Reviewer: Shannondoah (Signed) · Date: 18/05/10 05:46 PM · On: Chapter Seven
I can feel its evil, its destruction, and I iopenly embrace it. i suck it into my own body, call to it, pull it into me. I feel it seep into my own veins, flow like my blood; change me from the inside out. Marvelous! The way you describe Mercedes taking the poison into her body is clear on such a deep level that I could almost feel it myself. And I am still focusing on Dean's eyes, watching as the sadness - that deep sorrow - returns to them, and I feel my own remorse released. How beautiful! Especially the part where she wanted to see Dean's eyes so she could remember them forever and sees the sorrow return to his eyes and knows that she is part of that, part of him forever.
Reviewer: Shannondoah (Signed) · Date: 18/05/10 05:26 PM · On: Chapter Six
If I do happen to encounter the werewolf, at least I'll have a few seconds more to live. Somehow this thought doesn't comfort me. I know this was a serious part but it had me laughing. Is it better to die right away or live a few seconds longer? Great action! The chapter begins innocently enough but everything changes when the werewolf uses his brain to try to out-think the Winchesters. Very clever of you both!
Reviewer: Shannondoah (Signed) · Date: 18/05/10 04:57 PM · On: Chapter Five
Speaking the werewolf's name. Is that an actual fact or did you make that up? It sounds legit, I'd believe it. Yay! Finally we learn Mercedes deep, dark secret. And it isn't so deep or dark. But it does give her one more thing in common with Dean. he knows how it feels to have someone give their life for him. “But sometimes you have to be on the receiving end. Sometimes you have to let others make their own sacrifices for you, and even if you may hate them for it, or hate yourself for allowing them to do it, you have to accept it. Because it was their choice. It was their choice to save you, because they would have sacrificed anything for you.” Very good advice! I love this passage!
Reviewer: Shannondoah (Signed) · Date: 17/05/10 09:02 PM · On: Chapter Four
Very good! More hints but this time they're all about Mercedes. So what is she?? Inserting unspoken communication between the Winchesters is a nice touch. I can picture those looks because I've seen them dozens of times in the show.
Reviewer: Shannondoah (Signed) · Date: 17/05/10 08:48 PM · On: Chapter Three
I hadn't thought that Mercedes would try to distance herself from that night. I assumed it would be vividly etched in her mind but I understand how she could let it slip into the limbo between real and imagined. Getting angry at the end is exactly what I would do, too. You're building the suspense beautifully! Now tell me the secret that the Winchesters are keeping.
Reviewer: Shannondoah (Signed) · Date: 17/05/10 02:23 PM · On: Chapter Two
I like the way you feed us little details of information throughout the story. We know so much about this girl but we still don't know her name. What has Dean scurrying away? Who is he meeting? I like the self-evaluation our heroine takes in the mirror. She probably didn't think she looked as bad as she does and now wishes Dean hadn't seen her.
Reviewer: Shannondoah (Signed) · Date: 17/05/10 02:12 PM · On: Chapter One
wow! A great beginning! I love reading first person pov and there aren't very many of them written.
Reviewer: rbliss1969 (Signed) · Date: 09/04/08 02:09 AM · On: Chapter Seven
Taiven, Wow i am in tears at this ending what a great story. Dean wanting to protect her and in the end she saves Dean. i liked how you had at the beginning of every chapter "I met the man who would kill me on a dark November night." and that you added to it and finely finished it at the end. again great story Renee
Reviewer: ShinyWinchesterGun (Signed) · Date: 07/10/07 09:47 AM · On: Chapter Five
Awwww, this is a nice chapter! I feel bad for Mercedes...it's really great that you make her so real. And what a twist! She has an ability, too, huh? Niiiiice! Can't wait to see how this turns out, though I'm afraid it will be very, very sad...
Reviewer: ShinyWinchesterGun (Signed) · Date: 20/09/07 04:57 PM · On: Chapter Four
Oh wow! This is getting really really suspenseful! Has Mercedes already been turned into a werewolf??? Can't wait for another chapter! Great job!
Reviewer: ShinyWinchesterGun (Signed) · Date: 14/08/07 09:58 PM · On: Chapter Three
Oh my...this is nice and suspenseful...I'm hoping for another chapter soon! I like how you're adding onto the phrases at the beginning...and I'm wondering why Dean's going to kill her...love the mystery!
Reviewer: ShinyWinchesterGun (Signed) · Date: 14/08/07 09:54 PM · On: Chapter Two
Wow, great descriptions! I love how you describe Dean through someone else's eyes...it's really cool. Awesome.
Reviewer: ShinyWinchesterGun (Signed) · Date: 14/08/07 09:51 PM · On: Chapter One
Oh cool. I really like this, and it's interesting that it's told in a different POV than Sam or Dean's...nice job.
Reviewer: supernatfem76 (Signed) · Date: 14/08/07 12:51 PM · On: Chapter One
I like how you chose to tell this story from the perspective of the victim. You have me hooked already. I am curious to find out why the narrator was attacked.
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