Brilliant! I love the exquisite way you describe their surroundings, Sam's feeling, his unconscious thoughts. It's poetic. It lulls me into a trance of security and peace.
"The sound surrounding him was so far away but so near, he though he could drop in it and never climb back up. A whoosh of air, a slip-slide of heavy boots and those damn rocks crushing beneath someone’s boots." Even though he's mostly out of it, he still recognized the safety his brother provides even on a subconscious level.
"And he really didn’t want to talk. All he wanted to do was breathe. Finally. Breathe. He was drinking down the night air like water…soft, salty air." A beautfiul twist! First he's drowning and now you use the term drinking in a positive way.
"He used to hold Dean’s hand, when he was younger, but now… he’s too old to do that, now. So he held to those hate inducing pebbles and started to love them, now." Just so damn cute! Sam still craves the touch of his brother to chase away his fears and anchor him in safety. And the fact that the pebbles which tortured him are now giving him comfort is ironic.
Another masterful piece! Once again we get a glimpse into the brothers' relationship and what it means to each of them on a very personal level.
I love how you intermingle their subconscious thoughts and reactions flawlessly with the action that is happening. You do the same with their surroundings--adding another layer, tying it all together to reinforce the trust and brotherly bond the Winchesters have.
Thank you so much for reading!!! :)))
'm sooo happy you liked this story :)))
And you have no idea how much it means to me that you pointed out the things you liked! I could just kiss you!
Yeah, I think that Sam and Dean will always crave one another's touche, like idk, Dean touched Sam in Malleus Maleficarum, you remember!? There is just something soothing in a touch, you know!?
And whoah, I didn't even know that I did all that in this story...I just wrote what I saw in my head!!! so cool! thank you so much for pointing everything out! I see this story differently now, I think.
Aww I just love these boys so much! :))
I don't even know what to say to you...I feel that a simple thank you just isn't enough and even me reading your story won't be enough! *thinks hard*
*goes to think in the corner*