Reviewer: mizpah (Signed) · Date: 18/02/10 04:26 PM · On: Chapter 7
I'm wondering how Kripke and Co are going to treat God - frankly I'm a little worried, as every angel we've met apart from Cas have turned out to be dicks, in Dean's words. And I completely agree after watching the latest episode. Dicks. So it wasn't really a dream - Cas had been there. It was good that they talked, and that Cas offered the amulet back. I'm hoping that Dean does get it back for real - it was such a hard wrench for him giving that up. But I loved the line you used about Dean having his brother back. Jules
Author's Response: Hi Jules - Thanks for sticking with this through to the end and for all the reviews! I had a bit of a mare with this one in the middle, that'll teach me to start posting before I've really worked out where the story is going. I too am a bit worried about where Kripke and co will go with God especially as they've said God will make an appearance this season - I really don't want a Deus ex Machina or full on religious type experience (can't see them doing the latter from what they've said but you never know). And I want Dean to get all his accessories back but especially the amulet... but for this story it felt right for him to let Cas keep it a while longer. xx Anne-Marie
Reviewer: mizpah (Signed) · Date: 18/02/10 04:21 PM · On: Chapter 6
Lotsa action everywhere. Good on the sheriff for taking the plunge and believing Dean's wild story - and willingly going along to help with the crazy-sounding plan. And I loved Dean's extra help of young Marta hiding under the table. Loved even more the mental picture of an injured, in pain, and hospital-gown-clad Sam determinedly going up against a malevolent spirit armed with nothing more than a bowl and his Winchester stubbornness. And of course, Cas had perfect timing as always, arriving just in time to catch Sam before he could fall, putting him back to bed after vanquishing the spirit, taking care of the nurse then popping back to catch Dean and whisk him to the hospital. Could imagine the looks on Marta and the sheriff's faces when the brave, strong, unconscious fake FBI agent vanished into thin air, cradled in the arms of a mysterious stranger - LOL. Jules
Author's Response: Our Sammy - nothing if not brave!
Reviewer: mizpah (Signed) · Date: 18/02/10 03:56 PM · On: Chapter 5
That line about sand getting everywhere is very ominous......methinks Sam's going to be in a spot of trouble soon - and he's in no shape to handle it. Great that he remembered his spirit journey with Tamanend. And Dean's called in the troops - well, he called Bobby and Bobby called Cas. Help's on its way. I have a feeling they're going to need it. Wonder what 'call me Eric' is going to make out of Dean's strange tale, and if he's going to help the hunter or call the men in white suits.... Jules
Reviewer: mizpah (Signed) · Date: 18/02/10 03:50 PM · On: Chapter 4
The beach description when Sam woke into the vision was really well done - could quite clearly see the imagery you were painting. The massacre was tragic - but at least it explains why there are multiple spirits in the wind. Hopefully Sam will remember next time he wakes up, and tell Dean what Tamanend revealed to him about the parfleche full of scalps - obviously what is tying the settlers' spirits to the town. And it was great that Sam could see, even though he was in pain and drugged to the eyeballs, how Dean was beating himself up over the fact that he got hurt and almost killed. At least he got to tell Dean before he fell asleep again - hopefully big brother will take some of that to heart for a change. Jules
Reviewer: saltnburnem (Signed) · Date: 17/02/10 10:50 PM · On: Chapter 3
Whew! A little wind whumpage! I hope Sammy pulls through ok. You've left them both in precarious positions in this chappy!!!
Author's Response: Thanks - what is a SPN story without a bit of jeopardy?
Reviewer: vonnie836 (Signed) · Date: 17/02/10 06:04 PM · On: Chapter 7
You brought this to a very nice end. I have to say, I like your take on Cas a lot. Hugs, Vonnie
Author's Response: So glad you enjoyed it, thanks for taking the time to review. Nice to know the pacing was good, I wasn't sure about this one at all, thought I might have been too verbose and rambling!
Reviewer: vonnie836 (Signed) · Date: 17/02/10 06:00 PM · On: Chapter 6
Yeah, awesome battle on both fronts and I'm glad Bobby sent Cas just in time. Great chapter again. Hugs, Vonnie
Reviewer: vonnie836 (Signed) · Date: 17/02/10 05:48 PM · On: Chapter 5
Wow, this is really looking bad for Dean. I love this, it is so exciting. Hugs, Vonnie
Reviewer: vonnie836 (Signed) · Date: 17/02/10 05:31 PM · On: Chapter 4
Very interesting chapter. I'm such a sucker for background stories, especially if they are going back into history. Loved this a lot. And Dean is okay and on Sam's side when he wakes up. Hugs, Vonnie
Reviewer: vonnie836 (Signed) · Date: 16/02/10 10:11 PM · On: Chapter 3
Wow, another great chapter. I felt bad for Dean having to wait all this time and then having to leave Sam's side, just to get hurt himself. This is one angry entity, whatever it is. Hugs, Vonnie
Author's Response: Thanks for the reviews and the hugs Vonnie - and the comments about Sam's skewering. Look forward to hearing what you think of the rest of the story...
Reviewer: vonnie836 (Signed) · Date: 16/02/10 09:49 PM · On: Chapter 2
Having seen the original, I have to say that was just as believable. There are many cases out there with much bigger holes, who survive. Yeah, bigger ones have a higher death rate, but it really depends on where it hits and upon the first aid and emergency care. Great job nonetheless, awesome and tense writing. Hugs, Vonnie
Reviewer: vonnie836 (Signed) · Date: 16/02/10 09:37 PM · On: Chapter 1
Definitely a great start. I can't wait to see who the baddie is going to be, or should I say what? Hugs, Vonnie
Reviewer: saltnburnem (Signed) · Date: 15/02/10 11:01 PM · On: Chapter 2
Oh noes! Sammy's been skewered. That can't be good. I hope you put him, broad shoulders and all, back together! I enjoyed the MBV3D specific scene references. ('cuz you know we all saw it..... and probably a few times at that!)
Author's Response: I imagine that long body will stand Sam in good stead when it comes to surviving being kebabed...his organs have more room to spread out than short bodied folks like me!
Reviewer: saltnburnem (Signed) · Date: 14/02/10 10:39 PM · On: Chapter 1
Love the brotherly banter in this chapter. The MBV 3Dreference is a great launching point for a hunt!
Author's Response: I couldn't resist - it was all sparked by my desire to get in the joke about Dean saying Tom Hanniger looks like him!
Reviewer: mizpah (Signed) · Date: 14/02/10 09:18 PM · On: Chapter 3
Love the fact that Dean's conscience has Sam's voice - LOL. Could fully understand Dean's reluctance to leave the hospital right then - saving people or no saving people. He'd just waited six long hours to see if his brother would make it. Hope it wasn't too far from the hospital to the picture theatre to get the Impala. And the mystery of the town deepens. The sandstorm and voices sounds like there's more than one spirit - and they seem to have banded together. This is going to get messy. Oh, wait - it already is.....*slaps self upside the head*....poor Teddy's fallen victim to the spirit wind and Dean's now out for the count. Love the mental image of the sheriff pulling up just in time to see Dean go down like a falling tree. What on earth have the boys stumbled onto this time? Jules
Author's Response: Dean's conscience just has to have Sam's voice doesn't it? Um. As the cinema is imaginary I can place it near the real Beebe Medical Centre in the map of my mind (that was one item of logistics I hadn't thought about actually, can you tell?!)
Reviewer: mizpah (Signed) · Date: 14/02/10 09:05 PM · On: Chapter 2
Ooh, it got Sam good. I remember flinching back in my seat during that scene myself. I almost put out a hand to touch the end of the branch, it looked so real through the 3D glasses. Sam - and Dean - found out the hard way that this time the branch really was poking right out of the screen. It doesn't look too good for our favourite psychic, does it? He's already gone into shock - they're going to have to cut him out of there, methinks. What is doing this? Hope Dean doesn't go back to the theatre on his own to find out... *starts chewing nails worriedly*...oh, Sammy..... Jules
Reviewer: AnnaLucy21 (Signed) · Date: 13/02/10 06:20 AM · On: Chapter 1
I'm really enjoying this so far, will definitely keep reading, good work! :)
Author's Response: Thanks AnnaLucy, hope I can keep up the standard!
Reviewer: mizpah (Signed) · Date: 09/02/10 08:53 PM · On: Chapter 1
Interesting start, especially with good old Buzz flying around the picture theatre. Something tells me though, that I might not ever watch MBV in 3D again.... I like the sheriff - he seems a good bloke. I could really feel his relief when the boys turned up, even though he's still convinced that they're with the FBI. The motel room seems a fright - sort of like that retro disco one from Provenance in season 1. Not good that Dean's gone back to hitting the bottle quite hard - wonder how that's going to affect his ability to hunt. Just one little thing, Anne-Marie .....and I hope you don't mind my mentioning this in a review - but I just thought the phrase "bloody great pickaxe" is a very Brit/Aussie term, rather than somthing that Dean would say. Looking forward to where you're going to take us with this one. And long chapters are good - gives a decent read, especially during a lunch break - lol. Jules
Author's Response: Cheers Jules and yes I know, you caught me on the bloody great - I knew it was wrong when I wrote it but hells teeth....sometimes that's the way I roll....!
Reviewer: Roguehunter (Signed) · Date: 09/02/10 09:05 AM · On: Chapter 2
I found this to be an interesting conceot for a story, and think you did a great job keeping the boys in character. My only problem with the story so far is that I'm pretty darn sure you've just killed Sam in chapter two. A 3 to 4 inch in diameter hole in his stomach is massive. His spine would be more than likely shattered, not to mention his kidneys and liver destroyed along with his stomach. The injuries he would sustain from the force and impact such as this where the limb went through the chair as well as his body, are not ones he would ever recover from. I think it might be more believable if the limb were a lot smaller like maybe 1 to 2 inches in diameter which is still a good sized limb. Rogue.
Author's Response: Mmm thanks for that - the research I did really didn't give me too much of a clue as to what size hole a body could 'accommodate' - but I had read a news story a few years ago about a person surviving an impalement with a fencing post that came through their car windscreen off the back of a lorry (which I imagined would be about the size I was describing). It would depend on the angle of entry and it missing organs like the pancreas (which if perforated at all can kill you within an hour or so) and obviously lungs, heart, and the major part of the liver - something the size I describe could conceivably (just about) miss all of those...and yes I can't have it going through his spine either - so maybe I'll change it as you suggest!
Reviewer: Star (Signed) · Date: 08/02/10 04:49 PM · On: Chapter 2
Crap! An impaled Sam, distraught Dean! I guess this means Dean is handling this hunt on his own. Updat soon please!
Author's Response: Thanks Star, working as fast as I can!
Reviewer: Dame_Alyssa (Signed) · Date: 06/02/10 11:33 AM · On: Chapter 1
Very nice Anne-Marie :DI look forward to reading the rest
also - banner of awesomeness! Sweet :)
Author's Response: Thanks Kym!
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