Reviewer: moira4eku (Signed) · Date: 19/02/12 07:44 PM · On: Chapter 1

Yikes, I'd love to read it, but unfortunately the format is too hard for my old eyes. You need to break your story into paragraphs. If you have more than one person speaking dialogue, you need to start a new paragraph. I'd love to read it and review it but can't in this format. Sorry.