Reviewer: jennie81 (Signed) · Date: 29/07/10 09:55 PM · On: Chapter 9
good story clap clap
Reviewer: zz1989 (Signed) · Date: 20/03/10 06:21 PM · On: Chapter 9
I see now by the angels sent him back in time to learn about the dangers of revenge. I have enjoyed all your stories in this series. I hope you'll post another one soon.
Reviewer: lillelouis (Signed) · Date: 05/01/10 09:06 AM · On: Chapter 9
Oh goodness!! Just went back to re-read the first few lines of Tempus and noticed something horrifying! I hope I'm not right in my assumtions, but alass, only time will tell....! The horror!!!!! *mimics "The Scream" soundlessly* Moving on.....
Author's Response: Yeah, its all there, if you look, isn't it?
Reviewer: lillelouis (Signed) · Date: 05/01/10 08:59 AM · On: Chapter 9
So I figured out after reading Tempus Fugit that the lesson Ben needed to learn had something to do with an obsession. Had an inkling it might be something with revenge. Also (this is gonna sound conceeded) thought I saw some emotional similarities between John and Ben in Tempus. Some of this was probably written black on... err... red in the story and I've just forgotten that I read it, but it stuck for some reason or other :) So Ben's plans are to avenge his mother's death, huh? Seems logical... And the girl he was dating just so he'd have an excuse was actually Heather. Shame. I like Heather. I think she's like him in some way - like Katie too :P But you probably created her that way? Wonderful reader-manipulation there, hun :P Such magnificant writing! So beautifully executed. The emotions are all there, pungent and alive. Wonderful. I think it's oddly satisfying to see Ben from Dean's point of view - the one thing I can't copy or study from you. Trying, but haven't been successfull yet, in creating that overview of how Dean feels about his son and about Sam and his son, without letting it take over the pages. If you know what I'm on about? It's subtle, what you do. Just enough and just the right amounts. Very skillful. Thinking of more to write.... Probably could fill a dictionary, but I'll spare you. Thank you so much for these stories and for thinking of them. I was also wondering about something more personal? If I may ask a favour of you? If yes, mail me and I'll get into it. If not (be it life in the way or other obligations) then thank you again for creating these pieces of art to study and learn from. They help :)
Author's Response: The long review. These always make me smile. You nailed Tempus on the head. There is such an underlying theme about obsession in the show that I couldn't help not making it a theme in my story. A lot of people thought that I didn't like or that I was saying bad things about John in Tempus but I have profound respect for him. The point, though, was to teach Ben a lesson. If Ben is obsessive then who better to possibly knock him out of that obsession than the master of obsession himself. John, in Tempus, never really identified with Ben as truly Dean's son - meaning a son in the same way that Dean and Sam are his beloved sons. And also, he believed that since Ben had come from the future, it meant he was safe in the present so it didn't matter what John did. So John's needs overrode Ben's safety - something that an obsessive mind would say to themselves to justify their actions. I like Heather too and I believe Ben does. He is using her but he's having to have a real relationship with her in order to use her. Unfortunately it takes a lot more maturity than Ben's got at this stage in his life to learn how to love someone more than himself. So his needs/wants/obsessions prevail. She's good girl, Katie too but Ben's still a teenage boy - angelic or not. The key to my writing Ben from anyone's point of view is that Ben is an extension of my own son. Any action Ben gives (other than magical ones, my son hasn't sprouted wings yet) is something that my son has done at some point in his life. Dean and Sam's reactions are reactions that me or my husband have had when my son does those things. The only thing that I can't write with any skill is my son's humor, he's scary he's so funny. So, writing advice, write what's real. Whether its observations of how people interact with each other or how you interact with people, that's the key to writing something that feels subtle and real. I hope the answer you got in my email satisfied your curiousity. I'll happily give you any more information that you want or answer any questions. Thanks for for your reviews and particularly this one. Kim
Reviewer: lillelouis (Signed) · Date: 05/01/10 08:34 AM · On: Chapter 8
There was a moment where the whole scene stood out with complete clarity. I could actually SEE Ben stomping upstairs followed by Titus (love the name, by the way). Then I lost it. But it was very, very nice while it lasted :D Lovely story and immensely glad you've chosen to share it with us.
Author's Response: I did a quick scan on the chapter and can I say that I wanted you to be jolted at the end of that scene without sounding conceited? I wanted the reader to be wondering what Ben's up to and to feel as disjointed about the whole thing as Dean and Sam do. As for Titus. Kirsty, my beta suggested it. He's named after a fantastic, heroic character from the HBO show "Rome." Titus is such a large, powerful name in my mind - as is the character in the show and the dog in my story. I hope to one day own one of those dogs. They are bred to defend livestock from lions in South Africa. Huge and loyal. And there is nothing, nothing, nothing better in the world than a boy and his dog. Thanks for reading! And the reviews. Kim
Reviewer: lillelouis (Signed) · Date: 05/01/10 08:09 AM · On: Chapter 7
Ooooh no.... Wasn't Enoch said to exist both in heaven and hell? Some disputing over whether he was an angel or a devil? He gives me the heebiejeebies. I didn't comment on the other chapters, but really nice fact-gathering! Either your brain is HUGE or you've had a very exiting life :P
Author's Response: Enoch is an intriguing character to me. Many will tell you about his greatness, the possibility that's he's the only human to ever have been turned into an angel by God, that its possible that he's Metatron but he really has a strange vibe for me. Plus using him enabled me not to step on too many toes when playing with religion. Now, given what I emailed to you...would you consider Enoch to be another Supernatural Guide in Sam's life? I like the character but the heebiejeebies are supposed to be there - I often like my darker characters. As for my life, think I need to look over the chapters in question. I've lived in a lot of places and I'm open to a lot of things, exciting? Yeah, I've had a little fun over the years. I also have a very vivid imagination which helps a lot. Thank you. Kim
Reviewer: lillelouis (Signed) · Date: 05/01/10 06:23 AM · On: Chapter 4
“You guys suck! On three, on three.” Undeniably best moment right there!
Author's Response: I loved it in "Lethal Weapon," loved it "Supernatural" and the situation enabled me to steal from greatness. How many of us have had that conversation..."do you mean on 3 or after 3?" I know I have. Its classic. And Ben's a smart boy that knows his father and uncle well, he'd know that they'd manage that deception without even having to speak to each other. Thank you. Kim
Reviewer: lillelouis (Signed) · Date: 05/01/10 06:11 AM · On: Chapter 3
Aww... :) I love you for thinking of this story line.
Author's Response: This story was a long time coming. I've been working slowly toward getting Ben old enough and skilled enough that he'd get some time on his own. Also, thank my daugher, she wanted a Big Foot story. Thank you, Kim
Reviewer: penmin (Signed) · Date: 21/09/09 01:00 PM · On: Chapter 9
So much in this chapter, Ben's inheritance, and he's been given more freedom. So he's following John's path finally, and this story is now linking nicely with the previous story. Nice one Jacq
Author's Response: He's on his path, what choices will he make? Thank you for reading and reviewing. Kim
Reviewer: penmin (Signed) · Date: 21/09/09 11:24 AM · On: Chapter 8
If Ben is like Dean then I guess the girls would like him. But he is having a tough time...poor kid! I think I can guess what Ben may be up to now. Good chapter, onto the next. Jacq
Author's Response: Ben is like Dean but he also has a little something extra. The angel thing means that people are attracted to him, they can't help themselves. Ben isn't aware of this. He's also attractive to animals and supernatural things...its just in the nature of what he is. But, all of that is beside the point because he's also a teenage boy trying to get through the teenage years so he has it a little tough. Thanks for reading...where you right on what he was up to? Kim
Reviewer: rbliss1969 (Signed) · Date: 19/09/09 11:10 PM · On: Chapter 9
Another great story; i am always sadden when you finish one. i hope another one will be up soon. Renee
Author's Response: I'm sorry I made you sad. It will be a while before the next is up, I'm in the middle of another project. Thank you for always reading and reviewing. Kim
Reviewer: Midge (Signed) · Date: 19/09/09 02:30 PM · On: Chapter 9
Uh-oh, I can hardly believe Ben has been so very deceitful for so long. It saddens me. This chapter has left me semi speechless though some of that could be a result of wine after a busy day of work. Looking forward to the next update.
Author's Response: He hasn't really been deceiptful, just mindful of what he wants. He wants revenge. Up until now, he hasn't been able to seek it on his own. He needed to learn. He now thinks he's ready to get what he wants. I hope the wine was good. I haven't had wine in ages. I love a good wine and it does heighten one's reactions to things. The next update won't be for a while. I have some stuff that I have to finish and a timeline to finish it in. Thanks so much for reading and reviewing all my chapters. Kim
Reviewer: Shannondoah (Signed) · Date: 19/09/09 12:02 PM · On: Chapter 9
Yahoo! I'm the first to read the new chapter! Yay! Wonderful chapter! Still worried about Ben's involvement with Enoch. The Enoch in the Bible was trustworthy but the Winchesters don't usually have such good luck. Something, sometime is going to backfire. Maybe I'm just worried becuase he's sneaking around behind his father's back. And I'm not so keen on him using Heather to get space from his dad. Ihope he does care for her.
Author's Response: The beginnings of Ben's story is taken from The Lost Book of Enoch, not anything appearing in the Bible. Since I took Ben's story from there, it felt appropriate to bring Enoch into the story. Now, as with our beloved show, I reserve the right to poetic license. I'm not following scripture so Enoch may or may not be the same as you believe him to be. Ben's sneaking around is never a good thing. He should, by this point, understand the dangers but as is the case with most teenagers, I think he thinks he's invincible - add angelic power and look out. As for Heather, time will tell. He's not so keen on using her either but he is a boy that wants to accomplish his goals. Kim
Reviewer: penmin (Signed) · Date: 19/09/09 07:44 AM · On: Chapter 7
So things are progressing, very interesting. Does explain a few things. But I wouldn't entirely trust Enoch just yet. Jacq
Author's Response: Enoch is such a interesting mythology. He's very unique in religious mythology and since Ben is unique it made sense to me that he'd be interested in Ben. We'll see where he goes from here. Thanks for the reivew. Kim
Reviewer: penmin (Signed) · Date: 19/09/09 07:22 AM · On: Chapter 6
So..Sam and the Vet! I'm jeaolous lol. Puppies do so love to chase anything birdlike, thats funny. I'm three chapters behind, catching up. Nice soothing, fun chapter. Jacq
Author's Response: Sam and the vet. I hope you like her, she'll be back. The wing that is all my Beta's fault. I can't even remember what she said now but it got me to thinking about what would happen if Ben couldn't make the wings disappear. It all instigated a lot more thought than I thought I was going to have to do since explinations were required. But I loved it once I got to writing. Thanks for reading and writing. I hope you continue to enjoy the rest of the story. Kim
Reviewer: Shannondoah (Signed) · Date: 18/09/09 05:50 PM · On: Chapter 8
I'd love to see the 1957 'Vette once Dean's finished with it. I'll bet it'll be beautiful! Ben's moodiness is baffling. I mean I get normal teen-ager drama but Ben doesn't fit into that category. Thanks for updating regularly! Each chapter makes me more happy and more curious.
Author's Response: But he is. Even if he has angelic power and a purpose, he's still just a kid growing up. The angels warned Dean about that...I'm not sure which story, probably "Choices" and Dean said he could handle it. I just about gave away something major with the next chapter, glad I checked before I posted. The 57 'Vette is one of my alltime favorite cars. I live in Southern California and classic cars are everywhere here. I saw one at the beach over Labor Day, it was gorgeous and in beautiful shape. Thanks for reading and reviewing. Ask me about the car next chapter and I might have a photo for you, if you're interested. Kim
Reviewer: Midge (Signed) · Date: 18/09/09 03:29 PM · On: Chapter 8
Hmm. Whilst last nights chapter felt monumental this one feels transitional - a means to get somewhere else in the story. That said I loved the picture you painted of Dean in the shop covered in grease - I could enjoy more of that pretty please. Ben really is having a tough time fitting in at school . Dean's comments earlier about Ben forgetting his humanity certainly have validity based on this chapter. And just what is Ben so intently hunting for in John's journal? Have forgotten enough of your previous story that this is prequel to that I am already planning a reread. Have a great weekend and glad you enjoyed the new ep - bodes well for me in the new year.
Author's Response: Give in to the darkside, my apprentice, download...you won't regret it. The new season is awesome so far. Transitions are always huge in my stories since they feel incomplete and artificial if I don't do them service. I also had to introduce their lives in Souix Falls and we had to meet Heather. Dean in a shop is heaven to me, I love a man under a car and grease on him. Yeah. Freud would have a hayday with that since my fav memories of my childhood are handing my dad tools. I never worked on the cars, he refused to teach me (not sexist, he resented his dad making him learn) so he refused to teach me. The things we do to our kids. Anyway, too much information. Hope you like the next, it is the last before you go on (back) to Tempus Fugit. Thanks for reading and reviewing. Kim
Reviewer: Shannondoah (Signed) · Date: 17/09/09 05:37 PM · On: Chapter 7
Wow it's like pie for dinner--- a new chapter and a new episode all in the same day! Woot! Woot! The non-verbal communication between Sam and Dean was great! They've done that on the show so many times. I like that you keep the characters true to canon yet still explore new situations. Is Enoch/Metatron another Ruby? Is he trying to get Ben to do something that later will turn out to be harmful to him or Dean? Wait, don't tell me. I think he is!
Author's Response: Yesterday was a great day and I loved the new episode (5x02). I love the non-verbal communication but its freaking hard to write. I try to get it in there when I can but like I said, hard to write non-talking, talking. All I can say about Ben and Enoch is not to forget that the purpose behind this story is to write a Hero's Journey from the perspective of a Guide and Ben is Sam's guide. We'll see where that leads these two in the end. And Enoch would be a "supternatural guide" also. For all that Campbell's Hero's Journey is sexist and annoying, its damn fun to write based on a Hero's Journey. Kim
Reviewer: Midge (Signed) · Date: 17/09/09 12:51 PM · On: Chapter 7
Wow, that feels like a monumentally important chapter. But I have to say I don't like Enoch. He reminds me way too much of Ruby in the way he's offering to help Ben become all he can be. It's no wonder Dean is protective when Ben and Sam (in the past) can get into so much trouble just by being alone.
Author's Response: I'm glad it felt important, it was meant to. Me? Write paralells to the show? I'd never do something so obvious. Okay, I totally would. Sadly they've gotten ahead of me in my writing so now its going to look like i'm copying what they're doing. Oh well, just going to have to go with it. Thanks for the review! Kim
Reviewer: impalamedean1 (Signed) · Date: 17/09/09 11:09 AM · On: Chapter 7
oohh!!! that was good! update soon please!! jess
Author's Response: Thank you so much. It will be up as soon as I finish replying to reviews, so very shortly. Kim
Reviewer: Shannondoah (Signed) · Date: 16/09/09 04:57 PM · On: Chapter 6
Yay! Another chapter already? I'm in heaven!! I imagine the wings would be quite an impressive sight! You've done a wonderful job describing their glory and dimension. Bravo! So Ben is an adrenaline junkie? I hadn't thought of that being the reason he loved hunting so much. It makes sense. Who wouldn't love the excitement of a hunt and having all your senses keenly scanning for a sign of prey?
Author's Response: In my imagination the wings are amazing. Never knew I had a thing for wings until I watch Constatine and I loved the look of Gabriel in it. I even loved that he/she was so intense and scary. So, as I see Ben I see these vast amazing wings but facts are legistically, he could navagate around a human world very well with those things on his back. So, I stick to what I know and what I want to believe and then do the best I can to describe it. Always, the first thing I do, if the wings are going to manifest is figure out how tall Ben is at that time and keep the proportions of the wings the same as what's been described before...wing joint about two feet above Ben's head, that tells me how wide the things will actually extend when he stretches them out. As for Ben, I think there are several issues that are going on in him and Dean's grabbing hold of explanations so that he can do whatever it takes to get Ben through these difficult years coming up. Can you imagine a teenager with unlimited power? Not something I'd want to deal with. Sam and Dean are brave, brave men. But I'm with you, if I had the ability, I would find the whole process thrilling in the extreme. Thanks for reading and reviewing. Kim
Reviewer: Midge (Signed) · Date: 16/09/09 01:50 PM · On: Chapter 6
I'm sorry we missed the angel's visit and their banter and I'm glad Ben has healed and that Sam and Angela are getting along. But I have to admit I'm still waiting for the supernatural trouble to begin. That said, I love the very rapid updates and to be sure this is, in my humble opinion, the best story posting on the site at the moment.
Author's Response: This is a convoluted story that is setting up things to come. You probably won't feel a lot of resolution with this particular story but another will follow that will hopefully tie up a lot of strings. Look forward to another update tomorrow. WOW, thank you so much that's very high praise and it made me all aglow all day. Thank you! Kim
Reviewer: Midge (Signed) · Date: 16/09/09 12:38 PM · On: Chapter 5
Finally the angels have arrived - about time too if I may say so. I wonder what Dr Welsh will make of yet more angels always presuming she is allowed to meet them, and I wonder what she'll do if bad company makes an appearance 'seeking' for Ben's power as seems likely.
Author's Response: Yeah, freaking angels...never there when you need 'em. They do seem to hold back until the last possible moment, don't they? Thanks for reading and reviewing. Kim
Reviewer: Shannondoah (Signed) · Date: 16/09/09 06:53 AM · On: Chapter 5
Another excellent chapter! I like the technical explanations. they describe just enough (and answer questions I've had about the wings) without becoming tediously scientific. Finally, the angels show up! Still, we're a long way from finding out what Ben was doing in that house late at night (physical therapy on his wing? But why in secret?) And I'm certain the road is about to get even more bumpy for the Winchesters. Very exciting! I can't wait for more!! Thank you for posting so quickly!
Author's Response: The wing thing was difficult since obviously the human body is just too dense for flight. I liked Ben's answer in the end though -- he's an angel living on Earth, maybe the laws of physics don't apply. Our intrepid trio of angels that interfer but never show up when they're needed...I often imagine they're sitting around a TV set in heaven watching the Days of the Winchester's Lives and deciding when its best to get involved and when its best to make their missing brother deal with the mess his brother and son are making on his own. I can hear the laughter. There are several twists and turns in this particular story, hope you're still intrigued when its done. Kim
Reviewer: penmin (Signed) · Date: 16/09/09 06:14 AM · On: Chapter 5
I like how you have tried to explain how Ben's wings may work, one does wonder...and I was getting annoyed with Sam assuming that the Vet would be a man! I could imagine she would be shocked. Glad Bobby has a new puppy, never heard of that breed though. Sounds like a mastiff type. Good chapter again Jacq
Author's Response: I did the most insane research on human wings in order to write that chapter. Google the topic someday, you'll be amazed at what people have done, what they theorize about and how irate they get over the topic. But, some of the specifics came from that. It was fun to write. As for Sam, of course he had to assume the Vet was a male otherwise the reveal of the female wouldn't work, I abuse Sammy so. Boerboels are a South Africa mastiff bred to protect the domestic animals from lion, tigers and bears...oh my. Kidding, lions and hyenas. I discover them while watching The Dog Whisperer. They are freaking huge and absolutely beautiful and they look like they're smiling when their mouths are open. That dog will soon outweigh Ben for a really long time. And, all in all, there is nothing like a dog and his boy. Thanks for reading and reviewing. Kim
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