Reviewer: Jenn (Signed) · Date: 14/03/10 10:09 AM · On: Chapter 1

This episode is one of those episodes that tears at the heartstrings. The tag you have here is nice because we're getting to see Sam's initial reaction to being put away in the panic room. We get to see a little of what Sam is thinking throughout the scenes being played out, but you dig a little deeper here and give the reader something more with your very expressive sentences. 

I love Sam's initial confusion, how he thought Dean was playing some kind of sick joke on him and then his fear when he realizes it's real. I could imagine, with the state Sam was in, that this was one of many things going on in his head at the time.

There are a few grammar mistakes and run-on sentences, but they can be overlooked by the vivid, intense descriptiveness in the scene you've created here.

I adored this:

"...as the craving beast dug its claws back into his starving flesh."

Beautiful.

Thanks for a lovely read.

<3 Jenn

Author's Response:

Thank you for finding this story buried way back when...lol I guess it was a difficult time right then (still is!) for Sam and his addiction, I am glad you enjoyed the read.

Plus I always appreciate readers being brave enough to add constructive criticism over grammar etc and am always open to making things right. So I now may look over this one to see what you mean. (it wasn't beta-ed) unless you want to point out which bits you mean?

Thank you again and for the stars

Jacq x

Reviewer: mizpah (Signed) · Date: 21/10/09 10:15 PM · On: Chapter 1

Hi, Jacq,

Wow......what can I say....

This had such powerful imagery that I actually reared back a little in my chair. For a moment I was sickened when Sam put his finger in the blood and then......but then I realised this isn't the Sammy that we fell in love with (yes, even we Dean girls), but a hard-core addict, looking for the next hit and trying to convince himself and everyone around him that he had a handle on the situation. This is a crack-head trapped in the well of his own addiction, rationalising himself almost to death and blaming the one he loves the most for being weak.

And that bit at the end, with Dean's tears staining the outside of the door - that got to me, it really did.

I had an intense discussion with Petra after that episode, and she confessed she was heartbroken over Dean's actions during Sam's torture. She felt he wasn't being 'Dean'. But my aunt came up with an interesting theory - she felt that Dean just couldn't bear to be there and see what his brother had done to himself. And that visual image that you painted bears out that theory - that Dean was torn apart emotionally, just as Sam was being torn apart physically.

Oh, those poor, poor boys.....used and abused by powers too strong to fight - angels and demons both had a hand in their downfall.

I think I need to go have a quiet cup of tea after that. Powerfully written - really resonates on a deep level with the reader.

Jules

Author's Response:

Wow thank you for leaving this review.  I wasn't sure about putting in the depth Sam as an addict would go to, 'the finger in the...' it felt eww for me writing it, but then for me it had to be said, if anyone found that too shocking then..well, that really is the nature of any detructive addiction, and Sam is/was changing...a lot at this time.

Dean just couldn't handle this, he knew it was going to hurt, and that hurt was as bad for him, having to  watch it and be so helpless. 

Jacq x

Reviewer: zz1989 (Signed) · Date: 18/07/09 11:52 AM · On: Chapter 1

I enjoyed it.  

Author's Response:

Thank you and for the stars.

Jacq