Reviewer: Shannondoah (Signed) · Date: 08/08/09 09:57 AM · On: Chapter 3

A fantastic final chapter!  The entire story kept me on the edge of my seat. 

Thank you for that beautifully descriptive motorcycle ride! 

"It's like… holes. Most of it's there, but then I fall into this hole and it's empty and I… fall until the words fill it up."  Superbly expressed!

Slick reference to Angel.  Hee!  I also like that you slid Dean and Sam's words from the pilot back in, only they switched roles.  And the "because it's my car" line also tickled me.

Reviewer: Shannondoah (Signed) · Date: 07/08/09 10:28 PM · On: Chapter 1

Excellent story!  I love it when the beginning jumps right into the action.  Your description of the characters movements, their thoughts and expressions is so vivid that I can see it. 

It seems that Sophie is a vampire or some other creature so is Ben Rena hunting her because he's a hunter? 

"His mouth instantly watered. His skin tingled. His fingers flinched. He wanted coffee more than he wanted to take his next breath."  I had to chuckle.  That is so Dean.

I have a million more questions but I'm hoping they'll be answered in upcoming chapters.

Reviewer: Maureen Nesbitt (Signed) · Date: 30/03/08 08:17 PM · On: Chapter 3

Fantastic end. Really enjoyed this one thanks for writing it.

Author's Response:

Thank YOU for reading. :) Sometimes random flights of fancy can come together to tell a story. I thank you for spending time with me.

Gaelic

Reviewer: Maureen Nesbitt (Signed) · Date: 30/03/08 06:21 PM · On: Chapter 1

Enjoyed this chapter can't wait to start on the next one.

Author's Response:

Thank you! I'm glad you enjoyed this. I wrote the whole thing at once, so breaking it up into chapters was... challenging. :) I hope you enjoy the rest of the story!

Best,

Gaelic

Reviewer: downbythebay (Signed) · Date: 11/10/07 03:49 PM · On: Chapter 3

Interesting story. Your latin is fairly good, some errors in parsing. And I must admit, the song lyrics didn't really do much for me.

Otherwise, a very good read. So glad Sam & Dean got back together in the end and kicked some booty.

Author's Response:

Thanks for the review!

I think song lyrics have the ability to elicit emotion; however, not everyone agrees that the place to do so is throughout a story. But... it felt good to write it that way for *this* story, so I went with it. :)

I appreciate your honesty, though! And thanks for letting me know about the Latin -- wasn't sure in that.

In the end, it's always about Sam and Dean. :) Kicking "booty" and taking names.

Thanks again,

GS 

Reviewer: supernaturaljunkiejude (Signed) · Date: 03/09/07 03:50 PM · On: Chapter 2

loved the straight razor....dual purpose, nice touch, G....

put together such a great srt of memories both from the show and invented as reminders of a past life for Dean.......

so very well-written

Author's Response:

*grin*

ScruffyDean... mmm... 'nuff said.

Thanks for reading!

GS

Reviewer: jane (Signed) · Date: 21/08/07 04:24 AM · On: Chapter 3

Oh yes, also meant to say that the paper Sophie gave to Dean sounded like a 'get out of hell' card. LOL.  Is that me just being wishful and heck it will never be that easy I'm sure.  Will be interesting to see how the series deals with it and you guys doing these fab fics!  Jane :)

Author's Response:

Hee -- I'm glad you saw it that way. I wanted to lay a breadcrumb... see what I might be able to do with that in later stories.

I can't wait to see what the series does with his deal. Is it October 4th yet??

Reviewer: jane (Signed) · Date: 18/08/07 07:39 AM · On: Chapter 2

Oh gosh she's a Vampire! Half of me feels sorry for her plight but the other half is worried that she's still not quite been as truthfull as she should be.

And Sam, when Dean does find him, will Rena let him near him. I'm worried that he'll think Dean's been turned and shoot him again.

Long chapter coming up, lovely stuff.

Jane :)

 

Author's Response:

How great is it is that part of you feels sorry for Sophie! I love that. Mostly because I was trying to convey that aspect of her personality -- she may be undead, but she's trying for salvation on some level. And Sam... never fear. He's around. He'll be waiting for you (and Dean) in chapter three.

I'm anxious to see what you think about how it wraps up. Thanks for the review!!

Gaelic

Reviewer: lam (Signed) · Date: 13/08/07 01:11 PM · On: Chapter 3

I've been saving this last chapter to have time enough to read it and do justice to it, and well, to linger over it.... I loved where this journey ended up - Bringing Kat and Sophie together. I also like where the journey was able to bring Sam and Dean. As always, awesome writing in every way.

I have to comment on the little inside jokes that I think I detected - or maybe it's my over active imagination.... BUT - room 494? Dark Angel anyone??? AND "Because its my car." can I assume you saw the Comic Con panel vids?? I'll be really disappointed if there are more insiders that I missed....

As always, thank you so much for sharing your awesome talent with us.

Author's Response:

*Laughs*

You're dead on, girl. Couldn't resist the 494 -- even though motels across America rarely have outside entrances taller than 4 stories -- it does happen on occasion. Plus, by that time, I was writing at 1am and was getting a bit too involved in the whole story. :)

And you're right -- I stole that from Jensen's comment at ComicCon. It was a last minute change -- I'd had Dean glaring at Sam, but when I saw that, I couldn't resist. When I broke it up in 3 parts, I made the change, chuckling to myself the whole time. I often crack myself up... *shakes head*

There were more little inside jokes, but it hopefully just added to the flow of the story... like, for example, Sophie's perfum. ;)

I always look forward to your reviews and thank you for taking the time to send them to me. I hope to see you soon and often. And I am off to see what you're doing to our boys in that mudslide...

Best -- GS

Reviewer: star76 (Signed) · Date: 12/08/07 05:29 PM · On: Chapter 3

Sorry if you get this twice, something went wrong when I tried to submit it.. and now I can't remember everything I wanted to say!!

 As usual, your descriptions pulled me into the scenes.  I could have been standing behind Dean it was so realistic.

The scenes where Dean remembered were great, his whole life on fast forward.  I like how you did it that he remebered the small things first - coffee and latin before Sam and his Dad.

Dean and Sam together again - yay!!  It was interesting having Dean on his own for a while.  But the interactions you write between the two of them are so good, that we couldn't be without Dean with Sam for too long.

 "It's my car"... funny.  I read about Jensen saying at the comic con that was why Sam wasn't allowed to drive the Impala anymore!  Dean would have to be unconscious or dying to let Sam drive again after the crash with the Semi.

Great ending, the boys back together again and driving off into the distance in the Impala.... was there a sunset too!!

Thanks so much for a great piece of work.  Going to read your new one now.

Author's Response:

Thanks, star! I'm so glad you enjoyed this - and wouldn't have minded to get your review twice. :)

I'm pleased that you felt you could see the scenes -- that's my main goal...trying to get the movie in my mind to play in yours.

And the "It's my car" comment, yeah, I couldn't resist. I had originally written it as Dean simply glaring at Sam, but when I broke the story up into 3 bits, I made that change at the last minute after I read Jensen's comment. It was priceless.

Didn't really picture a sunset -- more just evening/night... but you definitely got the right idea. :)

I appreciate you reading and letting me know what you thought of the story.

Best always, GS

Reviewer: freyja529 (Signed) · Date: 11/08/07 07:18 AM · On: Chapter 3

Loved. It. First off, the image of Dean on a friggin' motorcycle  with the wind lifting his shirt up to expose...good lord, girl, are you trying to kill me?! Yes, apparently you are, because when I realized Dean didn't remember John's death and was going to basically have to experience it again...guh. That just gutted me. You have a way with a well turned phrase that just stops me and makes me re-read certain passages. Example: "It's like… holes. Most of it's there, but then I fall into this hole and it's empty and I… fall until the words fill it up." I thought the conclusion was satisfying and I loved that you used both Turn the Page and Everything Changes!! Bravo, you. So well done.

Author's Response:

*Hugs Freyja*

Thank you for this. Someone told me once that it was amazing that something she never knew she needed had so quickly become something she couldn't live without.

I know what she means. :)

GS

Reviewer: LovinJackson (Signed) · Date: 10/08/07 03:12 PM · On: Chapter 3

0o0o0 i know this is late and im slow and im feeling a little crazy coz its 6 am and i havent been to bed yet lol but i juust rememeberd that i forgot to mention the room number in my other review so while i was wondering around ur stories i remembered .... hehe 494 ... i love that reference ... i love Alec :P ... Awesome :D okay going now lmao I'll say again .... awesome story :D

Tara x0x

Author's Response:

Girl -- you crack me up. Especialy when you're operating on no sleep. :)

Loved that you got the 494 reference. I couldn't help myself -- even though it's rare for roadside motels to have a 4th floor... but oh, well. I thought it was funny. And it was like 1am when I was writing that part!!

So glad you liked this and you know I always love your reviews.

No, go get some rest!

GS

Reviewer: sojourner84 (Signed) · Date: 09/08/07 12:47 PM · On: Chapter 3

>>"—happened?" His voice sounded foreign to his ears, like razorblades sliding over rocks. His throat burned from the effort of speaking. The pain in his arm shot waves of icy-hot pain through him. He felt it in his teeth.

Guh…

>>"Easy, there." He heard a smile in her voice. It calmed him. "You're still prettier than you've a right to be."

Hee. So true. I mean, think of everything he’s gone through and he’s still that gorgeous.

>>She doesn't smell like fire, he suddenly realized. The charcoaled smell of ashes and soot clung to him in a suffocating, invisible cloud. Yet Sophie smelled like Ivory soap. We were caught in an explosion…

Smart boy that Winchester. Even with memory loss.

>>Dean groaned as he head dropped back against the soft cushion of the furniture. The darkness was calling him—and it wasn't using an empty name. It was beseeching him like an old friend… as if he were one with it, as if he'd been there before.

Nice!

And I just have to say again, that knowing only as much as Dean was so awesome. Made you share in his confusion.

>>"I… you said that you would… I can't…" Dammit, finish a freakin' sentence…

Aw, he’s so cute frustrated!

>>He reached up with his right hand and touched the cord, seeing a silver ring on his finger. From Dad. Made partly from… something… a… bullet? Dammit… so close…He could practically hear the information humming, feel the weight of it in the back of his mind. He knew the memory was there, sliding through the hollow of his mind like mercury.

I’d wanted to ask you. Was the ring mentioned as made from a bullet in the VS or is this something entirely your own? Personally I think it’s an awesome idea! Never really paid much attention to the ring…always the amulet, but made from a bullet. Maybe there’s a one shot laying in this paragraph. *laugh*

>>Dean felt a sharp stab in his head at that, but didn't react. His focus was on Sophie. He knew there was more. Something was off… something was… missing.

When I first read this I wanted to shake his pretty face and tell him it was Sam. SAM, DEAN!! You’re missing SAM!!

>>He bit his lip until he could taste the slick copper of blood in his mouth. Pale, haunted faces shimmered and shook toward him, skeletal remains burned, furniture flew across rooms, giant creatures with talons for hands roared in a darkened cave…

Awesome descriptions.

>>"I see the smiling faces; I know I must have left some traces…"

I loved how it was like I could turn on my playlist and read this story. Excellent music choices.

>>"I can't kill a person for you," he repeated.

Good. Dean is Dean.

>>"I'm not going in there naked," Dean interrupted, lifting an incredulous eyebrow at her.

Ah! There he is again!

Pausing again to say that it was about this point I started feeling like everything was surreal. Can’t imagine what that would be like for Dean. All the assassin talk and back alley deals…made me wonder at one point if this was a dream *laugh*

>>"I think I can safely say that careful isn't something I'm used to," Dean tipped the man a two-fingered salute and left the shop. The near-darkness of the outdoors was still bright enough in comparison to the gloom of the shop that he had to squint as he exited.

I love when people write him like that. Saluting. All cocky.

>>"I don't know why you changed sides. I don't really give a damn. But I’m gonna get him, and you're not getting in my way."

Love how confused I am. But I have my theories…

>>He continued down the hall, shoulder against the wall, a trail of blood behind him

I love how you write him wounded, but strong.

>>"I told you the truth… Dean, I promise, I told you the truth about Rena," Sophie hedged.

I was going for immortal at first, but vampire with soul makes sense. *laugh*

>>"Need coffee…" he groaned. Coffee could fix just about anything. Coffee or whiskey.

Amen, Dean.

>>His skin was pale, and the freckles that he now remembered hating stood out across his nose. Purple shadows contrasted sharply with wary green eyes and the scruff of beard that had been visible yesterday was prominent today. He scratched at his jaw line with the backs of his fingers, smoothing his hand, finger to thumb, over his mouth and feeling the bristly hair against his palm.

I love him “scruffy.” Dean. Stubble. Thigh. *laugh* Sorry…had to go there.

And then you lost me for several pages where I was unable to comment because my eyes were glued to the page…

>>Throttling the bike, he leaned close, noting that he could actually grip the handle bars with both hands this time. The wind whipped around him, the sun beginning its afternoon decent into the western sky, warming his right side. He felt his shirt shift and flap against him, relished the feel of the wind wrapping around his bare stomach and back. He leaned low, dodging between cars and watching for the exit for the motel.

I am so giddy right now. Thanks for that visual!

>>It took every ounce of Dean's remaining energy not to reach over, grab Sam, and pull him in for a hug.

Aww!

>>"You're petting me, Sam," he pointed out.

*dies laughing*

>>"We're not alone, Dean," Sam said softly, pulling his arm from the back of the seat and dropping his hands into his lap.

"When it's just me and you, who knows what we could do, if we can just make it through the toughest part of the day…"

Dean glanced at him.

"We got each other," Sam said, smiled a bit sadly and looked over at his brother. "I mean, right?"

You gotta save your brother, Dean… you're the only one who can. If you don't save him… you'll have to kill him…

"You bet your ass we do."

"Besides," Sam said, looking back out of the passenger window as the lights from the highway ticked by. "You remembered the most important thing."

"Black coffee? Metallica?"

"How to find your way home."

So good! So veryveryvery good! Thank you for sharing this. You’ve such an amazing grasp on these characters and your ability to write quality so quickly makes you one heck of a force girl! I’m so glad you’re working with me on a story. I’m definitely blessed to have you as a co-author.

-SJ

P.S. If they had a button for peanut M&M's, this would get one hundred. Guess I'll have to settle for stars. :)

Author's Response:

*write reply while munching on peanut M&Ms*

WOW. Just... WOW. You said it would be long, but I had no idea. Thank you thank you thank you thank you. This M&M? Right here? It's for you.

Okay, some specifics. You asked this:

"I’d wanted to ask you. Was the ring mentioned as made from a bullet in the VS or is this something entirely your own?"

That was me. I mean, I'm sure that there are many theories out there based on his ring and where it came from and all that, but the VS hasn't touched the ring (and I don't think there are any plans for that...at least right now).

I like your idea of the one-shot, though. *jots that down* I was just speculating on things that made Dean *Dean* and for me, one of those things is that silver ring that he's never without. And I thought... silver... bullet... first werewolf kill maybe? Hmm...

Thanks for the kudos on the music. I love music. Love love love. All kinds. Except country. Bad memories there. But I like everything else! And I always have my iTunes cranked up with I write. God bless the maker of iTunes. Love that we have that in common.

Thanks, too for the compliment on the description -- I love that you were confused. I know that sounds odd, but it's what I was going for, so YAY.

Dude. You just HAD to go there, didn't you? I told you that the words "Dean" "Stubble" and "Thigh" are seriously my undoing... *shakes head*

You can thank Kelly for the motorcycle scene. About a million years ago she told me she wanted one and I was like... how the hell am I going to get Dean on a bike... unless... a girl is there first... hmmm... :)

Thanks for this whole thing. My Thursday was pretty much sucking out loud and now I'm much better. Might be the chocolate, but I think it has something to do with reviews. :)

Best always -- GS