Reviewer: jane Signed
Date: 22/11/07 Title: Chapter 4: Chapter 4

LOL, yup a lot of work, Sam. Lets hope that Jax is a quick learner. It's quite lump forming to know that what Sam is doing is pretty much what Dean did with him.

Jax has quite a distinctive personality coming out, think I quite like him.

Jane :)

Reviewer: jane Signed
Date: 23/11/07 Title: Chapter 6: Chapter 6

::shiver:: ooh that was a tingly ending to the chapter.  A ray of hope given to Sam, lets hope that he holds onto it and turns all that anger into something constructive, rather than use Jax as his whipping boy.  AT the end of the day, they both need each other until their respective brothers can be found.

Jane

Reviewer: jane Signed
Date: 24/11/07 Title: Chapter 8: Chapter 8

Living such parallels aren't they these two brothers.  Jax will find, should it come to it, that killing your brother is a lot easier to say than do. Lets hope that he dosen't have to, but there are always casulties aren't there. 

Gabriel, master of all guises.  I'm hoping that he's keeping a good eye on them as well as attempting to guide them.

Jane

Reviewer: jane Signed
Date: 24/11/07 Title: Chapter 10: Chapter 10

Gosh so many deals going on and I'm not liking any of them. Dean and Sam do appear to be on the wrong end of all of them, though half of me doesn't want to totally believe the Vamp.

Dean obviously has no idea how important his amulet is, maybe Gab needs to give him some idea or it could all go to pot!

Jane:)

Reviewer: jane Signed
Date: 24/11/07 Title: Chapter 12: Chapter 12

Oh not a great choice there, huh. Either way it spells inpending doom, if not just for the boys, but in the bigger picture, the world.

Surprised that Dean allowed himself to be led into this situation. Where's Gab when you need him.

Ack, I've got to the last chapter, more please!  Hope you had a lovely Thanksgiving Holiday.

 Jane :)

Reviewer: jane Signed
Date: 17/05/08 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1. Nine Foot Babies and Snow Flurries

A good first chapter. You have the voices of Dean and Sam and good characterisation.

I'm enjoying the hurt already of poor Dean and the rather silly drunk Sam is good to read too.  Jo I like, but not sure I'm into a ship thing with those two.

Typos, a couple there; and I know that hazel eyes can shift to green but I'd definitely put Dean as a green eyed boy.  Otherwise, an interesting start and I'm certainly going to be going on to find out what happens next.

 Jane :)

Author's Response:

Jane

 Thank you for your review Jane and I'm pleased you are finding it ok.  It was my first ever long story and though far from perfect I'm really fond of it.  It's sequel is at chapter 10 now "So Not An Angel!".

And yup have settled on green eyes now!

Bev xx

Reviewer: jane Signed
Date: 23/12/07 Title: Chapter 2: Chapter 2

::takes a breath:: gosh that was relentless, my poor finger nails are pretty much gone. Fast paced, scary as hell, it had it all.  Icky arm popping, yuk I could hear the pop.  And there was I feeling sorry (yet enjoying, I know, bad me) Dean being blow up, then ya goes and really does the boy in.  This was a very traumatic chapter, both physically and mentally for Dean. And poor Sam desperately wanting to be there for his bro, when he pulls him into his lap, I just wanted to cry.

And it just got better, with Dean's inner torments filtering to the surface and you really have just drawn him to the very edge, the cracks are spreading out and he's gonna break. 

The demon wants Sam, so Dean wants out.  No saving the town, in this one Sam comes first.  

A very exciting chapter, glad I waited for some peace and quiet to read it. 

Onwards to the next chappie, but a cuppa tea first, keep me from nibbling my nails

Jane :)

Author's Response:

Hi!! Okay, most sincere apologies for taking so long to reply to your lovely reviews. The holidays kept me away from my computer... but I'm here now and return bearing thanks for reading and taking time to review!

I had a great time writing this story -- despite the trauma I put the boys through. It was the first I'd written for publication in a zine and I had no idea how to shorten a story or what to expect as a result. I'm SO pleased you enjoyed the events of this chapter. I tried to break it up so that something "significant" happened in each installment... this being the one (in my mind) with the greatest physical pain.

Sorry about the nails...

Gaelic

Reviewer: jane Signed
Date: 04/02/08 Title: Chapter 1: Watch

Oh wow that packed some punches, Abe comes back - bless he feels like a pair of comfortable slippers to me and I like that the boys are not alone - and Dean, ack the boy has a gunshot wound and he's off hustling pool, what is he like.  Leaving Sam to pour himself into a bottle as he remembers the sequence of events that led to him shooting Dean. 

It should have stopped there and the pair of them sent off to their much needed beds, but ha, not those boys.  Nope, a treat of a fight, should I apologise for loving the whumping? And then the angst of Sam and then as if it couldn't be any more packed, you throw in the dog/wolf guarding Dean's car. Hmm, is there more to this animal than immediately meets the eye.  Is he somehow associated with Abe I wondered?

And so they finally get to bed after introductions and realisation that they are where they should be and safe, thank goodness.  Once again Dean is stoic coping with Sam when really he needs a huge helping of TLC himself.

The poignant realisation by Dean that his dad had come for them at Abe's, he cared and Dean is suddenly hit by how much he misses him, definitely a dry throat moment there.

Fabbie, roll on the next chapter, I need feeding and it's not with sticky toffee pudding (with cream) this time.

Jane :)

Author's Response:

Jane -- so good to see you here!! Never apologize for whump-loving. Otherwise, who would I be writing for?

*grins at Jane's thought process about Lobo*

Thanks so much for reading and for your always clever turns of phrase that make me smile. I hope you enjoy the next chapter -- the 3rd should come in the next week or so.

Slainte,

Gaelic

Reviewer: jane Signed
Date: 14/02/08 Title: Chapter 3: Look

Squeel, that was an impressive Dean whumping chapter and he's still on his feet god bless him he has got some staying power.  The adrenalin rush is going to help him through the next bit, but I see a major crash heading his way.

I'm just loving Lobo, I had a feeling he would come do his Lassie bit and his protective stance around Dean was fab; there is definitely a connection happening between them. I'm hoping he stays in the thread as he really adds to the storyline.

Love the reverse roll Sam's taking and Dean, once conscious, pushing hard to get the roles back how he likes them. Snappy, hurting dean, just wonderful, he doesn't do the invalid gig well, does he now?  I was giggling at Dean's reaction to lying against Sam. I love the humorous touch admist the pain and angst.

But dear Sam, I feel so much for him trying so hard to clear up in his head what happened before - it seems to be playing over in a loop like nightmare - can't go back and definitely can't go on - and Dean, so bloody stoic, just doing the 'move on' bit, which doesn't work for Sam at all and, truth be told, Dean neither; but it's what he does. Ack, I teetered between wanting to bash their heads together and weeping for the lack of healing closure.  Abe, seeing so much, I do hope that he can help these two find absolution from their guilt at the possession Sam suffered. It's extra baggage that neither can afford to carry. 

Okay, that's a teasing place to leave it, huh!! Bloody walls, an un-named body (hopes it's Sal that will be one less problem- hehee) and not only do the lights go out, but there ends the chappie!! Hmm, evil wicked writer that yea be, hurry hurry with the next part. Dean needs to rest you can't leave him cold and hurting for too long there now can ya??

I'm off for a hot chocolate drink, all this talk of freezing cold water has made me cold.  And since you left us on a cliff, I deserve a treat - marshmallows with it.

Great chapter, I'm now intwined and living this story, so hurry back soon.

Jane :)

Author's Response:

You are fantastic, my friend -- your thought process is consistently smile-inducing. :) I'm glad you are enjoying this. Don't cry for lack of healing closure too soon... if I do it right, you might get your wish. But that's all I'll say about that.

Now, I have to vacate the room as my hubby wishes to comandere the DVR for several English Premiere Soccer matches he recorded. You people and your futbol. Ever the goalie, his current T-shirt says "my goal is to stop yours." *grin*

Well, my goal is to finish Chapter 4 and get it beta'd so that you can see if you enjoy that as well.

Slainte,

Gaelic

Reviewer: jane Signed
Date: 25/02/08 Title: Chapter 4: Appear

Oh that was icky. I could smell the fetid breath and blood you write so vividly.  Slipping and sliding in blood, organs displayed like market day fruit, oh that was one gross chapter in places; I was so there and so didn't want to be. Poor boys is all I can say, get them out quick!

An interesting turn with the ikiryoh and Yeats daughter and I think there is more to this than meets the eye.  Why would her spirit suddenly resurrect in this ikiryoh after sixteen years. And it certainly stirred up some painful memories for Dean. I half wondered if that was why the ikiryoh initially targeted Dean because he offered lots of likeminded emotions.

Dean admitting to Sam he was just holding it together, that's a huge confession for him and the fact he actually went for a nap on the sofa, speaks volumns as to how fragile his body is at the mo. Thank god he's got that stealed personality to get him over his physical failings.  And moreso now as Sam is in huge trouble, which I hope doesn't end with another Alien explosion!!!  How the heck did it get into him, doesn't he too have a charm like Dean?

And ::hugs Abe:: taking control and Dean letting him, again that barely holding it together thing, he's relishing in someone else taking the pressure off of him, leaving him free to keep a good eye on Sam.

Great chapter, lovely cliffy, but how will I manage to get through another week!

Jane :)

 

 

Author's Response:

Hmmm... *does* he have a charm like Dean?? *grins wickedly*

Thanks so much for this, Jane! I love your reviews. I'm so thrilled that you're enjoying this. I grin every time I see your name. I hope you like what's to come. I always get insanely nervous about half-way through writing the chapter and have to block everything else out except the movie in my mind.

I look forward to your next thoughts -- and I find myself thinking of you when we watch GolTV at night. :) Hee.

Gaelic

Reviewer: jane Signed
Date: 07/03/08 Title: Chapter 5: Stare

Stare, indeed I did that, at the screen, couldn't keep my peeps from it.  The movie was most defintitely playing in my head and it was service as normal from this gals pov, and what a service it was.  Ack, so many's a goings on, where to start!!!

Sam tucked dark inside his own body fighting an angst sucking ikiryoh; i should be worried, I have a lot in common with it, knowing my own warped love of angst!

And Dean, ah my Dean how torn is he coping with Sam, trying so hard to ease his brothers load and managing to stay upright when he really should be flat on his back (oh the imagery*g)  Surprised that he finally conked out? Nope, how did he last so long - purely because it's Sam and he lives and breaths his bro, gotta be there for him, whatever the cost to himself.

Add to that Claire, god what an evil little cow she is. I know she's been through hell, but the boys are not to blame for that and I'm not really sure her dad is. Misguided, yes, but he seems a decent enough guy.

Lobo, I love him, he's so connected to Dean and once again he has appeared at just the right time to save the dear boy.

Dean realising that Sam wasn't protected and making sure he fixed that before keeling over and giving in to his body's need to just rest.  And Abe calling out the emergency room to Dean. Go Doc!

I see a storm arriving, Bobby and ooh what is this with him and Maggie, romance... Bobby you quiet old dog you!!

Loved this, hope that comes through, and I truly hope that RL settles for you.

Jane :)

Author's Response:

Ach, Jane, there you are, my dear! Thanks so much for reading and taking time to send me this beautiful review. I appreciate it deeply.

I laughed with your comment that you have a lot in common with the ikiryoh. I think on some level, all fanfic writers/readers must, yeah?

I hope you enjoy what's to come... the next couple chapters are the ones I've been looking forward to writing all story...

Best to you,

Gaelic

Reviewer: jane Signed
Date: 07/04/08 Title: Chapter 7: Glance

Dean we are so on the same page with the pronouncing, spelling in my case too, of that irk...?!? thingy. 

Intro literally gave me a headache, m'dear from all the tension, I was sucking it in from all of them.  Screaming for them to drop out of whatever the 'I' (my own personal shorthand there as you know my sp probs LOL) had them gripped in.

Dean, omg man it was heading right for him, tasty angst meal coming up, and no one, but no one was movin and Dean was it's target. ARgghh! Tension overload.

Okay, slight relief with Dean and his 'so...juicy' comment but then the pressure was back on and when it jumped on him I was screaming for them all to do something.

And you just know how to work the reader up, a touch of comedy 'I'm naked' thrown in to aid the lack of momentum in getting out of the place. Jeezus, move it was pulsing through my head.

Some fabulous angsty, contemplative moments as the boys thought seriously about sitting this one out. Dean needing to slide into the chair, bonless but somehow hanging onto the conversation with his music and realising that they had to be there period. Feed me, feed me I love this internalising stuff.

Bobby and Maggie, ack he was only protecting her when he left, worried that she would end up dead; that is one hell of a sacrifice to make for someone. And her simple declaration of love and the painful clarity with which Dean realises its something that he's never experience, ooh that left a lump in my throat!

Lobo!  Taraaah he's ok which pleased me muchly and Dean too. His talisman all up and running, okay a little dogeared *g round the edges but there to protect and help Dean.

And once again, Dean is our hero, all around him are dropping like flies and he's up there gun a shooting and its all horribly chaotic with Sam on the floor. I loved the mixed up, clutteredness of this part of the story everything happening at once. Fab.

And Claire finally the truth of the 'I' emerging and, I'm sure thankfully for Dean and Sam who see too much death, she survives.

And what a delicious ending. Lobo connecting with Dean and Dean likewise connecting back with him and Sam. Knowing he was safe as he sinks into his own much needed oblivion.  

::sigh::  I'm exhausted from reading this chapter!!  *vbg* Bring on the next, I'm loving this so very much.

Oh we've had snow here, not masses but enough to get a snowball or two going.  Teenagers are worse than wee ones for wanting to get a hit or two on an unsuspecting parent! What happened to the old days when we built a sweet little old snowman!! LOL.

Take care, Jane :)

Author's Response:

Terry said the same thing about the "iki..." I said I didn't *have* to pronounce it... I just had to write it. But... yeah, I don't think I'd do much better than Dean. :)

Okay, and I know it's evil, but I'm grinning that you're exhausted!! Tee hee! I did something right. *grins*

I'm so pleased you have enjoyed this and that you let me know what speaks to you. Means more to me than you know.

Snowmen are a thing of the past, my friend. AH, those were the days.

Best to you,

Gaelic