Reviewer: Dorhinky (Signed) · Date: 19/05/13 08:09 AM · On: Chapter 31: Too Late
Where do you keep finding these poems? They're fabulous. This one gives me the heebie-jeebies. But I still love it! A very emotional and heart-wrenching chapter. So glad Dean has Sam to help him. And Sam has a plan up his sleeve, yes? Also, I didn't mention it before but I'm glad Chris Drap is still being a jerk. I like hating that guy. Now even his friends are going to see what a bastard he is.
Reviewer: Dorhinky (Signed) · Date: 19/05/13 08:06 AM · On: Chapter 30: Insane
Very spooky poem but another good one! Such a sad chapter. Now Dean has to commit Asher. I'm glad she isn't really crazy. I really like her and Dean together. If it can't be me then she's my next choice. She's a good opposite. Usually writers put him with girls that are more like him. This makes a much more interesting dynamic.
Reviewer: Dorhinky (Signed) · Date: 19/05/13 08:03 AM · On: Chapter 29:Clinging to Fading Color
Love the poem! It's grabbing and eerie. Poor Dean. He's trying so hard. And Sam is right there with him lending unspoken support. This chapter was funny and sad. This is a cool story and I'm glad I latched onto it.
Reviewer: Dorhinky (Signed) · Date: 10/05/13 05:57 AM · On: Chapter 28: Honeymoon (expanded version) part 2
AWESOME!!! (with three exclamation points) I need a cigarette and I don't even smoke. I ways imagined Dean as a good lover not just because of experience but in the fact that he'd make sure it was great for the girl. His concern for Asher really showed special and important she is to him. I especially was moved by Dean's worry when he knew he was hurting her. He was so tender. This seems too detailed to be fictional. I'm guessing it's autobiographical. Right? Spill the beans. You can tell me. I won't tell a soul. (wink wink)
Reviewer: Dorhinky (Signed) · Date: 10/05/13 05:45 AM · On: Chapter 27: Honeymoon (expanded version) part 1
This is already better than the watered down version. I like that is so concerned about Asher.
Reviewer: Dorhinky (Signed) · Date: 10/05/13 05:45 AM · On: Chapter 27: Honeymoon (expanded version) part 1
This is already better than the watered down version. I like that is so concerned about Asher.
Reviewer: Dorhinky (Signed) · Date: 10/05/13 05:44 AM · On: Chapter 27: Honeymoon (expanded version) part 1
This is already better than the watered down version. I like that is so concerned about Asher.
Reviewer: Dorhinky (Signed) · Date: 10/05/13 05:38 AM · On: Chapter 26:Honeymoon (mild version) part 2
I think this is awesome. I'm off to read the racy version because I'm pretty sure I'm one of the voyeurs you mentioned our opening notes.
Reviewer: Dorhinky (Signed) · Date: 10/05/13 05:35 AM · On: Chapter 25: Honeymoon (mild version) part 1
you're a wicked woman leaving us hanging like this. The only reason I'm hunting you down is because you did post both chapters at the same time. Sam gave them the CD Jess made him with all their love songs--- that almost made me cry.
Reviewer: Dorhinky (Signed) · Date: 29/04/13 08:14 AM · On: Chapter 24: The Vigil
I didn't expect Asher to fall apart but I like it better than if she'd remained strong and pushed her grief down like the Winchesters do. It shows she's the other half of Dean and why they're so perfect for one another. It also gives Sam a chance to honor Dean's request that he take care of Asher. The whole wife widow thing was an eye opening observation.
Reviewer: Dorhinky (Signed) · Date: 29/04/13 08:11 AM · On: Chapter 23: A Lonely Wooden Cross and a Pinewood Box
Wow! Sam's account of preparing Dean's body was moving. It's exactly how I pictured it in my head. I'm sure it was a very respectful and reverent time. A time that he could pay homage to his hero brother. When Sam gets mad at Asher and tells her he's never leaving Dean- that was great!
Reviewer: Dorhinky (Signed) · Date: 29/04/13 08:07 AM · On: Chapter 22: What Doesn't Kill You...
A heart-felt scene between Bobby and Asher. So sad. I like that he recognizes how Asher's absence will affect all of them and not just Dean. I like that Bobby warns Asher that Dean losing her would make him kill himself. Funny that Asher's possessed by the essences of women who've committed suicide and Bobby is telling her that's what Dean will do. I also like seeing Sam and Bobby's grief through Asher's eyes and how she's taking Dean's death. Very interesting that Asher never felt their connection snap. I think that's better than if she had. Imagine the fun guilt you can play with...
Reviewer: Dorhinky (Signed) · Date: 29/04/13 08:00 AM · On: Chapter 21: A Father's Love
Squeeeee! She's going to break through and reach out for Bobby! Yes! I love this chapter!!! I'm glad you focused on Bobby and his happiness for Dean. The locket he gives Asher- so touching. And the conversation between Dean and his friends was so cute. I think it's interesting that Dean's nervous about the honeymoon because Asher's a virgin and he's an old worn out shop rag. It made me consider that might be how he'd feel.
Reviewer: Dorhinky (Signed) · Date: 21/04/13 02:41 PM · On: Chapter 20: Hide and Seek
Cool that Asher didn't just tell Dean she'd be the perfect mother to his kids. I like that she actually thought about it and admitted she didn't know how she'd react but it was worth finding out just to be part of his life. Gotta love that girl for loving that guy!! Although, I'd be happy to take over if she gets tired of him.
Reviewer: Dorhinky (Signed) · Date: 21/04/13 02:39 PM · On: Chapter 19: The Sum of All Fears
Fabulous fight! Dean really knows how to push Asher's buttons. I'm surprised she got side-tracked so easily. I know they get back together but it's nice to suspend that thought and live in the excitement.
Reviewer: Dorhinky (Signed) · Date: 21/04/13 02:37 PM · On: Chapter 18: Outside In
Good chapter.
Reviewer: Dorhinky (Signed) · Date: 21/04/13 02:35 PM · On: Chapter 17: Easy
Cool part with the voices.
Reviewer: Dorhinky (Signed) · Date: 21/04/13 02:34 PM · On: Chapter 16: Risk It For the Biscuit
That was SO SWEET! I love that Asher didn't freak out when Dean mentioned werewolves and such. She tried to understand him which is sort of what Lisa did. And it's cool that she went after him unlike Cassie. And I like that you didn't tell us he was crying when he left but you made it seem like it was raining. Such a Dean thing to do. My favorite line (isn't it everyone's?) from Aliens 2.
Reviewer: Dorhinky (Signed) · Date: 23/03/13 02:56 PM · On: Chapter 15: Connecting the Dots
So Hannah and Asher both tried suicide by car. And before that Gena killed herself. I see the chain forming here but not what links them all together. A cursed dashboard hula girl?
Reviewer: Dorhinky (Signed) · Date: 23/03/13 02:54 PM · On: Chapter 14: Grasping at Straws
And the hunt begins. Sam will surely find something. Let's get the Geek Squad fired up.
Reviewer: Dorhinky (Signed) · Date: 23/03/13 02:49 PM · On: Chapter 13: Alone In My Head
Wooohoo! FABULOUS CHAPTER! I love the descriptions, and the way you investigated Dean and Asher's feelings and how their understanding of one another changes those first perceptions. Encore!
Reviewer: Dorhinky (Signed) · Date: 23/03/13 02:47 PM · On: Chapter 13: Alone In My Head
Wooohoo! FABULOUS CHAPTER! I love the descriptions, and the way you investigated Dean and Asher's feelings and how their understanding of one another changes those first perceptions. Encore!
Reviewer: Dorhinky (Signed) · Date: 23/03/13 02:32 PM · On: Chapter 12: Dean and the Lion's Den
So totally cute! I LOVE the flashbacks. We get to see how their relationship began and how it changed both of them. Asher was such a sweetie. Dean deserves someone like her, someone who isn't hard and jaded to restore his belief in goodness and humanity. I can't wait for more flashbacks. They're cool little vignettes within the story that tell its own story. But don't forget the present day story.
Reviewer: Dorhinky (Signed) · Date: 23/03/13 02:26 PM · On: Chapter 11: Lost
Tooooooo short! Great poem! I liked the introspection and Dean wondering what it'd be like to be a dad. I like that he's doubting himself and taking full responsibility for Asher's condition. That's exactly what he'd do. I noticed that you end a lot of your chapters with great lines. Keep up the good work!
Reviewer: Dorhinky (Signed) · Date: 23/03/13 02:24 PM · On: Chapter 10: The Choice
What? What did he hear? I liked this chappie. Nice to see the three men coming together to take care of each other. I'd like to say more but I'm hanging on the edge of a wicked cliffie.
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