Supernaturalville
Reviewer: badaiwind (Signed) · Date: 10/05/08 01:29 AM · On: Chapter 1

Don't know what to make of it, but LOVE it.



Author's Response:

Well, it's an emotional piece, and I got an emotional response, so I'll chalk that up as a win. Thanks!

Sue

Reviewer: Scanilla (Signed) · Date: 23/11/07 12:22 PM · On: Chapter 1

This's a great missing piece. You captured their emotions very well and the interaction between the brothers was real. The dialogue was nicely written too. I liked this.

"No, Sammy. You chose, I'm just trying to deal." That's a very powerful line.

"You're gonna make a great lawyer someday, Sam. You've got a hell of a way with words." I can just feel Dean's hurt.



Author's Response:

Glad you liked this, Scanilla. And you zeroed in on two of the best lines in the story to comment on;)

 

Reviewer: fantasycatcher (Signed) · Date: 19/11/07 05:42 PM · On: Chapter 1

Great story Swellison:)

Love the emotion, great fill in for a missing scene.

Schelz



Author's Response: Thanks for the review, glad you liked the story and the emotion driving it.

Reviewer: Shannondoah (Signed) · Date: 19/11/07 11:05 AM · On: Chapter 1

Great story!  Lots of emotion and anger!  Poor Dean.

Author's Response: Hi again, Shannondoah. Glad you liked this. I kept remembering Dean's line from the pilot, "If I had called, would you have picked up the phone?" To me, that sounded like there was something more than just Sam's leaving for Stanford between the boys. And family fights are very personal, because no one knows you and your buttons better than your family.

Reviewer: dookie (Signed) · Date: 18/11/07 03:07 AM · On: Chapter 1

great story!

poor Dean, i could really feel Sam's emotion while reading your story, awesome job :)



Author's Response:

Thanks. This is essentially a 'talking heads' story, so it's driven by dialogue and emotion. I'm glad you felt it.

Reviewer: Cookie6 (Signed) · Date: 16/11/07 04:16 PM · On: Chapter 1

timeline blah! Let's look at your little oneshot purely for what it is - a beautiful little uncovering of the boys hearts during their time apart. I just loved it. You captured the both boys perfectley with you banter and reflections.

Loved Dean're-salting' the skylight and Sam intuitivley knowing what Dean's opinion of the skylight would be. Sam's absolute understanding of Deans' take on "We are all in danger" and his subsequent need to get to Sam was a reminder of what drives Dean. Clever!

I get Sam's "not semantics, mindset" and so did Dean. You wrote this as a given for Dean and an issue for Sam - the heart of their conflict. Your "our lives don't mesh" was so well illustrated by your two differring views of Thanksgiving that I found myself agreeing with both at the same time! So well written.

The kicker line for me was "And where, in your perfect little world, is there room for me?" Wow, powerful! Reveals Dean's core hurt with a frankness that cannot be ignored.

I thought this awesome, a perfect missing scene that helps us put another piece in the puzzle. Thanks for the peek.



Author's Response:

Wow, Cookie, thanks for the detailed review. You even made a connection I didn't even realize I'd written, between their lives not meshing and the 2 different views of Thanksgiving. Thanks again for the awesome review, it made my day.

 

Reviewer: Freedom (Signed) · Date: 16/11/07 03:20 PM · On: Chapter 1

Really liked this Swellison. It was very well written.

Author's Response: Thanks! 'Very well written' - you've put a big smile on my face!

Reviewer: Winchester07 (Signed) · Date: 16/11/07 01:37 PM · On: Chapter 1

Very well written

Author's Response: Thanks, glad you enjoyed  the story.

Reviewer: Birdy (Signed) · Date: 16/11/07 11:08 AM · On: Chapter 1

Really enjoyed this.  The whole 2 year / 4 year thing has always bugged me too and this would be a good explanation.



Author's Response: Thanks, Birdy. Glad you liked both the story and my version of the timeline.

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