Reviewer: gengen0776 (Signed) · Date: 22/05/10 06:11 PM · On: Chapter 10-Without A Trace
Hmm, so a stalker back at Stanford…creepy! Loved how Dean went to bat for Sam trying to smooth things over with Amba for him! So, they’re gonna stay with Amba again…good they need to stay close she is in danger! And she’s got Dean diggin her too! Lol not as much as Sam surely! But Dean won’t go there…he won’t do that to Sam! Love how Charlene and Dean keep giving Amba and Sam “time” alone, hehehe. Oh no! Lisa is missing too! More reviews tomorrow! Promise! Great job so far roping us on!
Reviewer: gengen0776 (Signed) · Date: 22/05/10 05:59 PM · On: Chapter 9- Invisible Friendz
Wow the convo with Grace was very intense! And then such a cute flashback scene with Amba and her mom! Made me smile and think of convos I have with Audrey sometimes! Short chapter here on to the next!
Reviewer: gengen0776 (Signed) · Date: 22/05/10 05:52 PM · On: Chapter 8- Atonement
HAHAHA Sparrow and Turner! Sam made himself Captain! I burst out laughing on the bus at that part! Between the CSI reference and the Pirates on I was nearly crying…which garnered me a few strange looks… And the laughs continue with Dean being all “oh that’s me!” when Sam calls him Turner. Uh oh, Amba left at ten thirty and Allan died around eleven…this looks bad…but I don’t think she killed him…don’t want to believe it anyway…I like Amba! Aww Sam…you totally put your foot in your mouth! So, not good…but I guess it had to be asked…I guess… So, this thing is after the whole town??? Seriously this is quite the mystery you have brewing here! So Henley out the roof??? Wow I really can’t wait to see what this thing is that can fly… or err it seems it can fly! Oh evil cliffie here! Who is this stalker of hers and she knows this person…man you are the weaver here weaving this story so that the reader is completely hooked and needs to stick around to find out what the heck is going on!
Reviewer: gengen0776 (Signed) · Date: 22/05/10 04:56 PM · On: Chapter 7-The shabby man, M&M's and a sad story
Poor Amba! Her mom was JUST there!!! Poor thing why is someone trying to hurt her??? Hmm, strange phone calls that send her running to her mom's...what is going on here?? Interesting that in a town so small there could be an unidentified fatality in that fire...Someone is covering something up! I bet there's an angry spirit! Lol, false drunken neighbour alarm! Hahaha LOVED the banter between the bros lol! Another dream for Amba! Poor thing what do they all mean and what did Lisa mean "It's here, it's coming for me."??? So much for questioning shabby man...Ooo a trail of goo cannot be good! Nice chapter! You keep amping things up!
Reviewer: gengen0776 (Signed) · Date: 22/05/10 04:43 PM · On: Chapter 6- Cursed.
Hmm...Sam had a bad feeling about Amba...these two almost seem linked... She had the feeling Charlene was next and she'd have to tell Sam and Dean so they could protect her. They'd want to know how she knew, maybe she'd have to protect Charlene herself and just pray they find whatever threat is out there. What's her secret? The dreams??? Or is there something more? LOL I guess there will be many secrets in general as the story is called secrets! Oh someone is out there with her! Seriously, what has Amba done that practically the whole town goes cold and distant at the mere mention of her name? "Amba's usually a loner, that's how she likes it. That's how it should stay, you understand?" Grumpy warned. "No, I don't, why is that the way it should stay?" Sam enquired. "Listen to me," He whispered while looking around "She is cursed, she don't mean to be, but people who stay around her get hurt sooner or later. Now you boys..." He stopped himself, scared to continue. Cursed??? Interesting!!! "Nobody will mess with Amba if they know what's good for them," WOW what is that all about? Eleanor talking to herself??? Dude what is up with this town??? Ok so Amba was kidnapped and almost killed??? Dude this poor girl! Just when I think I have this story figured out...poof you twist and add something new! Good Job!
Reviewer: gengen0776 (Signed) · Date: 22/05/10 04:43 PM · On: Chapter 6- Cursed.
Hmm...Sam had a bad feeling about Amba...these two almost seem linked... She had the feeling Charlene was next and she'd have to tell Sam and Dean so they could protect her. They'd want to know how she knew, maybe she'd have to protect Charlene herself and just pray they find whatever threat is out there. What's her secret? The dreams??? Or is there something more? LOL I guess there will be many secrets in general as the story is called secrets! Oh someone is out there with her! Seriously, what has Amba done that practically the whole town goes cold and distant at the mere mention of her name? "Amba's usually a loner, that's how she likes it. That's how it should stay, you understand?" Grumpy warned. "No, I don't, why is that the way it should stay?" Sam enquired. "Listen to me," He whispered while looking around "She is cursed, she don't mean to be, but people who stay around her get hurt sooner or later. Now you boys..." He stopped himself, scared to continue. Cursed??? Interesting!!! "Nobody will mess with Amba if they know what's good for them," WOW what is that all about? Eleanor talking to herself??? Dude what is up with this town??? Ok so Amba was kidnapped and almost killed??? Dude this poor girl! Just when I think I have this story figured out...poof you twist and add something new! Good Job!
Reviewer: gengen0776 (Signed) · Date: 22/05/10 04:18 PM · On: Chapter 5- Tormented Sleep...
Oooo evil you've kept us in the dark about what Naheeda told Dean! And Dean is keeping it from Sam too...it can't be good then... Oh and Amba saw them outside the nursery, not good! The relationship with her aunt is very sweet! Hmm women's intuition...is it more than that??? Aww, Amba caught in the eternal falling for a Winchester trap...they eventually leave...*sigh* "Oh, um clowns, been terrified since I saw It" hahaha! Oooo figure on fire! Wonder what this all means!
Reviewer: gengen0776 (Signed) · Date: 22/05/10 11:49 AM · On: Chapter 4- I had this cousin
Ahh so it was Sam! But that’s not who she thought it was…She’s being very evasive… Ooo cool twist that her cousin was Taylor who was killed by the hook man! Love when you can tie lil things like that in with the show! I mean what are the chances that her cousin would be killed by the hook man AND that she knows Cassie??? Love the “it’s a small world” connections that can be made! Course one must be careful when doing this that we don’t have too many connections like that…but I have faith you are a great writer! Aww Amba calling Dean Sam’s angel! That made me smile REALLY wide! Cool how they are revealing things about themselves in this convo…Sam telling her he thought he saw an angel once…nice dialogue work very natural! More info about Amba and her dad…nicely done! Everything has a nice natural reveal I think. HAHAHA Dean and his car…now there is a lasting relationship! Love the development in showing Amba’s relationship with everyone…and everyone is seeming sad and troubled about her…seriously roping me on here! Love the name Matilda…Random yes…but I do! Hmm, so what’s the deal with Naheeda?(cool name btw) What night??? ok...gotta take care of some things...expect more reviews later!
Reviewer: gengen0776 (Signed) · Date: 22/05/10 11:28 AM · On: Chapter 2- Meet the parent
So I am actually almost done reading this story! I’ve been reading on my cell phone while on my breaks and during my traveling to and from work…It’s really fun…but I can’t review on my phone! So now here I am with my weekend off and a plan to review every chapter I’ve read so far…so here goes! Poor Amba! Abused by her dad, so not cool! And Sam reading into that photograph of her and her sis and her dad…he can tell there’s something there…Smart Sammy! Ahhh Dean, can dress him up but can’t take him anywhere as my dad used to day…Poor Sam all embarrassed. Uh oh mom’s not buying the “from school” story about where Amba knows them! Hahaha loved the “you don’t look the type” part and Dean on and on about life drawing and the womanly form! Interesting…Madeline was having hallucinations…very interesting! Ahh Dean, the food and drink critic lol! So, why’s mom cryin? Does she know more than she’s sayin?
Reviewer: gengen0776 (Signed) · Date: 22/05/10 11:26 AM · On: Chapter 3- Aunt Charlene
Hahaha Dean having to have his plate pried away from him! Priceless! Poor guy doesn’t get many home cooked meals! Lil brewing romantic interest there with Sam and Amba??? "See Sam, you get the girl," He winked annoying the hell out of Sam.Hehehe loved that line and then Dean telling him to kiss her! Amba smiled "You sound like the older one,""I should’ve been," The pair laughed. Hehehe made me chuckle! So they both dreamt of drowning…more interesting… So who’s this dark figure? She seems to know who it is as she is asking what they want…Defo intrigued!
Reviewer: gengen0776 (Signed) · Date: 16/05/10 12:39 PM · On: Chapter 1-just a dream?
Ouch what a start! Spontaneous human combustion…well helped along…so maybe not spontaneous… Ahh Sam tryin to fan the flames of love…but alas Dean is not havin it! Okay this is another intriguing turn…who is this…girl/ghost/apparition that only Sam can see??? Hahaha Dean…clueless about Amba…had he cracked open the profile he might’ve at least been clued in on her being African American…*shakes head* Dean always trying to pimp Sam out lol. Liking the banter! Ooo burns on Amba’s arms…you are opening a lot of questions in this chapter! Now I really need to stick around for the answers! Oh man her god father is missing too!! Nice opening!
Reviewer: brownsuga (Signed) · Date: 14/07/09 08:14 AM · On: Chapter 25- Wide Awake
Of course after you lose someone you thought you loved or deeply cared about you take it out on the closest person to you, I liked that. It was a way of Sam admitting his own guilt. But oh WOW you floored me again with this comeback, now your first chapter ties to this one, amazing twisting and tangling. Yes I'm not so upset now, I thought you'd done an injustice to your character just to please the romance haters but I was proved wrong. lol My only question is, you can't leave it there can you? There has to be some more Amba and Sam? - okay 2 questions. :) Thanks for sharing
Reviewer: brownsuga (Signed) · Date: 14/07/09 08:03 AM · On: Chapter 24- Nineteen Eighty Six
OMFG I'm speechless, WOW. What a twist, what a plot, you've had us fooled from the start, pure genius!!! Amba's real mother was really hard done by but I'm so annoyed with what Amba's ended up doing. I didn't want her to go, I mean I know her and Sam couldn't have a relationship because he's a hunter but...I guess I thought they'd get to spend some real time together before he went. Now Sam's heart broken, Dean doesn't know what to say to make it better and I'm upset. You wrote it very well, definitely wrote great chemistry between Sam and Amba, as well as Dean and Amba. Some weak points, a little bit of dragging in certain areas but all in all fantastic. A nice wrap up. I'm a huge fan of your work, definitely will always read your writings.
Reviewer: brownsuga (Signed) · Date: 14/07/09 07:53 AM · On: Chapter 23- Black Magik Woman
Geez, so it's not Grace! You are rolling with the punches, another death. Arghh, Sam and Amba kept missing each other by minutes and now the witch is.Drum roll....next chapter! And on Amba's birthday, you are a mean to her aren't you? lol ……………..
Reviewer: brownsuga (Signed) · Date: 14/07/09 07:48 AM · On: Chapter 22- Me, Myself & Cale
I love how at different times both boys comforted Amba, I really like the relationship she has with Dean. --- "Atta Girl." Dean winked at her. "You're stronger than you think." Amba caught Dean off guard when she threw herself into his arms, she couldn't smile even with her best efforts but she didn't cry either. Amba was petrified; everything was suddenly so real to her. Now she was scared of coming face to face with this witch and needed the safety of Dean and Sam's words and reassurance. "Hey." His arms slowly found its way around her body, he held onto her tighter as he felt her tremble. "Hey, It's gonna be okay." "Promise?" She whispered. "Yeah, promise." --- I also loved the twist between the trio, Matilda, Cale and Clare, brilliant unravelling. OMG Sam knows who the witch is and then Amba arrives at her mom's house and she's being shady.
Reviewer: brownsuga (Signed) · Date: 14/07/09 07:31 AM · On: Chapter 21- It's her they wanted!
A very long chapter with lots going on, let me see if I can remember. I definitely liked the fight between Joe and Grace, and I liked his hallucination. I wish Amba hadn't forgiven Naheeda, for once I wish she could be a bitch like Naheeda was. But, I was smiling from ear to ear when Sam kissed Amba again, and this time she didn't stop him. The end though, it was very heart breaking to read, Charlene has been Amba's rock and now...
Reviewer: brownsuga (Signed) · Date: 24/06/09 05:36 PM · On: Chapter 20- All the things you said.
I sadly lost track of this story for a while but coming back to it, I feel like I never went away. It still has the same pulling effect on me, I'm hooked again. I like the flashback of Clare, Matilda and Cale... I'm so intrigued by Eleanor and Noah's conversation, about debts being collected? Hmm. My fav part ... "Sam and Dean, the underwear models." Cale peered her eyes over the book. "Underwear models." Dean scratched his head "Ah that's funny." He turned to face Sam "I hate this bitch."
Author's Response: Hi Suga!!! It's nice to see you, no worries about losing track, it was my fault for posting so late. I'm so glad you were able to fall back into this story and still enjoy it! Hmm...yeah, debts must be collected. lol Hehehe thanks for quoting your fav part, it's one of mine too. :D I hope you like the rest...
Reviewer: Cuddles13 (Signed) · Date: 21/02/09 05:10 PM · On: Chapter 25- Wide Awake
I love the way it ends. This story is good. It had me laughing and crying on certain parts. There was a lot of detail, and I love that because thats what a good story is made of. Love ya
Author's Response: Relieved. I'm glad you liked the ending, I wrote the very last scene with the very first scene believe it or not. lol, That's why I named the 1st chapter 'Just a dream.' and the last one 'Wide Awake.' I'm chuffed you could find laughter and tears while reading this as it was my intention to evoke more than one emotion. I'm not usually so hot when it comes to detail so it makes me happy to know that you found a lot in this chapter. *beaming* cause you think I put in what it takes to make a good story. Love you too x
Reviewer: Cuddles13 (Signed) · Date: 21/02/09 04:58 PM · On: Chapter 24- Nineteen Eighty Six
I felt kind of sorry for Charlene when they grabbed her but it was funny when she was all cocky and started saying how she was going to come back and punish them for doing that to her but I guess that they have it coming to them after what the do to her even though she had a child. Some of them deserve what they get. What goes around comes around.
Author's Response: Thanks for the review, it's so sad what some people do out of fear and Charlene and ultimately Amba, suffered the most from the town's mistake. Yes you're right, what goes around comes around, lol
Reviewer: Cuddles13 (Signed) · Date: 21/02/09 04:50 PM · On: Chapter 23- Black Magik Woman
I wonder who the voice in the dark corner is. I felt so sorry for Amba when she was screaming when the house blew up. It's so sweet when Sam was scared for Amba, because they couldn't find her, it just shows you how much he really loves her.
Author's Response: I know, I've done so much to poor Amba, I feel so bad. lol, hmm you got me wondering who the voice is now. *evil smirk* I really like how Amba and Sam's relationship works so I'm glad you find it sweet. Thanks for the more detailed review Parky. Kisses xx
Reviewer: Cuddles13 (Signed) · Date: 21/02/09 04:09 PM · On: Chapter 21- It's her they wanted!
I wonder whats happened to Naheeda. I feel so sorry for Amba at the end when she's screaming for Charlene. I like the part when Joe has that daydream that he's being burnt alive. I was a bit suspicious when you wrote the part where Eleanor was talking to herself and then when she snapped when Amba asked who she was talking to. On a whole I love this chapter.
Author's Response: Hehehe, I'm glad you liked Joe's hallucination, that was fun to write. Yeah I love it when readers get suspicious, I think I've managed to put just about every character under suspicion. lol happy to entertain.
Reviewer: Cuddles13 (Signed) · Date: 21/02/09 04:01 PM · On: Chapter 24- Nineteen Eighty Six
I feel so sorry for Sam. H really loved her.
Author's Response: Awww I know, he really does care about her, I love Sammy. Thanks for the comments Parky xx
Reviewer: Cuddles13 (Signed) · Date: 21/02/09 12:10 PM · On: Chapter 20- All the things you said.
I love the way Dean always sticks up for Sam, athough that expected since they're brothers, it's so sweet. you've captured the brotherly love so well.
Author's Response: Thank you very much parky! :D I appreciate your comments always...
Reviewer: Andromeda171 (Signed) · Date: 02/02/09 03:24 AM · On: Chapter 25- Wide Awake
Beautiful, just beautiful Glad she is alive! Oh so that Sammy's poor heart won't be fully broken I loved this epilogue & I love that it is written for me. YAY! *hugs & kisses* Thank you for this wonderful story my best friend
Author's Response: *sniffs* It was this story that made us friends so of course it's written for you. It's because of your support and encouragement and just a tad *wink* bit of shoving and threatening that made me keep going. It's been a very long journey and I don't know if I have it in me to ever write so many chapters again. lol I'm really happy you liked the epilogue YAY! *hugs and kisses* Thank you for your wonderful reviews for this story, you're awesome. :D Bestie x
Reviewer: Andromeda171 (Signed) · Date: 02/02/09 03:14 AM · On: Chapter 24- Nineteen Eighty Six
I love you Schelir *sniff* This was the best story ever Amba is so great & her sacrifice is heartbreaking, although she didn't do it with Sam their farewell scene was the best romantic scene I've read in years Thank you my friend for this beautiful epic of sadness, romance & mystery Love, Jay
Author's Response: I love you too Jaylan! The stars are beautiful... <33333 It's been me and you from the beginning and you stuck with me for the long haul. Thank you so much hun, I'm smiling so wide right now. I'm glad you approve of Amba's actions, I was worried you'd be mad. *beaming* so chuffed that you like Sam and Amba's romantic scenes even though they never did the deed. lol (I promise if I ever do a sequel there will be.) Thanks again, Schelz x
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