Reviewer: mizpah (Signed) · Date: 27/02/11 07:37 PM · On: Chapter 1
Love the stream of consciousness direction in which you took this, hun. It works really well, like we're right inside Sam's head for the slideshow of moments both before and after the breach in the wall. And the guilt that Sam's feeling which led him to scratch in the first place was mapped out really well. Of course he'd feel responsible and want to make amends, in a way that was completely foreign to RoboSam. But as Sam said, now he has a soul, and it won't let him just walk away. And I think the most horrifying thing to Sam was just what you voiced - the fact that his soulless self didn't even try to help, but killed without mercy or remorse. Totally the opposite to how they have been raised, to who Sam is at his core. Great job, hun. I'm so glad you decided to join in the fun. Jules
Reviewer: Usagy (Signed) · Date: 21/02/11 09:15 PM · On: Chapter 1
I agree with everyone, I like how you got into sams head and how you described and expressed the guilt he was feeling... Nice addition to a great epi :)
Reviewer: ziggy (Signed) · Date: 21/02/11 09:45 AM · On: Chapter 1
Great job Liz, you really captured Sam's guilt here at what his soulless self did and despite remembering Dean's words to not scratch the wall he did, bringing the memories of the pain and fire of hell upon him. Loved how you had Dean's words breaking through to Sam and bringing him out of his memories and back to his big brother. And so typical of him to apologise to Dean, not only for what he did but also for scratching the wall. Loved it, you said so much with those words. Sarah
Reviewer: supernaturalfan (Signed) · Date: 21/02/11 08:40 AM · On: Chapter 1
That boy carries around so much guilt..and you captured that. Even with the knowledge that he has Dean's love he still can't get out from under his guilt. I read it in every line. This story is short, but it packs a real punch. Guilt, remorse..Sam and his curiousity can't help but scratch. There was so much of Sam in this short story of yours. Great writing, Liz!!! Take care,
Jane
Reviewer: Primrose (Signed) · Date: 20/02/11 10:59 PM · On: Chapter 1
Surely a little scratch won't hurt....ooo....I hope he's learned his lesson! Well done!
Reviewer: vonnie836 (Signed) · Date: 20/02/11 06:27 PM · On: Chapter 1
Loved how you got into Sam's head and captured his thoughts, his self-loathing and everything. How he hears Dean's voice and comes back. Awesome how he missed his brother's love that even that doesn't release him from his guilt. Great job with this, I really liked it a lot. Hugs, Vonnie
Reviewer: supernaturaldh (Signed) · Date: 20/02/11 06:24 PM · On: Chapter 1
Very intense story. I was fixated while I read it Good job!
Reviewer: bjxmas (Signed) · Date: 20/02/11 05:16 PM · On: Chapter 1
Liz, I think you got inside Sam's head perfectly. His determination to do right, to atone for what his soulless self did. The guilt that forever drives him to try and do better.
I most love how it is Dean who pulls him back to safety, Dean that he cries out to for comfort. Dean that he hears and responds to. And while Sam might not fully believe it, Dean has totally forgiven him...or not even forgiven because for Dean he doesn't see that other Sam as Sam. Dean will be there for his brother and is just so relieved to have him back. I love seeing the boys caring for each other, needing each other and you captured that, and in so few words. You got to the heart of it. Great job! - B.J.
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