Reviewer: vivadi (Signed) · Date: 22/01/13 08:55 PM · On: Chapter 16

Love it all... any way i can get an alert by email when you have new stories. I love your writing..thanks

Reviewer: leslie92708 (Signed) · Date: 23/12/10 03:17 AM · On: Chapter 3

The Mystery is unfolding!!  I'm intrigued!

Reviewer: Felanin (Signed) · Date: 26/10/10 05:07 PM · On: Chapter 16

wow an incredible story! *cheering*

Reviewer: ashon13 (Signed) · Date: 20/01/09 02:25 PM · On: Chapter 13

Uh oh...*wags finger at Joshua*...That wasn't a very smart thing to do...

Reviewer: ashon13 (Signed) · Date: 20/01/09 12:52 PM · On: Chapter 6

Wow, I have to say, John must have been horrified, walking down an eerie dark road looking for his two missing boys, then hearing one screaming in pain, only to find him a little while later trying to jump off a cliff...Jeez, talk about going out of your mind with worry. ;P

Reviewer: ashon13 (Signed) · Date: 20/01/09 12:01 PM · On: Chapter 1

"What if a bear eats us?!" Ahahahaha, that was great! :D

Reviewer: NongPradu (Signed) · Date: 02/12/08 12:54 PM · On: Chapter 16

Oh ho ho!  Clever, clever!  That evil thing is somehow lurking in Sam, eh?

 

Whenever stories end with a cruel little twist like this, I always want to see it continued later.  lol.

Reviewer: rahne (Signed) · Date: 05/10/08 11:37 AM · On: Chapter 16

Where do I begin? I am still fairly new to the supernatural fanfic universe, never having realized it was out there. (Since I have been reading LOTR stories for years, I should have known better, but it had not occured to me.) This was one of the first stories I found when I looked up fanfic, and I was astounded. I couldn't stop reading. I would have left you a review then, but the site features at fanfic.net don't work on my MAC, and I can't pull up the review space. Last night I reread Shadowstalker, and now that I have found this site, and after reading over a hundred different pieces, I want to tell you what a fabulous story this is. I happen to truly love John Winchester, and it's hard to find good stories of his hunts with his boys. (God, I wish he hadn't died so soon, but Kripke was right, it was almost inevitable given his character and his love for his boys.) You not only captured the true essences of Sam and Dean, but you got John as well as anyone I've met or read. Trust me, that wasn't easy. I love this piece, truly my favorite hunt story. ( I have to admit, I'm a sucker for the short pure angst pieces, especially Let No Man Put Asunder, and other John stories.)
I don't review, or even read pieces before they are complete, so I want to make all my comments at the end, here. Wow. The idea that John has always kept an eye on the boys was implied in the series, but never stated, and it's so obvious he would have. Even Sam understood here, that it was out of love. Since Stanford, Sam has had to reevaluate a lot of his assumptions regarding his father. How many boys reach the same realizations after growing up and walking in a man's shoes for awhile? That John would know where to look, that he understood his sons so well and looked at the facts unflinching, this is who he is, and why he is so feared. How many people in this world see only what they want to see, and refuse to face what they can't accept or don't want to know. Even the boys, true hunters that they are, find it hard sometimes to see the situation clearly and dispassionately, and act. When their brother is involved, they freeze, or hesitate, the need to be there so overwhelming they can't think. But even when John made the emotional choice to go to Sam at the end, it was because he trusted Dean to do the job, to bless the last river. Only knowing that, was he free to follow his heart. A hard thing, but it's the only reason he and his boys survived all those years. Hell, if John had not had that strength, he would have let himself die in the fire with Mary. It was his duty to his boys that let him leave her and go out to save them. (I think I identify with John more than most, because I worked 23 years as an E.R. physician, and was sometimes looked at askance for my ability to make life and death decisions in a crisis. Just because we don't become overwhelmed by tragedy, doesn't mean we don't feel it just as deeply.)
And Dean. How much he hates being helpless. His whole self image is his ability to fight, to protect, to hold his family together whatever the cost. He doesn't see the emotional and spiritual strength inside him, but his brother can. As the Shadow did. I loved how you brought that out without being sappy or indulging in one of Dean's dreaded chick flick moments.(Not that I feel the same, I'm much more like Sam in that regard.) Dean as one of the strongest souls the Asura has ever sensed? Sam as pure power and light? How incredibly perfect! I keep going back to that scene, I can't help it. I love it. And I love that the Demon fears John more than either of them, even if his soul is less 'palatable'. That Joshua is more afraid of John than the Shadow. (That the YED wanted John dead even more than he wanted the Colt that he needed to open the gate.) Yet Joshua had a valid point, and you didn't gloss over it. How many generations of hunters had lived and never tried tangling with a Demon? Even for those who had, it was never more than the occasional exorcism of some low level possession. Why do you think the owners of the Colt had never used it, never even hinted that they had it? 'Meg' said it; when John hunted the YED, when he took possession of the Colt, he declared war. And there will be casualties, civilian and hunter. John's obssession may have kept him from seeing it sooner, but I don't think that would have stopped him. (And maybe, unknowingly, he was right. Year 4 is revealing that that bastard had more than mindless demon terror and destruction in mind all along.) John's anger at Joshua at the end was not for his legitimate fear for his family and the others, it was for his cowardice in going after John's boys, his betrayal of humans to a supernatural force. In his enmity for all that threatened his sons, he was and always would be, implacable. I have to say, I would have done the same. But it's nice to know there are still gentle hearts like Sam, who would have spared him. The nurturers need us to protect them, sometimes. But we need them, too. To keep us human.
Well, this is getting longer than your chapters! Just thank you again for making us think, and feel. Maybe Sam's 'powers' aren't as demonic as the series has been hinting. After all, Power just is. There is nothing inherently good or evil in it. That is defined by how one uses it. (An ancient philosophical truth I wish more fundamental religious folks could grasp. (Good, 'God-fearing' people have done more evil than all the bad guys put together, in my opinion.) We will see. Just one last thing. There are far too many missed commas, incomplete or run on sentences, and wrong words for my tastes, even if the depth of the prose is enough to let me ignore most of them. Homonyms such as 'bare/ bear,' 'they're/their/there,' 'site/sight,' 'hear/here,' etc., do not get caught by spell check! I find this is a common problem for every writer less than forty or fift years old. Even my newspaper is full of them. Please, be more careful, and THINK what exactly you mean to say. Thanks for listening. And, wow. There are more stories in the Shadowslayer series! Never thought to look. I'll be reading.


Author's Response:

wow, what a great review, thank you so much. Stalker was my first story and was written a few years ago and there was a lot of things I didn't know about punctuation, spelling, and word choice. Because of a strange series of events throughout grade school I actually managed to make it through school without a formal english class :| 

Between dyslexia and a strangely high IQ test I was in both remedial english and advanced classes at the same time, and somehow missed the whole 'learn to write' part of things.

And I have to say, all the help I've been given online has been amazing. So thank you for the critiques. Someday I'll have time to go back through and edit my past work, but at the moment, I need to quell an uprising at work. haha

Thank you once again :). I'm glad you enjoyed the story.  

Reviewer: jackfan2 (Signed) · Date: 23/06/08 04:31 PM · On: Chapter 8

“Ten points. Crowd goes wild. Hhhhaaaa.” Dean joked quietly to himself, mimicking the sound of a cheering crowd.>> hehehe.. i loved this bit. Poor Dean.

Hallucinating Dean was great too! Naturally, Dean's thirst would = a bar out in the middle of no where, his oasis. Brilliant.

But the last bit.. POOR DEAN!

Reviewer: jackfan2 (Signed) · Date: 23/06/08 03:58 PM · On: Chapter 6

Well, so at least John and Sam are together and can go find and rescue Dean - Yea! Winchester's unite!

Reviewer: jackfan2 (Signed) · Date: 23/06/08 12:37 PM · On: Chapter 4

Okay, creepy creepy creepy; a stretch of road that is basically like the song "Hotel California" - you can check in any time you like, but you can never leave.

Seriously, that's a cool premise. And the fact that the Winchesters are targets since the demon...

Excellent creep factor! Off for more

Reviewer: jackfan2 (Signed) · Date: 23/06/08 12:14 PM · On: Chapter 2

Yikes! They've disappeard? Okay, i'm thoroughly intrigued by this situation. Love seeing John back in the works.

Great characterization of Pa Winchester. I know he loves his boys and I think Dean gets his strong sense of family from him.

Reviewer: deansbaby759 (Signed) · Date: 29/05/08 04:32 PM · On: Chapter 16

Awesome story! I read the whole thing without stopping.