Reviewer: mizpah (Signed)
24/05/11 09:56 PM · On:
For a long while he held my gaze and it was at that moment that I understood for the first time how those two boys communicated with one another without saying a word. It was like his emotions were flowing through me and I could feel a part of the despair that he had buried inside of him for way too long.
I really, really loved those lines. They stood out for me when I first read this on the email copy, and stand out every time I read the tag. Which I've done a few times now.
The three different points of view worked so well for this story, allowing the readers to not only advance step-by-step in the action, but to actually see and feel what each character was experiencing, and get a complete picture of what was unfolding. For instance, it jolted me in shock when I read that Sam was actually "standing" in front of the wall waiting for it to come down, whereas Dean was only seeing Sam lleaning against the wall staring into space.
And I loved how Bobby realised that he had to be totally honest, even straying into the dreaded chick-flick territory, to enable him to break through to his youngest and seal up that rapidly cracking wall. Loved the imagery there, too.
I've wondered time and time again how Sam keeps going with the burden of grief and guilt he carries, so the breakdown was completely believable. One last thing, and it all suddeny became too much to bear, even for a Winchester used to the weight of destiny on his shoulders. And we saw how affected Sam was by the electrocution - he couldn't bear to watch, turning around only when the worm was toast, and then springing into frantic motion when he found that Bobby wasn't breathing. No surprise that there was such a messy aftermath.
No way was I going to let you bury this one, hun. No way on earth. This had to be posted and shared!
huge hugs, and sorry it took me so long to review
oh - and thank you so much for the dedication - your support means so much to me, especially at the moment with all the stuff happening....thank you for not letting go
Author's Response: I have no idea how to express the way I feel about your review. It means so much that you completely understood what I was trying to convey. Your support and friendship is more precious than I will ever able to tell you! Thank you doesn't cut it, but it's all I can say! Love you my friend! Hugs, Vonnie
Reviewer: Tree66 (Signed)
15/05/11 02:43 PM · On:
Awww- I love this.... I love sooo many things about this one. First- I like how the dialogue and POV shifts back and forth- from Sam to Dean. Both of them so concerned about the other. Poor Sam, so worried about every little thing- and just pushed to the brink.
And then when it seemed like even Dean couldnt get through to him, Bobby- good old Bobby- shows up and just manages to pull him back from the edge. Getting through to Sam and helping him realize that they were all not so different when it came to guilt and pain.
I literally ADORE that entire passage between Bobby and Sam- so nicely written that I almost wish the writers would have given us something along those lines.
Well done, Vonnie!!! I'm totally jealous- makes my little convo between them pale by comparision!
Author's Response: Wow thanks, this is so amazing. I didn't even want to post this and then I get this response. But please, don't put your story down. I haven't gotten to it yet, but I'm sure it is just as wonderful as all your other stories. Hugs, Vonnie
Reviewer: Leigh Ann Wallace (Signed)
14/05/11 08:47 PM · On:
Very good story, Vonnie. Especially like the POV changes!
Author's Response: Thanks, glad you enjoyed it. Hugs, Vonnie
Reviewer: bjxmas (Signed)
14/05/11 06:24 PM · On:
Seriously, Vonnie...like? I freaking loved this! It was so awesome, all the emotion, all the truths, all the insight into all our Winchesters! You rocked this tag!
There were so many lines that stood out, I'd be here all night trying to pick out my favs. Just know that it gripped me and pulled me through their turmoil. And you perfectly realized the anguish each one felt, and how the overriding concern was always for the others, how they were feeling, how they would cope with the fallout of another Winchester tragedy.
Oh, and I love how you brought in so many past elements and yet kept true to the purpose of your story. It was especially effective having Sam go all the way back to where he should have died in the nursery instead of his mom.
Truly heartbreaking and yet the resolution was uplifting. Bobby forgives, just like Dean does, and just like Sam needs to do for himself.
Truly spectacular! Thanks for the closure, B.J.
Author's Response: I'm so ready to break out in tears now. This is so emotional for me and your words really hit me deep down. In a good way though. I'm glad I could get this kind of response from you. Never expected this. Thank you so much, even if the words don't really say how I feel. Bug hugs, Vonnie
Reviewer: ArielMarie (Signed)
14/05/11 06:17 PM · On:
Loved it! Sammy always feeling like he failed (like sam always does). Dean being there for the ones he loves (where would any of them be w/out dean). Bobby stepping up and being the dad sam and dean needs!
"...consider you my son and I love you!"
Loved it like i love u!
Author's Response: I am getting more and more overwhelmed, as I didn't expect this kind of response. Thank you so much, I love you too! Big hugs, Vonnie
Reviewer: supernaturalfan (Signed)
14/05/11 04:20 PM · On:
Wow, this was great Vonnie...just as I imagined that missing scene would be. So much emotion..and love. Your comparison between Bobby and Sam possession's was a great idea..and something I had not thought of until reading it here. That's why your the writer and I just read..lol I could feel Sam's despair..and all it took was Bobby's forgiveness to close the cracks in that wall and bring him back...and Sam's statement about helping Bobby forgive himself..perfect ending. Thanks for this..now on to the next.
Author's Response: Thanks so much. You have no idea how much I appreciate your comments. Really lifts me up. Hugs, Vonnie
Reviewer: ziggy (Signed)
14/05/11 03:44 PM · On:
Oooh sorry for another post but forgot to say what an awesome banner from Chris, fit the story so well. :)
Author's Response: Chris is so awesome, she really is an artist. Hugs, Vonnie
Reviewer: ziggy (Signed)
14/05/11 03:42 PM · On:
That was amazing Vonnie, so wished this had happened on the show as we all wanted to see Bobby forgiving Sam.
This missing scene fit with the episode so well, and so believable I could imagine it happening as I read.
Always wanted to know how Bobby came back after it looked like he was dead and this scenario was perfect. Spot on that Sam would feel guilty for leaving Dean to electrocute Bobby and wishing he had taken the burden from him and that Dean wanted to save Sam the burden of doing it after almost killing their surrogate father.
Loved how they both got him breathing again before it all became too much for Sam and he had the emotional breakdown he couldn't hold back any more. And as much as Dean wanted to make it all better it was right that it was Bobby with his heartfelt words that finally got through to Sam and they had that genuine and much needed hug, for both of them.
This was perfection Vonnie, loved it from first word to last, the ultimate missing scene.
Author's Response: Wow, just...wow. I really don't know what to say, you really got me with your review. I was so unsure about even writing anything until Jules bugged me. Then I was unhappy because I really didn't want to write in the first person, but just couldn't come up with anything else. I even sent it to Jules, because I still wasn't sure about posting. Now you are giving me this review and I'm ready to cry, but they are certainly not tears of sadness. If I could hug you now I sure would. Hugs, Vonnie