Reviewer: Shannondoah (Signed) · Date: 26/01/12 09:36 PM · On: Chapter 17

Nice wrap up.  i was afraid that Bobby or Dean would vanquish Hermione.  Or that Sam would have to throw his journal away but it ended nicely with the journal moving on.

Reviewer: Shannondoah (Signed) · Date: 26/01/12 09:16 PM · On: Chapter 15

Hmmm.  Now I'm very curious.  Did Hermione hurt Bobby to keep Sam there longer?

Reviewer: Shannondoah (Signed) · Date: 26/01/12 06:53 PM · On: Chapter 13

Another fantastic chapter!  I wasn't expecting a ghost journal or another Harry Potter character. "..wandering the streets wearing only my boxers on my head and one sock..."  I chuckled at that one getting a very questionable looke from my daughter.      

Reviewer: Shannondoah (Signed) · Date: 26/01/12 02:57 PM · On: Chapter 11

"They'll see you exactly for what you are - a fit guy with a serious injury."  I liked that.  And all the ways Dean broke his leg was a fun read.  I don't know how Sam kept from laughing.  I personally would fall for the skiing lie where he had to dig himself and his brother out from underneath an avalanche.

Reviewer: Shannondoah (Signed) · Date: 26/01/12 12:53 PM · On: Chapter 9

I had to add more comment because I hadn't finished reading this chapter before I had to leave. As you can tell I'm devouring your story.  I luuuuuvvvvv it!!  Your writing style is so smooth and descriptive.  I know how they feel physically, emotionally, their fears, their joys.  It's beautiful!  I feel like I'm part of their little group.

The description of Dean's leg was just gruesome enough to make my stomach upset without being too much.

What a wonderful break for Dean to get to slip into his role of big brother again if only for a brief moment.  I think that was good for both boys.  I'll bet even for that short period of time that Sam felt an ease of his burden and enjoyed the familiarity and comfort of Dean taking charge.

If I didn't know that you were not American before by the phrasing and spelling of some word, I would now.  In America the book is called The Sorcerer's Stone.  And it is a good one!  I enjoyed your description of Dean's rapt attention to the book.  Just one more image of little boy Dean.

Chilling words: "I don't know how he got out of it alive."  It took me back to a time years ago when a family member was in a similar situation.  Sam's going to have moments like this.

Reviewer: Shannondoah (Signed) · Date: 26/01/12 11:11 AM · On: Chapter 8

It's lunch and here I am.

I loved the whole section about the bacon.  Who doesn't love bacon?  But the way you separated the elements of smell and sound and then added that Dean's favorite phrase in the whole world was sizzling bacon was clever.  I was glad Dean got a little pick me up.

I could totally see Dean in the wheelchair leaving the hospital and how the way it affected him affected Sam and Bobby.  They're in for a tough time ahead.

Poor Dean!  Having to ask his brother to sponge him off.  Not even a hot girl around to help him.  I'm sure there are lots of humiliating things he's going to have to endure while he's incapacitated.  And I want to read every last one of them!   :)

Reviewer: Shannondoah (Signed) · Date: 26/01/12 07:49 AM · On: Chapter 6

Double yay!  I have time for one more chapter. 

Bobby's keep-me-out-of this look and Sam's saintly silence both made me chuckle.

This gets more funny by the paragraph!  Sam wanting to shoot himself up with morphine and Dean being a closet Harry Potter fan... I'm so glad I read this before work. 

Brilliant!  Making the Impala the friend that is going to hurt Dean was genius!  And Dean threatening to hunt her down set Sam up perfectly to ask if that was going to be before or after Bambi.  My daughter looked at me funny when I laughed.

Love the little one-shots that Bobby and Sam manage to get in to tease Dean!

Even I was getting irritated at Dean for asking when he could get out.  it was fun reading but man, he's irritating!  

The last journal entry was priceless. 

Reviewer: Shannondoah (Signed) · Date: 26/01/12 06:40 AM · On: Chapter 1

Fabulous first chapter!  Very well-written.  I think you've already captured Sam in just this brief introduction. "hos strength was self-perpetuating.  He was strong because he was strong."  I've never heard Dean described like this but it perfectly embodies who he is both physically and emotionally!

Reviewer: Shannondoah (Signed) · Date: 26/01/12 06:12 AM · On: Chapter 3

This is great!  Really, really great!!  You explained everything so clearly that I could see it in my head like a movie.  I especially liked "his white coat billowing behind him like a pantomime villain's cloak." 

And ending it with Sam's, "he only went to get candy," was superb.  That one statement showed how confused and lost Sam is trying to reason out in his head how one simple act could turn so horrible and change the brothers' lives.  That would be a reeling disbelief.  

And for the best case scenario for Dean to be a two-year prison sentence inside his own body... I can understand Sam's anxiety.  You summed it up perfectly when you said, "Dean was strong because he was strong," summed up the hunter perfectly.  Even by his family he's been pegged as the strong, handsome one even though he's resourceful and clever, it's his physical attributes that make him feel like Sam's equal.  And it's those same attributes that he's counted on all his life to be the womanizer and brother protector that he is (and that he sees himself as being).

I have to admit I'm a sadist when it comes to the Winchesters.  I love to see them hurt and fighting seemingly insurmountable problems only to come out on top in the end, stronger and more united.

I got up an hour before work so I could get more reading done.  Your story popped into my head every time I woke up during the night.  :) 

 

 

Reviewer: pendays (Signed) · Date: 25/01/12 08:26 AM · On: Epilogue

great story loved it!!!!

Reviewer: Swellison (Signed) · Date: 22/01/12 08:04 AM · On: Chapter 1

Normally, I'm not fond of stories that start midway, and then go back a couple of days to set the story up, but this is....wow. Sam's worry is leaping off the page, and I've gotta know what on Earth happened to Dean? And yay! Bobby's here for Sam.

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