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Real name: Andrea / Andi Status: Member Member Since: 28/11/07 Website: Beta-reader: No
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Reviews by lillelouis Summary:
S4 SPOILERS up to 4x14. My vision of The End. (Maybe.) Includes, inevitably, character death. Was once a 2-shot, now it's a 3-shot: I simply couldn't bear to leave it like that. Rated T for language and (t)issues. Categories: General, AU Characters: None Challenges: Series: An End, A Middle and a Fresh Start Chapters: 3 Completed: Yes Word count: 11378 [Report This] Published: 14/02/09 Updated: 22/02/09
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 Date: 14/02/09 Title: Chapter 1: A Bang And A Whimper Oh no you didn't?! You don't have to worry about being shot, you're gonna get EATEN if you don't finish this! *Dramatic gopher look* Hurry hurry, type till your fingers itch! (Was going to say bleed, but I'm not completely heartless) Looking forward to the second chapter! :D Wiiiii Author's Response: Next chapter coming as soon as it's been tweaked - probably mid-week. It's this Real Life thing that gets in the way, LOL! Glad you liked it!
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Date: 17/02/09 Title: Chapter 2: What You Leave Behind Aww... So I'm secretly hoping we'll get to see Sam and Dean as angels in the epilogue, looking down on everyone with compassionate smiles?... No?... Guess I'll just have to pace myself and wait... I like the set-up. The way you make it seem so logicsl and inevitable that they became angels. Like, "why not?" Very nice. Very nice writing as always, hun. Oh and I love the last line: Just what the hell does that mean? Very, very nice. And I loved the quote as well, although it made me a little melancholic.... Nice of you to share it with us. Cheers, Andi :D Author's Response: Ooooh, Sam and Dean as ANGELS? You[d like to see that, wouldn't you? I guess we'll just have to wait and see, LOL Thanks for reading and reviewing as always...
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Date: 22/02/09 Title: Chapter 3: EPILOGUE: The Song Remains The Same Very lovely. Thank you very much for sharing that little goodie with us. I actually went ahead and read the T.S. Elliot poem and loved it. Never would have thought of doing that if I hadn't read this. Thank you. Wow - I'm pushing lit poems on people? LOL. Who'd have thought Guy Fawkes would factor into it? :) Thanks for reaching the end. And thanks for the stars! Glad this went over ok - I had visions of being slapped for killing them off like that, LOL. Summary:
Winchesters don't take losing lying down and they know how to play the odds — but some things out there are stronger than luck. This is the sixth story in my Gobsmacked 'verse. They are all listed in chronological order by clicking on the series link. ;-P Categories: Romance, AU, Humor, Misc Characters: None Challenges: Series: Gobsmacked Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes Word count: 11097 [Report This] Published: 16/02/09 Updated: 16/02/09
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Date: 17/02/09 Title: Chapter 1: Blackbird Ok so now we're moving into a whole 'nother level of the story. We're moving deeper into the inner workings of Penny Hillsworth. Still with the same great linguistic style. Very well written indeed. Good job blending the two different characters too. You not only made Penny fit in with the Winchers' lives, but you molded Dean and Sam around her life as well. AND BOBBY. VERY nice tease with Penny being the seventh child. Hoping we'll hear more about that later. I love the mysterious air surrounding her mother's ordeal. It makes for a great tease and it keeps us interested. I love that you rounded off the story with a happy note. Not sure I can handle too much heartbreak in one take. Very nice - and long - story. Thoroughly enjoyed it. I love that you, by making Penny comfortable with stories of The Old Ones, create so much more space for the story to develope. You bring so much potential into the story by making her aware of the things in the dark. You're opening a lot more doors as you progress in the story rather than closing them as the information is given and the endresult narrows. What I mean to say is, I often struggle to keep a story full of potential for as long as I possibly can, by keeping the details to a minimum. But what you're doing is to actually limit the information and make it work FOR the story, rather than against it. Very nice job with that. Uhh, what else.... I have a feeling that we're gonna see more of Penny as she joins the brothers on a few hunts? If you let her character hijack the plot, that is :) No, but seriously. I'm a little ambiguous about seeing Penny hunting, because that would automatically put her in a new class with the other supernatural-hunter-babes (like Jo and - to a certain extent - Ruby) Tough women who help the brothers fight the things in the dark. I'm honestly not sure how her character would change if that happened. I don't mind saying that I'm a little apprehensive and intrigued at the same time to see what she would look like then :D Because her curiosity and apprehension to the world of hunting is very much a part of her character, as far as I can gather (feel free to correct me if I'm wrong) :) But again, I love what you're doing with the characters. You don't have to worry about not sticking to their personalities as defined on the show. Very good job :) Looking forward to more. Whoof! That was a long one. I'm done... for now... Cheers, Andi :D Author's Response: No worries about the length. I am forever writing long comments to reviews. I think I scare people. OK, the one thing I can say is that I have never - ever - planned on Penny becoming a hunter. Her background is somewhat unique - and you're one of the few people who has ever made the connection with the seventh daughter scenario - and it does have bearing on the 'verse and on her role within the AU. There are specific themes I wanted to explore that never materialized on the show, so I created a 'verse of my own to explore them. That being said, I'm doing my best to provide a reasonable development for Sam and Dean based on the changes I've made in S2 by incorporating the Hillsworths. Oh. Penny hijacked the plot by going to the Roadhouse. That wasn't supposed to happen, but I went with it anyway because that's where Penny wanted to go. I don't want to ruin the rest by saying more but...thank you so much for the review. As always. ;) Summary:
18 years ago, everybody thought the last Winchesters were killed . But they didn't know that Dean left something behind. Mary Jefferson was raised by a hunter called Ronald Jefferson and thinks he's her father. But when he's killed, Mary gives up her dreams and tries to find the responsible. Along the way she finds the truth about herself and her family. Categories: General, Misc Characters: None Challenges: Series: None Chapters: 12 Completed: No Word count: 21129 [Report This] Published: 17/02/09 Updated: 05/01/11
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Date: 01/04/09 Title: Bloodline You seem to have all the basics in control, but I would love to see you playing with the words. Don't be afraid to express yourself in images! It would work wonders for the story, I think. Just one girl's oppinion :) So far nice work. And I LOVE the idea of this story. I can't wait to see how it evolves!! :D
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Date: 01/04/09 Title: Bloodline I love it so far. The plot is thickening, but I'd love to feel a little more from the characters. I'd love to see how much emotion you could infuse the characters with.
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Date: 01/04/09 Title: Bloodline I'd love to hear more about the previous events that seemed to have wiped all demons from the face of the earth. Good job so far. Really enjoying this.
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Date: 01/04/09 Title: Bloodline I'm falling in love with the story and I'm beginning to see a much more detailed character-life. Love James :) He's spunky! And I love Mary. She seems to have a very calm demeanor about her. Not too emotional, a little cold on the surface even. I can't wait to see how this evolves! Great job!
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Date: 01/04/09 Title: Bloodline A mysterious letter? Could it be... A long forgotten hunter maybe? perhaps perhaps perhaps... :D
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 Date: 01/04/09 Title: Bloodline Kay I have a theory about james. I think he might, in some weird way, like "twilight zone" weird, be Mary's cousin? Or related to Sam somehow? It was weird that he fell ill when he entered a town under divine protection... Am I right? On the right track at least? Not totally off base??
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Date: 01/04/09 Title: Bloodline This one was great, made me giggle: - You can't even stand. Come on, I'll carry you. - I'm strong enough to punch you if you try to touch me. A little bit of Dean in her after all. Very nice :) Ooooh 'only one person'?? Can't wait to see who that is :D Great job. Author's Response: Thank you for the reviews! Like I said, I'm not really a writer, I just had this idea in my head and I'm doing the best I can to put it into words, so it's good to hear from someone! As for your theories, maybe you're right. Who knows? :D
Once again thank you!
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Date: 20/04/09 Title: Bloodline I think you missed a call as a script writer :) This is really good! You're doing a great job getting the tension and the plot across. I don't know how serious this is to you, but I'm gonna force some adivce on you because... well... I'm pushy... (sorry) I would advise you to use your mind to see the surroundings of the scene. Try to put yourself in the characters' place and describe what they see and feel instead of interprenting it and writing the answer (like math). If you want to make the story a little more vivid you should put down the calculations as well as the answer. Because you seem to have a very good idea of how the characters should feel and it comes across, but the imagery could be more.... colourful? Sorry. If you disagree or fell offended I apologize profusely. That wasn't my intent at all. I'm by far the best writer here and I'm still learning, but I in no way mean to take anything from the story. I love it and I can't wait to see how it evolves!!! :) Hurry with the next update!! :D Author's Response: You don't need to apologize at all, I completely agree with you! :D I don't take this seriously, I mean, I do write, but it's mostly articles and reviews, that's why this story kind of feels too factual. I'm not used to writing fiction at all.My sister is actually more the writer of the family, so I've been showing her this and she tells me exactly the same. I try to follow some of the advises, but writing fiction really isn't my thing. I've actually been thinking about giving this to someone else when I'm finished, even if it's my sister, because I think it's a good idea, only it's not very well developped. Once again, thank you for the review! Summary:
AU It's been six long months. Six months of hunting alone before returning back to the same town to watch from the shadows as his brother lives another life. spoilers up to season 4's wishful thinking. Categories: One Shots, AU Characters: None Challenges: Series: None Chapters: 2 Completed: Yes Word count: 2332 [Report This] Published: 18/02/09 Updated: 30/07/09
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Date: 19/02/09 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1 CONTINUE THIS ONE! Seriously! This would make an AWESOME AU!!! SERIOUSLY!!!! The depth of Sam's longing... You could do SO MUCH with a longer story. Like, why Dean doesn't remember? (To be fair I don't know if you've already written a prequel to this one, or started a series or something) But you DEFINITELY should!! This was a great read. LOVED Sam's deep, emotional pain. LOVED how Dean seemed happy, but in truth he really wasn't. I would DEFINITELY read the sequel to this, I promise you. Great 'onezie' :P Cheers, Andi :D Author's Response: I'm not sure about continuing the story byt I have been playing around with the idea of doing the story from dean's perspective, thanks for the awesome review!!
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Date: 08/03/11 Title: Chapter 2: Chapter 2 I want more. I really do. This is great and so in character. Summary:
In a last ditch effort to stop Sam from going after Lilith, Castiel decides to show the kid his future. A Limp Sam, Big Brother Dean Story.
Categories: General Characters: None Challenges: Series: None Chapters: 6 Completed: Yes Word count: 7029 [Report This] Published: 18/04/09 Updated: 24/04/10
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Date: 18/04/09 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1 Awww... I'm listening to a sad song so that might have caused the "aww", but that was almost sweet. Horrifying, but sweet. I'm loving this and can't wait to read the rest.
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Date: 05/05/09 Title: Chapter 5: Chapter 5 O' my dear fluffy lord that was wonderful! :D Thank you SO much for sharing. I thoroughly enjoyed that! Lovely brotherly bonding and it fits so nicely in the whole bleak show arc right now. Everything seems to be going to hell and Sam and Dean are slowly growing apart. This story offers a little hope :) Summary: Sam and Dean wake up one morning to find they have been transformed into women by a witch.
Categories: General, Humor Characters: None Challenges: Series: None Chapters: 7 Completed: No Word count: 4966 [Report This] Published: 22/04/09 Updated: 24/05/10
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Date: 25/04/09 Title: Chapter 1: Prologue Oh dear god! That's so disturbing on so many levels! :D But it did make me giggle :P The bouncing seemed like such a 'Dean' thing to do. It's short, but I'm hoping the next chappie is on the way? I will DEFINITELY be adding this to my list! So wrong.... but so funny!!!!
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Date: 28/04/09 Title: Chapter 2: Chapter 1 Very lovely :) I love how funny you're making this. Love the little comments, like Dean not being able to reach the pedals :D Ha - and Sam being short :D :D Double ha -
Looking WILDLY forward to the update - seing Dean and Sam shopping for themselves... shopping WOMENS clothes for themselves! Don't wait too long! Author's Response: Thank you! I'm planning to update within the next couple of days
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Date: 06/05/09 Title: Chapter 3: Chapter 2 Awww such an awkward moment, but at least the sales girl didn't out right laugh at them. I have a sneaking suspicion that they're gonna have to go back to the bar in order to find the witch. I'd love to see how Dean responds when his dignity (ass) is suddenly up for grabs. :P Great chapter. Thank you! I certainly hope I can have the next part up soon.
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Date: 11/06/09 Title: Chapter 4: Chapter 3 "Boob him to death" Niiiiiiiiice....! Author's Response: Thanks!
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Date: 24/05/10 Title: Chapter 7: Chapter 6 I'm really quite distubed by these new thoughts in my mind. Dean enjoying his new situation would eventually mean sex, right? But would he then technically be a lesbian or would he go after guys?! Oh god that's too scary to think about... Happy thoughts, happy thoughts! Summary:
Missy Bender was three things. She was obsessive. She was insane. And she was in love – with a tall, beautiful stranger who looked real purty when he was hurting. But unfortunately for Dean Winchester, one thing she wasn’t was still locked in the closet… Banner by Gypsywoman1 Categories: Action Characters: None Challenges: Series: None Chapters: 22 Completed: Yes Word count: 80863 [Report This] Published: 04/05/09 Updated: 15/06/09
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Date: 29/05/09 Title: Chapter 1: And They Call it Puppy Love I love it! I feel like I'm reading a description on the back of a book cover. LOVE that you found a feisible use for the word: Purdy. When I read I often hear the words in my mind like someone else reading them. Different voices and accents according to the person or character doing the talking or interprenting. Here I felt it! The hole way through I heard Missy Bender's voice AND (the most wonderful part) = her accent!! Great job for a first story and I will DEFINITLY be reading along on this one! Can't WAIT to see what you come up with next! Author's Response: Thanks so much! Wow I have just stopped here to update and found some reviews! Great! This story is completed bar some tweaking: 22 whole chapters, so no worries about it being abandoned partway through. I really hope you continue to enjoy it. You know, I do that with voices too though I think I may have tranplanted some Tennessee backwoods hillbillies into this story... I guess Show had to set it in Minnesota because of the weather! ;-) Summary:
Sam comes home from school after a bad day. A little moment between the brothers. SPOILERS: None - wee!chester DISCLAIMER: If they were mine I wouldn't have had to write this. They belong to Mr Kripke and Co. Categories: General, One Shots, Wee!chester Characters: None Challenges: Series: None Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes Word count: 408 [Report This] Published: 04/05/09 Updated: 04/05/09
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Date: 05/05/09 Title: Chapter 1: Here By My Side Ooooohhhh cuddly wuddly... I just wanna reach in and rub their little cheeks :D That was almost nausiatingly cute. Loved it! Nice reprieve from all the angst and heartache. Author's Response: Hi there Loved your review!! Had me laughing out loud at work! cuddly wuddly - love to see you call Dean that to his face! lol. I need a break from the angst that is S4 - hence this. Glad you liked! Cheers Mary x Summary: one-shot. Alternate ending to 'Family Remains'. Limp Sam.
Categories: One Shots Characters: None Challenges: Series: A Spoonful Of Limp Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes Word count: 3460 [Report This] Published: 05/05/09 Updated: 05/05/09
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Date: 05/05/09 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1 Holy crap! Aaaall that anger and frustration is rubbing off on me! It's like I can FEEL it. Like I just wanna scream it out and hope some of it sticks. VERY nice job relaying all these feelings. I only just spotted the Limp!Sam series, but I'll definitely be reading up on that one ;) Summary:
 Riley Chapman's brush with the Supernatural world cost him his whole Family and left him in an Asylum. He owes his life to a hunter named Dean Winchester - this year, he's going to convince Dean to take his "gift" back!"
Categories: General, One Shots, AU Characters: None Challenges: Series: None Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes Word count: 4464 [Report This] Published: 15/05/09 Updated: 15/05/09
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Date: 23/05/09 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1 I certainly did! It was wonderful. Sad and dark and the Shakespeare was nicely squeezed in there. Great job! Thank YOU *Grins*, Glad you did!!! ;-) You are very kind - glad the Shakesearen didn't stick out like a sore thumb! Isort of worked from the quote as a starting point. Thanks for taking the time to let me know how you found it. Abi |
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