Reviewer: saltnburnem (Signed) · Date: 27/02/10 12:13 AM · On: Chapter 13

Loved it!  You built up the mystery both in present time, and in the past.  I also "love me some hurt!Dean" and you served it up beautifully.  It was also nice to have Bobby and Ellen and Jo involved.  And protective little brother Sam had to step up to the plate and take over when Dean got sick. It's like a family coming together during a time of crisis.  And everyone helped out.  Nice job!!


Author's Response: Thank you so much for your wonderful review. I definitely wanted it to be a bit of a family piece so I'm very glad to hear that it came off as such. The poor boys could use some family support every now and then. And of course, there can never be too much hurt!Dean to help bring out that support. Thanks for reading and reviewing!  

Reviewer: birdie (Signed) · Date: 17/02/10 08:12 AM · On: Chapter 13

Hey RFT

Read the whole thing on a reference from a friend. Nice story, the plot was measured in its emergence and the build up of tension matched that pace. I liked Ellen's inclusion, a much underutilised character there and you voiced her well.

The flashbacks were well done too, not too cheesy as some people's sometimes can be.

Thanks for sharing.

Bird (DeansBabyBird from FF.Net)

Author's Response:

Hey Bird,

Thanks so much for giving it a read and for your wonderful feedback.

Ellen is definitely a beautifully strong character that has so much to give to the boys and should get to have more appearances in stories.

I do always worry about the cheese factor of flashbacks, especially of the young boys but I'm glad they came off well. 

Thanks!

Reviewer: Primrose (Signed) · Date: 16/02/10 11:21 PM · On: Chapter 13

Fabulous story!  This wrapped up in a very satisfying way.  You had it all!  You had great wee!chester moments, a very cool bad guy, some memorable moments describing the epidemic and the chaos at the hospital, and of course sick Dean!  Thank you for a great story!

Author's Response: Thank you so much for the wonderful compliments and for reading!

Reviewer: Primrose (Signed) · Date: 12/02/10 11:05 PM · On: Chapter 11

Eep!  I don't like the sound of THAT!  Ellen's got to WHAT?!?  Good chapter!

Author's Response: Ellen's sentiments exactly! At least she's smart enough not to listen to Dean - for which he should certainly thank her later.

Reviewer: Primrose (Signed) · Date: 11/02/10 12:00 AM · On: Chapter 9

I'm very intrigued about what really might be going on- who the lady was in the sanitarium, what is going on with the epidemic, all of it.  You've built your clues very carefully, and I can't wait to have all the pieces!

  I love Ellen.  I'm glad that she and Jo are coming to the rescue! The conversation with her was great!

Author's Response: The pieces are going to start coming together and the boys could definitely use some rescuing - Ellen is just the woman for the job and Sam could use some backup. I'm so glad that the conversation with her came off well. I just adore her and she and Jo are just too cute together. 

Reviewer: penmin (Signed) · Date: 10/02/10 10:15 AM · On: Chapter 5

I can see Dean is on a downward spiral, just hope he lets Sam in on whats going on soon.

Good chapter again,

Jacq

Author's Response: Thank you - Dean's definitely not doing too good, but Sam's going to get his chance to step in and make things right.

Reviewer: Primrose (Signed) · Date: 09/02/10 11:12 PM · On: Chapter 6

I never thought that Dean didn't actually remember what happened!  I hope John is okay! 

Author's Response:

I originally outlined the story three ways one with Dean knowing everything from the get go, one with him knowing nothing and then the in between where he knew bits and pieces.

I wrote a lot of it out with him knowing everything but it got funky from the perspective of his motivation for being there so I went with him knowing just enough to walk into trouble without really knowing what it was. He's so darn good at that anyway.

And don't worry about poor John. I really like his character and enjoy him far too much to do anything permanently bad to him.

Reviewer: Primrose (Signed) · Date: 09/02/10 02:15 PM · On: Chapter 4

I really like little Sam thinking the salt is hot.  Very cute.  I DON'T like Dean leaving Sam!  Scary!  Grownup Dean needs to stop hiding things.  Good chapter!

Reviewer: Primrose (Signed) · Date: 09/02/10 12:02 AM · On: Chapter 2

Hmm.  Dean's up to something, and I'm willing to bet it has to do with what happened when they were kids.  

Are you from Oregon?  I grew up in various towns all over Oregon, and I had to smile because Jordan Valley sounds SO Eastern Oregon!  There's NOTHING there but these tiny little towns...awesome!

Author's Response: I'm so glad you're enjoying the story! And I am indeed a Pacific Northwest native - western Washington state, but my family used to take vacations to the middle of nowhere eastern Oregon. Quite a place.

Reviewer: zz1989 (Signed) · Date: 08/02/10 10:57 AM · On: Chapter 1

This story is very well written.  I like both stories - the one in the present and the flashback to when they were boys.  I like how the two are tried together.  I am looking forward to reading the rest of the story.

Author's Response: Thank you very much for your feedback! I'm very glad to hear that both of the tied in stories work. 

Reviewer: penmin (Signed) · Date: 05/02/10 06:02 AM · On: Chapter 3

I can picture every scene of this, and now Dean has ditched Sam to do his own thing, doesnt bode well! Another good chapter.

Jacq

Reviewer: penmin (Signed) · Date: 05/02/10 05:43 AM · On: Chapter 1

Good first chapter, on to the next.  You seem to have got right their characters. And the flash back is interesting and where will it lead?

Jacq