The frustration and bitterness just comes off every verse. There is a real fear here that Sam believes he will become like his Father, driven by revenge and hatred... because in his world, run by his Father, the hunt is ALL. You have some very powerful lines here;

"Drink to your death instead"

John doesn't show emotions to his boys, no tears and maybe his method of coping is the bottle.

Loved the harsh;

"Trash your soul
Leave it to die."

Sam doesn't see his Father in the same heroic light that Dean does.... maybe because he has Dean's loving example as an alternative.

Your poetry is rich in dark images and emotive - Sam's jumble of fear and resentment are laid bare here and give us all a very clear picture of why he felt he had to go. Amazing job!

Louey, another beautifully sculpted chapter. I am as impressed with the way you are plotting your story, as I am with your awesome writing skills that reach down my throat and give my heart strings a tug. The way every detail of this hunt is reminding the boys of how desperate and heartbreaking a situation they find themselves in. The way Mrs Reece suffered and died in a year, the way Mr Reece had two short weeks that was an eternity to his tortured mind to try and come to terms with his loss - clever stuff Lou. Sam losing it on this hunt and Dean finding that all the fear and pain he is fighting so hard to retain is seeping out - gut wrenching stuff. Your work is so absorbing and scathingly true to character - that I had to take a break half way through ... it is not often that I am that moved by a story. But while the death sentence hanging over Dean is oppressive, there is a dreadful magnetism to the way you are writing this that compels the reader to read on.

Sure hope Bobby knows as much as he's half letting on he does. If John was all about tough love as a Father, Bobby (who is undeniably a Father figure for the boys) is all about gruff love - he says all those things (albeit reluctantly) that John probably should have. And I loved that he is so astute in his analysis of Dean's role in Sam's salvation.

"They were gonna save Dean Winchester, one way or another, even if he didn’t want to be saved. And if Bobby had to march into hell and drag him out by the scruff of the neck, well…he might just damned well do that too. " Go get him Bobby!!!!

Brilliant work here Louey, too many beautiful lines to quote.

Firstly I have to let you know that I am appreciating your writing skills on face value, as I haven't watched this far on in the season... but I needed a quick fix and I have enjoyed your work in the past (yes, it kind of does sound like I am calling you a "sure thing" right?!). Now having gotten that out of the way.... you haven't lost your touch! I liked this piece a lot. I know I am not appreciating it in context of the show, but as a reader. I loved your description of thousands of rings of Demons and representing the hierarchy through their eye colour. The circle thing was a little Dante and worked for me. The effect of this dream (premonition?) on Dean was fantastic, the physical response and psychological fallout- excellent stuff. Sam really seems to be at the end of his rope trying to cope with the "I'm fine" act!!!!

And you bring it all back to normal with the boys usual banter - that really is the source of their heroism for me, that whole laughing in spite of it all thing, and you wrote it here really well.

All in all - good fix, thank you!!!!

Touching and beautifully written - deserving of the nomination it reserved. The description of the storm and Dean's trip down memory lane was colourful and poetic.

I have admired your artwork in the banners you make for stories, but it seems that along with your pictures... your words tell a thousand... words!! Measured piece of work conveying so much more. Brilliant.

Nice work, your descriptive style is beautiful, very poetic, especially the start.

I like the way you had Dean talking through his feelings with the ghost - it seems fitting and so sad at the same time. It also played very well when you had Dean accuse Sam of being a "girl" though that is usually the Dean Winchester brush off - it will now strike me as something a little more. I can't imagine spirits always go so peacefully, so I have to smile at this surreal moment for Dean - and appreciate all the Alice in Wonderland references more.

Skillfully written and thoughtfully put together - great work author.

Bittersweet all the way!! What a touching image, and I liked how you drew back the curtain, revealing the brothers lives and the fact that at last Dean was not alone. Though this was sad, it was pretty wonderful too and had a comforting tone to it. Dean's message of Farewell for now, and love gugh!!!! I think what made it more bearable was that they had such a full life, and obviously did so much good with it, also the fact that Dean seems to have found a path for himself that means he can let Sam go without needing to follow him immediately - no deals here. How differently this plays to that other time Sam died.

Really enjoyed Grandpa Dean, and love that song - thanks for the read! 

Really liked the way you depict Sammy's grief here - giving him something to compare to Dean's experience after Cold Oak - especially "Every breath without his brother was painful…..every heart beat". And Dean's loss was sudden, Sam realises that he has been preparing himself (unsuccessfully - because nothing ever does I guess) for the conclusion of the Deal, yet when it comes (albeit early) he is devastated. What chance did Dean have of coping?

Love the tracks you have Dean's mind flowing down, Ben and Lisa, and passing on something to Sam, wishing he had more to give and releasing Sam from that titanic sense of duty that had worn him down all his life.

The clincher for me in all this was when Dean refers to Sam as "the best of the Winchesters", he is the one the other two fought so hard and surrendered so much to save.

I have to admit that I haven't watched this episode, but I can appreciate the warm, touching heartfelt way you have written this. Good job author! Thanks for the read.

Ladies,

You still manage to be the wildest ride around... where DO you get your inspiration from?!!!

Liked the shadowing of Season 3 - very unique viewpoint from both brothers, love that they actually are identifiable as brothers, despite all the off the wall stuff.

So chapter itself, it had me in stitches!!! It was a combination of well sculpted lines and just clever concepts like "curse rage" and almost choked on the Manolo Blahniks!!!! I am a comfy shoe girl... but we all know that there are occasions when even the most liberated amongst us conforms to those torture devices on our feet!!!! How brave of you both to expose what EVERY woman knows in her heart of hearts!!!!! LMAO!!!

Love the updates on Belepheron long road back to recovery - how many different droll gags do you'll have up your devilish selves?!!!!  

Continue to LOVE this witty combination of mythology and madness - the inspired kind - it is so unique and continues to deliver everything from the giggles to the unseemly howling/snorting laughter of the truly GONE!!!!

Bev, Louey, hats off to you both on this one - can't wait to see what you have planned for Chapter 3 - the title alone is worth the wait!!!!

Abi.

The scary thing here is how bright you too really are, and what fiendish ploys you will come up with next!!!! The way you blend such an array of myth, philosophy and pop culture with your own (now patented, I hope?!) mixture of mayhem and madness is mind-blowing! The ideas you throw together or innocently slip into sentences make this whole story work so well. Snuffy as head Hell Hound RUNT, the guild of Succubae, Kronos from the Valkyrie division and many other gems just go to show how deviously talented you both are.

By the way I am getting a little concerned that Tuffy might have the right of things and that Lust really is a 'Man-eater'?!!!! What in the Win****ter does she think she is up to?!

The word Fistycuffs is not used nearly enough - though I am a little concerned that Belle has instigated it!!! Small glimmer of hope... or should that be Hellfire (?) on the horizon that Tuffy is such a well trained demon.

But getting ahead of myself there... Enjoyed Tuffy's tirade about the 'Feathered Freak' using his hell hound as a seeing eye dog. LMAO at the thought of his greatest fear of Snuffy showing himself up when the Deal comes due and he leads the pack to retrieve Dean..."starts humping his leg instead of chewing on it!"

The idea that you have expanded from last chapter of involving not just threads from the series (like Dixon) but the UnGen is clever. And I have to agree with Tuffy's appraisal 100% on March's reading list.

"At the moment they have a list following the exploits of the worst of us and I must say, the daemonic works depicted have been a true inspiration. "

The idea of a Man-bag and public transport both being Demonic in origin is a given... you ladies are tortured geniuses aren't you?!!!

As for Belle's tirade - whoa! Thought the comparison between Dean's "I'm tired" and Tuffy's weak spittle, lacklusture, current state of mind was convincing and clever. Liked the brotherly advice to let the;

"Bwahhahahaha, Come forth foul human and let me feast upon thy tender flesh’ as befits a Hadian of the first water!"

But someone has to point out to Big Bro Belle, that his Dean-side is showing.... "You said doodoo, dude!  No one who has credibility down here says doodoo!" LOL!

The 'Gobs' verses 'spits example was a classic and as usual I found so many more phrases and idea's here that I would like to pull out and congratulate you both on, but I quote way too much as it is!!!!! LOL! Inspired stuff - on to next chapter - though I may run out of time to review.... have to read though, I am actually nervous about this Duel and what it could mean. See how well you dames have worked the brother angel?!!!    

Last chapter eh- well I am bolstered with promises of more... maybe. What will I do without my insight into Hades High society and Tuffy's high jinx up top?!!!

Well I can see Tuffy was heading for home once he decided to go to the sheriff's office to seek out the Wi*******rs. LOL at his attempts to 'self-exorcise'!!!! As always with Tuffy it's the casual comments that slays me (but apparently NOT him in 'pinky' form!!!). Liked the catalogue of violent ends he tried to bring to himself, culminating with his failed attempt to swing off a bridge; "hung around till I got bored then went for a cup of tea" -LoL!!! I thought Tuffy's inventive punishment of the clergy man was positively Trickster-esque!!!!! He has grown right in front of us, no longer simply exploding the problem away!!! Tuffy is definitely growing up - no longer quite so Hoof loose and Horn free - he is now arguing (sounding a little like Belle, by the way) for organisation; "Honestly, I despair sometimes and no matter how many times you tell them to get some T shirts printed up and a pamphlet with battle cries all printed out, they just ignore you" He really does sound like the Gordan Britass of the Van guard doesn't he? Must be his old school Demon genes rearing their multiple heads!!!!!

As for BELLE... (my Beau!!!) fancy being accepted into the most elevated Evil family like that - just because Snuffy tried to get one back for Pup kind!!!!! Loved his acting 'drama-queen-of the-damned' classes... with none other than Brando himself and LMAO at the directors cut ending to the Von Crap saga in the 'Sound of Muzac'. Belle really is an upper-crusty Daemon isn't he? I have to say that I am relieved that Tuffy made it home safely - even if we don't know the outcome of the duel, we know the brothers were together... kind of like another diabolical deadline with our Favorite Brothers hmm? I also really enjoyed the idea of Supernatural taking over the underworld with T-shirts paying homage to Dean-isms!!!! Fitting!

Lastly the idea for this was nothing short of genius Ladies and I have had such a good time reading all the mad-cap and the mayhem... all there is left to say is... Tuffy and Belle know how to find me... all they have to do is 'click' ... those boyz know how to 'click don't they????

You really are cranking up the Dean pain for us here - God bless you for that LOL!!!!! This continues to build into a bigger more menacing puzzle - what has happened to Dean?!!! I am not medically canny in anyway but this whole not breathing thing can't be concussion induced can it? And who's the lady with the baby - doesn't she realize there is a designated queue for those of us waiting to "Welcome" Dean home?!!! Lol.

On a serious not though - the tone and tension of your piece is magnetic and so well timed - loving this - I may miss a review or two in my dash to the next chapter though!!!! Great Work! 

OMG - hallucinating Dean has some scary imagination - congratulations on a very Stephen King tilt to this story - the chapter endings have just the right amount of hook in them. Also your visual descriptions are great - tap dancing Elephants - very creative!! ;-)

You have the brothers language down well too - enjoyed the argument - Dean using logic against Sam?Nice - but that Sammy is a tenacious one!!!! Enjoying the read!