Reviewer: Magos186 (Signed) · Date: 18/10/07 11:18 PM · On: Chapter 4 Tie My Shoes
ugh! awesome chapter. i love the way you wrote dean's drive out to california. But it was TOO short for me! please update ASAP! I really really REALLY can't wait to find out what happens at the hospital.
Author's Response: Working on more, probably not posting until late tonight, though. I'm so glad you are enjoying this. Thank you
Reviewer: Dean494 (Signed) · Date: 18/10/07 07:45 PM · On: Chapter 4 Tie My Shoes
Loved it. Jhon as always has something more important and lives Dean to take care of all, I felt great about Dean's answer. Awsome work with Dean's memories, I liked all of them along the road. Please let him eat something more than M&M's and coffee. Don't take too long for the next chappy, I'm looking forward to Jessica's and Dean meeting. Excelente. Gabriela.
Author's Response: Glad you like. So, tofu and sprouts maybe? Just kidding. Somebody had to teach Sam to eat better, my money's on Jess. Maybe she can give Dean a few pointers. Thank you!
Reviewer: Cookie6 (Signed) · Date: 18/10/07 05:51 PM · On: Chapter 4 Tie My Shoes
This is an AMAZING chapter girl! The perfect "inbetween" for your action and storyline. The "gas, coffee, gas, coffee..." theme was absolute in communicating Dean's desperation and panic and he undured the long miles. I loved the common beginnings to Dean's memories ("Dean?" "yeah Sammy?") as they revealed Sam's trust and Dean's patience, not to mention how Sam naturally looked to Dean for security and reassurance at all stages of his life. The memories as Dean's recoil to the notion of "I know you're not close" was brilliant. Your John drives me nuts and I'm glad you're bringing him back to the boys - I love how Dean defied him, but hey, this is Sam we're talking about and we know this is not negotiable for Dean. The soldier strategy for tieing shoes - how Winchester! You can be very confident that this ch is exactly right for your story, so stay confident and us all you got! Very clever and enjoyable piece of writing.
Author's Response: Yay! Yay! So glad you enjoyed it, working on Chap 5. John drives me nuts always, but somehow I still love the guy
Reviewer: supernaturalpass (Signed) · Date: 18/10/07 03:56 PM · On: Chapter 4 Tie My Shoes
Loving this story! Great update, I enjoyed the flashabacks! Update soon!
Author's Response: Thank you! Working on next chapter, but feeling guilty about not going to church bridal shower for someone I basically don't know, so will probably be tomorrow night for an update.
Reviewer: ReccaF (Signed) · Date: 18/10/07 03:17 PM · On: Chapter 4 Tie My Shoes
ok .. this was so powerful and yet so easy going that it was decieving. It hit me right between the eyes- you can almost feel Dean's building fear and tension as he makes the drive. John can be such an a..! The backward glimpse into the boys growing up-it tore your heart out realizing how much Dean is suffering not knowing if his brother will be alive by the time he gets to California. GREAT WRITING!!!!!!!!!! AWSOME!!!!!! please update SOON!!!!!! a fan
Author's Response: Everyone has made my day with these reviews! Thank you so so much. I promise not to kill Sam, but let's not tell Dean yet
Reviewer: catchme21 (Signed) · Date: 18/10/07 12:20 PM · On: Chapter 4 Tie My Shoes
That was an awesome chapter! I love how Dean was just eventually on "coffee coffee coffee". I lol'd at that. You don't always have to have action. You do need those transition chapters, and this one was beautifully done. You could feel Dean's desperation to reach Palo Alto, and the memories were a nice touch, along with the one line Jess said repeating over and over again. Awesome chapter! Looking forward to the next one very soon.
Author's Response: So glad you liked it! I pretty much typed it on coffee coffee coffee. I kind of worried about starting each memory with that line and "Dean?" "Yeah Sammy?" but I thought it made them feel familiar. More soon, thank you for reviewing.
Reviewer: Sammygirl1963 (Signed) · Date: 18/10/07 12:10 PM · On: Chapter 4 Tie My Shoes
This chapter did more than add a little something! It was perfect as we got to see some tender moments between Dean and Sammy as they were growing up and how they had an impact on Dean as he travels to California! I could so slap John Winchester in the face right now for not going too--loved the fact that Dean told him he would not meet him on time for thier next hunt! John now knows just how important Sammy is to Dean!
Author's Response: I frequently have an urge to slap John - but I don't think he's done in this tale yet. Glad you liked the road trip to memory lane, more soon. Thank you for the review
Reviewer: bulletbabe (Signed) · Date: 18/10/07 11:34 AM · On: Chapter 4 Tie My Shoes
Knew that was gonna hurt!!! Can't wait for Dean and Jess to meet, should be interesting. Great update, need more!
Author's Response: Working on that meeting now and on re-incorporating John. Wanted to get Dean's mood through in this chapter without maudlin speeches, glad it worked. Thank you!
Reviewer: Winchester07 (Signed) · Date: 18/10/07 11:31 AM · On: Chapter 4 Tie My Shoes
OMG....i'm bawlin' over here!! This chapter was awesome!
Author's Response: Thank you so much! Wanted to include a few happy memories, a few tear jerkers in a small space, wasn't sure how it would work out
Reviewer: supernatfem76 (Signed) · Date: 18/10/07 11:06 AM · On: Chapter 4 Tie My Shoes
Even though this chapter was not an action chapter, I loved it. I loved all the flashbacks. I found myself smiling while reading most of the flashbacks because I could picture them so well in my mind. Keep up the good work!
Author's Response: Thanks for the review - I wasn't all that confident in this chapter, just knew it made me smile - glad it works for you too
Reviewer: kwater (Signed) · Date: 18/10/07 10:54 AM · On: Chapter 4 Tie My Shoes
"Stand the first soldier up at attention. The second one creeps around the perimeter, then he bolts down in the foxhole. First one yanks him tight and he's captured. One tied up shoe!" - No worries this one memory alone is better than a world of action, nice job - K
Author's Response: Just couldn't see Dean doing the bunny ears poem. Thanks so much for reviewing this chapter - it made me nervous to write. Relief!!!!
Reviewer: Sammygirl1963 (Signed) · Date: 16/10/07 10:05 PM · On: Chapter 3 "I'm Trying to Reach Dean?"
Awesome chapter! Lor have mercy, that mesage is going to tear Dean up when he hears it! an't wait to see what his reaction is to it!
Author's Response: Chap 4 is kind of a breather for all of us before Dean meets Jess in chap 5 and also sort of a writing experiment for me, so let me know. Thanks so much for the review
Reviewer: Dean494 (Signed) · Date: 16/10/07 09:41 PM · On: Chapter 3 "I'm Trying to Reach Dean?"
Waiting for another chappy, I thought Dean was going to answer. Can't imagine the poor guy when he finds out Jessica's message. Great work, please update soon.
Author's Response: I'm going to save some of that for a face to face meeting for Dean and Jess, which is CHap 5. Thanks for the review
Reviewer: liferocks (Signed) · Date: 16/10/07 07:30 PM · On: Chapter 3 "I'm Trying to Reach Dean?"
I like!!
Author's Response: Thank you. Next chapter's a little wierd,hang in there
Reviewer: Magos186 (Signed) · Date: 16/10/07 12:31 PM · On: Chapter 3 "I'm Trying to Reach Dean?"
I really enjoyed this chapter. please don't kill sam. and i love that you had Jess call Dean. Though really nothing is gonna keep dean away once he hears that. I can't wait for the next chapter! post it soon! PLEASE
Author's Response: No killing Sam, promise promise. Thank you for reviewing.
Reviewer: supernatfem76 (Signed) · Date: 16/10/07 11:23 AM · On: Chapter 3 "I'm Trying to Reach Dean?"
Chapter 3 was another good chapter. I was really impressed with your medical knowledge. I can't wait until the next chapter.
Author's Response: The medical mumbo is kind of my day gig. Thank you for the review.
Reviewer: Winchester07 (Signed) · Date: 16/10/07 11:13 AM · On: Chapter 3 "I'm Trying to Reach Dean?"
OH this is great. I loved the ER scene. Very well done with the terminology. Can't wait for more.!!!
Author's Response: Glad you liked it! We'll get back to Sam at the hospital, but next chap mainly Dean. Thanks for reviewing
Reviewer: ReccaF (Signed) · Date: 16/10/07 09:32 AM · On: Chapter 3 "I'm Trying to Reach Dean?"
OMG... I waited until this chapter to review.AWSOME!!!!!!!!!! I like your style -right into the fray-no holds barred. I like the perspective - Jessica'sthoughts etc.. Wait until Dean gets there. Great use of wording- you paint perfect visual pictures for me. GREAT STORY!!!!!! can't wait for another chapter..PLEASE!!! BRAVO a fan
Author's Response: Thank you so much!!! Made my day.
Reviewer: kwater (Signed) · Date: 16/10/07 09:08 AM · On: Chapter 3 "I'm Trying to Reach Dean?"
Great update, I have to say I'm really enjoying this story. I can only imagine what Dean's reaction will be. Thanks for the read - K
Author's Response: Thank you for the review - I always really enjoy your work, so I value the input
Reviewer: Shannondoah (Signed) · Date: 16/10/07 08:55 AM · On: Chapter 3 "I'm Trying to Reach Dean?"
Wow! You put a lot of work into this piece to make it accurate. I'm very impressed! I love everything about it! Jessica's scattered thoughts, the ER team, absolutely everything!
Author's Response: Thank you for the review! Going to have to leave Jess in limbo for a chapter and go find Dean
Reviewer: bulletbabe (Signed) · Date: 16/10/07 08:43 AM · On: Chapter 3 "I'm Trying to Reach Dean?"
"I know your family isn't close.." now that's gonna hurt! Love this story - post another update soon please.
Author's Response: I was so excited you picked that line out! It's the set up for the next chapter and my favorite tidbit - Dean may be more hurt than Sam when it hears it
Reviewer: supernaturalpass (Signed) · Date: 15/10/07 08:55 PM · On: Chapter 2 Bang Bang You're Dead
What, are these people crazy? Haven't they ever heard of Dean Winchester? lol, man are they in for it! Great story, can't wait for an update!
Author's Response: Apparently they missed the bulletin. Working on chap 3 now, not sure if it will go up tonight
Reviewer: Swellison (Signed) · Date: 14/10/07 07:36 PM · On: Chapter 2 Bang Bang You're Dead
Ack, poor Sam, shot in the back. This is shaping into a fast-moving story, and now one of Jess's attackers is dead? I'm hoping for a flashback that details the fight scene - maybe Sam or Jess have a nightmare about it? Eagerly awaiting more.
Author's Response: Poor Sam. I wouldn't mind including the fight scene, maybe a few chapters down the pike. Thanks for the review
Reviewer: Cookie6 (Signed) · Date: 14/10/07 04:29 AM · On: Chapter 2 Bang Bang You're Dead
fantastic second chapter. Hurt!Sam is sure to have Dean and John running ready to hand out some Winchester justice. Very exciting story, adrenalin packed from the very beginning. Well done!
Author's Response: I can hear them running in anytime now. Thank you for the review!
Reviewer: bulletbabe (Signed) · Date: 14/10/07 03:45 AM · On: Chapter 2 Bang Bang You're Dead
This is great - it's very different, don't usually see too much of Jess, and a good plot - lots of action. Whats not to like? Looking forward to lots more of this!
Author's Response: More soon. I thought if Sam was that in love with Jess, stands to reason she might be a fairly interesting person
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