Reviewer: rbliss1969 (Signed) · Date: 22/04/08 12:41 AM · On: Chapter 16
Maggie, wow what a great story i loved all 16 chapters. i love how you had John in it. Dean and Sam are so strong together and it was cool how you had John seeing how his boys are together. i am going to read the next story in your shadow stalker series i am sure it will be as good as this one. Renee
Reviewer: nightchills (Signed) · Date: 28/03/08 07:03 PM · On: Chapter 5
There's daylight , but the area is blanketed in deep, unnatural fog - how could he see the road overhead, let alone the blood soaked rocks? And, the rocks could not be soaked by his blood if he was just passing thru on his way rolling down, he'd have to remain in that spot long enough to leave a small pool or heavy enough trace. I'm just saying...
Reviewer: nightchills (Signed) · Date: 28/03/08 06:53 PM · On: Chapter 6
Maybe it's my English major, but, don't you have spell check? My brain gets distracted by the wrong words (dew vs. due, cant vs can't - this is a contraction, ya know-, to vs too, sorted vs sordid... you get the drift). You're a very good writer and I can't wait to start the next in the series, but, even great writers need to watch the grammer and use the correct word to keep the flow of the story going for us English weirdos. Unless you're from a different country and that's how they write? Anyway, love your stories.
Author's Response: i'm not from a different country :) i'm actually dyslexic and i do work without a beta. this is an old story, it was reposted from another site and written about 2 years ago. i don't have time to go back through and fix things i know now. but later stories are better, writing is a learning process.
Reviewer: CatzEye (Signed) · Date: 24/03/08 08:26 PM · On: Chapter 16
Very good job of storytelling! The villians of this story - both spirit & human - were scary indeed! Well done!
Reviewer: Kumaproogey (Signed) · Date: 29/12/07 02:22 PM · On: Chapter 16
Incredible descriptions!!! Seriously, the opening paragraph set the pace for the rest of the story, it was very vivid and portrayed and incredible picture: The road wove dangerously through the darkened hillsides and wilderness. Hairpin turns led to deadly drop offs, while the pine forest encroached upon the desolate straight aways. The shadows themselves seemed to be alive, misting silently across the back roads, swallowing all the sounds around them. Even the black car seemed to be just another ghost of the night, its piercing headlights the only sign of life in the quiet night. The low growl and heavy music of the impala was muffled by the dense forest growth, its rhythms dying away into the night, leaving no trace of its passage. The rest of the story didn't disappoint either (in either plot or descriptions and writing). Very original, unique and creative idea. Had me thoroughly interested from beginning to end. Interaction between Sam & Dean & both brothers & John was spot on!
Reviewer: birdie (Signed) · Date: 09/12/07 03:37 PM · On: Chapter 16
Maggie. I loved this. It was so well observed. the exchanges between Sam and Dean were funny and showed two brothers who love each other devotedly but who also at times irritate each other to death! John was superb too, with all his repressed love for the boys and his inability to articulate it. I thought you did his relationship with Dean especially well - so brittle and with John able to crush Dean with a word and vice versa. They are so alike in many ways! The last chapter where Dean tries to get up to walk up the mountain and he thinks John is gonna leave him is just heart wrenching. I was in tears at that point. So In case I've not been clear I loved it and am gonna do the rest of the series. Oh and finally (ok I know I'm a sick puppy) but you hurt Dean so nicely! Bev xxx
Author's Response: thank you so much, i'm glad you liked it. it was my first story back over a year ago, and still stands as one of my favs. and if you like hurt dean, there's plenty of it in the rest of the series. i swear i tried not to, i just couldnt help myself. haha.
Reviewer: garvaldmains (Signed) · Date: 29/11/07 03:50 AM · On: Chapter 16
This was absolutely brilliant, i was so hooked - so well written, the atmosphere was well creepy! Off to find more!!! Dix - i have so gotta stop reading all the wonderful stuff on this site and do some web design! My business will go bust!
Reviewer: _Psych_ (Signed) · Date: 04/11/07 01:12 AM · On: Chapter 16
For a second there i almost stopped reading, thinking you were going to have Sam die inplace of dean, towards the beginning....but i when i saw that wasn't your intent i kept going. It was pretty good though, i'm impressed. Poor Dean, muhaha...
Author's Response: thank you so much, i'm glad you enjoyed it. this was my first story, way back before season 2. seems so long ago now. lol. and no worries, i will never kill off the boys.
Reviewer: jane (Signed) · Date: 27/09/07 01:27 AM · On: Chapter 1
Love the dialogue, so the boys, fab. Dark forests are never good, paricularly late at night! Onto the next part. Jane :)
Reviewer: sasunaru_panda (Signed) · Date: 20/09/07 12:43 AM · On: Chapter 16
stupid shadow. haha :]
Reviewer: Shannondoah (Signed) · Date: 13/09/07 06:39 PM · On: Chapter 16
Oh no you didn't!!! You are pure EVIL! The shadow is in Sam?!
Reviewer: Shannondoah (Signed) · Date: 13/09/07 06:20 PM · On: Chapter 15
Incredible!!! Now that's action-packed!
Reviewer: Shannondoah (Signed) · Date: 13/09/07 06:10 PM · On: Chapter 14
Yay Dean! I'm so glad he wasn't tricked by his family's old friend. Now they just have to vanquish the demon and discover Joshua's reason for betraying them.
Reviewer: Shannondoah (Signed) · Date: 13/09/07 05:19 PM · On: Chapter 13
Now you've made me like John again. First I hate him because he's so hard on his sons and expects so much from them. Then you show me how the loving, fearful and vulnerable he is when it comes to Sam and Dean. That's the mark of a good story teller! Oh no! Next chapter---hurry!
Reviewer: Shannondoah (Signed) · Date: 13/09/07 04:31 PM · On: Chapter 12
An evil monologue...going by the book...too funny! A daeva with a brain and a will---that's deadly! Thanks for the education. I had wondered if the river would change from murky to clear after being blessed. Thanks for adding that.
Reviewer: Shannondoah (Signed) · Date: 13/09/07 04:14 PM · On: Chapter 11
I think you and Dean have something in common---smart alec. "The next time a demonic hsadow asks you if you want to die, you say no." Hilarious! Awww. What a touching, stirring scene between Dean and John!
Reviewer: Shannondoah (Signed) · Date: 13/09/07 03:49 PM · On: Chapter 10
I love the joking between the brothers. I also liked that you wrote Sam glued Dean to the beer bottle instead of the bottle glued to Dean. Cute! Blessing entire rivers---now that's a Winchester way of thinking.
Reviewer: Shannondoah (Signed) · Date: 13/09/07 03:07 PM · On: Chapter 9
John's criticism of Dean protecting Sam really makes me angry (good job, by the way)! He says he can't be with them because it puts them in danger, yet he criticizes Dean (who is always there for Sam) for not protecting his brother. At least John did something for the boys. The vanishing spell was genius!
Reviewer: Shannondoah (Signed) · Date: 13/09/07 02:46 PM · On: Chapter 8
This is a wonderful chapter! The spirit tells what he is and is still mysterious. I can't believe John and Sam walk right above Dean and no one knew it. It made me tense up, hoping they'd find him. But alas...
Reviewer: Shannondoah (Signed) · Date: 13/09/07 02:35 PM · On: Chapter 7
Wow! Johsua has turned against the Winchesters?! I can't wait to find out why.
Reviewer: Shannondoah (Signed) · Date: 12/09/07 04:46 PM · On: Chapter 6
Excellent! John and Sam working a hunt together without Dean. I don't know if that's good or bad.
Reviewer: Shannondoah (Signed) · Date: 12/09/07 04:32 PM · On: Chapter 5
An interesting villain. He doesn't seem to want to kill the Winchester's but play with them. Cool idea!
Reviewer: Shannondoah (Signed) · Date: 12/09/07 04:10 PM · On: Chapter 4
This just keeps getting creepier! Is Joshua in on this? OMG!
Reviewer: Shannondoah (Signed) · Date: 12/09/07 03:58 PM · On: Chapter 3
Ooohh! Very eerie and mysterious! This is exciting!
Reviewer: Shannondoah (Signed) · Date: 12/09/07 03:47 PM · On: Chapter 2
John's reaction to Caleb and Pastor Jim's cell numbers is very touching. I'm so glad John is going after his sons!
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