Reviewer: troubadour (Signed) · Date: 30/12/11 10:30 PM · On: Back On Our Feet
Hi there! This story was very interesting! The way you described Bobby's state of mind was very moving and accurate. I was just nagging about it with your friend (Jules, she directed me here), I said that it bother me that Bobby left Dean alone, so I really liked what you wrote about that. I also liked the fact that you presented Sam's point of view, and how desperate he felt when he figure out what Dean was going to do. Great story! :)
Reviewer: Shannondoah (Signed) · Date: 16/06/09 03:26 PM · On: Back On Our Feet
God's will---oh my stars! That's a hilarious irony! Sam's unusually hot anger, Dean's hug---no wonder he feels like he's missing something. Silent alarms are going off all around him. Very funny that both Winchesters had thoughts that there was enough food to feed the undead. Hee!
Reviewer: Shannondoah (Signed) · Date: 16/06/09 03:14 PM · On: Silent Witness
Genius! It was like watching a lost episode in my mind once I added your dead Sam pieces to this scene. They fit exquisistly! Just as if that's the way Kripke had intended the scene to be adapted during a later episode.
Reviewer: Shannondoah (Signed) · Date: 16/06/09 03:06 PM · On: Live for Me
Brilliant chapter! I love how well Sam interacts with Dean and Bobby even though they're completely clueless. there were so many points in this chapter that had me pausing to think (and sometimes rethink) about what I believed. "...something I have feared since I was old enough to understand." What an evocative way of putting what Sam's death would mean to his brother. "I shared, though I never would have admitted to it, Dean’s vision of going out in glory, of taking as many evil bastards out with me as I could. Maybe cause a few explosions, make the ten o’clock news." Loved it! Just like a modern day Butch and Sundance. We never really think of sam going out with such a bang but it's always the way we envision Dean's death. It's only natural that given their life, the mode of death would be the same.
“Live Dean,” I whisper quietly, my failure crushing me under its weight. “Live for me...live for you...live for us.” heart-breakingly beautiful!
I damn Bobby for leaving him alone; I damn myself for killing him.
Reviewer: ashon13 (Signed) · Date: 11/01/09 09:59 PM · On: Back On Our Feet
Wow, thats amazing! This must of taken some seriousl thought! Cuz I've seen that episode quite a few..er..several...okay, maybe more than several times, and I know it pretty well, and everything on here seemed to fit, and make sense. Like the crossroads demon glancing around, that amazed me the most..anyway, nice job! :D
Reviewer: darkhunter (Signed) · Date: 24/09/08 07:41 AM · On: Back On Our Feet
This story was outstanding, every single chapter, well done.
Reviewer: Midge (Signed) · Date: 22/09/08 01:14 PM · On: Back On Our Feet
Well done, you certainly did make sense of all that food, and I love Grandma Betty and her wonderfully prophetic comment. It gives credence to the idea that someone up there is looking out for the boys, just as much as those down there want them dead.
Reviewer: Soennelchen (Signed) · Date: 14/01/08 02:48 AM · On: Silent Witness
Thanks so much for adding another chapter to this "oneshot" :) Your description of Sam's POV was so powerful and heartwrenching. You did an incredible job. If the last chapters had chocking me up this one really did make me want to reach for the tissues. “I’m not giving up on you Sammy.” The words were so quiet and so loud at the same time.
The Dean I know and depended on for so long is gone. He has been replaced by a mere shell, I can see the life drain from him, each word the red-eyed demon throws wears at him like waves on the shore. Amazing! I wish you would carry on with this... Thanks!
Author's Response: Yeah...thanks to Jules (mizpah) this little thing left one-shot status a long time ago haha. But I wouldn't have it any other way. Hope you had enough tissues! I wish I would too...man...*kicks own butt* The next two weeks are going to be some really really long hours at work, but I am going to try to pick this back up. It is sort of like a chocolate bar you never got to finish, and you are constantly reminded of that sweet goodness you are denying yourself. Okay, weird analogy, but I'm a weird one, what can I say. :) Thank you again and I hope the next part lives up to what you expect! Loves!!
Reviewer: lilballerette10 (Signed) · Date: 13/01/08 11:00 PM · On: Silent Witness
wow...having the whole thing from sam's pov...wow...this is awesome!!!! all the angst, and it's totally what Sam would have been doing and saying as this whole thing went down...amazinggg job!!!!
Author's Response: I really wish they would have had that on the show, I think Jared would have done an amazing job. Maybe that would have been too much though? Haha awesome, but behold the power of fanfic. I do try to get the boys as much in character as possible, so I'm really glad you agree. Thank you! I hope you enjoy the next part...whenever I can get that posted... Loves!
Reviewer: Cookie6 (Signed) · Date: 13/01/08 03:44 PM · On: Silent Witness
Wow! I loved how you had Sam's as the 'silent witness' (great title) to that devasting scene where we all watched Dean grovel in desperation and grief. The idea that she was smirking and addressing Sam, that he was there all along, is so original and clever. Awesome thinking! Your description of Sam desperately trying to manipulate the corporeal world were fantastic. And I could feel his anger and panic as he tried to get Dean to stop. Loved your imagery of Sam being dragged back as the deal was sealed. Amazing writing! I can never get enough of AHBL because it seared our souls with an impact that has stayed with us, and your fic embellishes it with skill. This whole fic is outstanding.
Author's Response: Is that not the most silly thing? Haha how much we love our show and we love our boys. Kripke has forever stolen our hearts and our devotion, and now he can just run amok with us. Thank you again for such an awesome review. I love how much feedback you give me, and it definitely lets me know what I'm doing right. I'm really glad you were there too feel, I was worried I described too much but I guess it was just right! Thank you again! Loves!!
Reviewer: Bookworm (Signed) · Date: 13/01/08 02:02 PM · On: Silent Witness
dude good job
Author's Response: dude thank you :)
Reviewer: bulletbabe (Signed) · Date: 13/01/08 11:23 AM · On: Silent Witness
Enjoy? I should say so, this was heartbreaking but just fantastic. Such a great plot to have Sam there while Dean was striking the deal and the desription of Sam being pulled back to his body - just awesone writing. Well done!
Author's Response: Two reviews? You rock!
Reviewer: bulletbabe (Signed) · Date: 13/01/08 11:19 AM · On: Live for Me
What a beautiful scene this is...and your take on Sam's POV is just heartbreaking...can't believe I missed this when you posted...glad I caught it now.
Author's Response: I'm glad you caught it too! I am most proud of this one and I'm glad you enjoyed it! I hope you continue to enjoy and I'm glad you made it! :) Loves!
Reviewer: Soennelchen (Signed) · Date: 24/12/07 07:47 AM · On: Live for Me
This is so heartwrechning and touching. There are many stories dealing with AHBL 1 +2 but there is probably none that has touched me like that. You have done an incredible job describing in a very sensitive way the basic line of these episodes: the never dying brother love. The last line made me swallow hard and I had tear come to my eyes (again)....“Live for me...live for you...live for us.” Awesome... thank you! Happy Holidays!
Author's Response: Your review is touching! :) That is my favorite part of the series, is the awesome and very complicated chemistry between the brothers. I enjoy bringing tears to people's eyes (not because I made them cry, oh Lord no) haha but because I have done my job and drawn you in. Thank you again for the awesome review and I hope you enjoy the next part just as much. :) Loves!
Reviewer: kwater (Signed) · Date: 20/12/07 09:56 AM · On: Live for Me
Well a big Thanks has to go to Mizpah from me also for pressing you to add to this story. Though I've seen this eppy done a ton of different ways this one is really unique and absolutely heartbreaking. Sam's last line to Dean is enough to make me tear up. Thanks for the read Catch, I look forward to more - Kel
Author's Response: Thanks Kel! Yeah, that mizpah...what can I say haha. She also gave me some really awesome ideas for a continuation so hopefully I won't disappoint you guys with the next update. Thank you for the 'unique' statement! I try for that, so I'm glad I succeeded. I figured this has to be one of the most popular episodes to write fanfic for, but I couldn't help doing one myself. Thanks again! Loves!
Reviewer: Rosilee (Signed) · Date: 19/12/07 06:16 PM · On: Live for Me
i love the way that you ended that chapter! it sounds like something that sam would definitley say! i love it!
Author's Response: I am really glad you said that, I try to keep the boys' personality in check. There's nothing worse than a Winchester out of character... :) Thank you so much for the review! Means a lot, and it is very motivating to get back into it. Loves!
Reviewer: Cookie6 (Signed) · Date: 19/12/07 04:13 PM · On: Live for Me
Fantastic! This ch compliments your others so well. I did wonder throughout AHBL2 if Sam was 'watching'. I loved how you had Sam affirming everything Dean was thinking he had done wrong, even if Dean couldn't hear it. The way you had Sam sit so close to Dean 'blocking' his dead body was beautiful, Sam at his best, you at your best. I felt that Sam getting angry, at the situation, at himself, at Bobby, at Dean was the right way to take this, the intensity of both the boys anguish and despair had to manifest in anger somewhere. I really loved the way you had Sam's dialogue and thinking inbetween Dean's words and actions from the actual eppy, made it real and you fitted it in naturally. And 'live Dean" is the only response Sammy could ever have made to that devastating "what and I supposed to do?!" that's now forever branded into our souls. I knew this was gonna be worth the wait and you didn't disappoint!
Author's Response: I would have loved to see Sam actually there, watching Dean. Behold the power of fanfic huh? haha I appreciate you waiting! I'm glad it was worth it, this is one of my faves still to this day, of all the ones I've written. I'm going to try to pick it up again, I swear...and not keep you guys waiting too long... Loves!!
Reviewer: Cookie6 (Signed) · Date: 03/11/07 06:01 AM · On: No Rest For The Weary
This is an absolutely heartbreaking fic, and yes you did it justice by writing the second chapter. Dean's devastation as seen through Bobby and Sam's eyes was original, rivetting and downright shattering. You had me every step of the way but these outstanding lines saught my attention because they caught my heart: “I’ve got him. I’ve always had him" "His shoulders adjusted to the weight, the weight he had proudly carried his whole life.” “…but Dean was dangerous when crossed….Already Dean has that murderous glint in his eyes. ..I'm pretty sure Dean has already decided he's going to kill himself.
“…In one quick motion, he's standing fully erect and is carrying me as if I'm nothing. But it doesn't surprise me, he's been carrying me my whole life, whether I've wanted carrying or not. Its simply who Dean is.”
“I owe him every single moment of my undivided attention” You highlighted the strong connection between the bros with your link in their thinking that no injury Dean had suffered could compare, very clever, very poignant. Bobby's observation that there was "one dead and one dying brother" made ne catch my breath, and that truth "the last living Winchester" was like a punch in our thinking. And I loved your closure "He could finally unleash his tight hold on the facade" as the understanding that everything Dean ever did was for Sam's safety and happiness. Congrats on an awesone missing scene, I just loved it!
Author's Response: Wow, thank you for the simply awesome review!! I'm so glad you enjoyed it, this piece is probably one of my favorites that I've written. It all stemmed from an inspirational season finale and a sucky time at work haha...so it came out pretty dark. Thank you also for pointing out your favorite lines. I never know where those lines come from, but I'm insanely glad I have a pretty good muse. :) So thank you again! Your review...I'm still smiling. :) Loves!
Kris
Reviewer: GotTheShining (Signed) · Date: 29/09/07 09:07 AM · On: No Rest For The Weary
First time in first person? Pretty good. Though your normal POV writing is outstanding. Be careful because too much 1st person can get boring. If you add a little dialogue (even if its one sided) it will notch it up. And again, I love your use of little details, excellent imagery.
Author's Response: I noticed there wasn't a whole lot of dialog, but I had already read so many fics where Dean was talking to Sam as if he could still hear him. So part of it was not wanting to follow along with them, and the other part was just trying to get into the internal workings. That sounds really strange haha...but hopefully makes sense. So thank you for the const criticism, will keep that in mind for the next 1st person pov. :)
Reviewer: GotTheShining (Signed) · Date: 29/09/07 08:19 AM · On: Do Not Go Gentle
“I can’t…Sam…he’s…Bobby…I can’t fix this.” ----What a good line! The part where Dean hestitates to put Sam down on the bed. Excellent! Very well thought out, great details.
Author's Response: Thank you!! Once I started writing, I couldn't stop haha. But it was a very fun piece to write, so I'm glad you enjoyed it! :)
Reviewer: Shannondoah (Signed) · Date: 29/09/07 07:58 AM · On: No Rest For The Weary
Very good! I loved the first person point of view and the second viewpoint as a companion piece to Rage Against the Storm. Superb!
Author's Response: Thank you once again! I may have been bribed into expanding this even further, so uh...I might have more haha.
Reviewer: Shannondoah (Signed) · Date: 29/09/07 07:48 AM · On: Do Not Go Gentle
Some very profound lines in this chapter: "the weight he had proudly carried his whole life" and "he hated the thought of leaving the dying and the dead alone." Excellent! I love the depth of Dean's anguish described so poignantly. I also liked the creativity in the behind-the-scenes story.
Author's Response: No clue where any of those came from, but I ended up surprising myself with those lines. "the weight" is probably my favorite line as well. So thank you for leaving me a cookie. I loved how well Jensen delivered Dean's anguish to us, but it was fun to dip in to.
Reviewer: bulletbabe (Signed) · Date: 29/09/07 05:38 AM · On: No Rest For The Weary
First person is always hard but you handled it like a pro. this is fantastic writing and sooo emotional. I'll be looking out for more fiction from you. Thanks for posting.
Author's Response: Yeah, I don't think I'll be doing 1st person that often after all haha, but thank you! It was surprisingly emotional for me, I don't normally do pieces this heavy. I was hit by something inspirational I guess haha. So thank you again for leaving me a review and the support, means a lot. :)
Reviewer: bulletbabe (Signed) · Date: 29/09/07 05:32 AM · On: Do Not Go Gentle
This is absolutely beautiful, moving on to the next chap.
Author's Response: Aw thank you!! So glad you're sticking around for the next chapter... :)
Reviewer: ciel4 (Signed) · Date: 19/07/07 05:24 AM · On: Do Not Go Gentle
Beautifully described, it was just so sad. This is a great line:
His shoulders adjusted to the weight, the weight he had proudly carried his whole life. *sniff* Well done.
Author's Response: Thank you so much! I was surprised, those lines were just hitting me, I have no clue where they were coming from, but it was awesome. :) I tend to lean towards humor, so it was great that I got such a reaction out of you guys. Thank you!! :)
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