Okay, I was disappointed with this story.  An FBI agent going undercover as a vampire – I thought it was a really good idea that had real potential.  The story though moved way too fast for me.  There were no details or build-up, only action.  For example, the killing of the vampire nest was mentioned in passing and it seemed more important than the time it got.  It didn't have any suspense or back story to it.  

I like how both brothers are trying to protect the other by not revealing their conversations with a demon (Ruby & Casey) & they are thinking the same thing (it's so them!)

 Well written & good concept. 

Interesting (not sure if it’s good or bad interesting – I’m undecided).  I felt like you could have so much more with this.  I was anticipating an interesting, chapter story that had twists & turns because the beginning definitely grabbed my attention. The ending was also so abrupt and I was disappointed.

Author's Response:

Hi, thanks for your review, this story was an entry into the halloween comp and was limited to 2,000 words max. So a lot had to be crammed into a little space. And because it was obviously a oneshot there had to be an ending. sorry you were left dissapointed.

Lorraine

This was a fun, light hearted story.  Any story that puts the image of Dean naked in my head gets 2 thumbs up!

You took a risk with the 1st part of this story – with the detaching head – it could have turned out comical instead of scary and dangerous, but I think you nailed it.  Incredible writing, really descriptive and clear (in all scenes).

My thoughts on the ending of chapter 4: Say What!?! I am really eager to see where this going.  You've got me hooked!

Good idea, had me hooked from the beginning (I'm a sucker for Sam angst though). You really got the rapport b/w the two brothers down really well.  Their mannerisms, actions and words towards each other is true to the show.

I enjoyed this story.  More lore about what it was that Dean killed would have been intriguing.  You have a good rapport written b/w the two. 

Author's Response: Thank you and I am glad you enjoyed the story!!!

I'm definitely intrigued.  Good, strong writing.  You seem to have a good grasp of the relationship between Sam and Dean.  I'm hooked and can't wait to see where this leads!

Author's Response:

Thanks :) I love to hear that I am doing good with the characters coz I really do love them alot so thanks so much :) I appreciate it :D

Tara x0x

Wow...that was powerful.  Very touching and incredibly well written.  I couldn't stop reading.

Particularly loved the game 'Stealth-Wording.' This was a simple story but unique & creative.  It was a very sweet story that further delved into the brothers' history & explained them and their relationship more.

Author's Response: Thanks for the review Karen, and I'm glad you enjoyed and yeah, 'stealth-wording' was kinda popular...lol X Louy

Good rapport b/w Sam & Dean, very true to the show.  I’m anxious to see what the story is/where Sam’s story leads.

Author's Response:

Thank you so much! I'm so happy to hear the boys are true to the show, that's about the greatest compliment I can get!

Hope you like the rest of teh story too.

 Love, abni

 Great descriptions, example:

The snow swirled more violently around him, biting at his exposed skin and stinging his eyes. The skies once ashen now turned a deep indigo, clouds overshadowing the pale moon. Night had descended with a vengeance, winds howling and rushing past him with ominous veracity. A whispered voice carried on the breeze, so faint at first Sam was forced to crane his neck to hear it. Louder and deeper the voice grew, its tone rich and silky smooth.

Good storyline. The beginning was a little abrupt, I felt like I was thrown into it & like I was missing something.  Maybe you meant do that because that's how Sam felt, I don't know.  If it was on purpose it worked perfectly & was a genius idea.