I was soo happy to see this update, the tension remains as high as ever.  I wasn't expecting Dean to be so distraught over killing Marlin (probably because I was so looking forward to it and he so deserved it) but it was so typically Dean to put himself through the wringer.  I'm pleased Sam's voice was there to reassure him, Marlin was a Demon unto himself, black smoke or not!! 

Your description of Sam suffering in that sweat box had my skin crawling, the agony of the cold, the sand the thirst and hunger, not to mention his poor eyes.... Dean's voice, the only thing holding it all at bay.  Wonderful stuff!!

Del Villar doesn't know what's headed his way, or he'd be hightailing it out of there right about now.  I think Deans' just about reached the end of his tether.  Please update soon, Sams' suffered enough......lol.  Thanks.  Jane 

Author's Response: Thanks so much Jane!  I think Del Villar might have taken on a bit more than he bargained for this time.

As a tried and true Dean girl, I love this story.  As with all your stories, you seem to realize that you cannot have a good Dean story without Sam.  Sam defines him as much as Dean defines Sam.  My favorite Hunter would be so much less without the love and compassion Sam brings into his life.  I think old papa Winchester would have ground that out long ago, and while that might have made Dean a much scarier, deadly hunter, I don't think he would be as good a one.  You seem to capture the sibling relationship so well in all your stories that either you have a few, or your imagination is fantastic.  Either way, I look forward to seeing any of your stories come up, because I know I'm in for a treat...a great tale, with characters true enough to seem alive and with story lines sure to catch my imagination.  Long live the Winchester Boys, and thanks for sharing your playground with them with us!

Author's Response:

The boys wouldn't be the boys without each other, that's for sure.  Knowing you look forward to my stories is such a thrill, and inspiration.

I do have half-siblings, but never really lived with them, don't know them...so I guess it's my imagination that gets the credit.

Thanks so much for reading and the great reviews.

OMG... did Del Villars really think a foul , disgusting poor excuse of a humaniod like Marlin could beat Dean?????????

No one hurts Dean's brother...what part of that didn't anyone understand!!!!AWESOME writing!!!!!!

OUTSTANDING visual verbage-excellent timing and tempo-the suspense has crested again-

GREAT job!!!!!!!!!!

Now, I can't wait to "see" Dean take Del Villers down-and I hope it's painful. He needs to suffer just like he has made Sammy suffer.

I loved the line from Sam-...he had a shield fightning for him..-that totally sums up the Winchester way.

MORE please ....soon???????

BRAVO!!!!!!!! 

 

 

Author's Response:

Thanks again for all your great comments.  Del Villar is a bit of a smug A&%...hehehee

More coming soon.

Thanks....Laura

Yay! Dean's getting Sam out of there! Hang on Sam! He'll save you! lol Great job. I love this story!

~kayla

Author's Response: Thanks!

Dean’s words no one hurt his brother, they weren’t just words, it was the code the man lived by.

liked this phrase, it's so true. Nice work on these two last chappies, waiting to see what's gonna happen next...

Author's Response:

Thanks so much fredo, your comments mean a lot to me.

Laura

OMG this soooo rocks please write more soon.

Author's Response: Working hard on it.  Thanks so much for reading.

AHHH! This is SOOO good! Thanks for updating, and please, please update soon! I can't wait to see Del Villar get what he deserves! (At least... I hope he does. He will. Dean will triumph! :)

Author's Response:

Dean will triumph, I promise!  Thanks so much for reading and commenting.

Laura

Oh Jeez, I hope you're right. What an intense chapter, and yeah Dean does NOT know how to lose.

You really concentrated on the emotion in this one, laying the path for the big final confrontation and it's sure worked with me. I couldn't believe it when the chapter came to an end...but you've left me desperate for the next one so great work...

Author's Response:

Thanks so much!  I'm glad you liked it, felt the emotions.  That makes me happy.

Laura

Whoa Laura, well I guess he deserved no less but gee what's it gonna do to Dean? 

Bev xx

Author's Response:

Bev, thanks so much.  I'm glad you liked the chapters and thanks so much for all your wonderful comments.

Laura

gee Laura!  Marlin is a real bad man and he should be worried now 'cause Dean is pissed!

Sam is sweet in this trying to be so brave for Dean when really he's rightfully terrified.

Compelling and draining!

Bev xx

Thank you  thank you... that sub human Marlin has finally gotten what he deserves.......

Dean at his best- ending Marlin and his threat to Sammy.OUTSTANDING!!!!!!

OMG Sammy in one of those sweat boxes......Dean is needed  quickly on this.

You have kept the tension, the drama, all of it together so perfectly-YOU ARE THE MASTER STORYTELLER!!!!!!!

AWESOME WORK!!!!

Dean will not be happy when he finds out where Sammy is ...I can't wait.

BRAVO!!!!!!!!

Author's Response:

I'm quite sure Dean will be not happy when he finds out where Sam is.

Thanks so much for reading and for all your great comments.

Laura

Whoa..... yeah just that. Yes I admit to the same blood lust for Marlin as expressed previously, but the cold commanding execution style comments from Dean was truly chilling. Do what you want with him... you have twenty minutes and the worst; “And burn his body when he’s done.”  A cynical laugh and a shrug.  “Or get a head start and do it now, I don’t care.  Just make sure he burns.” This seems to suggest that Dean is taking care of Marlin, like he would a Supernatural threat - ensuring his evil would never return again. Amazing work Bayre.

Also liked the juxtaposition (I think that is the appropriate BIG word) of Sam's mental battle and Dean's physical one. Also noticed the similarities between Sam's tortured imagination wondering what was happening to his brother, and Dean's hell earlier on when he wondered to what extent Marlin had abused his brother - very well plotted. But words... BIG or otherwise won't cover how much I admired this line from Sam;

"Everything good in him came from Dean, learned from Dean, everything he needed nurtured by his brother from before Sam could remember.  He’d spent his life with his personal hero, watching him, emulating him, living up to the man that was Dean Winchester."

That is possibly one of my favorites in the whole story, that is saying a lot as you are that skilled a writer, I spend most of my reviews quoting your work and finding ways to explain to you how impressive your work is!!!!! 

 

 

Author's Response: Thanks so much...always so appreciated and valued.