Reviewer: Smudge93 (Signed) · Date: 23/07/09 05:44 PM · On: It
a ghastly barbecue - that made me shiver! This was great! Mary xx
Reviewer: Smudge93 (Signed) · Date: 23/07/09 05:42 PM · On: He
Wow, poor John! This was great, chilling with loads of emotion in it. Loved it, Mary x
Reviewer: Smudge93 (Signed) · Date: 23/07/09 05:41 PM · On: She
This was great, loved the format and loved this part - He looks up at her, his lips slightly parted ready to smile. Love and warmth float up but never reach her. His presence a reminder of a future lost by her past. Innocence brightens his face, filling her heart with longing. Soo sad, Mary xx
Reviewer: bhoney (Signed) · Date: 22/07/09 09:48 PM · On: It
I liked the formatting. My favorite was Mary's part, you had some great lines and descriptions in there. I especially liked the description of John as "tall, dark love." Very sweet and nicely said. Good job! And wonderful artwork!! Congrats on the win!
Author's Response: Hey hunny! Thanks for taking the time to read and review! Mary's part was the easiest to write. I guess I could relate to her most. The formatting was great fun and I love to play with it on times. Thanks for you compliments about the artworks. They were (as was writing this story) so much fun. I had a great time entering the challenge although I never dreamed of winning any of the categories. LOL. Life is funny. Cheers, Ilka
Reviewer: darkhunter (Signed) · Date: 22/07/09 04:25 PM · On: It
Wow, this is fantastic, i liked the layout of this story. So very sad when you think of all of the heartbreak thats still to come, well done i loved it.
Author's Response: Hey Lindsay! Thanks for reading and reviewing! I am glad that most people seem to like the formatting. I love to play with layouts and this time it just had to be done! I think the heartbreak started with Azazel killing Mary's parents and making the deal with her for John's life. But yeah, there is still so much to come for the Winchesters after this night. Poor guys but lucky us, don't you think? And I can't wait to see what next season holds in store for us. Bring on all the heartbreak, hurt, angst, guilt, action and some nudity (sorry, I am a sucker for bare-chested Winchesters...). Cheers, Ilka
Reviewer: NongPradu (Signed) · Date: 20/07/09 10:59 PM · On: It
That was just chilling. The whole thing -- chilling! Really great job!
Author's Response: Hi Mel! Chilling huh? Despite of all the fire and emotions... LOL. Well, I have to say I agree! Thanks for taking the time to read and review! Glad you liked it coz this whole challenge was great fun for me! Cheers, Ilka
Reviewer: Shannondoah (Signed) · Date: 20/07/09 08:46 PM · On: It
Once again, the placement is a statement of its own. "Little feet scurry down a staircase, carrying a precious weapon." Wow! Very potent! I never thought of Sam as a weapon before. It's perfect, yet strangely at odds with the tiny innocent baby in dean's arms. An ingenius stroke! Ending the last chapter with the title was brilliant!
Author's Response: Wow. First of all, thanks for reviewing each chapter! Awesome. The reason why I put Azazel in the middle was to point out how he intrudes on this family, how he rips them apart. How he stands between Mary and her future, John and his love, the boys and a chance for a normal life. I think that Azazel really thought of Sam as a weapon and a key. He needed Sam to get his father out andin doing so to kill Lilith. I always thought of Sam as Azazel's weapon ever since Azazel showed Sam he had fed him his blood. And I agree, there is something very wrong about an innocent baby being a weapon. I had the title first. Before I even decided on the POVs. And I guess the title just works best right after Azazel feels so accomplished. After all, these few minutes truly set things in motion, don't they? Cheers, Ilka
Reviewer: Swellison (Signed) · Date: 20/07/09 08:45 PM · On: It
Wow, Ilke, Stunning tour de force of blank verse, here. Gripping, vivid images and an all-encompasssing vocabulary. Wow. Sue
Author's Response: Hi Sue! Thanks for reviewing and sending me those nice stars along with it. I love me some poetry sometimes. Makes things rawer (or so I think) and more painful. Thanks for the compliment about the vocab. Hehe, I really feel awkward writing sometimes as I don't write in my first language. Hence this compliment is VERY much appreciated! Hugs, Ilka
Reviewer: Shannondoah (Signed) · Date: 20/07/09 08:41 PM · On: He
Nice visual, putting John's pov in a format opposite Mary's. Very effective technique! An unspoken way of demonstrating the unity of the husband and wife.
Author's Response: Hey again! I imagined the whole scenery like a dialogue, first one POV then the other picking up where Mary's left off. Glad you like that and glad it worked! Cheers, Ilka
Reviewer: Shannondoah (Signed) · Date: 20/07/09 08:37 PM · On: She
Amazing! I loved it! "a reminder of a future lost by her past" A wonderfully interesting turn of phrase! "A chocolate soda paradise." I had to smile when I read that. It was such a visual embodiment of the innocence of young love and the carefree days of youth.
Author's Response: Hey Shannon, thanks for the review, I am glad you liked it. I know some people just don't like blank verse or any poetry but I felt I had to write it like this. You picked my favourite lines by the way. I like em for different reasons: the first one for its sad message and the second because I just had to go back to that moment when young Mary and young John were in the diner, before everything went sideways and they still had a future unperturbed by demons. And the soda just came up. Sums up happiness and innocence, just like you said. Thanks again! Cheers, Ilka
Reviewer: Rae666 (Signed) · Date: 20/07/09 07:11 PM · On: It
Ooo, niice! Love it. He he. And I love how you did the formatting, not weird at all. The YED jammed into the centre, almost kind of seperating John and Mary. Great!!
Author's Response: Isn't it just great being a writer and getting to say/write nasty, mean and terrible things? And then it gets even better. You get reviews praising you for being a mean SOB! LOL. Life is funny. And YAY! You picked up on the YED stnding in between them! *yells vindictively* It worked! I thought about putting John in the middle first but felt it better if Azazel stepped between them, the intruder and destroyer... YAY again. Thanks for leaving 3 (!!) reviews. Very much appreciated! Hugs and congrats once more on winning and scoring a feature to boot! Ilka
Reviewer: cowgirlfromhell (Signed) · Date: 20/07/09 07:09 PM · On: She
As I’ve written before, my benchmark for what I consider great writing is when I say to myself “I wish I had written this” and I do, with all of my heart, but I don’t think I ever could. This is a fantastic piece of writing and I am simply blown away by your unending talent! Super job!
Author's Response: WOW. Thanks! YAY. Reviews are well worth the work we put into writing, aren't they? 'specially such kind words... I am not sure about the "unending talent" bit but thanks nonetheless! AWESOME! Cheers! Ilka
Reviewer: Rae666 (Signed) · Date: 20/07/09 07:07 PM · On: He
That was awesome! I love how it follows on from Mary's and the imagery is so perfect. Awesome job, And loving the format ;)
Author's Response: There you are again! YAY, one review for each chappie,THANKS! I tried to put some chronology into the chappies as the format and the style would maybe be hard to read. Thank god it worked for you. Loving the format as well, by the way. Ilka
Reviewer: Rae666 (Signed) · Date: 20/07/09 07:03 PM · On: She
Awww! So sad!! Poor Mary! Totally loved the style you wrote this in, it worked really nicely.
Author's Response: Rae Congrats again! Loved the story! Thanks for reading and reviewing mine! Oh and the stars, too! Mary was the easiest POV for me. I could relate to her very well. John was very difficult to do. I understand him but I could never write him as well as you did. He is as complex as his sons but then again so different... Anyways, glad you liked it! That's an honor! Hugs, Ilka
Reviewer: Jenn (Signed) · Date: 20/07/09 06:45 PM · On: It
Roweena, you are seriously creative and talented and I'm just never sure what to say about you and your writing to justify how amazing it really is. I'm a HUGE FAN of awesome formatting, and this is AWESOME FORMATTING. You chose three of the most obvious POVs, BUT! You chose to write them in a way that is incredibly unique. The writing is poetic and powerful and the imagery it produces is something to rave about. You know what happens here, you've seen it in the Pilot and in so many of the episodes. This part of the Supernatural story is rehashed over and over again, but this is like seeing it for the first time. And I just have to say, this was awesome: An unholy prayer carries over the howling flames.
Author's Response: Hey Jenn, wow, thx for the stars! And the review! Amazing? Heh. yeah well, I can't really believe it myself. I only started writing (in English) a year ago and banner'ing is pretty new to me as well. Guess it's the show that unearthed some creativity I never suspected I had. I chose the obvious POVs on purpose and I am glad my plan worked seeing as you said it felt like watching it for the first time. Guess that's due to the style and formatting (love me some different formatting, heh). The concept to this story was to do an equivalent to the 'previouslies' on TV but sorta like an inner monologue. A recap from 3 different POVs. Thx for reading and dropping me these wonderful lines, Ilka
Reviewer: Primrose (Signed) · Date: 20/07/09 06:38 PM · On: It
OOO, yes I did! What a difference knowing all the backstory revealed this last season makes! Mary remembering a warning made years before, Azazel thinking on the whole plan and why he was doing things in the first place. Lovely! I liked your format, and frankly, I wish my command of the English language was as good as yours. You put the words together beautifully.
Author's Response: Thanks Julie, for readingand your kind words. I just re-read it for the first time since May. And it surprises me a little. In good way. Heh.Can't believe I've done this...
I love to play with formatting. Trouble is, only UnGen supports my formats. But then again, who needs other sites when we have such a great community here? The backstory sorta sparked -pardon the pun - the whole thing. And I chose this style (a little bit like a poem) to celebrate the feature I won for 31 Seconds in Hell last year in June. Anyways. Thx again, catcha later! Ilka
Reviewer: Tree66 (Signed) · Date: 20/07/09 06:32 PM · On: She
Great job Ilka- this was one of my favorites!
Author's Response: Oh, it was? Ta! Never would've thought so. Was pretty sure Dotty would win though, after you asked about her story the other week... Anyway. Lemme thank you again. I love the way you run this site, never boring or carless always exciting and very friendly. I am glad I ventured a glance at snville last year during the hiatus. Opened a whole new world for me. Not just because it brought me back to writing but because of the awesome people I met through this site. And I guess this is due to the way the site is run! Hugs, Ilka
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