Reviewer: stranded_chess_piece (Signed) · Date: 28/12/07 09:23 AM · On: Everything Was Wrong

This is GREAT so far! Your writing is fantastic and I can't wait to see how this ends :]

Reviewer: stranded_chess_piece (Signed) · Date: 28/12/07 08:55 AM · On: Bizarre Abstract Painting

wow what a great start to a story! Definitely looking forward to reading more of this :]

Reviewer: supernaturaljunkiejude (Signed) · Date: 27/12/07 07:15 PM · On: Everything Was Wrong

And the truth shall set you FREE...... Or let's hope so...

Like your terse but sympathetic Doris, Linda...sure hope the boys get the leads they need from her mystery box.......Nice update...

Reviewer: supernatfem76 (Signed) · Date: 27/12/07 06:42 PM · On: Everything Was Wrong

Thank you for updating this story.  Happy Holidays to you.  I enjoyed reading this chapter and I look forward to the next chapter.

Reviewer: Cookie6 (Signed) · Date: 16/12/07 05:24 PM · On: Numbers

Such an intriguing chapter! The mystery is hotting up!

Sam and the boy spirit calling out silutaneously was creepy and the fact that Sam was in for it just leapt off the page "Dean!'...Sam whispered in a frightened voice that Dean would not have expected to hear from him" shouted loud and clear that both boys knew it too. You set up the anticipation brilliantly here. *applause*

Dean being restrained while Sam cops a beating is Dean's worst nightmare come true and you wrote his helplessness and frustration very well. Having Dean count to gain control of his panic was brilliant, I felt every second of what must have felt like hours, listening to Sam's yelps *shudder*

The Energizer Bunny gag was funny in amongst your drama, and I did snigger a bit at that light heartedness between the boys.

But how mega weird that the spirit whispered that message to Sam!?!?! Was the boy a Chosen Child?? Thank goodness the boy left a clue!!

My heart just melted a bit at your words "You can't take much more of this and I...I can't either" *sigh* a little peek behind Dean's carefully crafted defences...Beautifully written.

And Yeah! Damn straight that room should be for free!!!

Top job, I'm enjoying the ride!

 

Reviewer: supernatfem76 (Signed) · Date: 15/12/07 09:52 PM · On: Numbers

This was another interesting chapter.  I liked how you had the child's spirit leave Sam and Dean a clue.  Sam taking a beating from his father was so descriptive I could really picture in my mind.  I can't wait until the next chapter.

Reviewer: Cookie6 (Signed) · Date: 06/12/07 03:54 PM · On: FINE!

Wow, intense! Loved Dean so assertive in his worry "Look at me and tell me if I'm serious" yep, I woulda stayed put too! All that door slamming! Dean's cranky factor practically leapt out the page!

You did a great job of showing us the boys completely different perspectives in their united aim of the good fight - Dean to save the lives of innocents, Sam from a social justice angle and personal empathy. Not always compatible...Great work!

For me a big focus in this ch was Dean so adamant that Sam is not evil. He was a terrier with a bone with this one, unable to let go. You gave us a peek behind his wall to expose a big chunk of his fear and faith in Sammy. Brilliant, really got to me.

So Sam's theory of the spirits being isolated to the room just went down the gurgler. You just ramped it up at a hundred miles an hour!!! I think some hurt!sam and ansty!dean / angry!dean is just round the corner...

 

Reviewer: supernatfem76 (Signed) · Date: 30/11/07 08:10 PM · On: FINE!

I liked the conversation that Sam and Dean had in this chapter.   I also liked the ending.  The ghost in the backseat was something I definitely did not see coming.  This was another well writtten chapter and I look forward to the next chapter.

Reviewer: supernaturaljunkiejude (Signed) · Date: 30/11/07 07:04 PM · On: FINE!

omg now Dean sees him too...and he's NOT tied to the motel room.....hell of a roadtrip this could turn into...!!!!!!!!

Reviewer: supernaturaljunkiejude (Signed) · Date: 30/11/07 06:30 PM · On: So Much Fear

Oh, wow!!!!!!! not sure we want to hear anything else from this kid

Reviewer: Cookie6 (Signed) · Date: 22/11/07 01:50 AM · On: The Devil Inside

This is the best chapter so far, I'm rivetted! Sam getting belted around is bad eough, but a little abused boy seeking help by inflicting his abuse at someone as gentle as Sam is heart wrenching. "Sam shut his eyes. He had no doubt what was coming next" - Shattering, my heart broke in a million bits of your image of Sam, helpless to nothing but witness, and your unsaid words that left us in no doubt of what was happening that little boy. Well written to make us feel  that tragic`sadness and outrage,.

Loved the little brother analogy - Sam identifying as both a protected little brother and an opportunity to be in a big brother role for a little boy in trouble. That little spirit is sure in need of help if Sam feels the need to lie to Dean. Sam yelling at Dean, begging, would reach out to Dean, no wonder Dean had to steel his heart to block out Sam's deperation. His conflict is whether to allow Sam to stay and protect, cos that's what he'd do, or to drag Sam's a$$ outta there cos he IS the little brother...

You wrote protective!dean so well, instantly taking charge, assertive and making a decision with Sam's safety foremost in his mind. "His body began to pulse with anger and fear" - I loved this description of Dean's reaction to the danger he recognised, both in front of his eyes and high on his radar.

Your words "Every hunter had a limit...a hand that was just too risky to play. Like his father, his was Sam's life...I fold" brilliant writing.

Loving ya work!

 

Reviewer: ReccaF (Signed) · Date: 21/11/07 12:00 PM · On: The Devil Inside

OMG... this is just getting better and better.

You have built up the tension and drama with each chapter. You have visually painted an ongoing thriller - making your readers ask for more.

OUTSTANDING JOB!!!!!!!

The interaction between the brothers is right on the mark.

Sam'scompassion for the little boy , as opposed to Dean's need to protect his "little brother'-excellent  writing-

AWESOME  work- please post soon !!!!!!!!!!!!!!

BRAVO!!

Reviewer: supernaturaljunkiejude (Signed) · Date: 20/11/07 07:58 PM · On: Ring Bell for Service

poor Sammy.........Thank God he looks great any old time...all the time.......maybe he can stay clear of the mirror.....