool story Bambers!!!

Modifications???? What a place to end the chapter, this is torture, hope the next chap isn't too long. Great work, as always.

Author's Response: Thanks loads for reading :) Cruel place to end it, true - but I've managed to get the next chapter uploaded now... I can't believe it's not over. :D Hope you enjoy!