Reviewer: SamGirl2011andBeyond (Signed)
21/04/12 01:08 PM · On:
I love the way they tease each other but that you also know they would have each other's back's in an instant.
Oh, absolutely. Even if they were fighting, cut one and the other one bleeds. That showed in the way Sam dropped his plans and took off to find Dean in Scarecrow, and a thousand other times for them both during the last seven seasons.
This was an experiment, to see if I could pull it off. I'd read a Star Trek fanfic which was nothing more than a dialogue between Spock and McCoy in a similar situation - pitch-dark and no descriptions virtually, but in that, it was pretty easy to pick who was talking.
So I played a little, to see if I could pull it off with a SN fic. Glad it worked - whew.
Reviewer: dontknowmyname (Signed)
14/06/11 08:52 PM · On:
Congratulations! You have been recced at spn_littlebro on LiveJournal.
You can find the rec in the Injury Theme post here:
Oh! Well, thank you very much for that.
I'm only a newbie to Live Journal - still haven't figured out how to navigate all around the posting stuff as yet. Tried to put in the links for previous and next chapters, but....*sigh*....it didn't work.
Thank you for the link - I'll go have a look at it this week. And thank you for the recommendation. Eventually all my stories will be up on my LJ page as well as here - I'm up to story number eight I think so far on LJ.
Reviewer: Dolphindreamer (Signed)
15/03/10 10:26 PM · On:
Dean held up his hand. "How many fingers am I holding up?"
Squinting, Sam tried to focus on the gently waving hand. "A hundred and two."
That's your temperature." Dean sighed
LOL....your banter is fun and clear and spot on!
I knew it was Sam all along!
I am so enjoying your work. And Holy cow....you printed out Bumbles? You are way cool! Thank you so much. I am utterly speechless!
Your stories rock my world!
LOL - thank you, Karen.
I'm really chuffed that you enjoyed this one. And lots of extra cookies for you for picking that it was Sam who was the worst hurt of the two. Thanks so much for reading.
And yep, I printed out Bumbles, and I've read my printed copy a few times now. I've also printed out Dude! There's Something In The Basement, Moon Shadows And Dragon's Blood, and Every Blue Moon, and I'm going back for more in the next few days. I love your work, and I love your "sunshine in rain" wishes.
Reviewer: ashon13 (Signed)
25/03/09 03:54 AM · On:
So okay, stupid question...Dean was the one in the mind that kept moaning around and saying how bad it hurts, while Sam yelled for help, but Sam was the one that was more seriously hurt?
No, not stupid at all - perfectly logical question, actually. And I'm happy to answer. In the beginning, it was Dean who was the more seriously hurt, being pinned by the rubble and unable to move. When Sam lifted the plank, etc, off him, it aggravated his own injuries, including the internal bleeding, and Sam was the one who collapsed gasping and saying that it hurt. Dean was the one soothing, trying not to panic, and yelling for help. When the rescuers arrived, Sam was the one unconscious.
Reviewer: bhoney (Signed)
15/02/09 01:04 AM · On:
Hey there! You did a great job with this. I liked how you put in little clues throughout that helped the reader pick out which brother was talking.
And you did a great job setting the scene with just a few words too, especially with your use of sound when they were in the mine. Some really nice descriptions in here.
Neat idea, and well executed!
Thanks for that, hon. This was one of those things that I always wanted to try, so I'm glad it actually worked. I have to tell you, though, it was getting really tough finding different ways to describe pitch-black darkness without getting repetitive - LOL! Thanks for reading, and reviewing. Reviews are gold to me.
Reviewer: sam (Signed)
21/09/08 08:51 PM · On:
I have more sympathy for the character of Sam for I have a husband whom acts almost identical to the characted of Dean. "Always with the bottom brain!"
Author's Response: Oh, poor you! LOL. Thanks for the review - I hope you liked it. Bit of a departure from my normal style, but I just wanted to see if I could pull it off....Jules
Reviewer: kiara_ratterjmouse (Signed)
17/09/08 06:29 AM · On:
I'd rather have a Windsor 208 or Cleaveland 352 block on my motorised wheelchair. 427 would suck too much petrol. unless you ran it on chilli juice like my dad intends to
Chilli juice? That's a new one. I heard of a diesel petrol being made out of vegetable oil, but chilli juice? Hmm....
Windsor 208 sounds good to me. Hook a Holley 4-barrel off it, and we're right to go. Mag wheels, set of extractors....*glances at pic of XY Falcon GTHO on office wall and drools*... Anyway - thank you for that Kiara. Hope you enjoyed the story - lol....Jules
Reviewer: Cookie6 (Signed)
26/04/08 10:17 PM · On:
This is just awesome - in both unique style and story plot.
I read this when you first posted (actually printed it out to take to some boring meeting so I could play with it) but never got round to reviewing - so apologies for being a lurker!
Picked the boys out although you did have me doubting myself in a few spots and I backtracked on my second (and third!) reading to get my head around it! Dean being pinned was a twist that caught me by surprise.
Loved your combo of snark and gags with the angst and brobond, it was both a fun and a beautiful read.
Author's Response: Ahh, that's all right - lots of people lurk. Glad you enjoyed it - but...taking it to a meeting? What if you'd been sprung? This was something I wanted to try - glad I pulled it off without too much confusion.
Reviewer: BlueEyedDemonLiz (Signed)
17/03/08 11:28 AM · On:
This was brilliant. I loved it. I know I've really enjoyed a story when I go back straight away and read the thing again. I'm never coming off my laptop at this rate. Seriously your stories are making my poor hubby a fanfic widower at such a young age. Great story Mizpah. Liz x
Author's Response: Hullo Liz! Aww, your hubby still isn't buried under that pile of ironing, is he? Think you and RedDevilGirl might be right in starting a fanfic widower's club, so they can man-hug. Glad you enjoyed this one. And I for one hope you don't come off your laptop for a long time, if you keep throwing out gems like Blood Stains to your loyal readers.
Reviewer: nightchills (Signed)
08/03/08 04:57 PM · On:
Well, knew who was speaking from the second line, but then got confused who was who with the sudden can't breathe problem! Tricky! Really enjoyed it, thanks.
Author's Response: Ahh - sorry about that...well, not really, as I kept it deliberately vague - that's me being all mysterious and Agatha Christie-like...Thanks for the review...Jules
Reviewer: Shannondoah (Signed)
27/12/07 02:18 PM · On:
I think you did a marvelous job! This is very different fromyour usual style, but equally good. After I read it, I went back through to see if I had guessed correctly. It was even better the second time!
Author's Response: Thank you for that. It is quite different, and I don't know if I will ever do another like this, but it was fun to have a go. Glad you loved it...Jules
Reviewer: Janger (Signed)
11/12/07 06:28 PM · On:
Ooh, that was very clever, I have never come across this style before but it worked so well. It really added to the darkness and confusion of the rockfall. You were so spot on with their distinctive dialogue, I had to re-read a couple of sections just to get it sorted in my mind once the serious injury became clear.
Loved the story and enjoyed the extra challenge. Thanks J.
Author's Response: Thank you so much! And thanks for reading. I've only come across this style once before, and it stuck in my head for an embarrassing number of years....lol! And of course, sneaky me kept it a little vague as to who was hurt the most. Glad you enjoyed it - and thank you for all the pretty stars! Take care...Jules
Reviewer: birdie (Signed)
07/12/07 01:38 PM · On:
This is cool! Even without announcement it was evident which bro was which. Funny and random and cool!! Bird x
Author's Response: Thank you for that. It was a fun piece to write, but also a bit of a challenge. I'm glad I had a go, and even more glad that people liked it. Thanks so much for your review...Jules
Reviewer: mymuseandi (Signed)
02/12/07 09:04 AM · On:
I did get confused in the middle of the story. I did guess that Dean injured his leg, but i thought that he got worse as well.
Anyway, it was a good style of writing. :)
Author's Response: Thank you for that. It was something I wanted to try - not my usual style - just a bit of a holiday. Thanks for the review....Jules
Reviewer: garvaldmains (Signed)
25/11/07 04:10 PM · On:
Author's Response: Thanks for that - and thanks for reviewing - I love reviews! Glad you liked it....Jules
Reviewer: CdeWinter78 (Signed)
21/11/07 08:10 AM · On:
Found this interesting, at first I thought I would get to puzzle out which voice belonged to which brother, but as I read, it was pretty clear as you write both characters so distinctively- and for me, accurately!!;-) Liked the dialogue in the dark as it almost showcased the brotherly banter - which held up really well the way you wrote it. Many good lines, but loved:
"College boy didn't know he was bleeding to death?"
"Pre-law, not medicine."
Author's Response: Thank you for that - I really took a chance on this one. It could so easily have gotten thoroughly confusing. I'm glad you enjoyed it so much....Jules
Reviewer: maimat (Signed)
30/10/07 08:29 AM · On:
Great dialogue, I didn't even notice the characters were unidentified until more than half way through, and I still knew who was who.
Fun to read, thanks!
Author's Response: Thanks for that - good to know I hit the mark. Thanks for the review...Jules
Reviewer: danrac1066 (Signed)
28/10/07 10:18 PM · On:
Always love to see a try at a totally different approach - doesn't always work out, but this one sure did! Really enjoyed it.
Author's Response: Thank you for that - I think it's why I took so long in finishing it and posting it - I wasn't sure if it would really work. Thanks for the review...Jules
Reviewer: ciel4 (Signed)
28/10/07 06:37 PM · On:
Very clever mizpah - hilarious and suspenseful at the same time. Very entertaining.
Author's Response: Thank you - there is just so much comedic potential to the boys' banter, and I can't resist dipping in...Jules
Reviewer: bayre (Signed)
28/10/07 04:46 PM · On:
Awww....that's great! I loved it!
Thanks Laura - I really appreciate that. Something very different from my usual style, but it worked well - thankfully...Jules
Reviewer: Magos186 (Signed)
28/10/07 10:44 AM · On:
i really liked this. if you know either of the boys it's so easy to figure out who's saying what and i really like the way you wrote it so you had to be the one to figure it out yourself. nicely done. this story was excellent and i loved the ending. a nice humorous ending to a good story.
Author's Response: Thank you Magos - I'm glad I finally got this finished. I kept going back to it, and reading it, and changing a word, adding a line, and then last week I decided, for heaven's sake finish the blasted thing. Nice to know I hit the mark with it...Jules
Reviewer: fredo (Signed)
28/10/07 02:44 AM · On:
"I skipped the ‘How To Survive A Mine Collapse' lecture."
"Probably washing your hair."
"Ha, ha. You're funny."
"Can you just - is it possible for you to say one thing - just one - without turning it into a smartass comment or an insult?"
"That was it."
"I know. It's a gift."
Awesome Jules! I could read Winchester banter -and especially the one written by you- for hours. I just hope you'll complete a lot of other stories, thanks for the great read...
Author's Response: Thanks hon - with all those yummy Dean pics you sent me to motivate me, there will be fics galore for you. There are still 11 incomplete fics in the folder, not counting In Dreams, which is nowhere near finished. Happy to feed your addiction for as long as I possibly can...Jules
Reviewer: wolfsnight (Signed)
28/10/07 12:15 AM · On:
I love the style of writing that you used here, and that although you didn't tell the reader who was talking, it was still obvious because of the difference in speech patterns.
Author's Response: Thanks for that - I went over and over the dialogue so many times just to make sure I got it right. Glad you enjoyed it...Jules
Reviewer: SUPERNATANGEL67 (Signed)
27/10/07 10:21 PM · On:
Author's Response: Why thank you. And thanks for the review - I'm rather addicted to them. This was fun and scary to do all at once - fun because it was something new, and scary for the same reason - if the dialogue wasn't right, it wouldn't make much sense, and I would have lost the reader. Breathing a big sigh of relief that it all worked...Jules
Reviewer: supernaturaldh (Signed)
27/10/07 07:25 PM · On:
Another awesome story. I love your stuff. You inspired me to give it a shot!!
I too had a passion from my childhood, but got busy living life, raising kids. Putting my passion on the back burner. Then I found this website and loved the stories. I decided to take a chance and here I am. Now, I am loving this, reading them and writing them!!
That would have to be one of the nicest compliments anyone has ever paid me. I am so touched by your words. Thank you.
I too, was inspired by another author to give writing a go again after so many years of putting it aside. I read one of her stories over on sn.tv, fell in love with her writing style, and thought, if I could write half as good as she can, I'd be happy. I gave it a try, got some nice feedback, posted a second fic, and the thing just steamrolled. Cave In is my 14th story. And that author that inspired me is now a good friend of mine - Windyfontaine.
Hang on to your dreams. It may take quite some time before they come to fruition, but don't lose them - they're precious. I'm so glad your dream to write came true, just as mine did......Jules