Reviewer: garvaldmains (Signed) · Date: 30/11/07 05:16 PM · On: Chapter 9 Epilogue
Brilliant! Thank you, loved it! Dix
Author's Response: This one's my personal fav so far, three others that I haven't started to post yet are in various states of disrepair. Thanks for joining me for the ride and I really appreciate the reviews!
Reviewer: Midge (Signed) · Date: 22/11/07 04:58 PM · On: Chapter 9 Epilogue
That was really a lovely story, thank you. In fact it was much much better than I expected, and I loved the twist that Dean phoned Jess every month and then they pretended never to have met. Wonderful. I've always thought all that childhood training must have shown up somewhere in Sam's life at Stanford - killing someone whilst defending Jess just sounds so right. Well done on a very well crafted story.
Author's Response: Thank you so much! This has been my favorite story to write so far (not that there are that many yet - lol) and am very glad to see the positive response.
Reviewer: Cookie6 (Signed) · Date: 19/11/07 06:59 AM · On: Chapter 9 Epilogue
Lovely smooth landing, your epilogue is even better second time round. Loved this "If she could keep secrets that well, she was going to be one hell of a Winchester" Wonderful fic, I was rivetted right from the start. Your portrayal of all of our Winchester men was spot on!! Awesome work!!
Author's Response: Thank you so much, I really wanted this to end up in line with what was already familiar for all of us.
Reviewer: Cookie6 (Signed) · Date: 19/11/07 06:49 AM · On: Chapter 8 Plane Tickets
I read this chapter when you first posted but I didn’t review straight away because I wasn’t sure how I felt… Don’t get me wrong, this is an awesome chapter in an awesome fic. I love the story and I love your style of writing. But I think a little voice in me was expecting, hoping for the Hallmark ending: the-happy-ever-after-Winchesters-reunited ending. So I stayed away a bit to mull it over, for some reason I needed to get my head around Dean leaving without Sam knowing he was even there. But you know what? You wrote it the only way it could go down, not only because it dovetails so beautifully into the Pilot and the Winchester history, but because it’s so the Winchester way. So I’m back, asking *begging* for your forgiveness for my tardiness and wayward thinking and would like to review this fic as you deserve… Jess sitting with Sam was just as heartbreaking as Dean’s vigil. Your words “Anything to fill the void of silence where Sam should be” showed us how big Sam’s presence is in Jess’s life. What’s more, Dean recognised this. Your flashback of nineteen year old John was STUNNING in description and perfectly timed for this story to explain why John went after the shooter. You portrayed the hopelessness and helplessness of war graphically – “…he was friendless, but not alone. Now there were three dead bodies at his feet, returning in death to the near children they were. Now the innocent Kansas upbringing was over. Now he'd become a killer for the first time. Now he was alone.” – shocking yet inevitable, you showed how John has been indelibly shaped as a soldier and a hunter. And now with these words – “The loss of that little part of your soul that goes when you kill another human. For all that he'd raised Dean and Sam to be hunters, he'd never wanted them confronted with that. Killing evil was different. John had very intentionally not taught them to kill men. Now in spite of his best efforts, Mark Pullman had introduced his younger son to that hell. Damned if he'd been willing to let Todd do the same to the elder” you showed us that impact on him as a father. For me, this whole flashback was the pinnacle of this chapter. *standing ovation* No wonder he never discussed that scar with his boys. I loved the way the brothers breathed in unison, the calm before the storm. It was almost as if you were establishing a secure place for Sam to return. Your scene with him waking up, both boys panicking, one reassuring, one needing reassurance was dramatic. I’m sure that heart monitor going off was me! “Hazel eyes locked with green ones’ – a beautiful moment shared, so few words yet so much understood *applause* So here we are, back to where I started… Dean asking for a promise for Sam and Jess giving that promise for Sam - the perfect ending, how could I have ever doubted you!!! Brilliant.
Author's Response: No forgiveness needed - I really appreciate that you thought this was worth mulling over and an insightful review is worth its weight in gold. I can't blame you for wanting the Hallmark moment, I wanted to write it so badly I could taste it. Course I'm one of those that can re read Gone With The Wind 'cause I think it might end happy this time. Thanks for liking my take on John's first war - let's just say that one's a near and dear subject for me - and my Dad. Thank you!
Reviewer: Winchester07 (Signed) · Date: 14/11/07 08:50 PM · On: Chapter 9 Epilogue
Very cool story. Loved it
Author's Response: I'm so glad you enjoyed this and thank you for reviewing.
Reviewer: greensheep8 (Signed) · Date: 30/10/07 05:17 PM · On: Chapter 9 Epilogue
wow! cool story-hope you do more! liked how you tied it in with the pilot! :)
Author's Response: Thank you! Actually have three different prologues kicking around the hard drive, I'll see what spins out
Reviewer: eye4u (Signed) · Date: 30/10/07 04:54 PM · On: Chapter 9 Epilogue
Hey! Nice connect! You stood true to the pilot! Kudos!
Author's Response: Thank you! I wanted to stay with established version of the pilot, glad it worked
Reviewer: supernatfem76 (Signed) · Date: 30/10/07 01:39 PM · On: Chapter 8 Plane Tickets
I really liked this story. I see that this chapter confirmed my suspicions that Papa Winchester took care of Todd Pullman. I liked the flashback to the first time that John killed someone. Not having Sam remember what had happened I didn't see that coming. Dean leaving so that Sam could live his life was typical of Dean. He is always taking care of his brother.
Author's Response: Thank you for the review, glad you enjoyed! Somehow this story evolved from being about Sam to being about Dean and he always gets his heart trampled for everyone else
Reviewer: kwater (Signed) · Date: 30/10/07 12:50 PM · On: Chapter 9 Epilogue
Great finish, really you just rocked this story all the way. Thanks for the great read - K
Author's Response: So, like it enough to forgive me for my Halloween one shot mess? lol Thank you.
Reviewer: kwater (Signed) · Date: 30/10/07 12:46 PM · On: Chapter 8 Plane Tickets
Oh, my god, put a tissue warning on this..lol. That was a terrific ending I loved that last line. I'm truely sorry this story is over as I've enjoyed it sooooo much, Gonna head on over and read the last - K
Author's Response: Puffs or kleenex? Thank you so much for the favorable reviews, they mean a lot. - Angela
Reviewer: Sammygirl1963 (Signed) · Date: 30/10/07 12:39 PM · On: Chapter 8 Plane Tickets
Awesome chapter! I can't believe that Dean actually left Sam before talking to him after wanting so badly for Sammy to wake up But he is right, Sammy did want another life!
Author's Response: Thought I'd tug at Dean's heartstrings a little and make him take a pass on talking to Sam. Thank you so much for the review.
Reviewer: Magos186 (Signed) · Date: 30/10/07 12:27 PM · On: Chapter 9 Epilogue
interesting way to end the story. i liked that you bridged it to the pilot. i also like that you had dean and jess talking since the shooting. it was sweet. and john's just a bastard. all in all this was a good story. keep writing.
Author's Response: Thank you. I had the writing bug back in college, but it's been on the back burner for a long time - I've been so pleased with the encouragement to let it back out.
Reviewer: supernaturalpass (Signed) · Date: 30/10/07 12:12 PM · On: Chapter 9 Epilogue
Excellent story! I really enjoyed this and you did a great job of ending it and managing to fit it with the show! Excellent!
Author's Response: Thank you! I wanted to make sure I didn't change anything once those opening credits rolled.
Reviewer: bulletbabe (Signed) · Date: 30/10/07 10:20 AM · On: Chapter 9 Epilogue
This just tied it all up for me, with a huge ribbon..lol Fantastic story, believable and totally original - loved every minute of this!!!
Author's Response: thank you so much!!!
Reviewer: bulletbabe (Signed) · Date: 30/10/07 10:19 AM · On: Chapter 8 Plane Tickets
Where to start. The John as a 19 year old flashback was awesome, and original, never read something quite like that before. And Dean feeling the need to leave, before Sam was aware that he was even there was just heartbreaking. Fantastic job danrac!
Author's Response: Glad you enjoyed this! Seemed to me that John would do anything for the boys - except tell them that. I wanted all four left a secret in the end - John's hiding his hunt, Sam hiding his past, Jess hiding meeting Dean, Dean hiding checking up on same . Thank you.
Reviewer: supernaturalfan95 (Signed) · Date: 25/10/07 11:22 AM · On: Chapter 4 Tie My Shoes
This chapter is awsome! I loved it.. Its soooo cute the way they talked to each other.. the flashbacks somehow filled in the closeness they have for each other.. this chap made my day!!
Author's Response: Thank you for the review! I thought at least a little of their life should have been cute.
Reviewer: bulletbabe (Signed) · Date: 25/10/07 03:42 AM · On: Chapter 7 The Glass House
I'm enjoying this story so much, and in this chapter, you've managed to weave emotion, drama, suspense and sadness all in together. And done a great job of it too. I know at this point it's a guess but thank you for letting John show his dark side, and his protective side. For me that's the real J.W.- very dangerous when his family is threatened! And lets face it 'vengeance' is his middle name. Great work and beautifully writen as well!
Author's Response: Guesses are always welcome and generally on target! Nearing story end, hopefully post chap 8 late tonight
Reviewer: Swellison (Signed) · Date: 24/10/07 11:51 PM · On: Chapter 4 Tie My Shoes
I love this chapter! It doesn't have a lot of action, or description, but it's got tons of feeling. I knew that Jessica's last words (I know you're not close) would leave Dean reeling, love the way that it's haunting him throughout the long cross-country drive, with his memories as a firm counterpoint to Jess's words.
Author's Response: I kind of thought of this chapter as my little emotional interlude, glad it worked for you. Thank you!
Reviewer: Swellison (Signed) · Date: 24/10/07 11:41 PM · On: Chapter 7 The Glass House
This was an interesting chapter, scattered all over the place. The interview with the neurologist, which had its own twist, Dean losing it, and giving Jessica an earful of the details of Sam's earlier life, without explaining the reasons for it, and Dean's hunting of Pullman, with the mysterious stranger beating him to the finish line. Who was that hunter? John? (But John would've left Dean's paperwork exactly as he found it, leaving no trace he'd been there.) Bobby? Whoever is the local hunter for the Palo Alto area---? It can't be a cop... does Jessica have an older brother???
Author's Response: It was a bit scattered, hopefully not too much. All of those things needed to happen, but none of them really seemed to warrant a chapter of their own. Never considered a brother for Jess, maybe in another tale, hmmm.... Thank you for reading and for the review
Reviewer: greensheep8 (Signed) · Date: 24/10/07 10:21 PM · On: Chapter 1 The ER, WHERE ELSE?
i like it!!!
Author's Response: I'm glad! Thank you.
Reviewer: Cookie6 (Signed) · Date: 24/10/07 04:13 PM · On: Chapter 7 The Glass House
What a powerful chapter in terms of all the characters. Your description was intense and kept me riveted. Tender moments intertwined with anguish and despair, this story is wicked.Dean talking to Sam as though he was awake was heartbreaking and Jess picking up on that was a sweet connection. Wonder if she’s picked up that he calls him ‘Sammy” or how he paces or how he brushes his bangs back without a conscious thought…or is that just my empathy for Dean kicking in??Loved Dean’s straight talk and the Dr’s appreciation of the need to respond accordingly. I love how you use Dean’s internal dialogue to build the story and the tension “Not buyin' it, doc”a great example, clever writing. This was spectacular: “Somehow the beautifully quick mind struggling for coherent thought was almost worse to contemplate than the current war his body was waging for air.” Your words here as Dean’s reaction to Jess’s question "If he wakes up, is he still going to be Sam?" froze me to the spot. Upon reflection, I don’t know what hit me first: the picture of Dean remaining outwardly calm while dying on the inside or Jess’s IF…And your take that it “Never occurred to him he wouldn't need to shout the doctor down to get Sam a chance” was pure Dean – NEVER give up on Sammy. Bravo! “Assuming he had a life” as the trigger for Dean’s dramatic outburst was wonderful timing, turning a strained conversation into a focal point of your story, I was actually waiting for the balance to tip. Dean’s description was revealing for Jessica yet confusing coz it really didn’t give her answers. I loved your chronological account of the weapon’s training history, very cool. Oops, is it OK to admire when I should be grieving and sad??? I smiled at these two bits “"That fight in the street, you said it wasn't Sam? It was.” and “It's not a life Sam ever wanted, but he was good at it.” coz I recognised the hunter you described. Also very cool. And Jess’s perception that the secrecy is because John must be awful, have done something wrong to the boys caused my loyalty to want to react…“If he doesn't want to serve that up on a platter for you to gawk at, don't make him!"” protective!dean at his best, even protecting Sam’s new life for him. Followed by his usual self-guilt trip with your introspective dialogue: “Can't believe I just did that to Sam. To her... Just beautiful work girl! “Dean was hunting” such a lot said in so few words, this was awesome, stood out for me like a neon sign coz we REALLY get it. And finally thank you so much for John, the best dad in the world, working hard for both his sons, actions speaking louder than words, his huge love and protection factor making Jess’s assumptions all the more wrong. “Finding other people's work, well, that might please you, might confuse you, might even infuriate the holy shit out of you, but one thing it wouldn't do is haunt your ass.” And you know , if I squint and hold my tongue just right, I thought I saw Sam’s fingers twitch too…
Author's Response: Thank you, thank you! I was so pleased someone else picked out basically the points in the chapter I was trying to hit a little harder. Keep squinting, gonna get Sam better, although this story has evolved into being as much about Dean
Reviewer: Bookworm (Signed) · Date: 24/10/07 03:26 PM · On: Chapter 7 The Glass House
eight pluse epilogue
Author's Response: Okey Dokey. Thanks!
Reviewer: Winchester07 (Signed) · Date: 24/10/07 02:06 PM · On: Chapter 7 The Glass House
*claps* very nice.
Author's Response: Thank you! More soon.
Reviewer: supernaturalpass (Signed) · Date: 24/10/07 01:47 PM · On: Chapter 7 The Glass House
Can't wait for the next chapter! I have my ideas of who our mysterious person is. I'll just have to wait and see. Keep up the great work!
Reviewer: Magos186 (Signed) · Date: 24/10/07 01:00 PM · On: Chapter 7 The Glass House
is the mystery man who i think it is? it's john isn't it? hangin by a thread for the next chapter here.
Author's Response: Keep the thread going a few more hours, almost done. Thank you for reading.
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