Why have the creepy townsfolk latched onto Dean? And what is that thing that's trying to electrocute him? Is it something the townspeople have unleashed, or something they try to keep appeased?

Ugh, too many questions. Thank heavens Sam's still fighting for his brother - and I just knew that Dean was being influenced by something. Whether it was the thing in the town or something else that the town entity has sensed already within him, I'm not sure. But I knew that couldn't be the real Dean. 

And now Sam's been hurt again and kicked out of town, locked out by a supernatural barrier.

Wonder who he's calling for help. Hope it's Bobby. I love Bobby.

Jules

Know all about writer's block - and how damned frustrating it is. Hang in there.

Hmm, so Chelsea knows what's going on between the Winchesters. And just who did carry Sam out of the closet and lay him on the bed? Dean? Or someone else?

I'm still holding onto the belief that something sinister is at work on Dean. And probably on Sam as well, given the waves of emotion he's feeling and how they're affecting him.

Chelsea's right - they need to leave, now. Before something terrible happens. 

Jules

That was ominous - the town isn't what it seems. So is Chelsea giving him a warning, or a clever bit of misdirection? 

So sad that Sam is feeling helpless and lost - and scared, it seems - around his brother because of Dean's inability to deal. And that bruise didn't bode well for what's going on between them at the moment. 

Jules

"Shut up and blow..." *giggle, snort, chortle*.... And the beauty mark - priceless.

Wonderful bit of fluff. I did wonder whether the dolls came already inflated....and I'm so not asking where the little nozzle was.....

Thanks for sharing, Vanessa.

Jules

Oh, my gosh! They're here????

That is going to send Sam into full-on little brother panic/protect mode.

Hell's bells, has the ghost already gotten to Ursula, or is she just a really, really big bitch? That icy smile sent chills down my spine, I can tell you.

Thank heavens Sam gave Dean his mobile phone before he left the room - at least Dean could call for help. Hurry, Sam - get those long legs moving!

Oh, and I'm sorry, I forgot to mention that I really love your poetry at the start of each chapter. You truly have a great gift.

Jules

Ooh! Hurt Deany-babe. And freaked out Deany-babe, by the sounds of that last yell....*rubs hands together with unholy glee*....

Love the little girl's thought about Sam - the tall man with the pretty eyes....awwwwwwwwww - out of the mouths of babes but so true.

Could picture Sam trying to distract the spirit with everything he had - even though the actual scene was told in retrospect, I was still taken there.

And what an a/h to run a stop sign and almost wipe out the boys on their way to hospital! Hope there was a cop at the next corner and the d*ckhead was pinged for speeding!

Wonderful start, Vanessa - we're off and running!

Oh,and sorry I haven't replied to the email yet - I've been unwell, and my hands have copped another infection - well, an allergic reaction. But the rash and blisters are clearing up, so I'll be back on the keyboard with a vengeance soon.

Jules

Oh, my poor Dean - lost, hurt, sick and desperately trying to find the brother he thought was dead. Ooh, and he smacked the doc a good one, too - I don't think he's going to be their star patient, somehow.....

Love how Sam could soothe him, and could imagine Sam's fear, too, of seeing his brother restrained - no wonder the puppy eyes came out in full force. Even Tricksters aren't immune to those deadly little weapons.

And really loved Dean's head coming to rest against Sam's arm - that was a lovely "awwww" moment for me. And my Pollyanna soul needs those "awww" moments.

Great job, Ness - sorry it's taken me so long to get back. Pain in my hands is a bit too much for me to write tonight, so I'm reading instead - and I just had to catch up on yours. I love your work.

Remember that pedestal....ROFL!

Jules

Great scene with Sam and that wanker of a security guard, Ness. I love it when Sam uses his height to intimidate - he doesn't do it often, but when he does, it's a thing of beauty. Sam in full-on protective/pissed mode is downright scary.

Oh, and I'm so glad that little jumped-up sod missed the Impala and got his own shoe with that disgusting golly he hawked up.

Hmm...the docs are suspicious - not good. And Dean's about to wake up by the looks of things. This should be fun....*rolls eyes*

Well, I'm off again - right hand is going numb. But I'll be back.

Jules

Oh, my gosh! The thing is now in Monica! Dean's in deep shite.

Poor Sam's not even going to want to go for a pee break after this.

I'm beginning to love Mike. Great that he's allowing Sam to stay with Dean, especially after what happened. And I really loved the face-off between Sam and Ursula - go, Sammy!!! *waves imaginary pom-poms*. And Dean's comment about Sam being scary when he's angry was a gem.

Awesome work.

Jules

Oh - a Dear Jane letter - never saw that coming. I almost felt sorry for her......

That scene in Dean's room sent shivers up my spine. Thankfully a lifetime of trusting Sam's voice is keeping Dean on the bed and inside the salt ring, but for how long will he be safe...?

Jules

It was so sad to see Sam's faith take such a battering, both during S3 and especially S4, when he finally met the angels and realised they could be just as bad as demons. And what a cruel twist of fate for the one who believed in God to be the one marked by demons?

My heart breaks for Sam and his lost faith. 

Jules

Love the fact that the title, even from the first chapter, could be taken a few different ways: Sam running into that bar, John letting his temper get the better of him, Dean deciding to leave his father and brother alone, John not telling Sam the real reason he doesn't want him to leave, Sam drinking all that beer, not taking his phone.

And he's written himself off in a very short space of time, too - we all know he's such a lightweight. His defences will be down and that's not a good sign.

Hope Dean can find Sammy before he gets into real trouble.

Jules

I hope that cow Joanna goes down hard for what she did to Sam. And yes, she was right - that was totally the wrong thing to say to John.

I knew it was going to be bad....poor Sammy - his heart stopped and he's not breathing. Can imagine Dean's panic and John's anger.

They're right - it's going to be a long night.

Jules