Reviewer: mizpah (Signed) · Date: 18/12/08 06:19 AM · On: Chapter 1
"...a grouchy bitch with a deadly shot"... I really loved that. Actually, I think my good friend and fellow Aussie Cookie6 told me about that line. Again, another great peek into Dean's mind, and his reviewing of his choices. I felt for both of them - Sam torturing himself with the horror of his beloved big brother going to hell for him, and Dean unable to live without his treasured baby brother to such an extent that throwing away his own life seemed like the perfect solution. Those boys continue to break our hearts, don't they? Really good - and this was your first story? Hell's bells, you're going to be on fire y the time you have a few more under your belt. Thanks for sharing this.....Jules
Author's Response: Without sounding too fan-girl ... it was a real thrill to have you review my work, I really enjoy everything I have read of yours and think you are an incredibly talented author. Having said that, Thank you for the generous words of praise!! This one shot was entirely fueled by Jensen's amazing acting skills and definitely his ability to break our hearts anew every week! I find Sam the greater challenge to write, so I'm beaming at the fact that you saw something "Sam-like" in there! This was the very first thing I ever shared with anyone that I wasn't related to - it was the most nerve racking experience and I was shocked by the kind response I received. To tell you the truth I am ALWAYS shocked by the kind reviews I receive - LOL!!!! Thanks again for the awesome review and words of encouragement - they really have made my day!!!! Abi.
Reviewer: Nilah (Signed) · Date: 18/05/08 08:09 PM · On: Chapter 1
First try? This was great! Well done. Definitely will be looking out for your stuff.
Author's Response: Definitely first try - sweaty palms, dry mouth and ALL!!! I am really pleased you found this and enjoyed it, it is kind of special to me because it was the first thing I ever had the guts to share and everyone was so awesome in their response to it. (Just like you !!!) Please feel free to let me know your thoughts on any of the rest of my stuff, I find it hugely helpful to hear what works and what doesn't. Thanks for taking the time. Abi.
Author's Response: Definitely first try - sweaty palms, dry mouth and ALL!!! I am really pleased you found this and enjoyed it, it is kind of special to me because it was the first thing I ever had the guts to share and everyone was so awesome in their response to it. (Just like you !!!) Please feel free to let me know your thoughts on any of the rest of my stuff, I find it hugely helpful to hear what works and what doesn't. Thanks for taking the time. Abi.
Reviewer: mymuseandi (Signed) · Date: 11/03/08 05:34 AM · On: Chapter 1
Very nicefirst fic...it's funny and sad at the same time...amazing how you can make the readers wanna do both...LOL
Author's Response: Happy that you found this and seem to have enjoyed it. This was my first Fanfic and I kind of have a soft spot for it. I wrote it from Dean's POV and I see him the way you saw this story - funny and sad at the same time. So thank you for the kind compliment - I will put it down to inspirational Dean!!! (Wow am I ever Dean-centric! LOL!) Abi.
Reviewer: birdie (Signed) · Date: 28/02/08 06:19 PM · On: Chapter 1
Abi. Terrific hunny! This is a little gem and I'm embarrassed it took me so long to get to it! You have a consise but very 'to the point' style. I like this bit : "God, how he had wanted to lay the fuck down and die right next to him. Curl into Sam and ... just expire. Dean sobbed in a way that made Bobby flee the premises" This is achingly sad but not indulgent or mawkinsh in any way. You have caught and built on Jensen's so convincing acting in the Sam's death scene in your piece, and it's lovely. Thank you for sharing! bev x
Author's Response: Bev, can I first say that it's a real honour to be looked up by you - I always find it's a huge thrill when people find this and review it - so no apologies necessary !!!;-) Secondly, wow!!! What a compliment - to say I came anywhere near the general vicinity of Jensen's stellar performance in AHBL 2; is very high praise indeed! Apart from looking like he floated down from cloud nine (thank the maker for SUCH a well made man!!!!!;-) ... uh..hmmm) that man is one solid actor!!!! He was devastating in his delivery and so convincing in his grief that I guess I was just inspired. Thank you for telling me what specifically you liked about this - I find that really helpful. I am relieved that what I tried to write here wasn't too OTT for you - Dean is not Emo-indulgent and it is a real struggle to try not to "fix" this for him - he just wouldn't be Dean then!!!! So happy you found your way over to this piece - it's kind of special to me as it's the sweaty palmed first one (Ha Ha). Thank you. Abi.
Author's Response: Bev, can I first say that it's a real honour to be looked up by you - I always find it's a huge thrill when people find this and review it - so no apologies necessary !!!;-) Secondly, wow!!! What a compliment - to say I came anywhere near the general vicinity of Jensen's stellar performance in AHBL 2; is very high praise indeed! Apart from looking like he floated down from cloud nine (thank the maker for SUCH a well made man!!!!!;-) ... uh..hmmm) that man is one solid actor!!!! He was devastating in his delivery and so convincing in his grief that I guess I was just inspired. Thank you for telling me what specifically you liked about this - I find that really helpful. I am relieved that what I tried to write here wasn't too OTT for you - Dean is not Emo-indulgent and it is a real struggle to try not to "fix" this for him - he just wouldn't be Dean then!!!! So happy you found your way over to this piece - it's kind of special to me as it's the sweaty palmed first one (Ha Ha). Thank you. Abi.
Reviewer: bulletbabe (Signed) · Date: 20/02/08 11:01 AM · On: Chapter 1
Gotta be honest here, I only dipped in to have a look because of an extreemly kind review you left me and it got me wondering if you were a 'writer' or a 'reader'. Now that I've read this, I can only thank you again for pulling me over here for the ride...this is absolutely beautiful. Your turn of phrase is unique and beautifully descriptive and you are so completely inside the boys heads that every tiny movement is made real. And I particularly like the references to the show, Mary as angel image and Dean trying to be brave for her...heartbreaking. I give lots of 10/10, probably too many but rarely has one been so heartfelt. Adding you to my fave authors list! X Louy
Author's Response: See this right here, this is why I'm glad that I don't own a computer camera ... because you would see what a massive lump has just formed in my throat - what a HUGE compliment to be added to YOUR favorite Authors list. Thank you!!! I am really happy you enjoyed this, it's the first thing I ever wrote and posted - I was so boosted by the response that me and my "pen" went on to inflict more scribbling, on poor unsuspecting readers!!!:-) I am trying the Multi-chapter thing, you guys make it look easier than it is you know!!!! I think when I am done I will probably go back to a one shot - sounds strange, but they feel safer... but I am still learning and reading as much as I can on this sight, because the authors here are so talented. PS. I don't do "Kind Reviews" - if I can word it politely, I try to tell the truth, if not I don't write a review... I REALLY did enjoy your work and I have always admired your banners. Thank you for looking me up! Abi.
Reviewer: garvaldmains (Signed) · Date: 20/12/07 04:51 PM · On: Chapter 1
Found this via the new story. Very good. You shouldn't dread responses - your writing is very very cool. "In Dean's heart of hearts, he knew that the Deal was the most proactive suicide plan he could muster" - EXACTLY!! Dix
Author's Response: * Blush Blush* THANK YOU. The double blush was because you looked up my other piece and, secondly because of the compliment about the writing. This was my first posted work anywhere, and I do not have the words to tell you how nervous I was. LUCKILY that story has a happy ending; as everyone on this site is so supportive that you overcome the dry mouth and sweaty palms !!:-) Please feel free to let me know what you think anytime as I really do appreciate the feedback. Abi.
Reviewer: lostatc (Signed) · Date: 05/12/07 01:18 PM · On: Chapter 1
I really liked this. It is well written, especially for a first attempt. I hope you write more.
Author's Response: Thank you for the review. I appreciate the compliment, and hope that you enjoy the next one. Abi.
Reviewer: kitten25 (Signed) · Date: 02/12/07 05:29 PM · On: Chapter 1
absolutely loved it gal! Thumbs up.
Author's Response: * LOL *Thanks for the thumbs up!!!!:-} Glad you enjoyed this - appreciate the enthusiasm!!! Abi
Reviewer: DreamsDestiny (Signed) · Date: 29/11/07 07:18 AM · On: Chapter 1
great job and very well written cant wait to see more of your work
Author's Response: Thank you for the review and the compliment on the writing. *Smiles* would be glad to have you along for the next one - hope it meets your approval too. Abi
Reviewer: Shannondoah (Signed) · Date: 26/11/07 07:01 PM · On: Chapter 1
Loved so many snappy lines like: "marked fox in a Hell Hound hunt" and watching the grass grow (and then needing to cut it)"! Brilliant! Very thought provoking and emotional, but not in a chick-flick way. Perfect Dean! Excellent!
Author's Response: Thanks for letting me know what you thought, I am flattered that you thought it was "perfect Dean". I also appreciate how closely you seem to have read and am glad if it worked for you. (I loved Dean's lawn mowing skills that much, I couldn't resisit putting it in there!!!!) Abi
Reviewer: WynterSun (Signed) · Date: 26/11/07 01:17 AM · On: Chapter 1
*Falls to floor drooling* A wonderful insight into the mind of Dean that we rarely get a chance to glimpse. I couldn't help but nod and smile the whole way through. Tears pinched at my eyes once or twice as well. It seems you've been able to take the boy's inner feelings and outward expressions from the show and turn them into words, the sorrow, tension and loneliness, the brotherly compassion, as well as a brief reprieve of humor despite the darkness that surrounds them. You've been true to the characters and that is a true talent, make no mistake. I wish I could be more eloquent like some of the other writer's on here. I am most definitely looking forward to any more stories you plan on gracing us with on this site. Thank you for the awesome read!
Author's Response: Thank-you for the great review. I still grin like a mad thing when I see that someone has taken the time to tell me what they think, but when what I wrote gets a response from a reader, I don't have the words to describe how proud and utterly satisfied that makes me feel. When you say that you nodded and smiled the whole way through, that you had a few tears and that you think I have been true to character... please believe, you have made my day!!!! Abi
Reviewer: ReccaF (Signed) · Date: 13/11/07 12:09 PM · On: Chapter 1
AWSOME beginning. You have captured the Winchester pov from both boys. You broke my heart with Dean's realization of what the Deal is doing to Sam. your vivid words painted a loving picture of Dean's ramblings as he waited for the chupacabra to show itself. typical downtime for a Winchester-OUTSTANDING!!!!! Excellent story-timing, tone, delivery-you have it all. Writing at it's best-I'll be looking for more stories from you. Thanks for sharing this. BRAVO!!!
Author's Response: *HUGE GRIN* That you thought I captured both boys pov gives me such a thrill. Thank you for such a glowing review *blush*, I really am bowled over. Writing about this show comes far easier than daring to share it on a site with so many talented authors . I look forward to hopefully seeing you again on the review pages- if you enjoy the next one that is!!!;-) Abi
Reviewer: ciel4 (Signed) · Date: 11/11/07 05:56 PM · On: Chapter 1
Beautifully done. The whole situation is so heart-wrenching, and the way you wrote Dean's reflections wrenched my heart all over again. Many thanks!
Author's Response: *Grin* Thank you for the review Ciel, it means a lot that you took time to read and let me know your thoughts. The fact that you had that response to this, is a boost for me. Abi
Reviewer: therealdoctor who (Signed) · Date: 11/11/07 09:20 AM · On: Chapter 1
its not the real docter who its ness, mum is so sad anyway it was fantastic well done :) it was fantastic :) A* :) ness xxx
Author's Response: Thanks for the review ... was really touched that you read it. I know that you enjoy the show ( and that we both appreciate certain aspects *cough* of it) I know reading is not your thing, so it ment a lot. Abi
Reviewer: therealdoctor who (Signed) · Date: 11/11/07 09:04 AM · On: Chapter 1
Excellent! I reallt enjoyed this! I can not wait for next insight....no i mean I can not wait GET TyPING please!
Author's Response: So glad you liked it .... Bossy!!!:-) I really appreciate all your encouragement and will get typing soon. Know what a busy lady you are, thanks for taking the time. Abi
Reviewer: supernaturaljunkiejude (Signed) · Date: 09/11/07 10:31 PM · On: Chapter 1
enjoyed your first tale for supernatural........will watch for more in the future
Author's Response: Real happy you liked it, thank you for reviwing, it definatly is a confidence boost that will make posting again less nerve wracking!!! Abi
Reviewer: Vanessa (Signed) · Date: 09/11/07 07:03 AM · On: Chapter 1
Unluckily for the chupacabra Sam was a grouchy bitch, with a deadly shot, even when woken up. Loved that line. Also loved "one of those Armageddon looks". Yup, that's Sammy all right. Great look at what's going on in Dean's head!
Author's Response: Thank you!! I was really pleased you liked my version of Sam - I find him more challenging to write than Dean. But I LOVE those looks he pulls out!!! Abi
Reviewer: Armaita (Signed) · Date: 08/11/07 07:57 PM · On: Chapter 1
Great fic! I hadn't thought of the father, son, and ghost angle (good parallel to religion), and you're right. Only a Winchester would be able to lose one of the trinity twice! I look forward to your next story.
Author's Response: *Smile* Appreciate the review - thank you for taking the time to read and letting me know what you thought. It's always nice to know what you've written makes sense to other people. Abi.
Reviewer: Janger (Signed) · Date: 08/11/07 04:38 PM · On: Chapter 1
I've really enjoyed reading this, your first story - I'm still trying to build up the courage myself. I loved the insights into the two missing hours with Bobby after Sam's death, some very powerful images there. Great story. Thanks J.
Author's Response: Thank you for your review, I am so pleased you enjoyed it. I loved how the relationship between Dean and Bobby developed when Sam went missing - it was one of my favorite aspects of AHBL . Good luck with your writing, I can completely relate to the "building up the courage" part - will be on the look out for your work. Abi
Reviewer: Cookie6 (Signed) · Date: 08/11/07 03:36 PM · On: Chapter 1
I was absorbed in this fabulous little fic. Your indepth exploration of Dean’s headspace was amazing. Your writing style perfectly revealing melancholy, resignation, anxiety, determination, fear and love – you drew out the stillness of this night despite the shortness of Dean’s time left as well as emphasising loneliness of Dean’s thoughts. Your intro just nailed Dean: his only focus at the moment -the hunt, his only focus in his life -Sam. Those two words “Watching, waiting” were such a powerful way to put us straight into Dean’s head at this moment. Awesome writing. Your reflection of Sam’s death for Dean was dramatic and my heart broke all over again for him. He didn’t need to be emo, your words did it for us. You reminded us know loud and clear why Dean made the deal, why he has no regrets, even if the fallout with Sam has some collateral damage. Your account of his absolute need to give up on that night and Bobby’s astuteness in preventing Dean’s despair driving him to follow through made me hold my breath. I could feel Dean’s emptiness, feel his desperation that there was no other path *sigh* Once again I love Bobby to bits. Beautifully written, loved it. Your description of the effects on Sam, physically and emotionally was incredible. How Dean sees it, understands it, didn’t consider it before he sealed the deal, wishes it wasn't. You gave up Sam’s pov clearly through Dean’s eyes and I get it too. Each sharing the others torture. The boys banter made me smile, you showed us their strong bond despite their burdens, their confronting words as each deals. Well done. Your conclusion was kicka$$. Loved this - “Unluckily for the chupacabra Sam was a grouchy bitch, with a deadly shot, even when woken up. Luckily for Dean knowing this and the million other things that made Sam, Sam ... was what was going to see him through” Not to mention a very cool image of Sam! This fic just hit me. It packed a huge wallop. Poignant, vivid description, cleverly written, MANY winning lines. Congrats on a great job, hard to believe it’s your first.
Author's Response: *Blush - HUGE GRIN - Blush again!!*Wow what an awesome review. I am so glad you enjoyed this and am am blown away by your kind words... I had to stop myself double checking that you had posted for the right story - LOL!! I have always found (both in Kripke's version and also from some of the phenomenal writers on this site) the character of Dean amazingly touching. For a guy who portrays himself as shallow and A moral he has an amazing amount of integrity and grace. I am so relieved you liked my rendition of Sammy, as I sometimes have trouble with this. I love the brotherly bond and really get a kick out of their banter on the show - so I was happy that this part of the story worked for you. After a review like yours I am walking 10 feet tall - and am finding the prospect of posting again less daunting!!! Thank you!
Reviewer: StrigoiVii (Signed) · Date: 08/11/07 02:46 PM · On: Chapter 1
Pretty good for a first try. Keep it up!
Author's Response: Thanks for the encouragement, it's a real confidence boost. Abi
Reviewer: buttercup (Signed) · Date: 08/11/07 01:37 PM · On: Chapter 1
FANTASTIC...if this was your first fan-fic you should definitely keep writing. Sophie
Author's Response: *grins* Oh yes -the sweaty palms whilst reading your reviews and the HUGE grin that there are reviews, confirms it!!! Thanks for the encouragement. Abi.
Reviewer: mtee (Signed) · Date: 08/11/07 12:33 PM · On: Chapter 1
This was good. Thank you!!
Author's Response: Thanks for taking the time to review- greatly appreciated!! Abi
Reviewer: fantasycatcher (Signed) · Date: 08/11/07 11:44 AM · On: Chapter 1
That was really good! I am glad you dug deep into Dean's head and produced this:) I can't wait to see what else you come up with...multi- chapter I hope. Let me know when you do hun... Fantasy
Author's Response: Thanks for reviewing, I'm really glad you liked it. It kind of dug me out from where I was hiding, slapped me up-side the head and told me to stop being such a big coward.. and write. I am definitely trying to work the courage up to do this again. Thanks for the confidence boost! Abi.
Reviewer: Bookworm (Signed) · Date: 08/11/07 08:26 AM · On: Chapter 1
it was good
Author's Response: Thanks for reading and especially for taking the time to review. Abi.
|
