Reviewer: lam (Signed) · Date: 20/06/07 10:55 PM · On: Chapter 3 Dinnertime
So, I was liking Bobby Lee's romantic evening - right up until the knife in the shower - yikes!! Loved the fried lettuce. But you do realize that they had their clothes on for like the whole chapter......
Author's Response: Terry told me to behave....Hey I try to do it tastefully.....will toss a few bones in the next two ......Yeah fried lettuce and sauerkraut.......Veggies ..Right.. love a little shock now and then....thanks, lam
Reviewer: Ace33 (Signed) · Date: 20/06/07 02:03 PM · On: Chapter 3 Dinnertime
Wow, I so was not expecting that ending! I'm at a loss for words! Good job! ~Kayla
Author's Response: Guess, with the town being so small I need to stop bumping them off and get the boys working on a solution....thanks, kayla....
Reviewer: gaelicspirit (Signed) · Date: 20/06/07 01:39 PM · On: Chapter 3 Dinnertime
Hmmm.... now, Bobby Lee was watching TV, not water... *Gaelic rethinks her theory* And fried lettuce!! HAHAHA!! Priceless. The murder was very horror-movie good. Ready for more!!
Author's Response: Fried lettuce !! works for me .....Dean and his health foods........ Sorry about destroying The THEORY ....h2o was a good guess.. Thanks ... amanda, You're the best....sooo looking forward to August... My friend read your review and was laughing as hard as I am...you guys make writing sooo worthwhile.
Reviewer: fredo (Signed) · Date: 19/06/07 10:52 PM · On: Chapter 3 Dinnertime
great chapter Jude ! Your description of people's everyday life (including murders part by the way!) are exellent. And you now what, here in France, i live in Alsace (near Strasbourg if you wanna locate), and it's the capital of sauerkraut ! Actually having the name from a little town called Krautergersheim ! And yes we eat bratwurst with, and drink bear. Why am i so happy that Dean's enjoying this food ??!!
Author's Response: That's cool background, Fredo...i grew up in Wisconsin which was settled by mostly German and Swiss so those were our foods.....i'm Hungarian but ethnic lines blur when it comes to food........The towns where this takes place are where I lived for quite awhile....... Brat Stop is my old favorite eatery....food to die for..... Glad you like the descriptive....wouldn't be as shocking if the people were all like 2 finger charlie, huh??
Reviewer: bambers2 (Signed) · Date: 19/06/07 10:43 PM · On: Chapter 3 Dinnertime
oohhh...brutal ending...think you are starting to be like me!! evil, evil evil!! as i have heard from you so many times!! come on, admit it, it was kinda fun to be let your evil side out for a bit!! lol!! great job, jube!! bambi:)
Author's Response: Felt a little bad on this one....seemed a nice couple but you know everybody has their own idea of a romantic evening !! ... Actually I find bringing out my EVIL side rather therapeutic!!
Reviewer: kwater (Signed) · Date: 19/06/07 10:12 PM · On: Chapter 3 Dinnertime
Hey great chapter Jude, I like the psycho murder...can't wait for more....K
Author's Response: for adequate..Thanks, k.....you guys inspire me....Terry called my style "restrained but effective"...... means probably NEVER a great writer, but i'll settle for adequate
Reviewer: gaelicspirit (Signed) · Date: 14/06/07 08:48 PM · On: Chapter 2 A Haunting We Will Go
Okay. THIS is why I waited until I was home from my biz trip to read. Out loud I went: Awww... HA! Hmmm... and EWWW!! Loved that you had Sammy call the Metallicar part of the team... and dude, Dean waxing her in his boxers?! I'm not getting that image out of my head for awhile... Dean and the Impala are love. AND! You put my 2nd fav bad in there. I'm a Zepp girl at heart, but my baby rocks to Metallica and "Wherever I May Roam"... awesome choice. Now... I see a pattern emerging and I usually never try to "figure out" the stories -- I like to just be entertained, but your title has intrigued me and I'm trying to figure out what has everyone "mesmerized"... I'm thinking it's something about the water... And I can't think of leeches without thinking of that scene in "Stand By Me" -- so I was appropriately grossed out. Thanks for that. *shudders* ;)
Author's Response: Thanks, Amanda....for the R & R.......song seemed most apropos..... like you, i'm with LZ but Metallica and AC/DC also float my boat..............yeah, I wanted to draw the Dean scene out a bit more but, then after the shower scene, the Sammy girls would whine......they'll get a little treat later.........I know everybody yucked on the leeches..... The eyeball part left me a bit squeamish but having fished with leeches for bait for years, they're just not as spooky as all that( held many a leech in these hands) ...well, see how close everyone is on their guesses...
Reviewer: Ace33 (Signed) · Date: 13/06/07 08:05 PM · On: Chapter 2 A Haunting We Will Go
Fabulous chapter! What a disgusting, yet effective image at the end! ~Kayla
Author's Response: Terry had mentioned i deserved some type of grossout award on this one........ It was certainly fun writing the first three ( #3 to be beta'd soon) chapters...let's hope I can keep it up ..... 1st time with trying a multiple chapter story .......i'm still hoping i'm not in over my head..........thanks, Kayla
Reviewer: lam (Signed) · Date: 13/06/07 02:23 PM · On: Chapter 2 A Haunting We Will Go
O.M.G.!!!!!! I don't think that I have ever read anything or seen anything as horrifying as those leeches!!!! Please do NOT let Dean and Sam near that leech tank - like YIKES!!!!
Author's Response: lam....want can I say.........?? leeches suck !!!!.....HEHEHEH........ man, writing for you all is a real fairytale kind of job......1st i get a review from bopeep and now one from our lam(b)........too cute it means so much to me to hear from you on reviews.................ewwww!!!!leeches on our boys ..........ooooooo describing removing from from all the muscular chest/abs/limbs may not be so bad......!!!
Reviewer: bopeep (Signed) · Date: 13/06/07 01:02 PM · On: Chapter 2 A Haunting We Will Go
whoa! dude, what a totally wicked ending! very well written, and a great catcher for a next chapter! may i suggest in this story LIMP!sam and PROTECTIVE!dean? i think this story has so much potential and having you write it could definuntly make it work. i cant wait for the next chapter, so please upd8 asap!!! :)
Author's Response: Thanks, bopeep.....and loving every word you guys send me .....thank you so much for reading........terry and I were wondering how the LEECH chapter would affect people....Guess I know now.....I'll try to bang Sam up a little just not sure where to put it in........
Reviewer: fredo (Signed) · Date: 13/06/07 09:35 AM · On: Chapter 2 A Haunting We Will Go
yik, after rats now you bring leeches ?! beurk, and on the eyes, gross ! But gooood chapter, funny that the boys can't finally remain quiet, even for one week, even with a hot tub ! Besides, we didn't have much benefit from that tub, looks like you'll owe a special Sammy scene to the Samgirls like our friend Bambi... And for the plot, hum hum, something about that goofy moovie, some brainwashing thing... Ouhhh, can't wait to read more !
Author's Response: fredo, sooooooo sorry about the hot tub scene not being HOT !!!....should have done a lot more with that... As John said to Meg in Salvation "Sorry to disappoint.!!!"Sammy girls will get there little treat later.....chapter 4 or 5.......PROMISE !!!!
Reviewer: kwater (Signed) · Date: 13/06/07 08:07 AM · On: Chapter 2 A Haunting We Will Go
UUUGGGHHHH!!! Does that sum it up for you, You can add leaches to the things that ick me out. Seriously nice job, Jude. I like that the boys, are panting for a hunt - As always thanks for the read Kell
Author's Response: Knew you guys would love the little squirmers......used to use them as fishing bait in WISCOnSIN........yeah the boys are definitely antsy....
Reviewer: bambers2 (Signed) · Date: 13/06/07 07:59 AM · On: Chapter 2 A Haunting We Will Go
eeeewwww....leeches on the eyeballs!! very gross, jude!! and you talk about me!! so like the new chappy!!! i'm thinkin the one time movie thing is some sort of demonic brainwashing thing...am i close?? thanks for the great read, looking forward to chappy three...and for us Sammygirls a little shameless Sam shower scene would be awesome...that wasn't a hint but a full-on request!! bambers;)
Author's Response: not exactly 2 finger Charlie.....but pretty okay for a newbie.......terry was anxious to see the reactions.....said my set up was good .....sammy's time is coming and it is NECESSARY to the plot....well sort of......and our brains think similarly........
Reviewer: gaelicspirit (Signed) · Date: 11/06/07 11:24 AM · On: Chapter 1 Let's Take a Break
Hey Jude -- great start! I'm intrigued. The action at the start was fast paced and knocked both boys around just enough for me to be concerned... and what a treat, to give them run of the house for a week! 'Course, I suspect it won't be the week off they both want and need... I liked Dean's observation of himself -- his scars roadmaps of the evil he'd survived in his life. That scene made me hungry... I'm sure it was the roast beef sandwhiches and beer... *wink* And nice way to raise our eyebrows before the next installment. Just enough that Terry's prediction of WTH? was dead on. :) Can't wait for chapter two!
Author's Response: Thanks so much for taking the time to read it.......hopefully you'll enjoy where this is heading...it's original but that doesn't necessarily mean that it will keep the readers happy and coming back for more, Amanda. Fredo tells me a few more shower scenes won't hurt .. actually I was trying to be serious in that scene, like you thought
Author's Response: yeah, I know it was the sandwich and beer that had everybody drooling
Reviewer: Ace33 (Signed) · Date: 10/06/07 10:36 PM · On: Chapter 1 Let's Take a Break
Wicked beginning! I'm hooked already. I'm glad our boys have a decent place to stay! ~Kayla
Author's Response: Thanks, Kayla......had to be a little nice to them everybody's been doing such a bang up job of kicking the crap out of them in most of the other tales........ hopefully you all will enjoy where this is all headed ....................not as experienced as you guys so I'll be lucky if I can drag it out to 5 chapters.....
Reviewer: lam (Signed) · Date: 09/06/07 05:32 PM · On: Chapter 1 Let's Take a Break
SOOOOO - about the shower scene..... Ah - YUM!!! Keep those coming and who would even care if you had a plot! Which you do. Dylan is very scary - WTH???? Can't wait to see where you are going with this.... Awesome FIRST chapter!
Author's Response: My dear little lam....thank you so much...Fredo suggests using scenes such as that as filler to lengthebn the chapters.......a serious consideration...s'pose we could do Sammy next......?? I think my plot is okay, terry seems to agree though she says one part makes her feel squeamish.... if I was a better more experienced writer, I could probably drag it to 8 or 9 but i still get to the point a bit too quickly so you''ll probably be lucky to see 5 chapters.......better than "Maddie" and 'Gnaws" though..............i'm learning..... loved your WHT ?? exactly what Terry predicted when I cut the chapter there..... :0) jude
Reviewer: bambers2 (Signed) · Date: 09/06/07 02:29 PM · On: Chapter 1 Let's Take a Break
what can i say, you're off to a great start on your first chapter story!!! loved the shower scene!! so i am eagerly awaiting an update!! thanks for sharing!! now i must get back to Sammy!!! bambers;)
Author's Response: Thanks, B....any attention from you, Terry, Kelly, Amanda is awesome....how you guys make time for me is so flattering, when you are surrounded and sometimes overwhelmed by that thing called LIFE and all your many, many responsibilities....thanks...shower scene my favorite too
Reviewer: kwater (Signed) · Date: 09/06/07 01:53 PM · On: Chapter 1 Let's Take a Break
Great, Jude I knew you could do it. Wonderful start (especially the shower, I bow down to your storytelling- LOL) Wating for update ;) (I love saying that to you ) Kell
Author's Response: Thanks so much, kelly.....long way to go but slowly getting there... Yeah even Terry said she like to be a fly on the wall in that bathroom.....just had to throw it in there.......working on the third chapter now....
Reviewer: fredo (Signed) · Date: 09/06/07 01:39 PM · On: Chapter 1 Let's Take a Break
and i say a yeah to Jude !!! You did it my friend, and it's completely great ! The nearly hysterical salt and burn was awesome, and the shower well... By the way, friendly advice from a Deangirl, if you're afraid that a chapter may be to short or a little weak, put in a long, humid well-detailed shower scene, and nodody will be able to notice the rest ! And now begins the whining and begging process, plleeaase, give us some more, update asap, i can't wait...
Author's Response: I promise to heed that sage advice, Fredo.....thank you so much for your kind words...the next chapter still needs to be Beta'd but I think I'm getting better...still need to master action and thinking analysis a bit better.......Terry will be verrryyyy busy from 12th to 18th so I will just keep writing....may be five to seven days between chappies though ...will try to improve... :o) jude
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