Reviewer: Anybody out there (Signed) · Date: 04/02/08 06:20 PM · On: Chapter 6 It weren't there before!
Holy... that section where they 'rebuilt' that wall... *speechless* "Yeah, I know you’re good, big brother…but I’m gonna help you anyway." That was just beautiful!!
Author's Response: Hehe...Dean and his walls, huh? I had real fun with this one, trying to figure out an original way of portraying an idea that most of us have seen before, so I couldn't be happier that it seems to have worked.
Reviewer: Anybody out there (Signed) · Date: 04/02/08 05:25 PM · On: Chapter 4 It's what you do with it that counts!
Wow, there's a surprise! Mac isn't what I thought he was... quite a turn of events. Think it's great how you make Sam so resoursefull (cause those boys really are:) My favorite part was the last scene with Dean and Gustav. Girl, I have to say you certainly have a grip on that boy. The way you describe his fall in defenses just to show us how he rebulid them; replacing those internal barriers, brick by brick, stone by stone. That was one amazing sentence. On to chapter 5:)
Author's Response: I love the resourcefulness of the boys in fact I don't think they make enough use of it on the show. I just know they're way more lethal than they're sometimes portrayed. Thanks for the shiny stars for this one and for keeping up with the reviews...you've made me very happy this morning.
Reviewer: Anybody out there (Signed) · Date: 04/02/08 04:54 PM · On: Chapter 3 Halitosis man & Blubber boy!
'Traveled by trunk' LOL, bullet, you're so cool:) The scene in the the trunk was amazing! Tell me; do you have any experience with 'traveling by trunk' yourself? (really hope not!) Glad to see Sammy up and running too. Thanks for another good chapter.
Author's Response: Y'know I haven't, but I'd jump at the chance to travel by trunk in that Impala...those boys don't know how lucky they are...hehe...and all those toys, um...I mean weapons to play with too...lol
Reviewer: Anybody out there (Signed) · Date: 04/02/08 10:33 AM · On: Chapter 2 No 'skinny assed' chick!
*Grrr! Trying to add bulletbabe as favorite author, but stupid stupid site wont let me:(( Makes me angry!!! -"What are you saying? You want to hear what wonderful words I have to say about this story, rather than my wining over something that's totally not your fault? Ahh, okay. Since you asked so nicely* Another great chapter of you, girl!! I simply LOVED the 'Mac the knife' reference! That was awesome and such a totally supernaturaly-winchester thing to throw in. I think it's the little things like that, that differ a good author from a great author. Unless you wondered, you're definitely amongst the latter ones. I know Dean loves his baby, but I can imagined the trunk not to be his favorite place to spend some time in his so not 'skinny assed chick'. Stuppied professor!!
Author's Response: Hah...Well first, thanks so much for trying to add me to your favourite list. It's always a real honour when someone does that...so thank you very much!! And I couldn't be happier that you're enjoying this story, I'm having a blast writing it and I'm always so pleased to hear what works and what doesn't. And the car has always been my 3rd favourite character so I have to get her in there when I can, love that car!!! Thanks for such a great review AOT and I hope you continue to enjoy. X Louy
Reviewer: danrac1066 (Signed) · Date: 03/02/08 07:18 PM · On: Chapter 8 Did all hell break lose again?
Ever wonder if Dean always stands in front of Sam as much to rein him in as protect him? - its crossed my mind - lol. So "like an expert felon" - Ha- anything I should know(not necessarily about MacKenzie). Just kidding. I really like this chapter, angst/action is there, but for some reason it gave me a big goofy grin, too. Alas, I have a chapter of Leap that I love and a chapter of Gift Returned that I hate to finish up so I can post, so off I go.... Great chapter - Angela
Author's Response: Although I'm a Dean girl, I always thought there was more to our Sammy than meets the eye...hehe Very glad you're enjoying Angela, and thanks for the great review and the stars, you have brought a big smile to my face today! X Louy
Reviewer: Anybody out there (Signed) · Date: 03/02/08 08:09 AM · On: Chapter 1 A big freaking girls knife!
Eeeeeeh!! I'm happy there's more chapters writen right now, so I don't have to wait for an update.. Your opening scene in the car was awesome. It was so perfectly 'Winchesters in Impala' style that for a minute there I was wondering if I was watching the show on tv. "Collector." He’d used the lie so many times it tripped off his tongue like his best hook-up line. :-)Yup, that's my Dean! :D This made me smile: Knowing his brother's anger was just for show, Sam didn’t hesitate to goad him on. "Come on, Dean, like you couldn’t make that back in ten minutes on the pool table." Dean paused in his tracks just long enough to realise he’d been paid a compliment, but refusing to be sidetracked, he raised one hand. "Totally not the point, Sammy. True, but totally not the point." Lol, yeah, you gotta just love siblings -what would we do without them. Specially if the siblings are two deadly handsome brothers named Winchester.... *ehem* yeah back to story... This is a great start to something i guess is a great story!! ~A
Author's Response: So glad you've enjoyed the first chap AOT, this story's probably only got a few chapters left to write so shouldn't be too long...Thanks for the awesome review and I hope you enjoy the rest! X Louy
Reviewer: fantasycatcher (Signed) · Date: 02/02/08 04:33 PM · On: Chapter 8 Did all hell break lose again?
WOW!!! Blown away by this addition Lou. I'm speechless.... Okay not totally. LOL I love everything about this chapter but just love how Mackenzie was on point, Sam..a teacher..who would've thought?? The bit that really sent shivers down my spine like I was actually watching it on TV... -"I fink yow in trouble, boy." He enunciated the words with as much menace as he could through swollen gums, spitting blood and saliva as he spoke. --and then he stilled as he felt the faintest wisp of breath against his neck and heard the quietest and most feral growl in his left ear. "Think again." Then Sam put the fat dude on his back...I just loved it!!! Now Nancy is gone and really can't wait for the next chapter.. Great update hun;) Schelz
Author's Response: Awe Schelz, you're a star...I always love to get a review from you, they're always so uplifting and an inspiration - you make me want to go and write straight away! Thanks for the review and the stars, they mean the world! X Louy
Reviewer: lostatc (Signed) · Date: 02/02/08 03:40 PM · On: Chapter 8 Did all hell break lose again?
I loved, " but he’d wasted far too much time thinking it through." With the Winchesters any time is too much time. So glad that Dean is back in Sam's hands. I am loving warfare Sam. I have the hardest time writing Sam so I appreciate any Sam that's well written and speaks to his stronger tendencies. Well done and I can't wait for more.
Author's Response: Thanks for that lostatc, it's great to know Big Bad Sam is working as I've never written him like this before...and thanks for all the great reviews and the stars, they always make me smile! X Louy
Reviewer: lostatc (Signed) · Date: 02/02/08 03:18 PM · On: Chapter 6 It weren't there before!
Yea! Dean's fighting back!
Author's Response: Better believe it...that boy's a fighter!
Reviewer: lostatc (Signed) · Date: 02/02/08 03:08 PM · On: Chapter 5 A sudden drop in pressure!
I don't like Gustav. Probably not supposed to, huh? I can't wait for the boys to get revenge on this creep. Thanks.
Author's Response: When the revenge happens I'll make sure it's slow and painful...have no fear...
Reviewer: lostatc (Signed) · Date: 02/02/08 02:57 PM · On: Chapter 4 It's what you do with it that counts!
This guy is too creepy with all his breathing on people - that's just gross. You have Dean down perfect! Well done.
Author's Response: Gustav's actually based on a friend of mine but I haven't told him...and he's a nice guy, not a 'creepy clergy' lol (never breathes on anyone as far as I know)
Reviewer: lostatc (Signed) · Date: 02/02/08 02:45 PM · On: Chapter 3 Halitosis man & Blubber boy!
I hate it when spiders do that. Gustav really has Dean figured because harming the girl would be harder on Dean than anything Gustav would've done right then. Great read. Thanks.
Author's Response: So do I, when they just spontaneously pour out of your mouth like that, makes the throat itch, doesn't it...lol
Reviewer: lostatc (Signed) · Date: 02/02/08 02:24 PM · On: Chapter 2 No 'skinny assed' chick!
Messing with Dean's car is never a good idea. I've read most of this story but I don't think I reviewed - wonder why? Maybe I was drugged like Sam. Anyway, it's great and I'm off for the next chapter.
Author's Response: Ah yeah, the car will always be his Achilles Heel, just as much as Sam is...glad you're still enjoying...
Reviewer: lostatc (Signed) · Date: 02/02/08 02:13 PM · On: Chapter 1 A big freaking girls knife!
Expertly written as always. I love the arguing between the brothers. I also love that it was Sam that ended up in the smelly river this time. On for more.
Author's Response: Always glad when someone new comes to the story...and especially since I have huge respect for your writing...hope you continue to enjoy...X Louy
Reviewer: kwater (Signed) · Date: 02/02/08 09:13 AM · On: Chapter 8 Did all hell break lose again?
Another well done chapter Bullet, loving the smoke bombs and the concussion grenade. Gotta stop for now, but I'll be back for more - Thanks for the great morning read - K
Author's Response: Thanks for the review Kel, and if you feel tempted to get experimental with the REM's - get earplugs! hehe X Louy
Reviewer: kwater (Signed) · Date: 02/02/08 09:05 AM · On: Chapter 7 Urban warfare Winchester style!
Okay so this chapter again kicked ass... Loving a Sam that's going to war and I have to say I got the smoke bomb but I"m at a loss as to what'll happen with the heating element from the REM's..lol. Also, Dean trying to regain control and dodging Gustav's prying was perfect. Great chapter - K
Author's Response: Aha, the REM, all will be revealed in the next chap...hehe. Glad you're still enjoying this Kel, and especially big bad Sam!
Reviewer: kwater (Signed) · Date: 02/02/08 08:56 AM · On: Chapter 6 It weren't there before!
Damn I absolutely loved that chapter, we all talk about the walls that Dean keeps in place to cope, but to actually see him building the walls in his mind was just really very cool. And Sam's offer of help perfect. LOVED it - Great job - Kel
Author's Response: Thanks Kel, it's always a bit of a challenge to find ways of showing something we all know, but in an original way and I'm so pleased this seems to have worked. Thanks so much for the review and the stars, they mean the world. X Louy
Reviewer: supernaturaljunkiejude (Signed) · Date: 01/02/08 07:52 PM · On: Chapter 8 Did all hell break lose again?
…and then he stilled as he felt the faintest wisp of breath against his neck and heard the quietest and most feral growl in his left ear. "Think again." he toppled like a felled OAK, landing in a knot of limbs and body fat Though OAF may have been more appropriate...........What an awesome tale you are telling ....Our wonder Little Brother to the RESCUE...YAAAAYYYY!!! SAMMY!!! poor Dean though will he get back to Winchester Normalcy???? such a cliffie!!!
Author's Response: Oh, he definately will Jude, but gonna make him work for it, but having said that, with big bad little brother on the case, he probably won't have to work too hard...hehe Thanks for the review and the stars Jude. X Louy
Reviewer: Vanessa (Signed) · Date: 01/02/08 06:18 PM · On: Chapter 8 Did all hell break lose again?
Terrific update, Louy. Loved it. My favorite part: "I fink yow in trouble, boy." He enunciated the words with as much menace as he could through swollen gums, spitting blood and saliva as he spoke. …and then he stilled as he felt the faintest wisp of breath against his neck and heard the quietest and most feral growl in his left ear. "Think again." That was superb! I don't know about Petra, but it sure tides me over!! For a little bit anyway. hehe Can't wait for the next chapter!
Author's Response: Thanks so much for that, Ness. I have to say I was pretty worried about how BigBad Sam was going to work but I quite like writing him like this now...may have to do more stories with the BB...hehe Thanks for the review and the stars X Louy
Reviewer: birdie (Signed) · Date: 01/02/08 04:56 PM · On: Chapter 8 Did all hell break lose again?
Lout. As I said Samantha!!!! Love MacKenzie being ballsy even though he's shit scared and love butch tough Sammy riding in to the rescue. But most of all I adore poor fragile Dean dragging hinself up by sheer willpower and managing to stay on his feet. Go Dean Hunny!! Can we have another chapter now please (oh after you do my banner! Pretty please!  Bev xxxxx PS (meds now!)
Author's Response: Popping the meds as we speak...hehe. And we may have to talk about that Samantha crack!!!!!!!
Reviewer: Cookie6 (Signed) · Date: 25/01/08 08:22 AM · On: Chapter 7 Urban warfare Winchester style!
Goddamn this story just gets better. The underlying sinister factor from the villain, and menace factor from the Winchesters is a potent mix that has my adrenalin pumping. I am so in lust with your Sammy! Yeah, yeah, Ima Dean girl but you are sure pushing my Sam button!! And ye gads girl! With all that bomb making knowledge, I’m so glad we’re friends. Would hate to fall on your bad side!!! Now who’s the research geek?! Dean would so love you!! Your portrayal of Sam as a man of few words but intense glares and hardcore action just screamed his threat. I could feel the ‘lethal’ simmering. Your phrases just kept building his force. Wow to this entrance - “…the door was kicked open and Sam stormed into the room like a full force of nature” yep, his aura announced his arrival ahead of him! For me this line “…the feral look in his eyes as he’d stalked out of the room had convinced him it would be a very bad idea to ‘disappoint’ Sam Winchester right now” was an absolute standout. Add that physical presence with these words “I’m going to show you what to do so pay attention. You’ll need to watch carefully." and you have one intense, serious Sam working with such dogged, single mindedness. You sure surfaced his ’Winchester’ – his assertively stated order would have made John proud. And boy, did you catch my attention with this “Sam stared up at him with a harsh, dark gaze and no hint of pity. He spoke more slowly, enunciating every word” WOW, you leave absolutely no doubt that Sam means business and will show no mercy. It was very cool how you pointed out that this hunter Sam was so different to the gentle, curious Sam that Mackenzie decided to drug. Here’s a stunning sentence, so well written “This was a man whose very presence projected danger, a man who was clearly prepared to do whatever was necessary to achieve his aim, and this was a man who was pissed” – work of art! I can’t wait for you to cut Sam loose! “Urban warfare” what an understatement! What a promise! And I just love your “don’t try this at home” heads-up! Are you serious?!? With your instructions in bomb making watch out anyone here at home, PMT just got locked and loaded!!! And ok, I didn’t really mean I could let go of my Dean factor… These lines are delicious “…and he remembered. He remembered everything” What an eye catching intro to your new scene. The stealth of it was almost serene. You caught my breath with this “His brother was safe now, concealed behind that hard built wall and no-one was getting through that. Not while Dean still had breath in his body, fire in his belly and devotion in his heart. No-one was getting through that.” I knew that wall would be a weapon, how could it not after the brothers’ joint effort. Amazing analogy once again. Holy Sh!t! Your descriptions of Gustav invading Dean’s memories was creepy and disgusting. The ultimate violation, nothing else left to be violated one he’s there in your soul, your most private existence…*shudder* You left me stunned with the imagery of Dean mentally turning away from the horror of watching his mother burn while Gustav watched on with joy. Truly horrible for Dean to experience the theft of such privacy. Boy OMG, the pinnacle of this ch was Dean chasing Gustav down with his barrage of memories, all to keep Sam hidden. A.W.E.S.O.M.E. That whole scene was the ultimate in storytelling and the ultimate in describing the love and bond between these brothers. That whole scene blew me away, I read it three times I am so in awe of it. Loved your description of Dean gaining awareness. And as he began to gain a small measure of physical control, spurred on by his mammoth success with the mental control, I thought this was perfect “And although he couldn’t show it, on the inside Dean smiled”. *bravo* Wonderful, wonderful chapter. Put another mental tick in the box of Lou style talent that rained down on her readers’ heads.
Author's Response: Wow, Petra once again. I'm lost for words. It never ceases to amaze me that you can cast your eyes over something and pick up all the nuances, subtleties and layers of interwoven plot that takes sooo long to write. You always manage to highlight those particular bits that mean so much to me even though I always think they'll be missed by everyone else. I'm working on the next chapter now, mostly because of this review, and I really hope you continue to like this because I can't tell you how much I love to get these thoughtful and so inspiring review from you! Thank you so much Petra!
Reviewer: danrac1066 (Signed) · Date: 21/01/08 01:14 AM · On: Chapter 7 Urban warfare Winchester style!
Someone in the same line of work - lol- poor deluded professor to think you can get that on every street corner. GLad Dean's still in there and determined. I remember enough chemistry to know that those instructios work just fine - don't ask - laugh! Looking forward to the rest of this, great job! - Angela
Author's Response: Hehehe, I have a strange feeling you and I have led similar lives...(you're right, they do work but don't tell anyone) Thanks for the great reviews Angela, and hope you continue to enjoy, should be updating within a week (hopefully) X Louy
Reviewer: danrac1066 (Signed) · Date: 21/01/08 01:10 AM · On: Chapter 5 A sudden drop in pressure!
Another chapter review that disappeared. Personally, I'm a fan of sarcasm, whether MacKenzie is or not. "then we have a plan" - can so see Sam going the lethally simple route in these circumstances. And Dean - yikes!!!! Vivid nightmare he won't ever forget. Very well written, ratcheting up some suspense... Love this - Angela
Author's Response: Oh he's gonna be lean and lethal all right...This is a whole new Sammy for me , never written big bad Sam and I've got to say i'm enjoying it immensely. Thanks for another great review Angela. X
Reviewer: danrac1066 (Signed) · Date: 21/01/08 01:05 AM · On: Chapter 4 It's what you do with it that counts!
You know, I reviewed this chapter 2 hours ago when I was more awake and I'd like to think a bit more insightful, but when I looked at the reviews after I finished chap 7, I found that only the one for 3 and 6 showed up. Weird little quirks with the site lately, huh? Anyhow, I'm wishing ye ol' course catalogue had included hotwire 101 and improvised weapon making, would have livened up a few semesters! I'm thinkin' Winchester life has way too much nightmare fodder for this turn of events to be good ..... Angela
Author's Response: Angela, I'm so impressed you came back and reviewed again - thanks so much for that...and I'm working on a few more 101 lessons from big brother at the moment, got a few one shots hanging around unfinished, but will hopefully get to them one day. Thanks for the double review X lol Louy
Reviewer: danrac1066 (Signed) · Date: 20/01/08 11:48 PM · On: Chapter 6 It weren't there before!
Love the wall building image and reassured that Dean's still in there. Another very nice chapter, plowing onward...
Author's Response: That image has been kind of popular and I'm actually very pleased. I'ts a bit of a challenge to try to approach ideas we all know about in a more original way and make them work... Thanks for the review and I never mind what order they come in..hehe
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