Reviewer: Tree66 (Signed) · Date: 02/06/11 05:07 PM · On: Chapter 1

Well... there's 37 old women that just had an answer to prayer!!! LOL ... and with chocolate cake to boot! Happy day in my book!!!!

Tree

Author's Response: Yep, it would either make them feel a lot younger or finish them off completely ... but what a way to go, huh?

Reviewer: Hooligan (Signed) · Date: 31/05/11 09:23 PM · On: Chapter 1

Oh.  Wow.  

It was the chocolate cake that got me. Nice summary.

The start to a sentence is always capitalised, even in dialogue.  This:

obvious lack of pockets; "and where the hell am I supposed to keep it?"

Should be this:

obvious lack of pockets; "And where the hell am I supposed to keep it?"

Not commenting on the semi-colon because the blasted things always confuse me.

Frankly, i love it.  Dean's first line is completely in-character, and the dentures were a great touch.

Author's Response:

Glad you enjoyed it; I will bear your cfomments in mind!

Thank you :)

Author's Response:

I did of course mean 'comments'

duh ...

Reviewer: penmin (Signed) · Date: 31/05/11 09:50 AM · On: Chapter 1

You know how to bring a smile to a girls face! :)) Just picturing the scene here...lol

Nice one.

Jacq

Author's Response:

You should have seen the smile on my face when I was writing it :)

Thanks for the review, glad you like x