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Reviewer: birdie (Signed) · Date: 16/11/09 11:18 AM · On: Chapter 1

I love your cocky but almost playful Azazel, very true to cannon and the other voices...distinct and well written. Nice one.
bev xx

Reviewer: Pandora Jazz (Signed) · Date: 24/07/09 12:18 AM · On: Chapter 1

Excellent story. Congratulations on your win.
Your description of Azazel was so creepy and yet so perfect. Of course a demon would take pleasure in causing pain to a human.
I liked the neighbors description of the Winchester family. How Mary was so nice and believed in angels and how little Dean could melt hearts even at the age of four.
It was a surprise to read an entry from Mary after she had already died, but love how you had her keeping Sam company after he had died. She knew that Dean was off making a deal to save Sam, just like her deal years ago to save John. Just one big circle. Loved her story and her apology to Sam and Dean.
Enjoyed reading your story. Thanks for sharing it with us.

Author's Response:
Thank you ^_^
Mary's POV seemed so obvious to me but it's taken a few people by surprise. I guess that says more about me lol! I had to have her in there and I needed her to have some sort of closure with Sam, even though he won't remember it.
I'm glad you enjoyed it.

Reviewer: RoweenaC (Signed) · Date: 23/07/09 04:31 PM · On: Chapter 1

Wow. Awesome ficlet! I can see why Tree chose this one! Here are a few thoughts about it...
Azazel was VERY well done. I could just hear his ironic, sarcastic voice through your words. Loved it. Very close to the way they portrayed him on the show. And the words you picked for him were from all seasons, which I especially loved because it brought up some very awesome episodes in my mind! And of course I am gonna watch 'em now, lol...

he’d throw himself at me with wide open arms. “Mr Barnes,” he’d say, “you’re not old enough to be my elder.” the cheekiest grin ever. Melted my heart every time. (and mine! Dean still has a cheeky grin as a grown-up and I just melt everytime he shows it, love a cheeky man or snarky, LOL) One night was all it took. I never saw another smile from that boy. the little boy always so full of life? Not a sound, not a movement, nothing. These lines broke my heart. You had me in tears here... so sad. The neighbor described Dean so sweet, in a heart-wrenchingly accurate way. This is exactly how I picture mini-Dean. And this wonderful boy still lives on in the man he is with all those terrible scars and happy memories of his mother and the way his family used to be. It just makes it hard to watch the show or read fanfiction sometimes. To know that there is so much pain inside that man, it crushes me on some days. Still, I can't wait for the premiere... bring on September 10. I will find a way to watch it!
I thought Hell had come on earth. Jeez, little did he know how true he was there! I think even those people outside of the hunter community “know” there are things out there that would kill them with a simple snap of the fingers... (that's a very German expression. Don't know if that works in English. Forgive me!)
Giving up your life for someone you love. It’s what this family is all about. This about sums up the whole problems with this family. And it is what Dean finally understood in No Rest For The Wicked last year, why he said that they were "not gonna do the same mistakes all over again". Sam still has to learn that. Hunting demons, killing Lilith or even Lucifer next season, it isn't worth dying over. Family comes first, no matter what.
Anyway, Jenny. Great story and well-worth of a feature and the win! Congrats again and I am happy to see that you followed my advice to come and join snville and enter a challenge! Paid off, didn't it? I just love this community!
Hope you enjoyed MBV by the way! Awesome movie... mmmmmh. Insane Jensen... Yummy.
Hugs ya, Ilka

Author's Response:
Wow - helluva review there! It's almost as long as my fic lol! I'm just so taken aback by the response I've had to this. I'm dead chuffed people are able to 'hear' the voices as clearly as I had them in my head. And if I've sent you back to watch a couple of episodes - my job here is done ^_^
I also owe you a big thanks for encouraging me to enter this and ease me into the way of UnGen - it's been a great experience so far!
(Oh, and MBV? - me, a glass of wine, a good film and Jensen. The perfect evening.)

Reviewer: Rae666 (Signed) · Date: 23/07/09 01:06 PM · On: Chapter 1

Congrats again! Man, that was awesome.
I loved the way you wrote Azazel, like he was playing some kind of game and only he knew the rules, so twisted and evil, but so perfect.
"Always had a smile on her face and sunshine in her eyes" Such a gorgeous description ^_^ Mr Barnes view totally broke my heart, especially with the description at the end.
And Man, Mary's view? I love how you did that! Such an amazing job. Seriously, awesome work!!

Author's Response: Thank you Rae. I really tried hard with this one and it paid off!

Reviewer: darkhunter (Signed) · Date: 22/07/09 04:05 PM · On: Chapter 1

This is a beautifuly written story, a well deserved win, well done,i loved it.

Author's Response: Thank you. I'm so pleased you enjoyed it.

Reviewer: Swellison (Signed) · Date: 21/07/09 10:41 PM · On: Chapter 1

Very nice. Your narrative captures the distinct voice of each viewpoint character - and it was cool seeing Mary's viewpoint from a 'looking back' perspective, instead of the traditional 'real-time' scene.
Congratulations!
Sue

Author's Response: Thank you Sue. I had to take a break of a day or two between writing for each character just to be sure I'd got the previous one well and truly out of my head :) And I wanted Mary in there and it seemed like she'd be there for Sam at Cold Oak. It was too good to pass up.

Reviewer: bjxmas (Signed) · Date: 21/07/09 04:20 PM · On: Chapter 1

Wonderful story, warm and tender, heartbreaking and so real I can see that night through their eyes. You perfectly captured all their voices. Very deserving of the win and I'd never guess you were new to writing. Excellent job! Congrats! - B.J.

Author's Response: Thank you. This is the first challenge I entered so to win it was fantastic! I'm so glad it worked on each level.

Reviewer: penmin (Signed) · Date: 21/07/09 03:27 PM · On: Chapter 1

This is wonderful. I love the YED, his character, the neighbour was so nice and ordinary, real, and Mary in Cold Oak. yes that works, she would be there with them. Well done.
Jacq x

Author's Response: Thank you Jacq. I tried to get three POVs that were as different as possible and this is what I came up with.

Reviewer: Midge (Signed) · Date: 21/07/09 03:27 PM · On: Chapter 1

Congratulations on writing a winning entry.
Mary's point of view took me by surprise based as it was when Sam was dead, in comparison to Azazels and the neighbours which were 24 years earlier. (I admit I can't now remember the parameters of the challenge apart from it revolved around fire.) But I think you thoroughly deserve the accolade of being a winner. Well done.

Author's Response: Thank you. I've often wondered what happened to Sam when he died and this is just one idea. I'm glad it worked.

Reviewer: Primrose (Signed) · Date: 21/07/09 02:29 PM · On: Chapter 1

Hooray! Congratulations on your win! GREAT story. Of course, I loved the neighbor- since all of mine were about neighbors too. But I especially loved the idea that Mary was there for Sam after he died in Cold Oak. You had a great voice for each point of view as well- Azazel's snarkiness, Mary's quiet peace- each one came through clear and unique. Good job!

Author's Response: Thank you so much :) I'm glad the different voices came through in the writing, sometimes it's hard to put across what's in your head.

Reviewer: Green_Eyed (Signed) · Date: 21/07/09 02:26 PM · On: Chapter 1

Excellent story! Best of all I liked Mary POV. So much pain, so much distress, so much love and so little words! Thank you very much. It's great, really.

Author's Response: Thank you. I was absolutely determined to get her in there somewhere. There were a lot of things left unsaid and undone when she died. This was my attempt to put some of it right.

Reviewer: crashing_nightingales (Signed) · Date: 21/07/09 11:11 AM · On: Chapter 1

This story is such a beautiful look at the events of the season premiere. You managed to capture everyone's emotions so perfectly. It's especially intriguing how you started out with the voice of Azazel the YED. Your words perfectly captured his cold, arrogant tone, and the dark sense of humor that he has when it comes to doing evil.

Author's Response: Thank you - I had him running round my head for several days prior to writing this. It was an interesting few days LOL!

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