Reviewer: fitz (Signed) · Date: 01/11/11 02:12 AM · On: Chapter 9

Your story is in my favourites.  Looking forward to the next installment. Cheers.

Author's Response: Omg your favorites? Wow! Thanks!!!

Reviewer: Tree66 (Signed) · Date: 28/10/11 01:48 PM · On: Chapter 7

Sorry- I didnt mean to scare you. I ABSOLUTELY LIKE!!!!! I was literally left speechless when I read this chapter. Let me explain.. As admin- I jump on-line each day and read through a variety of stories that either need validated or barring that- just whatever has been posted (I literally read EVERYTHING.) But in this case- I had been waiting for this chapter so I saved it for last in anticipation... so even savoring each word- it was still like watching a tv show where you're glued to the screen and when the credits roll you cant move, you cant breathe, you can barely speak. I knew - just KNEW- what was coming in my head... but you painted such a picture- and both Sam's and Dean's reactions and interactions were so right on - it was both painful yet GREAT to read.

I wanted to be able to sit back down and digest it- to be able to coherantly collect my thoughts beyond that simple WOW and be able to say- okay... what an ASS that D.A. is- and how much I hope Carin wears his meatsuit to the prom... and how I hope the entire police force of that town ends up splattered all over the inside of the jailhouse...  and how I hope Dean introduces them to his fists and how I hope Sam seriously kicks ass on his brother's behalf... but then- like I said-- that would have been the WOW response.

So, instead, a couple of days later- I can now be a bit more objective and say: I love the nuance of "Just...(pause) don't take too long?" the closest thing Dean can show to weakness. And Sam responding by biting his lip to avoid letting anyone know how much he really wants to fall apart right now..

I also love how Sam fell right into "lawyer mode"-  kinda a nice difference than what the show gave us a couple of weeks ago... I think these boys are such great bullshitters- that they'd know their way around faking something like this...

I also liked the small details that you didnt forget- about Bobby still being in a wheelchair and handicap ramps... many writers forget those seemingly tiny bits- but it makes all the difference as your reading and painting a picture in your head.

and Hun... whumping Dean.... I'm not sure you can ever do that enough for my demented head. But honestly... you did it tastefully enough without having to be graphic. My imagination was plenty enough to fill in THOSE blanks... hell- I was almost waiting for them to beat him with a rubber hose or waterboard him at one point- but like I said.. you didnt have to go there- you painted a well-enough picture that my mind filled in the rest.

So- never fear... I didnt mean to make you think I hated it... I was merely trying to pick my jaw back up and scoop my brains back into my head!

Well done! NOW TOP THAT!!! lol

Tree

Author's Response: Omg you set the bar high!!! The next few chapters have already been written just need to spell check etc. I actually had a lot of trouble with this stry, it didn't flow naturally for me. It was written for someone who suggested the premise, and for some reason I just couldn't get into it, so it may ebb and flow in its intensity. I have also had a few bad weeks that will, unfortunately, affect the story. I write from the heart, and when your heart is heavy.... I'm just sayin'.... Also my most faithful, precious little dog was put to sleep yesterday, just another scar on my bruised soul. Anyway, enough wallowing, I ill pop up another chapter in a few hours. As always, I am humbled by your attention...

Reviewer: Jennay88 (Signed) · Date: 27/10/11 09:34 PM · On: Chapter 7

Every chapter I read, I only continue to think - WOW!  This chapter honestly left me breathless!  I cannot wait to read more.  Keep up the fantastic job!

Author's Response: Thank you so much!!!

Reviewer: lam (Signed) · Date: 27/10/11 11:57 AM · On: Chapter 7

I have to admit... I've been waiting for this chapter - and it doesn't disappoint! Looking forward to how Sam is going to get Dean out.... and how bad off Dean's going to be by then....

Author's Response: You are wonderful, thank you for taking the time to leave a review... Does Dean get it bad?  Or Worse?..... Well, it's not gonna be good, that's all I'm saying....

Reviewer: Tree66 (Signed) · Date: 26/10/11 07:05 PM · On: Chapter 6

I love the taunting between the DemonCarin and Sam. Even though I knew Dean wasn't dead- it was cool to hear how she tried to make Sam believe he was... Loved how she picked up on his slips "no wait, you said brother?"

And how later- Sam channelled Dean- trying to act defiant even though he was freaking out and desperate to find his brother.

Nice how they immediately fell back into synch- tripping her up into revealing how to trap and get rid of her... Nice touch on Sam's part (very sneaky - alaDean!)

And now- even though it would seem like they have her set- up- it would appear they've actually stepped into her trap. I guess this brings us back to the beginning and answers the WHO of who made the anonymous tip to the cops.

I loved the description of her "reptilian smile" cutting through the soft face as she hung up and crushed the cell phone under her foot.... that image really played out well in my head... She's one sadistic evil bitch!

Can't wait for the next bit!

Tree

Reviewer: TrippleP (Signed) · Date: 23/10/11 01:25 PM · On: Chapter 4

I have been sick and forced (by my hubby) to lay in bed just because I laid my head on the kitchen table during breakfast. Reading this story on my phone has been like a medicine  to me. This is classic Sam and Dean and I love it. Keep up the good work.

Author's Response: Thank you so much for your kind words!!! I, too, am not well, but slugging it out at work.  Brain fogged means not too much writing, tho, so I'll just have to bet better quickly!!

Reviewer: Tree66 (Signed) · Date: 17/10/11 04:24 PM · On: Chapter 2

I love the characters you've created - even if they might not last long in the story - LOL. The coroner is just described so well that he comes alive in my head. And the comment about  "FBI breeding them that way" in reference to the boy's height - really tickled me. I could just see some poor civil servent staring up at Dean and Sam and being a bit intimidated and yet at the same time having his moment to shine with the Feds needing HIS help on a case...  It really played out like the show.

Also like the DemonDanceTwins- Cindy & Heather... If they arent up to no good. Not sure I've figured out the master plan yet... but it cant be any good.

Love just how true to form Dean is... I think I missed what season this is set in- I'm assuming it isnt recent since Dean seems like he's on the prowl... but I love how both brothers are in their element- have pegged Cindy but yet like the show- we know they're walking right into something.

Looking forward to the next bit!

Tree

Author's Response: We're in Season Five... Dean's more talk, than prowl, me thinks....

Reviewer: Tree66 (Signed) · Date: 15/10/11 04:34 PM · On: Chapter 1

Yep.... hooked. Mostly- I'm already wondering who might have been the "responsible citizen with the anonymous tip"... sounds like they were set up.

I'm also sensing that its gonna take ALL of Sam's brainiac talents to get his brother out of this mess. Not to mention, that the cops are already pretty heavy-handed. Which also makes me wonder if the boys in blue- might not be a bit 'black-eyed' themselves???

okay- I'll quite guessing and try to be patient... so not one of my traits.

Tree