Dean, Sam and Bobby - who shot Dean?  Can't help but wonder how he got a bullet wound when no one else armed is near.  Good effort but a beta would have been a plus.

Author's Response:

hey!!

:) I always say I don't like this story, but people seem to like it... actually I don't really like any of my stories...*sigh* 

umm to answer your question about who shot Dean... people often ask me to continue this story and like write about what happened before and what happens after this... but you know what?! I don't wanna.... because I want people to use their imagination and think about what the hell happened so that Dean got shot.... I mentioned that they were on a hunt for some thing and it took everything from them and shot Dean... so you can totally use your imagination and imagine what the hell happened to the boys that Dean got shot and the thing took everything from them. it had to have been one nasty SOB and in my head the thing shot Dean  while it took his gun away from him.. in my head.. Dean took a shot but the thing is idk bulletproof and it easily overpowered Dean and took his gun and Sam and Bobby weren't there, becasue they split up before,and the thing took care of Sam and Bobby before it came for Dean or idk lured   Dean somewhere else or somethnig... but that is just in my head... idk what your imagination will come up with!! you know!? I mean I could totally make another chapter of this, but it would completely ruin the story... and the story IS Dean being cauterized... that is the point of the story, anything more or less would just ruin everything for me... 

ummm beta... yeah I tried that but it didn't work out, because I have trouble explaining my ideas to others, as you can see from how I tried to explain the story to you! :) 

so yeah... a beta is not for me... and besides, sometimes a story is just a moment in time, just one moment of something bigger... you know!? and I love giving the readers that moment and for everything else.... they can use their imaginiation to fill up the empty spaces!

phew... okay hows that for an explanation!? 

okay I need some sugar now... ahahhah :)))

thank you so much for reading! and I really don't mind critique... I love it actually, becasue that gives me the chance to explain myself and why I did what I did with the story!

hugs, 

S.

Wow. Powerful story, I felt like I was in the cave with them, incredible dialogue, chockful of pain and feeling. Gotta go read something light, now, but phenomenal job, here.

Sue

Author's Response:

Hey!

:))) thank you!!!

Gosh, I hope you weren't suffering with the boys too :)  that cave was not a happy place for the boys!

ahhaha, go read some humor...it will take the edge off whatever you're feeling right now :)

thank you so much for reading and reviewing! :)

hugs, 

S.

Hey hunny.

Owh ouchie that's a lesson in anticipated pain that is challenging and arduous. I realise as i review that I've been reading it with my teeth clenched together and my jaw aches!

You inflict very poetic pain.

Bev xx

Author's Response:

hey hun!

thank you so much for reading and leaving a review!!! :))))

well if you had your teeth clenched and it was ouchy to read them I did my job well! :))) poor Dean....

poetic pain?! that is such a cool expression! thank you! 

hugs, 

S.

 

I've read this story before, over on ff.net, and it still packs just as much of a punch now! Framing it with that 'All this happened in a few agonizingly slow minutes' is perfect - while reading it feels like you're lingering there in the cave forever, and then you read the last line and it's all kind of compressed down into this tiny burst of hurt.

The only thing I would say is; do you have a beta? There are a few little niggles in there, but don't be nervous about it! This is an amazing little scene!

Author's Response:

hey!

you did!? awesome, I changed a few things but nothing major! :))))

:) yeah, gosh I didn't know how to like make it fast, because the procedure has to be done fast, or else...you know!? so I just framed it with all this happened in a few...., otherwise the story would just not work in my opinion! :))

beta!? yeah, no...I don't have one. idk why not, but...idk....having a beta is just to much work, or something?! because then you have to send the story to your beta, and it has to be checked and I just don't wanna bother people with it....I know there are mistakes in the story, oops, sorry, but..I just really don't wanna bother people with my stories... so.... I think that's why I don't have a beta! :)))

thank you!

hugs, 

S.

i actually liked this and your limp-sam one very much! i especially love drowning or struggling to breathe scenes and these were awesome. do you like harry potter coz i just put up a crossover between this and hp that is as nearly sadistic (in a good way) as this.

 

kiara

How can you even think that this sucked :) ? Seriously, this was one piece of amazing writing. I could so see this happening to the boys. The pure desperation, the raw emotions, the tough decision to be made - all wonderfully described!    I would like to see more to this. A prequel/sequel?

Great job!

Author's Response:

hi!

idk, idk....in my head some things just suck, but the readers seem to like them....so...odd!

thank you so much for reading!!!

noooooooo......don't put plots in my head!!!! nooooooooo......I have so many plots for stories in my head already that will make me go nuts if I don't write them!!! ahahhaah....and sometimes a story just needs to end, you know!?

but thank you so much for asking! 

and yeah, the boys went through a lot in this story! and it was awesome to explore every aspect of emotions, actions..everything really....a lot of fun...and I got to hurt Dean AND Sam in a way....:)))

thank you!

hugs, 

S.

Good God!!!  How could you think that sucked!!?  That was incredible!  I haven't seen the movie you mentioned, but I've seen enough intense war movies to liken your story to some painful post-battle scene.  It was riveting.  I was reading so fast to see what would happen, that I had to catch myself so I wouldn't miss a single sentence.  And I could easily see Bobby's face of grim determination, and Sam pained and fearful resolve to do all he could for Dean.  And you totally rocked hurt!Dean.  Fantastic job, and great follow-up to your hurt!Sam story.

Author's Response:

hi!

I don't know....sometimes a story sucks in my head but the readers seem to like it....so odd! :)))

OMG I LOVE WAR MOVIES!!! LOVE THEM!!! maybe because I'm a history student! LOL 

ahahah, really!? you were reading that fast!? so cool! I sometimes like slide my eyes through the whole story to see what's gonna happen next and then go back to the begining to like read it slow...teehee! 

I'm so glad that the story sucked you in so much that you were reading so fast! that is a huge compliment and just...thank you!

I love Bobby and I think he really wanted to help the boys in this story, but somethings are better left for Sam to do...and I really needed Sam to do them! :)))

OMG I rocked hurtDean!? *blushes* 

thank you so much! :))

hugs, 

S.

 

you need to write more.  who shot Dean? what were they hunting? 

this story needs more chapters.

great job so far.

Renee

Author's Response:

hey!!!

LOL, nooooooooooooooooooooo.....don't put plots in my head!!!! nooooooooooo!!!! *hugs*

I can't possible write more of this, I have sooo many story plots in my head at the moment that, they will make me go crazy if I don't write them down so.... and sometimes a story just needs to end and a reader has to turn on his imagination and continue with the story....:))))

thank you so very much for reading!

hugs, 

S.

 

 

Awesome. As usual.

Author's Response:

hey!

Thank you so much for reading! I'm glad you found it awesome....I love that word...awesome! *giggles* 

thank you!

hugs, 

S.

loved it,thank you

Author's Response:

Hi!

aww thank you so much! 'm glad you enjoyed!

and no need to thank me.....

thank you so very much for reading!!!

hugs, 

S.