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Penname: loftymnd [Contact]
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Real name: Lisa Kay Status: Member Member Since: 06/03/07 Website: Beta-reader: Reviews by loftymnd Summary:
This is what happens when Sam and Dean meet two female hunters going by the names of Michelle and Amber. They'll discover a life beyond hunting and that others can be just as deadlily as they are. How will they handel this new life of hunting and how much will Amber and Michelle change them? This takes place after Pilot! It's sort of like my own little missing episodes! :D Categories: Romance Characters: None Challenges: Series: supernatural Chapters: 18 Completed: No Word count: 102689 [Report This] Published: 17/01/07 Updated: 03/12/08
Reviewer: loftymnd Signed
 Date: 22/03/07 Title: Chapter 1: The Graveyard Lady I didn't get any further than Amber saying she was sorry to Dean for hitting his car and I just had to stop and comment. So far I had to reread what little I got through twice and skim it a third time.It's a little confusing how Amber was the sassy one when she hit Dean's car then all of a sudden she became the mellower one.Same with Michelle and her "cute" wave to Sam then the attitude in the store.Saying as long as she didn't have to ride with "him"(meaning Dean,I guess) when up until then they hadn't minced words or anything to merit that comment she made.Not to mention-you didn't even give the girls the slightest descriptions - physical or otherwise. Leaving the reader to draw there own visual of the girls only to have it confused when you finally do get to their descriptions.I like when a story jumps right into it but this just doesn't seem to work.The guys just happening to bump into a set of female hunters and not being the least bit set back.Accepting it right away and even the way they all got together.Sam just says lets go together.Its just odd.I am going to read some more in hopes the story gets better....maybe a little more sophisticated in style. Author's Response: I'm sorry really don't like my story. I'm also sorry I didn't put descriptions in. The only reason I didn't put descriptions in, because I usually do, was because this story was orginally made for just my best friend and my enjoyment. I just put it on the internet to see what other people thought. (I was already seven chapters in before I even put it on the internet.) Also, Amber and Michelle switched to their actually additudes in the store. Amber was orginally pissed off at Michelle and Dean and her hitting doors didn't help. She just calmed down when she was in the store. Michelle, on the other hand, is a hot head, but thinks Sam is cute. She was just flirting with Sam and she doesn't like Dean (throughout the whole story may I say) which makes her hot headedness reach a peak. I'm not trying to change you're opnion bacause I respect your opnion. (that's why this is on here in the first place) I just wanted to clear some things up and I hope I did. If I didn't, I'm sorry again. Summary:
A new hunt brings to light the brothers' buried fears and asks the question: Can we really survive what we are raised to be? Categories: General Characters: None Challenges: Series: Shadow Stalker Chapters: 18 Completed: Yes Word count: 45836 [Report This] Published: 24/01/07 Updated: 09/03/07
Reviewer: loftymnd Signed
 Date: 16/03/07 Title: Chapter 14: Chapter 14 ooooh,how very clever.I love it! Summary:
The brother's strengths are tested when they are confronted by both a supernatural threat... and a human one. Dean must face his fear of losing his brother in order to save not only Sam, but himself as well. Categories: General Characters: None Challenges: Series: None Chapters: 8 Completed: Yes Word count: 94133 [Report This] Published: 08/02/07 Updated: 28/03/07
Reviewer: loftymnd Signed
Date: 15/03/07 Title: Chapter 6: Chapter 6 Oh bummer.....I didnt realize this wasn't done! I hate that...when are the other two chapters coming? I have read all your other stories and absolutely love your writing! I am going to go nuts waiting.Thankfully Supernatural is on tonight but I am sure its another repeat.Grrr! By the way,I really like the character Brenna.I found myself at times on the edge of my seat reading.I do think Dean and Sam sound more like gay lovers than brothers on occasion...but I get there situation and relationship is unique because of the life they lead but still....at times,it just seems a little to much.It would also be nice to see Sam use HIS powers a little more given the tension between Brenna and he over her insight into Dean.Although I love her character it would be cool to have Sam trump her in this area.And in general,get a little more use out of his gift.Then again...I am not the way cool writer here.That would be you... Thanks so much for your stories.Can't wait for more.
Author's Response: Okay, this review made me laugh out loud! First, I'll address your WIP worry -- the story will be complete by the end of March. I will be starting to work with the team at the Virtual Season and have an episode to write! :) I hope that keeps you from going nuts. Next, I have to say that you are literally the first person to say that Sam and Dean sound more like gay lovers than brothers (on occasion) in my stories. I was so surprised by that candor that I laughed. Thanks for sharing that with me. I do think their unique situation and the pressure that Dean is under to protect Sam (and has been all of his life) coupled with the pressure Sam feels for his apparent destiny makes for a bit of a different brotherly relationship. I just write the boys as I see them in my head. And, well, since I'm female, admittedly I probably write them a bit more emo than they might be were they real. But that's the beauty of fiction -- fanfiction in particular. You can write as you wish and if you're lucky, someone out there will like your take on it. You seem to be enjoying the story, though, by your eagerness to see the last two chapters, and for that I am very pleased. So, thank you. OH, and about Brenna -- I'm glad you like her. Sam will be using his power more, but as far as trumping Brenna... as I see it, his power is a bit different from hers and I think Sam's a little afraid of it. Because it's a connection to the Demon. Brenna doesn't have that fear, so she's a bit stronger than he is. Again, as I see it... so, take that as you will. Thank you so much for reading and taking time to review. I hope you enjoy the last parts, and I'd love to see what you think. GS Summary:
Valkyrie, Dean and Sam (Banner by Tru_Faith_Lost)
Souls sometimes travel the same path together. Who protects the protector? Sam is snatched by a serial killer who finds out justice according to Dean Winchester doesn't involve a court room. Categories: General, Action Characters: None Challenges: Series: Two Souls Chapters: 15 Completed: Yes Word count: 56075 [Report This] Published: 08/02/07 Updated: 29/03/07
Reviewer: loftymnd Signed
Date: 16/03/07 Title: Chapter 9: Chapter 8 ok I would have commented sooner but I didnt want to have to stop in my edge of the seat reading and then clicking page after page.Now I know I am at the end and I want it to stretch out longer.I am not ready...this is sooo good! Freaky.I am not sure if you are still interested in comments so I will say only this.....you are one hell of a story teller.Thanks .....Author's Response: Always interested in comments! LOL And thank you SO much! There will still be a few more chapters before we're done, so don't wander off too far. Thanks again. Laura
Reviewer: loftymnd Signed
Date: 23/03/07 Title: Chapter 12: Chapter 11 while waiting for your next chapter I read some other stories here.Your writing sorta spoiled me toward some of the other writer.Thanks for posting more.You saved me from slumming in bad storyville..lol
Reviewer: loftymnd Signed
Date: 04/04/07 Title: Chapter 15: Chapter 14/Epilogue This story was awesome !! I almost cried when they were leaving without the dog.I really liked how they ended up going back all the while telling each other they cant have a dog.Nice touch.The very end was great too.Over all I enjoyed this story very much.Thank you for writing and sharing it with others. I'm glad you liked it , thanks for reading.
Laura Summary:
A spate of disappearances leads the boys to a small community, where they find the locals less than helpful. What is out in the woods that the townspeople are hiding? And will it take one of the Winchester boys as its next victim? Categories: Action Characters: None Challenges: Series: None Chapters: 6 Completed: Yes Word count: 23898 [Report This] Published: 24/02/07 Updated: 14/03/07
Reviewer: loftymnd Signed
Date: 19/03/07 Title: Chapter 6: Epilogue I always want to comment on the stories I read but feel intimidated by it. Like I might say something wrong - but I figured with this story , I would take a chance.I read it out loud to my son and we both liked it very much.We ended up finishing it on St.Patrick's day and it was a nice end to a fun day.Thank you for sharing something that we will always remember with fondness. Thank you so much! I am really honoured that you liked it enough to read it to your son. That touches my heart. I write to satisfy my creative urge, but mainly to give something to others. Comments like yours reassure me that I am doing my job. Thanks again. Summary:
Categories: Orphan Characters: None Challenges: Series: supernatural, The Others, The Others, Creature Feature, love or hate?, what will dean do ?, love or hate?, Strange Angels, Strange Angels, Winchester Single Shots, Winchester Single Shots Chapters: 0 Completed: No Word count: 0 [Report This] Published: 31/12/69 Updated: 31/12/69
Reviewer: loftymnd Signed
Date: 27/03/07 Title: Chapter 3: Chapter 3 Ooooh this one sounds like it's gonna be good.Scary too...........thanx for the nightmares........lol
Reviewer: loftymnd Signed
Date: 27/03/07 Title: Chapter 3: Chapter 3 Wow.....just wow ! This is going to be good.This is the first time since I started reading fanfic here that I thought "this I would love to see on Thursday night television". It almost makes me want to stay away until you finish the story so I can read the rest all at once.Who am I kidding tho? I will be checking daily I'm sure.Thanks so much for the beginnings of what can only be a kick ass story Summary: Deancentric. Set after In My Time of Dying.
Categories: Romance, General Characters: None Challenges: Series: The Coming War Chapters: 9 Completed: Yes Word count: 23900 [Report This] Published: 18/03/07 Updated: 22/03/07
Reviewer: loftymnd Signed
Date: 21/03/07 Title: Chapter 7: Chapter 7 The story is great so far with the exception of the errors.There were so many it was hard at times to remain focused on the story.Some sentences missing two to three words and taking more than two reads to place what you were trying to say.Also Dean seemed way to Sam like.I found it a little unbelievable though it was nice for a change not reading over and over again how Sam was the only thing that mattered to him...that gets a little ...well - gay after awhile.Cant wait for the rest of it.I love your style and I found myself being swept right up in the tale.You are a talented storyteller.Thank you for sharing your talent with the less fortunate...lol Thanks for the review, I went back over the exsisting chapters and cleaned it up. Hope you enjoy the ending.
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