Reviewer: birdie (Signed) · Date: 10/04/11 02:41 PM · On: Chapter Seventeen
Well I'm glad it had a happy ending and that Dean and his daughter were reunited. I was a little unsure why the other angels didn't help Dean, or why Sam didn't for that matter but he managed non the less. Well done on finishing you story. Bird
Reviewer: birdie (Signed) · Date: 10/04/11 02:32 PM · On: Chapter Thirteen
Jennifer You don't think the memorial service is a bit premature? Why have they assumed she is dead? She has powers that would allow her to heal herself wouldn't she? Oh goodness, can she shapeshift now as well? What a vast range of powers she has/ Bird
Reviewer: birdie (Signed) · Date: 10/04/11 02:25 PM · On: Chapter Ten
Ah, so she did retain her 'witch' skills!She's not a nice girl at all! Can i just say that having chapter titles that tell me what is going to have happen in the chapter is a bit off putting. It spoils the tension of the plot. Bird
Reviewer: birdie (Signed) · Date: 10/04/11 02:20 PM · On: Chapter Nine
Jennifer. You sure don't stint on the action do you hunny? So was the girl who appeared and knifed the victim Amber or not? Surely they all saw her so would know whether it was Amber? Bird
Reviewer: birdie (Signed) · Date: 10/04/11 02:16 PM · On: Chapter Eight
Gosh, well that's dramatic! Nothing like that ever happened at my school dances, thank goodness. You still need to check your use of capital letters, Jennifer. You have capitals where you should use lower case. For example - "Some students gasped in Horror while others simply stared." In this case, horror should not be capitalised. Bird
Reviewer: birdie (Signed) · Date: 10/04/11 02:10 PM · On: Chapter Seven
Hi again, Jennifer. Well that's a relief! So tell me, in exorcising Amber has she now become an innocent character? So was it the deamon who was after Dean or actually Amber? I think you said she was also a witch? I that a benign guise? I'm a bit confused! Bird
Reviewer: birdie (Signed) · Date: 10/04/11 02:02 PM · On: Chapter Six
Jennifer. Can I ask about the angels in your story? You mention Amber being surprised that Elliot was strong enough to restrain her - are your angels not the powerful warriors of God of the series? I'm thinking about Castiel beating Dean in the series, he wasn't weak there. The other thing I'm a bit confused about is seeing how strongly Dean does not want to leave his family in danger, why does he not just use the colt and kill her? Bird
Reviewer: birdie (Signed) · Date: 10/04/11 01:48 PM · On: Chapter Five
Hey Jennifer. Gosh there's a lot of characters suddenly appearing - I'm loosing track of who is who! Bird
Reviewer: birdie (Signed) · Date: 10/04/11 01:42 PM · On: Chapter Four
Hey Jennifer. Wow she's a vindictive woman isn't she? I'm a bit surprised that Dean hadn't put two and two together, knowing that she's a deamon, and been ready for her. Maybe he's got sloppy now he's a family man. Bird
Reviewer: birdie (Signed) · Date: 10/04/11 01:32 PM · On: Chapter Two
Hi Jennifer. Well done for finishing the story, I'm gonna try and read all the chapters now as they're fairly short. I think you have a different view of teenage Dean than I do, hun. I can't see him making fun of other kids because he knows what it's like to be made fun of but that's just my opinion. i've noticed you have a habit of capitalising the final word (see 2nd to last sentence for example) of each sentence. Is there any reason for that? It's not a grammatical rule I am familiar with. Bird
Reviewer: moira4eku (Signed) · Date: 10/08/10 05:46 PM · On: Chapter Six
Very interesting...didn't realize that Dean is an angel? Is Amber a demon or a witch? If she is a witch then she is human but evil. She seems kinda stupid here if she actually believed Dean would just go off with her all lovey dovey. I'm really glad that Dean's friends and family were there to help set the trap, so hopefully they can set things to rights. Looking forward to reading the next chapter.
Hmmmm....not sure who Tree is, but I'm not her or him. Sorry.
Author's Response: Sorry about getting you confused with someone else. Yes, in this series Dean becomes an Angel and thanks to Elliot and Cas he learns to use his powers wisely. Amber is both actually, Witch and Half-demon. So she's going to be a bit of a challenge in destroying. Also, theres more of a background to this series, theres more stories to the series than just this one and you can read them if you want to find out how Dean became an Angel. I've got profiles of the characters on my supernatural site that you can view by visiting my Supernatural website.
Reviewer: moira4eku (Signed) · Date: 03/08/10 08:39 PM · On: Chapter Five
I'm hoping between the whole family they will be able to get Dean out of this mess with Amber. Hopefully, Dean won't leave (I wouldn't put it past him if he gives it too much thought). Perhaps with all their powers combined, they will be able to protect Dean and themselves! Dean wouldn't be able to handle it if anything happened to his loved ones. Looking forward to the next chapter.
Author's Response: Dean's family will somehow get him out of the mess. And Amber will be taken down, I just won't reveal as to how, (that's a secret hehe). On my email thing it says you are Tree am I right? Hi Tree and thanks for your reviews and keep them up, I like reading them!
Reviewer: moira4eku (Signed) · Date: 03/08/10 01:00 PM · On: Chapter Four
Gulp, I hope Dean will be able to tell his family why he is leaving them so perhaps they can figure out a way to get Dean out of this mess. Doesn't Amber realize that you can't blackmail someone's feelings for you? Wonder what will happen next?
Reviewer: moira4eku (Signed) · Date: 03/08/10 12:56 PM · On: Chapter Three
Uh oh, wonder what kind of nasty things are going to happen with Dean and his family! I guess they will have to do something about amber eventually, she needs to be taken down!
Reviewer: moira4eku (Signed) · Date: 03/08/10 12:54 PM · On: Chapter Two
Well, so Amber is a demon now? Not good for Dean. I just don't see Dean behaving that way in High School, though. Just don't picture him being a bully. He may have thought those things about fat girls but I don't think he would have taunted them. I wonder what she has planned for Dean and his family? Looking forward to finding out.
Author's Response: Thanks for your reviews on each chapter and for typing in different reviews for them. I'm glad the fic has sparked an interest in fic readers. It's a bit tough trying to finish a series on my own, but I'm managing to do it! :) As for Dean, we never know what all went on during his past in High School. He could have been one of those jocks in school, always getting the prettiest girl, running in with the popular crowd, etc and some things might have went on about him that we never knew about so that's kind of how I came up with this story. Wanted dig into Dean's past a bit and bring back someone from his past.As for your other questions: you have to wait and see what happens to Dean and Amber :) Keep the reviews coming and they are greatly appreciated! ladyinwhite
Reviewer: moira4eku (Signed) · Date: 03/08/10 12:48 PM · On: Chapter One
Hmmmm....very interesting.I'm not that familiar with your OC's and verse. I wonder what the girl wants with Dean? Does Dean have a problem with his memory? Looking forward to reading more.
Reviewer: birdie (Signed) · Date: 17/07/10 05:06 AM · On: Chapter One
Hi Hun. I was cruising looking for a read and stumbled across your chapter. It's an interesting premise...a wronged ex-friend/lover returning to give Dean grief and I'll be interested to see where you take it. A couple of things. You use the word 'embalized' in paragraph three. Do you perhaps mean embellished? I couldn't find a word embalized in the dictionary. Also Down near the end of the chapter you have Dean making a sandwich at mid-day. The doorbell then rings as he's eating and you have him startled as it can't be Sam as he's coming at 6pm. It sorta makes it sound like you have jumped to nearly 6pm. Hope you don't mind me mentioning. Bird
Author's Response: Hi there Birdie, Thanks for your review. And thanks for pointing out nicely about several corrections that need to be done. I guess I do mean Embellished when I typed that. Also I can fix the minor changes about Dean eating the sandwich. I can put that it can't be Sam since it wasn't time for him to be there yet. Then that will make it sound like it's more mid day. I'm glad you find the story interesting. I'm having to write this series on my own now since my co-writer bailed out on me due to a misunderstanding. Keep reviewing every chapter and let me know how you like the chapters. Ladyinwhite
Author's Response: I've fixed the corrections. I put embellished instead of the other word. and in the other paragraph I had put that It wasn't time for Sam to come yet. It would be hours before Sam would come. So that way, it would sound more like midday, plus I had put down after that it was only 2:00. That way it shouldn't confuse others.
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