Reviewer: mizpah (Signed) · Date: 13/08/11 08:43 PM · On: Chapter 8
Hope you had a wonderful birthday, Nancy. I did actually recognise the lyrics, as soon as Sam spoke them. Loved how he corrected Dean when Dean asked was Sam quoting Janis Joplin - lol. And they talked! Well, the Winchester version of talking anyway. Sad, sweet, and deeply meaningful without being all wordy and gushy. And I really loved how Sam said that home didn't have to be a place - it could be a person. And that person was Dean. Oh, and the way he turned the tables on his brother with the sleeping with one ear open - LOL. Both playing possum and neither one knowing about it. Are they good, or what? Although Sam knew at the end there that Dean was faking it until the Fletchers left. Dean's speech to Danny felt so very from the heart. I could hear his voice, picture his expression, while he talked to the teen. Typical Dean that he could get through to the boy - he's great with kids, no matter what age. A great story once again, Nancy. I thoroughly enjoyed the ride you took me on, and it was very nice to get back to season one and a simpler time for the boys, before angels, demons and destiny ripped them apart. Thank you so much for sharing this. Jules
Author's Response: Hi, Jules! I hope you don’t mind if I give one big response and thank you for all your wonderful comments. I’m really glad you’ve enjoyed (and am eternally grateful that you’ve taken the time to review!) For my stories, I actually prefer more private discussion/critique (especially of things that don’t work) to gold stars, but I do love to hear that people are enjoying my stuff. (Sadly, I've become a review junkie...) And yes, I know I should be reviewing, too (*hangs head in shame*). In my (sort of) defense, I’m an editor and proofreader by nature and training, and it’s always a struggle for me to keep my inner editor quiet and just enjoy! I don’t know if the lack of reviews is from people getting bored or just burnout. I find that I’ve been writing mostly pre-series and early season stories lately. While I actually enjoyed the conflict between the brothers, the unrelenting doom’n’gloom of the past few seasons was starting to get to me, and it’s hard to find any uplifting stories or inspiration there. About the site—it sometimes feels as if the current batch of writers is a younger crowd (makes me feel very old!), and tending more towards romance and short-short/drabbles—things I'm not terribly fond of. But I’ll keep posting here as long as I keep writing. (I don’t suppose you have time to do any beta’ing, do you? <g>) Thanks again for all your encouragement, and to UnGen for giving me a place to post. Nancy
Reviewer: mizpah (Signed) · Date: 13/08/11 08:33 PM · On: Chapter 7
Solve all their problems? ROFL - I think you might need about a hundred more chapters to do that, hun. Love the adrenaline rush that got Dean onto his feet, even if it was just for a moment. But it was the moment necessary to do what had to be done - get the monster and protect the innocent. Bit sad that Danny now knows what's really out there in the dark, but at least now he might have a bit more respect for his father, who turned out to be vindicated after all. Fletcher should take some satisfaction in that. It was thrilling to read how easily the boys slipped into hunting mode, and the unbeatable team that they make when they're both on the same page. And heartwarming to read how Dean felt so relieved that it happened so quickly and easily, even after so long apart. Ah, those boys - they break our hearts and uplift them all at the same time. Jules
Reviewer: mizpah (Signed) · Date: 13/08/11 06:13 PM · On: Chapter 6
Oh, Sammy.... I wonder just when during their journey that dream finally did turn to ashes and he realised there was no escape from the hunting life. That there would always be something to hunt. Sam's ping-ponging from frustrated to worried to angry was very well done, and I could really feel the roiling emotions when he was talking to Danny, trying to get the kid to realise that his and Dean's life wasn't something to be wished for or envied. I really liked the pairing off that you've done, too - Sam with Danny and Dean with Colin. Sam the rebel, telling Danny the potential rebel that he's actually got the better life, and Dean matching wits with Colin and revealing to the man that there really was something out there in the dark, and he wasn't crazy - although he would be crazy to make it his quest and forsake his family. Agh! Have to go cook breakfast, but I'll be back to finish off the story. I have your home page listed in my favourites now, so I won't lose track of you. Jules
Reviewer: mizpah (Signed) · Date: 13/08/11 05:59 PM · On: Chapter 5
Reviews are down right across the site - don't know why. Perhaps it's because some people don't really have a long attention span, and five years seems to be their cut-off point before they have to move onto the next new thing, like the True Vampires Blood Diaries or whatever the flip it's called. *shrugs* No idea, but it's frustrating all the same. And it doesn't help when you've got a great story like this, and feeling like no one's liking it because no one's reviewing. I don't know what the solution is, Nancy. I've had this same conversation with quite a few people over the last few months, and we don't have the answer. But from a purely selfish point of view, as someone who loves your style of writing even though I don't review anywhere near as often as I should, I hope that you continue to write and post on UnGen despite the falling review count. Because even though the numbers are down, it's still a great site to be on, and we need talent like yours here. Anyway, onto the review... "Dude, don't tuck me in." That made me chuckle, at the same time I had a bit of a sad aww moment when Sam reached out and was rebuffed the first time. Dean in hunter mode never fails to thrill, even when he's down for the count and merely having a conversation. I loved the digging for information, and the way he got the story out of Fletcher without giving away too much of the Winchester family history. And while being sad at the revelation, I did love Dean laying down the law to the man about hunting monsters or having a family. You did a great job of showing his exhaustion during the whole verbal fencing match, too, by the way. Struggling to keep his wits about him while dealing with the pain and fatigue, his voice constantly dropping to a whisper, and the little bits of information that he let slip through because he was just too tired to censor it, giving Fletcher a brief but tantalising glimpse into their world but not ripping aside the whole curtain. Eagerly reading on... Jules
Reviewer: mizpah (Signed) · Date: 13/08/11 05:43 PM · On: Chapter 4
I'm beginning to not like/get a bad feeling about Fletcher senior...he seems to be a bit too cocky about the whole thing. Thank heavens Dean woke up when he did - must have been that latent big brother sense of his, eh? Knowing on a subconscious level that Sam really needed him just then. Love the way Dean first appraised, then deflected Fletcher's attempt at getting information out of them. I have a feeling though, that he won't be held at bay for very long. And I'm looking forward to his story being revealed as to why he and his son are out there, too. There's something definitely off with the man, especially since his son seems so peeved off with him about the situation. Moving on... Jules
Reviewer: mizpah (Signed) · Date: 07/08/11 09:28 PM · On: Chapter 3
Aha - I knew Dean would make some remark about Sam having to get some practice shots in - lol. And do I detect some fireworks on the horizon between Dean and this Dr Fletcher, who seems pretty damned pushy? He's already gotten Sam's back up with his questions and implied judgements. No wonder his son and he were having an argument when Sam came on the scene. Wonder what the good doctor is going to say if he finds out the boys are hunters, and deliberately went after the thing that had been killing people.... Jules
Author's Response: Since when would Dean ever pass up a chance to give Sammy a hard time? <g> I hope you keep reading (and reviewing...) Thanks for all your encouragement! Nancy
Reviewer: mizpah (Signed) · Date: 07/08/11 09:16 PM · On: Chapter 2
Wonder what Dean's going to do when he finds out he's been hit by friendly fire. I can see some target practice in Sam's future.... And who are the timely rescuers? Friend or foe? Interesting dynamic, and I love how Sam immediately thought of his own troubled relationship with his martinet father and bristled at the tone, while at the same time desperately needing someone as strong as his father to help him with his brother. Loved, too, Dean's reaction to being carried - lol. Jules
Author's Response: All will become clearr.... Thanks so much for your reviews, and I'm glad you're enjoying this.
Reviewer: zuimar (Signed) · Date: 05/08/11 02:32 PM · On: Chapter 8
Happy birthday!
Great wrap-up of another awesome fic, thank you for putting it on this site. I loved the conversation Dean had with Danny, he's got such a great way of dealing with kids. I'm really glad that Sam was so honest with Dean, letting him know that home doesn't have to be a place. That was a real chick-flick moment, awesome!
Have a great time with your family!
Author's Response: Thanks so much (for the review and the birthday wishes!) Ii think Dean really needed to hear that from Sam, so I'm glad you liked it.
Reviewer: blackcatswhiskers (Signed) · Date: 03/08/11 01:39 AM · On: Chapter 8
Happy Birthday. Loved this story - there seems to be a few stories going back to Season 1 around - which is really nice. And, yes, I do recognise and remember "Me and Bobby McGee"
Author's Response: I think everyone misses the season 1 attitude lately (I love angst, but am getting a little burned out on nonstop despair...) So glad you liked this, and thanks for letting me know!
Reviewer: lam (Signed) · Date: 03/08/11 01:10 AM · On: Chapter 8
Thanks for this! Have a happy birthday and a wonderful trip! I really enjoyed a season 1, h/c, with lots of hurt!Dean and good brotherly moments - don't see this kind of fic here that often anymore - so thanks for a great job.
Author's Response: Thanks so much, and so glad you enjoyed this!
Reviewer: mizpah (Signed) · Date: 02/08/11 09:53 PM · On: Chapter 1
Hmm - so one of the bullets either missed the onza completely and hit Dean, or it went straight through the creature first. I'm wondering, if it was the latter, what sort of effect the onza's blood might have on him, like a rampant infection or something supernaturally weird and horrible. And how's Sam's guilt? Not over Jess burning and now he's struggling with the fact that he's blown a hole in his brother? Poor kid. Sorry I've been MIA - real life has gotten a whole lot more....interesting...lately. But it's a great story, Nancy. I'm looking forward to the rest of it. Jules
Author's Response: Oh, I hope your RL has been a *good* kind of interesting (fingers crossed!) I always get good ideas for how my stories *should* have gone by reading the comments and reviews. Maybe next time...Meanwhile, I hope you like the direction I've taken. Thanks for taking the time to review! Nancy
Reviewer: zuimar (Signed) · Date: 02/08/11 02:35 PM · On: Chapter 7
Awesome chapter, that was some great team work! I bet Danny will look up to his father now. I love the similarities between him and Dean and Sam.
Author's Response: Ah, the joys of dysfunctional families... I'm glad you're enjoying this, and hope you like the ending.
Reviewer: Tree66 (Signed) · Date: 02/08/11 09:15 AM · On: Chapter 7
There's so much to like in this chapter. The characterizations are just so perfect. I love that Dean went from weak and injured to adrenalin-fueled and hunter-in-charge the minute the onza howled. It was so him! And I also loved how he and Sam fell right back into the brother-in-arms, back to back, ready to defend the Fletchers... even the light banter about target practice felt very right... I didnt get the chance to comment on the previous chapter- but I loved Sam in that as well. Nice touches of his present mind-set. Torn between self-doubt and feeling responsible about their current situation- yet also still harboring that desire (and semi-hatred of all things hunting) of a normal life as he talks to Danny. I also loved that Dean has nightmares in Latin- we dont always see that in fiction- but rather the opposite of Dean not being able to remember it... Nice touch! Loved these two chapters and looking forward to the wrap up! Tree
Author's Response: I'm soooo glad you're liking this. It was written a while ago, so it's kind of like I'm reading it for the first time, too, trying to remember why I wrote things a certain way. I do remember wanting Dean to dream in Latin for some reason...I figured he'd just spent 3 years without Sam to do the rituals for him, so he'd kind of crammed, and now that Sam's back, he can forget it all (when I took Latin in high school I used to have nightmares in Latin just before exams...) Thanks for all your kind words, and I hope you like the wrap up! Nancy
Reviewer: zuimar (Signed) · Date: 01/08/11 10:53 AM · On: Chapter 6
Hi, thanks for the update! What a sad conversation between Sam and Danny, at least from Sam's POV. I guess the onza will show up in the next chapter, I hope Sam's ready to keep the company safe. I'm not sure the Fletcher will be able to help.
Author's Response: One onza, coming up! But don't underestimate anyone... So glad you're enjoying!
Reviewer: Soennelchen (Signed) · Date: 31/07/11 06:09 AM · On: Chapter 6
Very interesting. I'm a bit less worried about Fletcher and his son but they are still mysterious. Poor Sam, he wants the nromal life that Danny finds boring so bad. Looking forward to more!
Author's Response: Poor Sam. There is no normal for him... Thanks for all your reviews!
Reviewer: zuimar (Signed) · Date: 30/07/11 03:43 AM · On: Chapter 5
For some reason I couldn't post a review for the previous chapter, I hope the site lets me review this chapter. I'm getting addicted to this story, so I really hope you'll be able to post it before you leave town! Thanks for the regular updates!
Author's Response: Sorry about the posting problems (actually, that makes me feel better: I can blame the site when I don't get reviews!) Thanks so much for the encouragement, and I'm so glad you're enjoying (sometimes addictions are good...) I'll try to post the next chapter tonight. Nancy
Reviewer: Tree66 (Signed) · Date: 29/07/11 09:01 AM · On: Chapter 5
Okay- so maybe Fletcher is on the up and up... but I'm just suspicious by nature. I'm still not counting on any of them making it out of this quite so easily as yet.... and I'm suspecting that now Sammy's on watch- all hell will probably break loose... cause that's just his luck! I really loved you're dialogue between Dean and Fletcher- it was SOOOO Dean-like... talking but not... Great job! Tree
Author's Response: You should know that nothing the boys do (or get into) is ever easy! Thanks for the reviews (and compliments!)
Reviewer: Tree66 (Signed) · Date: 28/07/11 04:00 PM · On: Chapter 4
So why can't I trust Fletcher? And why cant I believe that Dean is 'alright' enough to be on watch? And how come I just "know" that the onza wasnt the only one? *hears ominous laughter in the background* Okay... c'mon... bring it on!!! LOL Great couple of chapters- sorry I havent had the chance to review each as they were due... but I'm enjoying the story immensely! Tree
Author's Response: Oh, you suspicious people! <g> Glad you're enjoying it. I'm trying to get it all posted before I go out of town next week, so yeah, I'll bring it on...
Reviewer: zuimar (Signed) · Date: 27/07/11 10:43 AM · On: Chapter 3
Mmm, it seems the doctor and his kid are good guys. I wouldn't be surprised if they were hunting for the onza as well. Poor Sam, having to put Dean through so much pain, him being the one that shot him in the first place.
Author's Response: Coming soon...I'm so glad you're enjoying this, and thanks so much for reviewing!
Reviewer: Soennelchen (Signed) · Date: 25/07/11 02:01 PM · On: Chapter 2
Why do I have a strange feeling about those people? It almost would be too easy if everything went smooth and Dean got help soon. Let's see what you have in store for us!
Author's Response: Since when does anything go smoothly for the Winchesters? I'll (hopefully) get the next chapter up now (site willing...)
Reviewer: zuimar (Signed) · Date: 25/07/11 11:50 AM · On: Chapter 2
Hi, thanks for the update! I don't trust those new people at all, but I hope I'm mistaken and that they will be able to help out Sam.
Author's Response: I'll try not to keep you waiting too long! Thanks for your encouragement...
Reviewer: Tree66 (Signed) · Date: 24/07/11 07:43 PM · On: Chapter 1
You don't have to beg. Great story! Keep it coming. I love this time setting and I'm looking forward to the angst and H/C.
Tree
Author's Response: Lots of angst and h/c coming soon. I'm glad you're enjoying! Nancy
Reviewer: moira4eku (Signed) · Date: 24/07/11 01:21 PM · On: Prologue
I'm so glad you've decided to post this story here. I really loved it when I read it elsewhere. Look forward to rereading it again!
Author's Response: I forgot it wasn't posted here. Glad you enjoyed it last time, and hope it works in reruns!
Reviewer: Soennelchen (Signed) · Date: 24/07/11 07:22 AM · On: Chapter 1
I love it! Thanks for updating so fast! Oh... and I forgot the stars last time :) Looking forward to the next chapter.
Author's Response: Thanks for the reviews (and the stars!) I'll try to keep updating quickly, and hope to have the whole thing up in a week (well, that's the plan, anyway...)
Reviewer: zuimar (Signed) · Date: 24/07/11 05:27 AM · On: Chapter 1
Ha, I'm not too proud to beg for more, LOL! Awesome first 2 chapters! Dean is so putting up a brave face for his kid brother, but I'm not sure how long he can keep that up. I'd love to read Sam's POV, but I think the whole story will be written from Dean's perspective. No worries, though, I'm on board for the rest of the journey!
Author's Response: You don't have to beg! So glad you're enjoying it. If it makes you happier, l do switch perspectives (it's hard to write someone's POV when they're unconscious! <g>)
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