Reviewer: VBEDELL (Signed)
13/02/12 02:13 AM · On:
This was a great story! What an unusual pov. I really liked the different views of spotting Dean around town and how he just didn't seem to be comfortable there. I think you've captured both Dean's angst and the djinn's feelings too.
This was fantastic, thanks for sharing such a interesting story.
Reviewer: saltnburnem (Signed)
11/04/11 09:25 PM · On:
Nice twist! I note that she had to keep refocusing herself on her part of "the family job", because understandably, it's easy to get caught up in the appeal of Dean Winchester. I also like that she connected with Dean on the importance of family....but then had to move in for her revenge in the end.
Author's Response: Thanks so much, and so glad you liked it!
Reviewer: birdie (Signed)
05/04/11 01:48 PM · On:
So she was the Siren I take it? Your descriptions and capture of Dean's unintentional distance from Lisa and Ben were good, and a little sad and wistful.
I wondered if she, the Siren, would have been a little more disdainful of him? Well of any human - I get the impression it thought it's self 'above' humankind.
interesting little oneshot, thanks for the read.
I have Exiled Dean stuck in my mind, for some reason, and I think he might even melt the hardest Djinn heart! (well, maybe...) I did revise the story a little so I hope it works a little better now.
Thanks for your comments!
Reviewer: zuimar (Signed)
05/04/11 12:45 PM · On:
Never ever expected that twist at the end, how did you come up with that? Well, we all know who drew the short straw, right? Thank you for sharing this fic on this board!
I wanted to do the "monster POV" and thought maybe, if she actually got to know her prey, she might start to question what she'd been taught (kind of like Dean did in season 2...) I did a little revising, so I hope it's a little clearer now.
Thanks so much for your comments!
Reviewer: Amberdreams (Signed)
05/04/11 03:11 AM · On:
I liked the outside POV but I think for the purposes of this story, she was too sympathetic and warm towards Dean, so when the reveal comes in the final part, it is is a bit too much of a leap to go from a young girl attracted to the handsome stranger, to the Siren who is going to try and kill him.
Maybe introducing some kind of doubts on her part, or the beginnings of some kind of antagonism towards Dean a little earlier would help prepare the way without necessarily giving the whole plot away.
Apart from that, some lovely descriptions and a great idea.
Hope that helps?
Thanks so much for your comments, Amber. I made a few changes that hopefully will make it a little clearer, or at least more understandable. After all, who wouldn't be distracted by a sad Dean?
Thanks again for your suggestions, and hope this works a little better now.