Oh that was a lovely ending. Nothing like tying up the ends neatly and at the same time making you feel gutted to hell that John had missed the boys!!

I totally adored the fist to john's stomach, that told heaps about his feelings for each of his sons and the sacrifice he knows they and he make.  That he understands their relationship they have together, but its even more poignant when its highlighted by someone else.

This chapter was like dark chocolate bitter and sweet.

This was grand, and now I think i've read it all, so hurry hurry what else is in the pipeline??  Feed your reader she's hungry again.

Thanks for sharing.

Jane :)

There he goes again, 'you need some food,' does he never tire of looking after Sam. He so desperately needs looking after himself it makes my heart cry.

Sam succuming to the smell of the greasy burger despite his promise of waiting for Dean, it just wasn't going to happen, cos Dean's so wrapped up in making sure they are sorted with cash and a place to sleep.  But at least one of them is barely refereshed to make sure they get a place to lay their heads.

Deans face mashed up against the window, great description of a guy thats just all done in. Loved it.

Ack, do I go to bed, its late you see, or do I read on the next chappie and enjoy the glass of wine by my side. Well... I was never a gal to say no to a grand story or a glass of wine, so it looks like I'm in for the ride that the next chappie brings. ;)

Jane

HOWL!!  I've joined Dean in a sugar fix, chocolate.  Hell, I need more, fic that is, not chocolate. So, one more chappie, then bed, defnitely.

Dean needs rest, lots of it, I just hope that he gets it, and soon, his poor hand, and not to mention his fragile state of mind need time out.

Jane :)

With the car failing to start I reckon the old ghost/s are wanting the boys to stay.

Not sure if I like this smell that only Dean can whiff, its a bit too Dean exclusive for the comfort zone.

Love the descriptions of town and hotel, a place to stay if it weren't haunted, huh.  The corridor sounds a bit onimous, something to do with the doctors experiments perhaps?

1 am now bed is calling, I did well though, more tomorrow when the dark starts to descend, hell I can't wait; bring it on as they say.

jane :)

::shivers::  That was a bit on the spooky side. Margaret taking over his body like that, but at least Sam was able to erm... well, knock her out of him quick enough.

Well, it sounds like Margaret gets her kicks out of other peoples pain and we all know that Dean has plenty of that hidden away inside of him.

I wonder if Sam will think to research Margaret's name tomorrow, and it would appear that Dean remembers it all, but still unsure if it was real.

 Jane :)

Oh that was very good. I once wrote a POV for a multiple personality, arguing within itself, it was incrediably difficult to put to paper, so I understand your concern with this; but I think you definitely cracked it.

This is where I scream for Sam to come back early.  It's not looking very good from Dean's POV.  Hopefully, the fever will consume him and he'll drop and she'll just have to leave him alone.  God, he's so vulnearable! Love it.

Jane :)

Safe, ish!! I hope, though as Dean said Margaret doesn't mean any harm to him, I guess she just wants to be found.

And David and Linda are just totally perplexed as to what is happening with Dean and their hotel.

Looking forward to the next chappie, which will be tomorrow as I've had my tea and its early bedtime.

Jane :)

What a horrific death poor Margaret and her boyfriend suffered.  I could feel the claustraphobia she must have felt and the thought of insects crawling up your leg with no way to push they off and them having a 'take out' on your boyfriend.  Not a good chapter to be eating anything to methinks, but grandly descriptive.

So, our poor boy is really feeling the drain and desperately needs Margaret out of him, I just hope that they are not too late and Dean is irrepairable! 

I'm so glad now that I left this chapter to go to bed last night, as hard as it was half way through, but if I'd have got to the end I would never had got to me bed, as this is just way too cliffy and tantalising and where-we-came-in to leave and not continue.

Happy Thursday morning and what the heck is going on here.  It doesn't look like a possession, as such, but it must be because Dean wouldn't be so emotive and let his guard down, nor would he consider  leaving behind his most precious possession, his brother. So something is playing with his head.  Can't wait to find out the end.

Jane

Fabulous, fabulous ride.  And they both came out of it alive, always a bonus. 

I will go to work this morning, smiling, with the vision of Dean - wet in just his boxers  -need I say anymore.

It was an excellent ending, I can't see why you would think otherwise. It was all rounded up very nicely.  I particularly enjoyed the car convo, so Dean, building up his little wall, hiding his pandora's box. And then Sam steering it onto safer waters, food and more food.

Great story, m'dear very well done indeed. Thank you for sharing.

Jane :)

It's yay Thursday for you and yay Friday for me when the download hits cyber space! I can't wait for next week.  Its autumn which means new seasons and my eyes turn square! 

I go to concerts by an Irish band and in all the years I've been watching them, they have never been on stage on time, sometimes early, sometimes really, really late and we call that Irish Time, LOL.

Blimey Dean, he nearly went there didn't he. It was pretty touch and go and deliciously angsty, I had to read that bit twice, just to make sure I was totally over indulged!

I had to smile, typical man, hurting like hell and he can still manage to get a little amorous. But then again Brenna does have that hold on him.

And its not looking good at all, in fact, I was cringing for Dean when he hit that wall. Jack sounds like your worst nightmare come to haunt you in the daylight.  He's obviously got history with Dean and a very mean streak thats being directed at the one person thats going to end up getting Dean in more trouble, Sam!  What a wicked place to leave it.

Dare I venture on? I smell violence, blood and angst aplenty!

Jane :)

Kick some ass, go for it Dean!  I just hope he manages to stay on his feet whilst he's kicking ass, or he could be kicking ankles!! Bless.

Oh so much going on between these two, Sam's kinda right they need to get a room, though I think the conection between them is so strong that wouldn't actually make much difference. It might ease the electricity around them, but I think they will always crackle when in each others space.

The IRA, thats a biggie and I don't envy Sam and Dean going up against anything to do with that.  And add to that a potential soul stealer, that sounds rather icky and hell Dean's soul is full of stuff, he could be a heavy casualty if it got near him.

Roll on the next chappie!

Jane :)