Reviewer: CdeWinter78 (Signed) · Date: 14/04/11 05:17 AM · On: Chapter 5
What an excellent H/C chapter. Dean allowing Sam to take more of the burden and control as time goes on illustrates convincingly that he is far from fine. You do the whump justice here!! LOL. Love that image of Dean allowing Sam to pull him close, and when he asks Sam to sing its a touching blend of teasing his brother, practical survival method and vulnerability. Your right, the scene utterly works, I haven't seen the episode you mention, though I was an X-files fan, but you write it very well, just like the rest of your great story. Why have you not ventured out into writing- you got SKILLS Dude!!! LOL. Abi.
Reviewer: CdeWinter78 (Signed) · Date: 14/04/11 05:01 AM · On: Chapter 4
Ohhh - innocents to protect, nice touch. The boys are so very readable the way you write them, but there is something awesome about them when they are in protector mode. It sheds clear light on them as more than just supernatural vigilante exterminators, in the league of hunters like Gordon; it puts a purpose to their cause- they are heroic characters, and you are doing an amazing job translating this. Oh and by the way this line; "Dean stopped, turning to Sam. "Those two," he said, motioning to Leslie and Anson who were a few hundred yards away, "are a curious cocktail of inbreeding and Type II diabetes," he huffed" ..... Classic Dean! Wow - cliffhanger that just makes me glad there is a "next" chapter button!!
Reviewer: CdeWinter78 (Signed) · Date: 14/04/11 04:44 AM · On: Chapter 3
Seriously?!!! Season 2 nostalgia is taking over!!! I miss the time when the answer to all Sam's issues was Dean and the 'Jerk- Bitch' horseplay reigned supreme. You really have captured the early brotherly relationship so artfully. The way the undercurrent of trouble- Sam's spidey sense- and angst - Dean's ever present guilt complex- flows just under the brotherly banter is perfect. This is shaping up to be one entertaining ride! Love the way you are mixing all the classic ingredients of a Winchester hunt. Now between the outright kook- Harold- and the seemingly normal overly friendly Brian... I'd take the crasy anytime!!! On to find out....
Reviewer: CdeWinter78 (Signed) · Date: 14/04/11 04:09 AM · On: Chapter 2
Vision Sam was always so entertaining, you know your portrayal of the boys in season 2 might actually lead me to revisit!! Great set up of the hunt, always admire hunt stories- haven't had the courage to try one myself yet. The way you set out the Devil lore is brillient, you have the boys nuances down so well it makes picturing your story very easy. I am unfamiliar with Jersey devil tales, so this was informative, but not in a dry way. Still hitting all the right notes!!! Abi.
Reviewer: CdeWinter78 (Signed) · Date: 14/04/11 03:39 AM · On: Chapter 1
Hi there, I have to be honest, I only checked out this story because it has the same title as my own WIP (almost!! :) ) but I to say I so glad I did. Your story places itself seemlessly in Season two, your narrative and characterisation are spot on, they seem to flow effortlessly. It's a real pleasure to read! The interplay between the brothers (Sam returning the 'greasy sandwich' hangover cure) is authentic and filled with details that are so in keeping with the characters. I watched season 2 in a while, but you had me smiling over some of my favorite parts! Great start .... I have a good feeling about this one. Thanks for the read, Abi.
Reviewer: moira4eku (Signed) · Date: 13/04/11 08:40 PM · On: Chapter 6
Hmmmm.....something does seem rather strange, even more than the usual supernatural thing going on. What something trying to target the brothers? Wonder if Dean's injuries will get worse? Seems rather bad with the infection starting. Sam is gonna have his hands full with Dean that is for sure. Really looking forward to the next chapter.
Author's Response: Thanks for reviewing,moira!
Reviewer: moira4eku (Signed) · Date: 12/04/11 07:25 PM · On: Chapter 5
I read this elsewhere and really loved it. You really have Dean and Sam's personalities right on. I can easily see Dean making less of his injuries and Sammy being all worried and insistent in checking Dean out. Loved the end with Sam singing to Dean (never saw that ep of X-files). Looking forward to more!
Author's Response: hey moira, thanks so much for reviewing it over here! i'm glad you're liking my story!
Reviewer: Tree66 (Signed) · Date: 12/04/11 03:28 PM · On: Chapter 5
I had totally forgotten about Scully singing to Mulder until I read that. I was thinking- 'okay- where's the X-Files reference?" and there it was.... to the point I could almost see Sam running his fingers through Dean's hair like Scully through Mulder's- okay- so maybe that was a little too slashy- but it did bring back memories.... LOL ( although Scully could sing a helluva lot better than Sam!) SO now I want to know what Sam thinks is 'off' with the critter. I gotta go back and reread- what did I miss????? and oddly enough- I never really thought about the JD having hooves... Nice touch! I'm not sure if I ever read that in the decription or not- but I love the idea that Dean had a hoofprint on his chest! Pretty cool! ok- ok- write on!!! Tree
Author's Response: Hahahha - now I've got the image of Sam stroking Dean's hair stuck in my mind... You didn't miss anything, don't worry. Sam can't even remember what he saw, so it was very easy to miss (and I didn't describe it yet!) About the hooves - I think the Jersey Devil is one of the creepiest-looking creatures. The whole horse's head/hooves and wings just seem so out-of-place. Thanks for reading and reviewing! More soon :)
Reviewer: jensenluva28 (Signed) · Date: 12/04/11 09:34 AM · On: Chapter 4
OMG! This is soo great! I have to know what happens! I want more hurt Dean! Can't wait for the next chapters! :D
Author's Response: thank you for reading!! more hurt!Dean! coming up...
Reviewer: saber (Signed) · Date: 11/04/11 10:16 AM · On: Chapter 4
I want more. I'm enjoying this story. Thanks for sharing and please continue.
Author's Response: you're welcome! thanks for reading :)
Reviewer: mizpah (Signed) · Date: 08/04/11 06:51 PM · On: Chapter 3
That motel is a bit creepy, and so is the owner. And my ears pricked up when he said to Dean that the Devil was someone - someone - not to mess with. Not something. Sounds like Gary might know more about the legend than he's willing to share. And is old Harold as crazy as he seems? Was he there just for a bit of local 'colour'? A bait to give another bunch of tourists a bit of a scary thrill? Or was he really the boys' best eyewitness, and he's running scared of someone or something? The plot thickens. Great chapter, Katie. I can feel the tension ramping up slowly but surely. Sam's uneasy feelings, his nightmare that could be a vision, the gaggle of unsuspecting and thrill-seeking tourists, and the slightly off-balance townsfolk are all blending in to create quite a mood to this tale. May your muse be showered in peanut M&M's so she or he can help you get the next chapter out in double quick time! LOL Jules
Author's Response: ALL great questions! I love that you're analyzing everything in the chapters - it makes me feel so happy to know you're catching everything I wrote. Looks like the peanut M&M's worked! I'm posting next chapter now :) Katie
Reviewer: Leigh Ann Wallace (Signed) · Date: 08/04/11 04:07 AM · On: Chapter 1
Oh, are you kidding? Definitely like where this is going! I will be reading on!
Author's Response: Thank you!!
Reviewer: mizpah (Signed) · Date: 08/04/11 02:55 AM · On: Chapter 2
I actually liked the exposition - it set up the hunt quite nicely, and I loved reading the lore. Could actually hear Sam's voice reciting all the facts. But that nightmare - or vision - at the end was worrying. A portent of things to come, or Sam's worried mind working overtime? And typical Dean wanting to rush off straight into the hunt. Typical of Dean in season two, when he was drowning in grief and didn't care what it was, as long as he could kill it. Hmm...is chapter three up yet?...*chews nails*.... Nice work, Katie - really enjoying this story. Thanks so much for sharing.
Jules
Author's Response: Thanks for BOTH of your wonderful reviews, Jules :) I'm so happy to hear from people! Glad you're enjoying it so far - more angst and mystery come... Thanks again!
Reviewer: mizpah (Signed) · Date: 08/04/11 02:44 AM · On: Chapter 1
I skimmed through this chapter at lunchtime, and couldn't believe you hadn't gotten any reviews yet. Made up my mind to rectify that situation, only to find that Tree had beaten me to it - LOL! Nice start to what sounds like a rollicking good story. I haven't read many stories involving the Jersey Devil, so I'm looking forward to your take on this. Had to chuckle at Sam turning the tables on his brother during Dean's less than pleasant side effects of his binge drinking. And I think you captured the angst and tension of that particular time in the boys' lives really well. Eagerly anticipating the rest of the story. And I see that you've posted chapter three - just got to wait for it to pass validation. So while I'm waiting, I'll go hoover up the second chapter. Great start, and welcome to UnGen. Jules
Reviewer: Tree66 (Signed) · Date: 07/04/11 08:50 PM · On: Chapter 2
This is an awesome start to a story. You have the guys very much in character and I LOVE Jersey Devil lore. I can't wait to see where you take this- not to mention DeanWhump! I love that you also have this set in S2 when Sam is still having visions ( or in this case- he can't decide if its just a bad nightmare) LOL - again- great job of keeping them in character and in season. I'm looking forward to this one! Tree
Author's Response: Thank you so much!! I'm glad you're liking my story and I really appreciate you taking the time to review :) Thanks again!! Katie
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