Reviewer: darkhunter (Signed) · Date: 26/07/09 12:45 PM · On: Ring of Fire
This was a beautifuly written story,well done.
Author's Response: Hi Lindsay, Thank you for the review, short and sweet - beautifully written, that's what a writer loves to hear. Thank you! Sue
Reviewer: bhoney (Signed) · Date: 22/07/09 09:40 PM · On: Ring of Fire
Great job on this, Sue. This detail really stood out to me, excellent touch: "feeling every slight imperfection in the painted sheetrock as she was steadily inched towards the ceiling". You did a great job grounding everything in physical sensation and detail. I also really liked John going back to their house once he'd talked to Missouri and heard Mary'd been there. I have often thought how sad it was that he missed his one chance to see her again. I'd planned to write something about that sometime. Now maybe I won't have to. ;) And it's so natural that Dean would think of that night as he watches his father's body burn. Nicely done all around!
Author's Response: Hi Beth, Thanks for the great review! I tried to have a "you are there" feeling to every scene, especially Mary's, since her involvement with the fire is the most complete. John lost a lot in Home by sticking to his principles. I think when he didn't answer Dean's frantic phone call, it put cracks in Dean's belief that his dad would always be there for him in a crunch-time situation. Plus, like you say, he would've seen Mary again. And I do like it when someone else writes my plot bunnies for me, so hope I've scratched that off your to write list. Glad you agree with me that Dean would be thinking about that other fire whle watching his dad's body burn. Figuring out a readable segue into that night was hard, until I remembered the after-images that I get from staring at something too long. Dean stares at the burning funeral pyre as long as he can, looks up to avoid it, and sees fire in the sky, fire on the ceiling... that worked for me, so that's how I wrote it. Sue
Reviewer: Rae666 (Signed) · Date: 22/07/09 04:16 PM · On: Ring of Fire
Great entry!! I totally loved how you had Mary's old hunter knowledge showing through, I never really thought about it before, but it would make so much sense! But poor Mary, having to witness that. And John fixing Jenny's new door, niice. ^_^ Makes you wonder what else he did while he was in Lawrence. But poor Dean not feeling strong enough. Bless him. Poor little kid, I can believe that of him. Great job.
Author's Response: Hi Rae, Thanks for the detailed review, glad you liked my entry. I thought the wedding photo on the wall looked too old-fashioned to be of John & Mary, so I decided it was Mary's parents, and that got me thinking about In the Beginning. I thought, I can use this! so I worked Mary's prior life into her scene; it felt right. I had to find some way of getting John back to the house, and since we know he's in Lawrence at the end of Home, that worked as a starting place. Besides, I wanted to try writing a little Missouri; she's a feisty lady and one of the few people who can order John around. I would really love to see a John and Bobby scene on air, maybe a flashback is at least a possibility? Dean's POV was the hardest, but I went back to what he told Lucas in Dead in the Water, "I *try* to be brave", as if he thought he hadn't been brave or brave enough during the fire, poor baby. Again, thanks for reviewing! Sue
Reviewer: Smudge93 (Signed) · Date: 21/07/09 08:16 AM · On: Ring of Fire
Hi Sue Loved it, especially the feelings at the end of each piece, John's in particular for missing seeing Mary at the house with the boys and then Dean's....what can I say, heartbreaking. Mary xx
Author's Response: Hi Mary, Thank you so much for the great review. I was going for something emo without being too girly, glad I succeeded. Sue
Reviewer: birdie (Signed) · Date: 21/07/09 07:51 AM · On: Ring of Fire
Sue. I liked its simplicity, the soft sadness, not florid or indulgent but elegantly understated. I got right to the last one before i cried too! bev xx
Author's Response: Hi Bev, "Elegantly understated' - I like that. Thanks for the review, and thanks for letting me know that I got to you, emotionally, as intended. Sue
Reviewer: Primrose (Signed) · Date: 20/07/09 11:11 PM · On: Ring of Fire
Of COURSE it was worth the wait! I loved your use of flames to separate points of view- VERY clever. I liked the idea that John helped repair Jenny's door. I also liked the time that each memory took place- at different points in the series. Good job!
Author's Response: Hi Primrose, Thank you for the kind review, and for noticing my themed scene breaks;-) I wanted to use unexpected scenes taken from later episodes to drag the point of view and the reader back to the fire, making the story truly circular. Sue
Reviewer: cowgirlfromhell (Signed) · Date: 20/07/09 10:54 PM · On: Ring of Fire
Wonderful, just wonderful. I'm having a tough time reading some of these and not crying. "Mom, I’m sorry I wasn’t brave enough back then. I let you down and I’m sorry. Dad, I’m sorry you’re gone because of me. Sammy needs the best protector around to watch out for him and keep him safe, and that’s you, Dad. You should be here, not me. I should’ve stayed dead…" This sent me over the edge. Well done.
Author's Response: Thanks, cowgirl. Dean was the hardest POV for me to write, so glad to know that it was effective. Sue
Reviewer: Shannondoah (Signed) · Date: 20/07/09 08:15 PM · On: Ring of Fire
Wow! Fabulous! Reminding us of the three big fires in the lives of the Winchesters was a unique idea. I really enjoyed it!
Author's Response: Hi Shannondoah, Thanks for the great review, glad you enjoyed my little fireside chat! Sue
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