Stupendous! Oh my hell, I loved it!! There are so many wonderful nuggets of gold! This is going straight to my favorites!
'In silence, Dean could still see the shift in the vampire's eyes when it realized it was't gonna live forever. Moron.' Inserting Dean's disparaging humor was a perfect touch.
'He felt kind of sorry for her. She was too young to die...twice.' Again, we're given a view of Dean. Even when he's being sympathetic, he still has that quirky way of thinking.
Very descriptive writing, unique techniques to let us see the amount of time, the number of attempts and the endless failures in trying to overcome the horrors he's seen and lived:
'...but he sucked that fear right out of her mouth and 'made' himself be gentle, just to see if he still can be. He can.'
'Dean could still hear her scream even after four beers, three shots of whiskey, something greenish looking and two burgers. With fries.'
'Trying to drown that feeling in the fourth bottle of beer...yeah...it had no effect.'
'But even the sweet taste of her couldn't help him get the taste of death out of his mouth.'
Very impressive! I understood the lost, loneliness that both Dean and the woman both experienced; their yearning to belong and feel alive even for a short time, their need to have a small measure of control in their wild, uncertain lives. This was another excellent example of people trying to forget the sadness of their lives.
'Silence. Sleepy brown eyes burning his. Searching... searching... searching... finding: "Okay, okay...give me a minute." ' Beautiful! Sam knows his brother better than anyone and loves him unconditionally.
'He laughed out loud. Maybe he is insane. Maybe he's not. Maybe he's just human. Or maybe... maybe he's not even that anymore.' Eloquently phrased to put us in Dean's head and experience his doubt. You left us wondering about Dean just as he wonders about himself?
Author's Response: hey babe!
:O :O *beams* whoah, that is some review.... *smishes you tight* thank you so much for taking the time and writing your thoughts down on this one! thank you! means THE WORLD to me! thank you for pointing out the parts that you liked!
ahaha yup, Dean and his humor! gotta love that! LOL
ummm I always LOVE to experiment with styles of writing... it keeps me not getting bored and it keeps the readers guessing and on their feet... so I chose this style, which I just think it fits so well, because you can wrap everything in just a few sentences... and if I would go way to descriptive the text would lose its intensity! you know!? so thank you for liking this!
and OMG I even wrote a small romance part *kill me now* LOL :) but it had to be done, coz Dean does have sex as a mean to forget and forgive! so.... *sigh*
yeah, I think that even though with everything that happened with Sam and Dean in S5, they are still brothers and Sam still knows Dean... and idk what would have to happen to them, for them not to know each other so well anymore!
mhm, *nods* I couldn't finish this story with a happy ending, so I made it like Dean is still questioning about himself, about what he is, what he needs to do... and I wanted the readers to go into that state of mind with Dean too.... because things are complicated... there are no flowers and rainbows here... just the darkness of someone's soul!
I hurt for those two boys! :'(
thank you so much!
*hugs you tight*
S.
