Reviewer: mizpah (Signed) · Date: 20/12/09 04:35 AM · On: Chapter 13
Ah, so that's what happened to the photos. Could understand Sam's confusion - he was completely out of it when Dean carried him from that place. So good to have Sam healing and the boys reconnecting again. They really are stronger as a team. Hope Bobby got away.....LOL
Jules
Author's Response: Yes Bobby was mirrored useless with only one hand so he had to have some fun. I hope Bobby got away too. ~Thanx Charity
Reviewer: mizpah (Signed) · Date: 20/12/09 04:30 AM · On: Chapter 12
Bobby's certainly fast - either that or Dean was just concentrating so hard on Sam that he became unaware of the time passing by. Thankfully Sam's injuries are being attended to, and his fever is dying down - that's a good sign. And he knows he's safe now. Hmm, wonder what Bobby's going to do with all those photos he's taking. Jules
Author's Response: Bobby one tough son of a gun and I'm sure if his boys were in trouble he could deatch himself from any knife. Ah yes the photos bobby has plans we'll just have to see. ~Thanx Charity
Reviewer: mizpah (Signed) · Date: 20/12/09 04:27 AM · On: Chapter 11
Thank heavens they finally got to Sam, although I was cringing when Bobby pulled his hand free - ouch, that had to hurt. Can understand Dean's one and only focus being on Sam and ignoring his own injuries to get to his brother. Touching moment when he carried Sam upstairs. Let's hope that all three wounded hunters get the help they need, and fast. Jules
Author's Response: Yes I was cringing a bit too myself and I wrote it. Thanx for reading and reviewing. ~Thanx Charity
Reviewer: ReccaF (Signed) · Date: 16/11/09 12:33 PM · On: Chapter 13
This was great!!!! I never would have suspected that Gordon would turn the gun on himself-OUTSTYANDING writing!!!!!! You kept true to all the characters and that made the story even more enjoyable. Bobby showing Dean that picture of him holding Sammy-priceless...hooray for the chick flick minutes!!!AWESOME!!!!! you are an excellent writer, and i look forward to reading many more of your stories. BRAVO!!!!!!
Author's Response: Thank you. I'm glad you liked it since it was my first story. I also want to thank you for reading and reviewing.~Thanx Charity
Reviewer: mizpah (Signed) · Date: 09/11/09 02:57 AM · On: Chapter 10
I did notice the banner - very nice. And it draws the eye to the story. Even better. Well - didn't see that coming. Even with the peace and silence at the end of the last chapter - I was expecting Sam to have at the very least a graze on his poor abused head from a very near miss. I certainly didn't have any idea that Gordon would turn the gun on himself, the crazy loon. Oh, gosh, Sam's in such a bad way - even though he roused himself long enough to smile and joke, reality and the pain of his wounds has come crashing down on him. I hope Bobby can get himself free soon - Sam needs medical attention and fast. And I completely agree with that thought of Dean's - that a gunshot to his baby brother's head would also be one through his own heart. We've seen how Dean is without Sam....as well as seeing Sam without Dean. They are two halves of a whole, and should never be separated. Jules
Author's Response: Some people automaticaly got it some didn't, some questioned. I like to let people ponder. I thought I add the hint but some people still took it the wrong way which is why I added it as a double meaning. I know I'm really psychological when I break down a character. Thanx for reviewing. ~Thanx Charity
Reviewer: mizpah (Signed) · Date: 09/11/09 02:49 AM · On: Chapter 9
*gasp*.....*thump*... That was me hitting the floor - no mean feat since the office chair has arms..... OH.....MY......GOSH....!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! Oh, flip, I hope Gordon's as poor a shot as he is a judge of character. Come on, Bobby - Dean can't get free - DO SOMETHING!!!!!! Jules
Author's Response: I'm sorry I let you fall out of your chair. That was the reaction of alot of readers. Yes my evil cliff hangers can be quite evil at times. Thanx for reading and reviewing. ~Thanx Charity
Reviewer: mizpah (Signed) · Date: 09/11/09 02:45 AM · On: Chapter 8
There will always be a hard core legion of dedicated lurkers, hun. They're shy things, but intensely loyal - once they like you, they'll stick with you for every story that you write. I know it doesn't really help that they don't review, but don't forget them - they're just as important as the reviewers. And you may never know how much you might have helped some of them get through the day just by reading your stories. So keep writing - and don't worry. Once people get used to you and know that you aren't going to abandon a story half-finished, they'll start to review. Some people won't read WIP's (Works In Progress), so you might find you'll get more reviews once the story's finished. Hang in there, hun. Now, for the chapter - well, Gordon's definitely a few sandwiches short of a picnic - and now Dean's seen for himself just how utterly barmy the man is. However he also recognises the danger a completely pycho Gordon represents - he could shoot the lot of them and not even bat an eyelid. Especially Sammy. And oh, how cruel telling Sam - the one who always prayed, who was so desperate to believe that a higher power was watching over him - that God can't love him. I hope that there can be some intervention before Gordon completes the pull on that trigger.... Oh - and don't worry if I disappear for a while and then pop back. I tend to do a lot of hibernating in my little cave, trying to write - but the damned muse has taken off across the Nullabor Plain AGAIN and left me in the lurch, so I'm back reading for a while until she decides to come back. This time I'm going to put a leash on her....
Jules
Author's Response: I know but I tend to muse on things a awful lot and let things go to my head. I often or should I say all the time let people's opinion matter more so then they should. The read count is going up but I just don't think that's enough. Thanx for being a supporter ~Thanx Charity
Reviewer: crashing_nightingales (Signed) · Date: 09/11/09 01:15 AM · On: Chapter 10
Excellent story so far! After a very hectic week, I discovered your amazing story which totally had me hooked. Gordon is such a psychopath, and it's very intensely interesting to have him back again. Poor Sammy is practically hanging by an iron-link thread here. That last evil-cliffe really has me by a thread if it helps. XD At this point, I really hope that Dean finds a way to get Sammy back to a hospital. For my own sanity sake, as well as Dean's. Dean's odds are really stacked against him, which is perfect for this type of story.
Author's Response: Thank you yes the banner has been drawing people's attention in thanks to impalamedean1 so thank her. Yes I rarely do evil cliff hangers but when I do I tend to go over board *evil grin* ~Thanx Charity
Reviewer: rbliss1969 (Signed) · Date: 04/11/09 08:25 PM · On: Chapter 9
Chariity, evil cliffy.............shame on you. Gordon is nuts. Poor Dean, helpless to save Sam. good chapters. Renee
Author's Response: Yes I'm very evil when I want to be yet I can be so kind when I want to be. Split personality I say. Thank you for your review and mores in store. Thanx ~charity
Reviewer: ReccaF (Signed) · Date: 04/11/09 03:47 PM · On: Chapter 9
OK....dont' do this...cliffes'..shots fired...damm Gordon ...AWESOME writing!!!!!! YOU are killing me with Gordon- I hate him so much , I could rip him apart with my bare hands-OUTSTANDING storytelling !!!! you have woven a masterful web of suspense, action , angst, "big brother" honor, and visual verbage that constitutes an EXCELLENT tale. Having Gordon hearing voices -priceless. He's always been a coward , and this just exemplifies it more so. MORE PLEASE!!!!!! BRAVO!!!!
Author's Response: wow! thank you for your review. Would you believe this is my first story? I'm slowly coming up with more so don't worry and yes I'm evil but I don't think there will be any more cliff's...maybe~thanx charity
Reviewer: mizpah (Signed) · Date: 24/10/09 09:26 PM · On: Chapter 7
Yep, they're royally screwed all right. Gordon's got to go - as messily as possible. Maybe like in Tango & Cash - Dean could shove a hand grenade down his jeans and shove him down the basement steps like the b**tard did to Sammy. And now Bobby's not only chained but pinned to the wall with a knife! It's all up to Dean now. Hopefully he can keep pushing Gordon's buttons until he breaks, but not to the point where all Dean gets is a knife in the gut like his brother. Come on, Dean! Jules
Author's Response: Yes I do use a bunch of humor in my stories no matter how serious the plot you'll also find alot of irony too. I tend to feel comfortable with humor that is why I wrote a humor fic thanx ~charity
Reviewer: mizpah (Signed) · Date: 24/10/09 09:21 PM · On: Chapter 6
Gordon is completely out of his gourd - now he's quoting the Bible?? Dean's in deep shite now. Gordon's probably going to find the most obscure quotes just to make Dean lose, so he can keep inflicting punishment on Sam. Good for Bobby trying to keep Dean's temper and guilt under control. But, oh, Sammy - being thrown down the stairs was the last thing he needed. Dean's going to kill Gordon by inches when he gets hold of him. Jules
Author's Response: Gordon is going to try but as we all know has gordon ever won a fight? Theres much more to come thanx for reviewing~ charity
Reviewer: mizpah (Signed) · Date: 24/10/09 09:12 PM · On: Chapter 5
So it was a trap. And now both Dean and Bobby are down, Sam's helpless, and Gordon holds all the cards....for the moment. Bobby's instinct was right - there was something off about the situation. But I have a feeling that even if they'd tried to get Sam out first before attending to his wounds, they wouldn't have made it far. Gordon obviously has a plan somewhere in that screwed-to-hell brain of his. I hope they can dig their way out before he inflicts the same sort of pain on Dean and Bobby that he did on poor Sammy. Just watch your tenses and perspectives a little bit, hun - it switched to first person present for a paragraph then went back to normal.
Jules
Author's Response: If you notice in my stories I never stick to one point of view I can switch really fast, I tend to confuse people easily by doing that but that's what happens when you get taught poor grammer in middle school thanx though ~charity
Reviewer: mizpah (Signed) · Date: 24/10/09 09:04 PM · On: Chapter 4
Gordon's certainly next in line for that wraparound white jacket, isn't he? And that's a twist - now he's ringing Dean to beg him to take Sam back? Or is it a trap? Perhaps Gordon will regret it when he gets out of the basement and away from the voices. Poor Sammy's in a bad way - blood loss, fever, and who knows what else. Bobby's got his work cut out for him this time, keeping 'his' eldest boy in one piece while trying desperately to find the youngest. Jules
Author's Response: Yes gordon has hit the straightjacket status but indeed more to come thanx~ chairty
Reviewer: mizpah (Signed) · Date: 24/10/09 08:57 PM · On: Chapter 3
Sam's in deep trouble - and the worst of it is, it isn't really trouble of his making. Gordon's lost his mind, hearing voices taunting him and taking the punishment out on Sam in the physical. Not good - not good at all. Dean and Bobby really need to hurry before Gordon kills Sam, or he dies from the blood loss. Just a quick little note, hun, and I hope you don't mind my commenting - but it would probably be easier to discern the thoughts if you put them in italics, so readers can clearly see the switch back and forth between the voice in Gordon's head and Sam's real speech. It would go something like this: "Whoa, let's talk about this," Sam pleaded as he tried to tug his body away from Gordon's impeding frame. Gordon saw it...the fear, the desperation in his victim's eyes......etc..... "Gordon, even as you look at me and dream of all the torture you want to inflict, you see no worth." "What?" Gordon dropped the knife as he stumbled back, eyes wide open in surprise...... Anyway, just a thought for next time. Jules
Author's Response: I don't mind I take constructive crticism all the time, I'm not that good of a writer and I alway enjoy the help so thank you for the comment and i'll try to encorporate that into later chapters thanx~charity
Reviewer: mizpah (Signed) · Date: 24/10/09 08:44 PM · On: Chapter 2
Sounds as if Gordon's completely lost the plot, talking to things that aren't there. And if he thinks that he's going to find meaning in killing Sam, he's got a very short span of satisfaction coming up, because Dean will end him quickly and messily when he finds him. Thank heavens Bobby called and is on his way. I love Bobby - he's been a true father and mentor to the boys. Hopefully between the two of them, they can figure out where Gordon's taken Sam. Oh, and those smacks to the head certainly aren't going to do Sammy any good - but I have a feeling that will be the least of his worries very shortly.... Jules
Author's Response: I'm sorry I didn't get to you sooner computer problems. I love how your reviewing all my chapters it's really a confidence booster thanx~charity
Reviewer: mizpah (Signed) · Date: 24/10/09 08:39 PM · On: Chapter 1
It's never a good thing when the boys separate, is it? So, Gordon's back, and of course he's not playing nice. Poor Dean is going to slowly go out of his mind worrying about what the psycho is doing to Sammy. Hope Dean gets a lead on their whereabouts soon. Jules
Author's Response: Thanx for the review and I'm glad you joined the bandwagon and actually reviwed thanx~charity
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