Reviewer: bulletbabe (Signed) · Date: 11/01/08 02:16 PM · On: Chapter 12: Strip My Mind
And John falls right back into his old habits, but I can't blame him. I love the way you've chosen to portray him as a man who is just as broken as his son...and even less able to hold out a hand for help. But you've also shown us a side of him that is gentle and human and loves his boys very much. A very human portrayal. And rock on Missouri, she may be the only woman save Mary who could keep JW in check.
Reviewer: bulletbabe (Signed) · Date: 11/01/08 01:34 PM · On: Chapter 11: Back to Lawrence
God, I do love Missouri, I wish she'd adopt me. You just know she's a perceptive woman even without the extra skills. And another great description of Dean and Sam's characters from her point of view. You've also captured her voice perfectly as I know you do in later chapters. I really do think she was one of the most underused characters of the series...maybe she'll make an appearance in season3 - who knows.
Reviewer: bulletbabe (Signed) · Date: 11/01/08 01:15 PM · On: Chapter 10: Dreams Like These
If there was a 'best banter' award I think you would have got it for this chapter. Great dialogue and you speak through their voices very precisely. And I would love to have been a fly on the wall to see the look on Dean's face when he realised that ...yes, Sam had been in his head. Great plot, for Dean to be an antenna for all things supernatural...can't wait for Missouri to get involved, but I'm jumping the gun...
Reviewer: bulletbabe (Signed) · Date: 11/01/08 12:58 PM · On: Chapter 9: Something Close to Normal
I always thought the 'new found honesty' between the brothers was a poignant thought. Dean had certainly needed that all his life... ...just like the apology and declaration from John. Such a shame that it took something so horrific to galvanise them both into doing the right thing. but also so very true to both their characters, especially John. And another fantastic dream sequence at the end, vividly portrayed and a great cliffhanger...I rushed to the next chapter to see what was behind that door...lol
Reviewer: bulletbabe (Signed) · Date: 11/01/08 12:37 PM · On: Chapter 8: Awakenings
Been waiting for this all day, and finally I get to sit down and read what I want to, with a good strong cup of coffee... The description at the beginning of this chapter is so full of fantastic detail of returning consciousness I can only assume the last time you woke up from a general anasthetic, you had a notebook to hand and spent your recovery time scribbling...lol And again it's so good to see John and Sam working together for Dean's sake (even though I know what's coming in later chapters) but also that Sam recognises Dean's dependancy and spends time with him alone...and the last line was poetic... ...'to let the soldier's mask slip if only for a little while'. Beautiful
Reviewer: bulletbabe (Signed) · Date: 10/01/08 03:40 PM · On: Chapter 7: He's Not Heavy, He's My Brother
Damn...so remember what I was saying about those Kleenex? Having just re read this chapter for the umpteenth time I've just realised how much I owe you. You're portrayal of the huge pain and emotional torment going on in Dean's head is sharp and yet ragged all at the same time. And the blind love and support Sam is willing to provide to help him through it just tears at me. And it just dawned on me how influential your style and content has been. I have to say you have been a massive formative influence on my attempts at writing and plot ideas and I'm sure there are many others who could say the same. Thank you for that...will finish this fantastic story tomorrow!
Author's Response: bulletbabe, darling, I still can't believe you're doing this...so hugely thoughtful and nice. I've really, really enjoyed reading your thoughts today and I hope you don't mind if I use this as a universal response to each one...at least for now. To say I've influenced you or anyone else is just unfathomable to me. I can honestly say that there are those who have influenced me, but to hear those words coming back at me doesn't hardly seem real. Sweetie, you sure don't owe me a thing, I'm just doing what I love to do and I'm honored anytime someone else enjoys it enough to review. Again, thank you so much for this...I really appreciate it and it's been a lot of fun to read each one...it's like getting a little present every time I check my e-mail! (((HUGS))), Nicole
Reviewer: bulletbabe (Signed) · Date: 10/01/08 03:09 PM · On: Chapter 6: Calling Missouri
I'm so pleased this was a less emotional chapter as it gave me a chance to go wash my face, restock the Kleenex and get ready for the next rollercoaster loop...well paced on your part I think! And i adore Missouri...I think she is one of the most promising and under used characters on the show...I've even tried to write her once or twice but can't do her justice...but you have spoken so well through her voice. The spot on description of Dean's psyche was so satisfying to read as it was as though you were putting all my own views down on paper for me. You obviously have a little psychic ability of your own...lol
Reviewer: bulletbabe (Signed) · Date: 10/01/08 02:47 PM · On: Chapter 5: Dreams Are Funny Like That
This was the chapter that did it for me - up till now I'd been really enjoying the ride and the style and I was very interested as to where you were going...and then I read this... ...and I was absolutely blown away! The whole description of the meeting between the brothers in their heads was so real I was almost there with them and the angst you put Dean through was tangible. For me Dean as a character has always been more susceptible to emotional pain rather than physical and you've portrayed that so very well here... And to finish with a silent tear and Sam reaching out for his brother, symbolically holding him together...and yes, I cried Okay? I admit it...I'm only human. This chapter stayed with me for a long time after I finished reading it.
Reviewer: bulletbabe (Signed) · Date: 10/01/08 02:32 PM · On: Chapter 4: John's Wake-Up Call
This is John's chapter all over, opening his heart to his two boys, one who can hear him and one who can't. And he does such a beautiful job of describing his oldest son to his youngest. A soft heart just like his mothers that's locked away...that line nearly had me filling up. And Sam talking to his unconsciouse brother was beautiful, especially when he refered to himself as Sammy...not Sam. I do have to take issue with you about your chapters being 'lameo' though because they are anything but...lol
Reviewer: bulletbabe (Signed) · Date: 10/01/08 02:20 PM · On: Chapter 3: Because It's Dean
You've done such a great job of portraying Sam's total dependancy on his big brother. Counting the hours since he last saw him... ...I'm starting to feel quite excited now because I know what's coming and at this point you really don't give any clues as to where this is heading. And again I love the way you write John, as such a loving yet deeply broken man. So marred that he can only keep it all inside...it's all he's capable of. Loved it!
Reviewer: bulletbabe (Signed) · Date: 10/01/08 02:06 PM · On: Chapter 2: The Rescue
Always thought that they glossed over the whole EMT involvement at the beginning of IMTOD. For me, this was the missing scene they should have used! And the thoughts you put in John's head, about how brave he thinks Dean is, and begging God to let him go in his place was a great bit of characterisation. All these feelings in his head yet he's never able to say it out loud...sad but very John Winchester. Beautiful.
Reviewer: bulletbabe (Signed) · Date: 10/01/08 01:58 PM · On: Chapter 1: Not Before Everything
I have NO idea why I haven't reviewed this yet so I intend to rectify that now - especially as there is a much anticipated sequel on its way. I loved this story the very first time I read it...I was completely captivated by your style and have only just realised this was you'r first multi chapter and first fan-fic which makes it all the more impressive. This first chapter was the perfect 'next episode' to the end of season one and left me desperate to find out where you were going with this - and lucky for me, the complete story was there to read. Hoping to be able to read the whole thing again over the next few days but this time give you the reviews you deserve for all the pleasure this story has brought me.
Author's Response: Oh, bulletbabe, that is so incredibly above and beyond nice! Thank you! Yep, this was the first fic I ever wrote and the first non-school related paper I'd wrote since high school...it was a major accomplishment just to finish it. In the past, I have started original fiction romance/mysteries that never got past the first few pages before I gave up...so I felt good about seeing this through to the end. Looking back on this now, I see SO, SO many mistakes, but it continues to thrill me to see it get some love. Thank you again, I really, really do appreciate it a lot. Hugs, Nicole
Reviewer: garvaldmains (Signed) · Date: 24/11/07 03:37 AM · On: Epilogue
this was amazing - so clever and despite having seen season 2 and seeing where th story line did go i think your way of thinking would have been just as valid, if not more so! Thank you Dix
Author's Response: Thank you! I couldn't kill John, despite the spoilers at the time, so this is the "nobody dies" version, lol. I'm glad you like it even though I probably could've edited out about half of the words used. I'm always thrilled to get new reviews on it. Thanks!
Reviewer: Vanessa (Signed) · Date: 25/09/07 05:53 PM · On: Chapter 1: Not Before Everything
Ahhhhh, you are a woman after my own heart. I adore, simply adore, Hurt!Dean stories!! Reading them as well as writing them. This was a wonderful story. Thank you so much for sharing.
Author's Response: Well, I can't seem to write anything but hurt!Dean stories...it's a compulsion, lol. Anyway, I always enjoy seeing a love for my first foray into the world of fan fiction. Thanks for making the time :)
Reviewer: Silvertayl (Signed) · Date: 14/09/07 05:16 PM · On: Epilogue
I have just finished reading your excelent story (loved it). I was wondering if you planned on a sequel, because I felt there were a few loose ends. Thankyou for an amazing read !!!
Author's Response: Hey, yeah. I'm working out the sequel now. After I finish my current WIP and get the sequel to this worked out, I'll start posting it. Glad you enjoyed it and thanks! Nicole
Reviewer: Singergirl (Signed) · Date: 05/07/07 01:43 PM · On: Epilogue
all i have to say is wow! i have been reading this story for the past week and everytime i go to read what comes next in the story i have to tear myself away from the computer! this was a great story, good balance of both Dean and Sam, i liked it alot! Are you going to do a sequel or answer why Dean is having the strange dreams about Jess? that was an interesting twist i didnt see coming at all......once again aweseom story, i really loved it
Author's Response: Why thanks! I'm absolutely tickled to get a review on this one. And, yes, I plan on writing a sequel as soon as I finish my current story. I think I'm more than half-way done with it, so hopefully by the end of summer I can get started on the sequel.
Reviewer: ghostwriter (Signed) · Date: 22/06/07 11:48 PM · On: Epilogue
WOW! WHAT A GREAT STORY---
WHAT TALENT.
Author's Response: Okay, seriously blushing now and speechless. I'm glad you liked it...that was my first and, therefore, is still special to me even though I cringe when I read parts of it, lol. Thank you, that was very sweet. Nicole
Reviewer: Ace33 (Signed) · Date: 16/06/07 03:01 PM · On: Chapter 3: Because It's Dean
Such emotional chapters! Geez, I'm tearing up here! Good job! ~Kayla
Author's Response: Hey, Kayla! I'm glad you found it, too:). Well, personally, I feel that the first four chapters of this one are a little rough, so I hope you stick it out. This was my first story, so I was learning as each chapter went up. Hope you enjoy the rest and thanks for leaving me some feedback. Nicole
Reviewer: Ace33 (Signed) · Date: 16/06/07 02:51 PM · On: Chapter 1: Not Before Everything
I can't believe I haven't seen this before! I'm glad I did...this is a great opening chapter! I loved it! ~Kayla
Reviewer: kwater (Signed) · Date: 30/04/07 09:02 PM · On: Chapter 1: Not Before Everything
Nice start I look forward to reading the rest - thanks K
Author's Response: Ooo, goody, a new review. I thought this one had died a slow death, lol. Well, personally, I think it gets better as it goes along. I think you can see my growth especially toward the end. I admit I had a lot to learn when I first started it. I hope you enjoy the whole sordid affair and thanks for reviewing! Nicole
Reviewer: lilballerette10 (Signed) · Date: 25/02/07 01:49 AM · On: Epilogue
hmmm...maybe you should do a story about the whole DEan dreaming of Jessica...this could turn into a series:D I know I'd sure lovee to read it:D hahhaa
Author's Response: Hey, I don't know if you'll come back and see this, but after I finish "An Act of Deliberation," I plan to address the Jessica situation in a sequel. I don't know about a whole series, but I do plan on writing more in the WUC universe with Dean and Sam's new connection, etc. I'm glad you enjoyed this...someone once called it a plot-less fluff piece, but I call it a learning experience and gratuitous Dean/Sam angsting - and hey, what's so wrong with that, lol.
Thanks, Nicole
Reviewer: lilballerette10 (Signed) · Date: 25/02/07 01:48 AM · On: Epilogue
wow....awesome storyyyy....truely awesome...it was a joy to read:D
Author's Response: Whoa! I totally missed this one somehow, I'm so sorry. I'm gonna go ahead and respond on the next one.
Reviewer: lam (Signed) · Date: 24/02/07 10:18 PM · On: Epilogue
Oh, you naughty thing! Are you sure that Kripke isn't helping you too? This seems a bit of a cliffy - what about the dream? What does Jessica want? Is there more coming? Thank you for the heads up to go back and re-read chaps 9 and 10. Am I correct in seeing a link between Dean's "emerald" eyes and the Wizard of Oz references? This was really a fabulous story. Great characterizations, dialogue and plot. I've very much enjoyed the ride - Thanks!
Author's Response: Actually, I did promise all the good folks at ff.net that I would do a sequel about half way through this one...promised to go back and clear up the Jessica thing. I figured this one was long enough by the time I got to chapter 11 or so and a sequel would have to pick up where I left off on the ghost-girl thing. I kinda promised to start the sequel after I finish An Act of Deliberation which I hope to keep at or under 10 chapters. Thank you for reviewing each step of the way...I have enjoyed reading your thoughts very much. Feedback keeps the muse alive, lol, so I'm thrilled to have had the pleasure of getting your reviews :)
Reviewer: Bookworm (Signed) · Date: 24/02/07 07:54 PM · On: Epilogue
Nice job loved it.
Author's Response: Thanks, I hope the ending was all you expected it to be. This chapter was THE hardest to write, trying to end it, but make it satisfying...yet leaving the door open to a possible sequel.
Reviewer: sojourner84 (Signed) · Date: 24/02/07 12:43 PM · On: Chapter 22: Living With Purpose
Sam dreaming that Dean was gone...gah. But thank goodness it was a dream. And I enjoyed the end of this chapter. Jay going with their father, and John being his stubborn self. "It felt good to be together as a family, however fleeting it might be, and they cherished it while they could." *smile* Great work.
Author's Response: Again, thanks...you are such a nice person! A much more conscientious reviewer than I.
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