Oh wow- totally knew Dean would not stay put with Sam in danger. The shift in persepective and POV is not to clunky, and in a way the brothers separation heightens the danger they are both throwing themselves into.

Like I said before, I AM SO glad there is a 'Next' button!!! Abi

That is exactly what the doctor ordered.... Bobby!!! It's like Christmas round here, a flagging Dean, and Bobby coming to the rescue! LOL.

 The dead Jenkins was vividly written and graphicly depicted the arterial redness of it all - no wonder Dean turned green. Great turn of phrase - arterial red, but then you play well with language, especially when you depict your characters.

Continues to be very entertaining, thanks for the read. Abi.

Thank you for the wonderful and scary story. i hope for more, please.

 

The blue ribbon means your story has been featured, and appears in the Featured list on the home page. That means it's deemed to be pretty special,  something out of the box. You don't lose the ribbon when the story is finished - after a while it goes red, which just means it's retired from the active list. But if you update it, you need to let us know because once you edit, you lose the ribbon.

So there you go.

Oh - and I put the ribbon back on for you - I see you lost it when you popped the last chapter up.

By the way, Dean shower scene? Works for this Admin too......

Well, well, well - it's going to be interesting to find out just why Brian is killing people, and why the townsfolk seem to be going along with it. Or are they aware, and just wanting to avoid being targeted by the Devil?

Still, Dean's in a bad way - thank heavens Bobby's arrived. Something tells me Dean's going to get a lot worse before he gets better....

Jules

Author's Response:

aw thank you! that makes me so happy :) 

you're definitely right about Dean getting worse...MUCH worse. 

Okay, I didn't see that coming. I never thought Brian would end up killing himself. Well done. I felt sorry for Gary. How brave of him to sacrifice himself for Dean. 

I'm sorry this story is coming to a close since I've enjoyed it so much.  

Author's Response: Thank you so much saber :) Sorry the update took so long, but I wrote a nice long final chapter.

"Stay here," Sam said firmly. "No matter what you hear, you stay here. Alright?" He took out one of the guns but refused to hand it over until Dean agreed.

Raise your hand if you knew stubborn Dean just couldn't stay put in the cabin. *Raises hand*  

I didn't mind the wait. This chapter was worth it. I'm glad Sam and Bobby know about the cross. I hope that's the key to stopping the Jersey Devil.

You really know how to voice Bobby. I could hear him saying these lines. I hope you write more stories in the future. 

 

Author's Response: :) Thank you SO much. I love writing but I especially like hearing from the people who read - I'll definitely write more stories in the future!

Well, well, well.....so it's Brian. And that explains why Jenkins was so nervous in the bar that night.

And Gary's on the Winchesters' side, it seems. At least for now. Wonder what Dean was picking up from him - whether it was just Gary's nervousness because he is connected to the Devil by blood, and knew what his half-brother had been doing.

That was a close one - I felt sure Gary was going to blast Sam to kingdom come, or at least try to.

Oh, and forgot to mention in the last review - the previous chapter wasn't choppy at all. As a matter of fact, switching from Dean's to Sam's POV like that is the only way to show what is happening when the boys split up. So don't worry about it, it flowed just fine.

Jules

Author's Response: Thanks for all your thoughts and kind words, Jules!! The blue ribbon made me very happy even though I still don't know what it means :) Glad you're sticking with my story and enjoying the mystery. Thanks agaiN!!

Trust Dean to crack the code - well, some of it, anyway. And Sam's got the other half under control. But what did he find out, and where is it going to lead them?

That was good advice of Dean's for Sam to stay inside - methinks something terrible is going to happen now that Sam's outside in the raging storm, and not just to the owner of that scream....

Oh, Sammy, why don't you ever remember it's bad to split up?

Jules

Dean must be really feeling sick for him to give in so easily to the urge to rest. No wonder Sam and Bobby are so worried, especially given the evidence Sam found on the Devil marking its victims.

So someone in the town is controlling it, eh? My money's on Gary. And if he's not directly involved in controlling the creature, then I'm thinking he knows who is - Dean had a bad feeling about him, and Dean's instincts are rarely wrong.

Oh, and congratulations! I see someone hung a pretty blue ribbon on your story. Very well deserved.

Jules

I'm so glad that Bobby talked Sam into taking a nap, seemed like he was about to keel over from lack of sleep. Loved the interaction between Bobby and Dean. You could really feel how Bobby feels about Dean, like a son (Sam, too). It's just like Dean not to want to exorcise the J. Devil for only a hundred years when it could come back and kill again. Good thing Bobby told Dean they would do everything they could to get rid of any kind of keepsake that could summon the J. Devil again. Dean is progressively getting worse and worse. They really need to hunt the J. Devil and send it back to hell! Really looking forward to the next chapter.

Author's Response: Thanks for the review, moira! I've always loved Bobby and I knew I had to include him in the caring - I'm glad you liked it too!

Well- the time is running out... I can feel the intensity in Sam's determination to find a solution- despoite his utter exhaustion - it mirrors his relentnessness there at the end of S3 and NRFTW.

I also loved Bobby's supportive side... very in character. Shooing' Sam off to rest- always so wise and yet he then show the cracks in his own frustration and worry...

And of course- nothing better than the Dean-Bobby interaction (always my favorite) and you captured it wonderfully. Nobody can fool Bobby- especially not Dean. He might pull his "I'm Fine" crap on Sam (on occasion) but NEVER on Bobby. I adore that you managed to capture that softer, uncranky side of the old guy. The side that takes NO-NONSENSE from Dean even as he's soothing him.

Simply awesome!

Tree

 

Author's Response: Thanks so much!! My next chapter is coming along nicely, but it's longer since I STILL haven't gotten to the hunt yet...and because I promised they'd be hunting in the next chapter, I refuse to post before that. LOL but I should have the chapter finished by tonight.

I feel for Gary being conflicted about helping Sam. He doesn't want anything bad to happen to Brian but at the same time knows this has to stop. I'm glad Bobby and Sam are going to take Dean with them into the woods. That guarantees that things won't go smoothly.

I've got a feeling more excitement and suspense are ahead. And I will say I'm loving it!

Author's Response: Thank you, Saber!! I'm glad you're still liking how things are going - more trouble in the next chapter!!