Really enjoyed this begining - like the possibilities of where it might be heading. Know what you mean about the adictivness of hurting Dean - sooo wrong yet sooo much fun !!!!!

The Witch's logic in striking Dean was spot on in order to bring down the Winchester family, and like that whole lingering doom vibe you have going. Dean is written very convincingly here as are the tension's between John and Sam.

Am egar to read on ... unfortunately I have work and will have to savor this tomorrow - loooking forward to it though!!!!! Thanks for the read!

Abi.

There are so many things this story has going for it. The tension between John and Sam is well written - and pretty important here...???? (waggles eyebrows)

Also the role reversal of the brothers - with Sam doing the wet nursing for once.

And OMG - Puking Blood????!!! You know how to crank the tension lady.

Oooooh using the Old Man's first name - Sammy enjoys living dangerously doesn't he? But like how they seem to be pulling it together and co-operating for the sake of saving Dean.

You have many great lines in this chapter - pointed Winchester humor I call it ; the idea of Dean wanting to actually scratch his "brain itch" - great imagery. Also what has the ring of Classic Papa Winchester to it, this gem;

"“Whatever your brother is doing, tell him to get that ass of his back into a bed before I come down there and kick it.” "

Typical Dean - rushing in to solve the mystery and then reaping the consequences. Very well written medical paragraph - again. You really get the essence of the panic and the pain that Dean feels.

Sam explaining where his frustration comes from is so plausible you have to feel for him - but at the same time right now I just want him to get calm and figure out the puzzle before time runs out for Dean.

Continues to be suspenseful and thrilling ride.

PS. 3am ???? Your dedication paid off on this one !!!!  

Almost there Sammy - is it bad that I need to give him a huge SHOVE?!!!

Butting heads really is like a second form of communication for John and Sam isn't it? This fact makes your plot work so well.

Hope Dean survived their last spat!

Dean admitting that his family fighting broke his heart brought a lump to my throat because I believe he is the type that would rather chew out his own tongue than admit anything remotely tied to emo moments!!! The way he truly can't win in the Winchester family civil war is very clearly demonstrated - nice job, you can't help but feel for him.

Happy that Jim has figured it out - hope he can run like the wind before John and Sam really get into it!

Wonderfuly thought provoking piece - you draw the threads together skillfully. Liked the mention of the New Orleans gig from the piolet - would that this WAS John's motivation for taking off.

From someone who has trouble finding a sympathethic reading of John - this really worked for me. I believed the tenderness of his emotions and the genuine misunderstandings that drove one son away and crushed the other.

Welcome back!!!! ;-) Thanks for the read. Abi.

You continue to augment the present with the past in a fluid way. Both time zones have so much going on in them.

In the past - the tension between the brothers is palpable and cuts through those tight bonds of brotherhood we all look upon as unbreakable. The way you write Ruby's character is spot on in my estimate - she is like a permanent thorn in the most venerable spot in Dean's defences. She appears to have slithered into the growing space between him and Sam.

Does that language mean anything? Nice touch that Demons would have their own language and that Dean might recognize it from hell. The betrayal was brutal - Sam under the influence definitely, but leading himself there. Equally powerful is Dean's rebuttal that Sam is gaining all this power for him. Really superbly well written.

The future is being played out nicely too, it's the small touches that give this story it's solidity. For instance that bit about changing the combination locks - it speaks to Sam clearer than the six or seven times his brother tells him to get lost. Meg is also a great device - her history with Dean gets his immediate attention.

Story has me on the very edge of the seat - and just who is that masked chick Dean runs to?!!!!

Onward ....

You have outdone yourself. That must have been so challenging to write and yet it flowed effortlessly. The torture scene and Dean's approach to it really had me seeing this terrifying broken, dangerous creature forged in hell - stellar writing really!

Like the pace of the relationship between Dean and Elizabeth - the way he clings to her for forgiveness because she gave him back some semblance of himself - wonderful stuff.

Keep repeating myself Mary but you are doing a wonderful job on this - it has everything, action, pace, intrigue and such a depth of emotion. I count it as time very well spent and look forward to the last chapter.

Great read. Abi.

Really enjoyed this chapter. You might even be selling me on the "less is more" concept. It almost distills the situation you are writing - if you have to be sparing with your words, I guess you search harder for the more apt and meaningful ones.

Like the promise of impending Sam retribution!!

Another great chapter.

Abi

Like the way you catalogue their emotions. It cuts straight to where we need to be (without all those flowery words I think you must be missing... trust me though your tale is not lacking because they are!!) Action Sammy is a great way to end here.

Loggers? Really? Hmm would not have guessed that. Still your descriptives are amazing here- especially when you describe Sammy's eyes. But my favorite has to be "Goodwill worn away by brotherly love", it plays to the very heart of the dark roads their family devotion takes each of them in the cannon.

Enjoyed the double drabble - for me I thought your story was getting there, though perhaps this part of your tale needed more fleshing out (no pun intended). So ham fisted Loggers working for something tall dark and toothy??? More like it - don't really know why that didn't quite sit with me, the fact that Dean was taken out by humans. Of course it would have happened often with their lifestyle!

Liked the progression of his thoughts as he realizes where he is - practical panicker Dean's first thoughts (maybe afet ouch?) is that Sammy was spared this, very in character!