Oh wow that is just so friggin' sad!  How could John not have noticed?!  

This is a very thrilling story!  You've got me completely hooked.  You've captured Dean's voice so very well.  Awesome!  It was obvious that Dean would never let go, not even to save his own life, and it's so like him to do whatever he could to cushion Sam's fall by wrapping himself around Sam.  

Oh, and you've managed to get me seriously pissed off at John for not listening!  I can understand John misunderstanding on the phone, but how could he not notice that both his boys are seriously injured and not just Sam?  It took him long enough to see! Poor Dean, no wonder he's got serious daddy issues!  I just feel so sad for him! Especially here "He hasn't noticed, can't see that I'm barely staying conscious, he doesn't know me, not well enough...I mean I spend every waking moment with the man, and he still doesn't know me." Seriously, poor Dean! 

Sorry, I'm getting perhaps a little too involved-your fault for writing something so awesome I guess. :P

Anyway, this is very intense, and very well written.  I can't wait to see what happens next, especially with the oncoming storm.    Oh and I really like Dean's reaction to John's mentioning of a helicopter.  It made me chuckle.  Here the poor guy is trying to communicate how serious his injuries are, then he's thinking "I'm pretty sure I can climb out of here and walk...I don't need a helicopter." Keep up the awesome work and update soon!

That was really cute!  There are a few typos, but nonetheless I enjoyed this little story.  It had two elements I love, humor and Dean whumpage and it was done quite nicely.  Thanks for that, it was an enjoyable read.